Good one-shot. I particularly liked the way you introduced Remus at the start. I loved how Remus seemed to wrestle with the difference between Sirius the 'friend' and Sirius the 'betrayer'. It was very poingient. As was the concluding paragraph.
I liked how Remus didn't equate the death of James and Peter merely with a loss of life, but also a loss of friendship and HOPE. That was brilliantly done. It seemed very realistic to me that Remus would equate the friendship he shared with his fellow marauders with HOPE, especially when you consider that one of the four betrayed the others...
I also liked the introduction of the Auror checking the train before it is ready to depart, just in case Siruis Black turned up. The use of the security question was well done! Brought back memories of Dumbledore and Harry's conversation in HBP.
One thing, though... It would be nice if you took a look at your verb tenses. There were several places where you slipped into the present tense. It was jarring. Worse, though, was when you used the present tense during a short memory of Remus's about his discussion with Dumbledore when the latter hired him. It's an easy fix, so I highly recommend taking a look.
GailAuthor's Response: Thank you for the review. I will look into the tense of verb changes. Report Review
Just found this and thought I'd read it. I'm so glad I did. The one question that has never been answered, other than thinking Sirius was the secret keeper, is why Remus accepted that Sirius betrayed James and Lily. Sirius was always opposed to the Dark side. He should have known something else happened. Thanks for this. And for giving me insight as to how Remus felt meeting Harry for the first time.
FoMAuthor's Response: Hello Molly, Thank you for the review. Remus trusted Dumbledore completely without question. If Dumbledore believed that Sirius was the actual secret keeper, which he did, then it was Sirius that betrayed James and Lily. In the book, Remus believed Peter to be dead until he saw him on the Marauders Map. I had wondered what Remus must have thought about going back on the train and Hogwarts, where he had the happiest times of his life.
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Ah this is so sad...poor RemusAuthor's Response: Thank you for the review! Report Review
omg so good. you never really think about lupins perspective...Author's Response: thank you! As I wrote this I thought about what it would be like to have such wonderful memories marred by the tragedy that was his life.
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