Please keep writing I love it! You have written this so well and look forward to more! :) Report Review
Oh Merlin, this is amazing! I'm not the biggest fan of the Marauders era, my favourite being the Next Gen, but this, with the flash forwards and the secrets and the Lucille DuBlanc-ness, is epic! Can't wait to find out how she turns all super-Gryffindor, and what happens next between her and Sirius in 1995. So as soon as all those edits are finished, update ASAP! Report Review
Oh man I have so much love for this story, so so much! It's reminded me about how obsessed I can get about fanfiction-I haven't read a fanfic that's done that to me in a long time! So well done, because this is brilliant, and I really hope you update soon, because I have exams coming up and this would be a beautiful distraction from them XD Report Review
She's a minx, that Lucille. Wonderful character :)Author's Response: thank you for your reviews. Hope to get a new chapter out this month :) Report Review
You know, I can't even really describe how much I'm loving this... I love it so much that I'm so eager to get on to the next chapter that I skip the review box at the end.. Sowwee :( Seriously though, you've done an amazing job with this, you really have. Report Review
You are incredible. Actually incredible. This is an amazing story. It's original, it's mysterious, it's fabulously written. Just brilliant. :) Report Review
FINALLY A BLOODY GOOD STORY! No matter what you say, this story is very well written. I absolutely love your writing style.
Lets be honest here. Your story is the bee's knees. Love the character development!
PLEASE I NEED MORE!! :DAuthor's Response: thank you so much. this is such a sweet review. It's honestly the nice reviews like this that are motivating me to force myself to finally sit down and write the next chapter. thanks again. Report Review
Wow. You're an amazing writer. I love your voice, and it sounds realistic, and not cheap like others! It was perfect the way you started this off, and perfect the way it unfolds! I love it! Even though I hate trio fics, there is enough marauders era to be great, the only thing I think about is how awkward it would be for Harry to be watching Sirius in a "scene of a sexual nature", or watching Lucille seducing Rabastan seems a little awkward as well. Either way, I really enjoyed it, and the details just MADE this scene. I really hope you update soon, because this is definitely one of the very very best stories I've ever read! Are you thinking of writing a novel? Seriously, this. Is. Amazing.
Love your story!
~JAuthor's Response: i'm going back and tweaking this story a little bit...it was meant to be some scenes are what harry sees from the pensive and some are just memories from Lucille (not seen by harry...like you said the seducing rabastan chapter would be very awkward haha)...I think a few people have gotten confused with this so I'm going to try and re write parts of the story so it flows a little bit better.
thank you a lot for the review, you are amazing. Report Review
I love it do far. I've read all the chapters and can't wait for more! Report Review
I've read your story through twice now it is amazing! I love how you develop Lucy through the chapters and looking forward to seeing how the other characters interact through the story. I love how it flits from present time to past. All in all i love it hope your not giving up on the story cant wait to read the next chapter! 10/10Author's Response: Its been a long time but I'm not giving it up! I've just gotten so SO stuck with it for a very long while, so now I'm going back and seeing what I can change (very slightly) to help me push through this enormous writers block and I think it's working. I'm hoping to get a new chapter up by the end of this month.
Thank you SO much for the review! Report Review
Nawww, how sweet was Sirius and Lucy seeing each other again! I'm really in love with the two characters.
And what did I say about Lucille's naivety! It really shows in this last chapter, where her main annoyance is that she doesn't follow orders from others. Poor Lucille, she's sort of innocent in that sense. No matter how bratty she is, she's strangely endearing. I especially enjoyed Sirius's description of noticing her impatiently waiting for letters everyday. She's like a little kid, adorable, really.
The only problem I have, which I don't really mind, because I really enjoyed the Azkaban scenes, they were so insightful, and upsetting. And it was so tragically sweet how Lucy was the only one who believed sirius without question. But, there is a bit of a disparity in the scene where Sirius finds out about Lucy coming over, and he's shocked when he learns about her being 'sick' and weak, and the Revisiting Azkaban chapter where he can clearly see her getting thinner and weaker. That's my only complaint though! And not really a complaint, more of a something I noticed. Apart from that, I noticed that you haven't noticed in a couple of months, I hope you'll update soon! Because I really am hooked! I really want to read the entirety of Sirius and Lucy's story :) Report Review
Loved the date/non-date! Haha Remus is adorable! And look, Lucy being normal, and nice, and hating on slytherins. The poor thing, she's just young, naïve, sheltered, she didn't know a thing! I definitely wasn't expecting that, I was as shocked as Sirius. I think we're starting to see a change.. Report Review
Ohmygosh! Sirius and Lucy reunion upcoming!
I also meant to say in my previous review, that I'm actually liking Lucy's character. That's young Lucy I'm talking about, a complete spoilt brat, but still, she's witty, and kinda funny, in a dry, dark way. Like her interactions with Remus, which I'm loving! And I want to see this compassionate and loyal side of her that the hat was talking about.
And as if I wasn't curious enough, what Remus said now has me super curious about what she did for James! And how she redeemed herself and I'm also hoping to see Lucy and Harry talk. Great chapter! Just sad to see it end! Report Review
I just had to review to say that.
