W.O.W!! I am at a loss for words! The twist you through at the end there was a complete and utter shock to me! I did not expect that at all. I had to go back and reread it to make sure I wasn’t crazy!!
You have an amazing gift of words! Thank you for this story! Report Review
that was simply amazing Report Review
Ok wow so words can't even begin to describe how much I loved this fanfic! All things considered and how this was only your first fanfic I think it was truly amazing! Wow the part at the end where Lucius saved Hermione and I though it was Draco and then in the last chapter it was actually Lucius that saved her and Draco was ok wow I almost started crying that was too perfect! Also I really though she married Ron in the end and that's why the other kid had red hair so good job with that little twist! It was so amazing I loved it! So that you for writing it! Report Review
Great story, read it more than once now. Just wanted to point out, not sure if you're aware, but some of your words have been changed. For example the word 'puppies' is used instead of eyes in the paragraph where Hermione tells Draco not to wait up. And when she says the thing about strawberries, it says 'Why couldn't she just keep her big toe shut?" instead of mouth. Funny, but clearly wrong. Just to make you aware. Still an epic story though :) x Report Review
I think you've been hacked...either that or you have some very different definitions of certain words like nose, purse, big toe, and peyebrowing--whatever that is. Just a head's up. Otherwise great story. Can't wait to see where it goes :) Report Review
Woah!!You sure now how to write a story!!hats off to you.When I reached the part where Lucius dies,I thought it was Draco!You are one mean writer,making me suffer even if it was for a few moments,I really thought Draco died! Report Review
WHAT A TWIST! I really loved this fic, you made me cry! Great job! Report Review
Very awesome. You had me fooled. I really thought Draco had died. You did an awesome job. I really enjoyed the story. ThanksAuthor's Response: Thank you very much Mariah. It was a pleasure to write. Report Review
I loved how surprising you made the ending! That was really clever. I was practically in tears at the beginning of the chapter, and once it was revealed what happened the tears came once again! That was a beautiful ending to the story.Author's Response: Thank you very much M, your review is much appreciated. Report Review
Honestly that was the best thing I've read in a long time.
Definatly the best fanfic, you had me crying my eyes out
when Lucius saved Hermione, it was so well hidden. I loved
the surprises and the fact you never were quite sure what
would happen next. I literally stopped breathing at "I
suppose she will learn about my father when she grows up". I
then cried again with joy when she said Draco. The relief was
overwhelming. This was so good with all the ellipsis, mystery
anf references to the original books whilst changing the
storyline. This was your first fanfic, and it is amazing. The
ending was perfect and this one of the rare fanfics where
Draco is him and not a blonde Ron/Harry, you captured the
hatred and confused love so well it was completely believable
so the happy ending was 100 times better for the reader.
Once again, this was awesome, amazing and beautiful. Report Review
I got so scared that you'd killed him, but in the back of my mind I just knew it was Lucius! This was a fantastic story, I loved every second of it! Report Review
I have spent the last hour and 50 minutes reading your fanfic and it was amazing. I was actually shellshocked at how creative the writing is, not in J. K. Rowlings style but in your own unique tone. I honestly think you have a career in writing ahead of you. Brilliant plot, twists and texture. The best Harry Potter fanfic I've read! Report Review
Oh my goodness I nearly started sobbing during the previous chapter thank you SO MUCH for not killing Draco off. A million stars for a beautiful story.Author's Response: Thank you very much for such a lovely review :) Report Review
This was the cutest ending to any fanfiction I have ever read in my entire life. Report Review
Why would you do that???
I truly thought Draco had died I WAS CRYING, that was cruel...
Seriously now, I loved every moment of it, lovely story, well done xxxAuthor's Response: I had to be mean in this chapter lol, sorry for making you cry though, and thank you so much for such a lovely review, you are fantastic! : ) x Report Review
wow this is amazing.. you are really good! the twist really had me going.. haha..
thank you for writing such wonderful story! you should write again! :D Report Review
I believe this is the 3rd time I have read this story; I still love it.Author's Response: Thank you so much, that is a huge compliment :) x Report Review
wow i am speechless this is really amazing really i am impressed is really well developed i love in the end were lucius at the end does something real for his son the fact that he saves hermione just shows to draco he loves him and wants the best for him and he knew that his son obviously was in hermione and he saved what his son loves more...this story is just perfect Report Review
I normally hate writting reviews because they can be time consuming, but I felt the need to for this work of art. I couldn't stop reading for a minute! You are so talented and I hope you continue to write. Your story had me smiling and laughing along with the characters and I had tears in my eyes at the end. The ending was amazing, I really thought Draco had sacrificed his life for his loved ones. Thanks you so much for writing this Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review this story, I really do appreciate it. And you are very welcome, I enjoyed every second of writing Beautiful Within, Charlotte :) Report Review
After reading the reviews of this, im probably just telling you something you've heard a million times, but this is hands down one of the best stories I've read. not just from a fanfic point of view, but just in general. the dynamic was fabulous, and i went from laughing to crying, and everything in between. nothing was terribly predictable and you worked the twist at the end perfectly. you are a wonderful writer, and i hope that you never stop writing. it would be a shame. i look forward to seeing more from you! Author's Response: Thank you Tanya, I appreciate every review I get and I'm thankful people such as yourself take time out of their day to leave me one. I am so glad I wrote something you were able to enjoy :) Report Review
Well, first of all, thank you so much for this wonderful story. It really got to me.
I read non-stop and I am so glad it's complete and I didn't have to wait for the last chapter (especially the last words). I do always suspect for things to turn out for the better (like Draco not dying) but my eyes still filled up with tears after the 13th chapter. You have an extremly pleasant way of writing, it consumed be but yet let me think on my own - I have no idea if this makes any sense though ;)
Anyways it's a 10 and again thank you so much for writing this wonderful piece :)Author's Response: Hello Arianna21, please allow me to apologise for my late reply, and secondly say a huge thank you for leaving me such a wonderful review. Charlotte :) Report Review
That was a very good ending! I will admit that I was really really worried for a moment! Very good!
-- MMMAuthor's Response: Thank you MMM and please forgive my late reply. I really appreciate you taking time to leave me a review :) Report Review
Firstly if this is your first attempt at fanfiction then it's amazing, I wish I could write a story as great as yours!! You got me at the end though, I was sure that Draco had been killed and I actually did a double take when I realised he was speaking to Hermione in the last chapter, it shocked me and it takes a really great writer to trick the reader like that, I really enjoyed this though and I'm glad they got to be together at the end!! :) I loved it 10/10!! Report Review
Man, this is confusing, I thought it was Draco who died, what happend right there? Report Review
I think that's so sweet!! I was a little confused at the beginning but I get now that it was Draco's dad who saved the life of Hermione!!! I loved this story! Thanks for writing it! Report Review
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