Awww. That's so cute! :D Report Review
Hello! Here I am with your requested review! This one-shot on utterly adoreable. The family fluff warms up my heart to the fullest extent. There were no grammatical errors in this entire piece, very nicely done love! There are no obvious ways to improve your piece (grammaticaly speaking) in my opinon. If you were seeking critique, I'm pleased to say that I honestly have not the least bit for you. This piece was short and sweet, a spirit raising piece of sorts. I really adore this one-shot, it shows the tender, caring, and adoring side of Sirius; the side of him, and everyone alike with the love of a child. This piece is wonderfully done, and a nice read. Astounding job!
- pigwigeonAuthor's Response: thank you so much!
i'm happy to hear you enjoyed it as much as i did writing it! it's good to hear i was able to get across the feeling to others as well, though i've no children, my youngest brother rather inspired it. ^^
once again thank you and thank you for the great review! Report Review
Hello, there! I'm here with your review.
I'm so very sorry that it took me so long to get around to this! I've just been so busy! But let's get right into it. XD
This was wonderful. Fantastic. More than that.
It was just the right story to put me into a light-hearted, fluffy mood. I loved your characters. Very unique names. I love how your characterized them. They really stayed very, very far away from Mary-Sue. YAY!
Haha. Oh this story was just so adorable. I love how you ended it.
The woman broke away from him. “Scrupulously? Do you even know what that means?” she asked teasingly.
“Thoroughly and utterly,” he mumbled between kisses as their daughter laid down upon the couch, drifting off into a carefree slumber.
It just made me smile.
This was so wonderful. And your writing style fit the mood perfectly. Everything just kept adding more and more to its brilliantness. Your perfection in grammar and spelling was just the cherry on top! :)
Thank you for introducing me to this excellent story. I hope to see more of these characters. ;)
9/10Author's Response: It's no problem and thank you very much for your great review! This really made my day and I'm happy you enjoyed it as well! ^_^
I had fun writing this and like writing about some of those little moments in little we generally don't give much thought to. XD
Anyway, once again thank you and I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
I am not going to sugarcoat this. This story is so adorable.
First off, it's a brilliant concept and it's perfect for a one-shot.
This was so cute, gosh. Usually I'm not into fluff but this was good. The grammar was good, and it was a one shot so I wasn't expecting any main story line. But this story most definitely delivers and I hope to see Avril and Ellie in more of your stories. Or possibly you've already written stories with them in it, if so. PM me :]
Great dialog, I liked it a lot.
I couldn't stop saying aw; thus making me almost get caught reading this in class.
10/10.Author's Response: when I saw the first sentence i was going "oh no, she hated it!", but I'm so glad you enjoyed it. though i do have others with Avril and Ellie. It's called Serenity and I'm afraid it might not live up to what you're hoping for now. ^^; It's Ellie a bit older though. I hope I didn't cause you too much trouble in class! X3
Nevertheless, your review definitely made my day and thank you for it again! XD Report Review
That was really sweet! I haven't read any stories like this, with Sirius having a happy, caring family. It was really nice. I liked seeing Sirius so happy, in canon he's always so sad. There were a couple grammar mistakes, but nothing awful or glaring. Nice work!
~lllbAuthor's Response: Thank you so much!
It is nice to see Sirius not to angst and more happy. i rather think he sort of deserved to be happy, so i was more than happy to try it out myself. lol. thank you again for the great review! XD Report Review
aww, that was so cute. I could really imagine Sirius and his daughter playing like that. Sirius was such a great guy... Anyway, well done. Very nicely written. It was a nice look into what could've been/would've been/was (?). That could've been Sirius and Harry, if Sirius hadn't "killed" the muggles and Dumbledore hadn't sent Harry to Petunia and Vernon's. Good job!
-Mrs Roonil WaslibAuthor's Response: yes i can see it like that as well if things hadn't gone awry for him, but still i'm rather happy you enjoyed my little oneshot! thank you for reviewing as it made my day! XD Report Review
Aw, this was cute. I really enjoyed this. It was light and fluffy, easy to read. It's good to see that this type of story still exists on the site. I really like your writing style in this. You didn't take too much time to explain emotions or over analyze anything. That made it easier to read and it kept the mood light. Great job.
The only thing I could say that would be negative is Sirius's character here. He seems a little too fluffy, but I like it. It's always refreshing to see a manly man's soft side. ^_^
I'm sorry but I really don't know what else to say. This was wonderful =)
Ganbare! Tanoshinde ^_^
.:.Ilia.:.Author's Response: i have to admit it is hard to find sometimes a Sirius that isn't full of angst or even on the slightly moody side. i couldn't help myself and would have liked to see him come out of the series with a good life ahead of him, but alas.
Nevertheless, i'm glad you enjoy it and thank you for reviewing! x3 Report Review
This was so sweet. You really know how to write those small entertaining stories. Nothing really happens, but they're so sweet, I can't help but love them.
Ellie is so adorable, and even though I'd never seen in the figure of a father, it actually suits him, not being so reckless and lazy, home at Grimmauld Place. haha.
I liked it!
Even though this was very short, you managed to put a lot of things into it, which wasn't about the plot, but about their life, and I can already now make a picture of their life, what's happened and such. It's small sentences once in a while, but that's enough, and it's a clear view. I really love this, and thiAuthor's Response: Those little things or events in people's lives is what i've always sort of found interesting. you know like the simple act of brushing their teeth or waking up in the morning as those moments are the ones that people some times take for granted. (i'm not sure i'm quite conveying what i mean, lol) but i rather enjoy those moments so i'm glad you liked what i had to write and i'm happy you found it entertaining though it's of little words! Thank you again for your great review! Report Review
Awww, that was sooo cute!
Ellie is really adorable.
10/10Author's Response: Wah you made my banner and read it too! I'm so happy you liked it! XD Thank you so much! Report Review
this is adorable! I actually really enjoyed it although it was short. I really really enjoyed it. I like how you wrote something about a very carefree and very what seems like a young Sirius. I love the name Ellie too. That's actually the name I'm using in my recent story. She's my female oc. Haha. But i love that name
Great job! no ccAuthor's Response: Thank you, i'm so happy you enjoyed it! I like the name Ellie too. Just popped into my head one day. What a small world! x3
thank you so much yet again for a great review! made my day! Report Review
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