Remus stories always make my heart break. This was no exception. Since it's one of your first stories and you complained about formatting and spelling, I won't point out any things I had issues with.
I loved the idea of how Remus's nights were always dark since James and Lily's death. The weight of his guilt, for never forgiving Sirius, that was so painful to read. I loved how he felt them there, though. Saw Sirius in the star, lighting the darkness, heard him forgiving him. It gave me hope that they would always be there for him, even in death.
Describing the moment when Tonks called out for him and he panicked, worried about not getting to her in time and then finding her dead? I was just like, "No!" I hate Remus/Tonks but I hate that they both died and left Teddy an orphan even more.
Then when he was facing those Death Eaters and he finally accepted his death, I felt sad but happy that he was going to be reunited with those he lost. I loved how he woke up surrounded by everyone. It was just a love!fest. Dumbledore's line about how they were needed by the living - that was great. The song really fit well with this story.
I know you think it isn't great, but it really isn't that bad. You're fantastic with emotions and you did a wonderful job describing Remus's thoughts at this moment in his life.Author's Response: blahhh. Old one shots.
I'm glad you enjoyed this despite all of its short comings. I don't know if I'd ever write another song-fic, but I couldn't get this song out of my head and felt it suited Remus so well.
Thank you so much! Report Review
Aww, that was lovely, very poetic. And by lovely I mean that, despite the 'downer' type topic, you gave a really hopeful view of death. I really enjoyed it. I was a massive fan of Remus and Tonks and was obviously heart broken that J.K. chose to sacrifice them in the face of literary symmetry. But I thought you portrayed Remus last moments wonderfully. You captured that slight melancholy, depressed outlook he had upon his life. In some ways, it made his death almost seem quite merciful, y'know? Like he didn't have to suffer anymore.
Oh but, just so you know, I noticed a little spelling mistake. End of the third paragraph (not including the lyrics) you've put 'squirmish' instead of skirmish. And my only other little criticism is that I kinda wished you'd mentioned the death eaters who killed the two of them. J.K.Rowling mentioned in a interview that Antonin Dolohov murdered Remus, and Bellatrix killed Tonks; I reckon this could have been interesting to show. But then again, I can understand why didn't. I mean, I loved the fact you wrote in he died helping students and that it took five death eaters to overpower him.
Anyway, yeah, I thought it was a good one-shot, nice work :)
Pirate Girl xAuthor's Response: Thank you again!! It's lovely to see a familiar reviewer. I'm slightly surprised to see a review for this story since it is an older one, but very grateful nonetheless. I'm happy that you enjoyed this.
Thanks for pointing out that little typo! I hate those. And as for the identity of Remus' murderer, as I said, this is an older fic that was written before I was aware of JK's interview. Though I know now, I am happy with this the way it is... there is something heroic about being overpowered by so many and I'm glad you enjoyed the slightly AU detail.
-Melissa Report Review
omg! I nearly started crying half way through this =[ It was soo sad. But I loved it.
I always like reading about how tonks and remus died and I really liked this fic.
I like the way you brought in the 'dog star' that was really well done, loads of writers would of left that out or completely forgot about it, and because you kept it in I felt more real.
Just one mistake at the very end, "to comfortable"- should be "too".
good job =DAuthor's Response: oh why thank you!! I had never written a song-fic before this peice, but couldn't get this bunny out of my head. I'm so glad that you liked this... I sorta feel like it is a sloppy and hastily written peice.
I love tonks and remus too, and thier deaths seem so unjustified to me. The dog-star was a stroke of genius (a rare occurance) so I had to take advantage of it.
Thank you for your review!!
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Wow, I really enjoyed that, although the song is kind of eerie *shudders slightly* I like your take on heaven...hmm...Author's Response: I'm so happy that you enjoyed this little song-fic. I had never written one before and just couldn't get this song out of my head...
The song is eerie. If only you could have seen it performed live in the theatre. It actully gave me goosebumps.
Thank you for this review.
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Aw! that was such a good ending, the way the song worked with the story was so good. and it was very beleivable, but rather sad :( Good job!! I rly liked it!Author's Response: Aw. Thank you for your review. :) Report Review
I ain't the biggest fan of song fics - but I liked this one - well done!Author's Response: Why thank you. I actually am not either. This little plot bunny just wouldn\\\'t leave me alone, so I figured why not? That you for your review!!! I\\\'m glad you enjoyed this fic. Report Review
that was so poetic and beautiful :)Author's Response: why thank you!!! be sure to check out my other stories. :) Report Review
omg i luved it!!! so sad but the ending was great!!!Author's Response: thank you. I didn't really plan for that ending... it just sorta happened so I am very glad that you liked it.
Thank you for taking the time to review. Report Review
oh my god, deep... *wipes tear from eye* wonderful story!Author's Response: please don't cry. although I'm super glad that my story made you feel that emotional. I'm glad that you liked it.
Thank you so much for reading this story and for taking the time to leave a review. Report Review
I thought this was beautfiul. You simply did a wonderful take on "Those You've Known". Beautiful song, beautiful writing. Good job!Author's Response: I know. I saw the touring cast recently and that scene is so haunting and beautiful. I'm glad you liked this rendition. :) I was worried that it was too dark for the song, but I thought it ended on a hopeful and uplifting note.
thank you for the review!!! I really appreciate it. Report Review
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