Aw this is so nice to see the way that Sirius wasn't entierly unhappy ALL the time.
well done.Author's Response: Even with his unhappy chidhood at home, he had James and his family's affection. Thank you! Report Review
Hi Manwe Valarian
Dat was so nice and finale's baeutiful lines were so-good dat it left me filled with warmth and love. The most beautiful scene in whole of the story was the fairies dancing in multicoloured glass-robes..i could imagine that and it visioned nothing less than perfect. Ur descriptions about the Christmas decorations were fantastic and mite i add very-imaginable. It was very good 2 read ur stoy, i enjoyed it and it certainly was a job well-done.
PS: Would you please be kind enough to read my new story and comment on it. I would just like to know your thoughts about it. The story is called 'Forever As One'Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing my story! Report Review
Interesting juxtaposition of characters to setting, it really gives the feel of how fake everything about the gathering was (Sirius pretending to read, the contrast between the warm cozy Christmas scene and his cold family, etc.). It really made my heart go out to Sirius, I just wanted to give him a big hug! In any event, lovely one shot; heart warming and straight forward, none of those unnecessary random things that get thrown in all too often when people write these. My applause.Author's Response: Thank you! Sometimes the beautiful settings can be filled with the coldest and most calculating of people.
Your comment on my straight forward writing, made me very happy. I have been told to describe more in each scene. However, many times that takes away from the flow of the story. I can't read stories that over describe scenes. I don't need to know ever detail, unless it is relavent or sets the mood. I could care less what type of a purse someone is carrying unless they use it to hit someone, or they can't find something in it. Report Review
How sad, but a really good fic!
I liked how you set up this merry, cozy Christmas scene in the beginning, with the wreaths and the smells of Christmas and everything - but then filled it with all these cold people. What a contrast! Kind of fits the way they wear fake smiles without being truly warm or happy.
Poor Sirius. I loved the bit with James' parents at the end! Good job.Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing this fic. I had always pictured Sirius' family this way. One of the reasons he rejected them and did not want to be a Slytherin. Report Review
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