I have to admit I was a bit sceptical when I clicked on Wicked, because it sounded so dark and angsty, and I don't know about other people, but I read marauders for the 'yay! Fun times!'-ness. The fact that I know, but they don't, they're all going to die :( is usually enough gloom for me. But I opened it up anyway, and again I was a bit iffy with the modern day and marauder era time jumps business, until I realised what this means... I've been reading a couple of siriusxoc fics lately and a lot of the time, the oc dies because obviously in canon, sirius has no love interest, and by the end of the fic, I'm all sniffly, but what can I see upcoming in Wicked... A REUNION!! Yay! Ha, I'm not really for corniness, despite how I may sound, but really, it's like poor sirius, you're life kinda sucks. So hopefully in 'present-day' sirius and lucy will have a lovely reunion, without drama - impending war and deaths not inclusive.
On the present-day topic, I find present-day lucy quite awkward, in her interactions with Harry, and Remus and Dumbledore, but that could be because she's been in isolation for the past few years.
Back to the time jumps, I actually find myself really enjoying both! At first I was thinking just give me marauders! I don't want to read about harry and the war, but now I'm excited. I want to read both present-day and marauder era. I want to know about how/why/when lucy changed, how she and sirius got together, what happened to her after James and Lily's death, why she fought for Harry, why Voldemort wants her, and of course - the reunion! You see, it's a mix of time jumps! Anyway, really loving this fic, and can't wait to read more! Report Review
I am utterly obsessed with your story. Lucille is such a complex character in which, she could be misunderstood simply as that 'slimy-slytherin-at-heart' girl without any other redeeming credentials but I applaud you for making her 'likable' to the readers (at least to me). Really, I love her with a passion! Keep doing what you do because so far you are definitely doing it right. Please don't feel pressured to write what you think the readers would 'want' but rather what you feel is right. This is my first time leaving a review to well, anyone on this site really. Hence, with this I hope that you will update sooner :) xx Report Review
Now things are starting to get exciting! I wonder what Lucilleīs next step will be. Will there be a confrontation between her and her parents? Canīt wait to find out! As I said before I love flawed characters, and I find Lucille very intriguing. When you look at her you donīt now what you get! Please update as soon as possible! Report Review
Fantastic! The story keeps getting better (: Report Review
Great chapter! I can't wait for the next update! 10/10 :D Report Review
Hi, nice work here! Interesting set up. Be careful of your word choice though. You want the impact of your writing to be from the meaning of the words, not the language. If a word isn't use correctly, it distracts the reader.
Also, while Lucy is fleshed out and very interesting, the reader has to draw from assumptions and previous knowledge to get to know your supporting characters. A simple 'showing' scene ( in writing courses you will often see 'showing vs telling') that would show each of the Marauder's character, and not just the stereotypical stuff, would do wonders. Anyways, great story, cheers. From what I've read, it's obvious you have a lot of potential.Author's Response: Hi, thanks for the constructive criticism. I'll definitely take a look at this chapter again and see if I can change the wording, and maybe add in a 'showing' scene, thanks for pointing that out!
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One of the best chapters as of yet! The flow and the dialoge was so natural and unforced and I was completely hooked on every word. Flawless perfection. I loved that Sirius is now noticing Lucille in a different light and I could totally see Remus being the one to notice Sirius not being himself.
Ugh! This story is amazing! Keep up the great work, can't wait for an update! Things are heating up!
XOXO WildFlower!Author's Response: you always leave the nicest reviews! I was a little scared about this chapter actually, even though it was fun to write. Isn't Lucille just the most devious thing? ;)
thank you loads for continuing to read :) Report Review
This story is great ! I'm really looking forward to how it's going to develop - especially the relationship between Sirius and Lucille!
Great work - please update again soon! :)Author's Response: I'm sooo lazy, I can't seem to make myself just sit down and write. I've got the next chapter all written out, it's just a matter of me typing it all out so hopefully I'll get around to it soon. Thank you for the review!! x Report Review
I love this story. Your character development is fantastic. The way you've written Sirius sudden interest in Lucille seems so real, it's not forced like a lot of other fanfics are. Can't wait to read more. Update soon :)Author's Response: YOU are fantastic! I'm happy you like the change in Sirius, I was hoping it wasn't too cliche? Report Review
Can't wait to read moreAuthor's Response: thank you!! Report Review
Hi! This is HappyMollyWeasley here with your very belated review. I am sorry, I know it was ages since you asked me for a review!
I like this first chapter very much. It is a very good beginning, which captured me from the start. Sometimes I have trouble reading about an OC as a main charachter, at least in the first chapter, but you made me interested in your OC at once.
The feeling I got from this first chapter is that this story will be a high quality story with a well planned plot. I hope that I am right! ;-)
Over all I can't really find anything that needs to improve. Good job! :-)Author's Response: thank you so much for taking the time and reviewing :)
This review actually made my day! The plot actually is really planned out, I've already written the ending and I've got a whole notebook written out for the timeline of everything...the problem now is just forcing myself to sit down and properly write everything out haha
thank you again for the review :) :) Report Review
Such a good story so far. I can't wait to hear more about Lucille and Sirius's relationship :)Author's Response: thanks for the review! Lots more on how Sirius and Lucille came to be starting next chapter! Report Review
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