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Review #1, by Dhanjer Farewell to Prince Manor

12th September 2016:
You over use the word 'for' as a conjunction. There are numerous other ways you could reword things so as not to burden your work with the excessive use of that weighty 'for.' It tends to draw attention to itself awkwardly in an overly pretentious way when used. It was especially awkward when you used it in the dialogue. When have you ever heard a typical fourteen year old use 'for' as a conjunction? I also didn't feel that it would be a vocabulary tool Severus would be inclined to use. The only one I can really see using it, is Draco, and even then only when he is making an effort to sound like a pretentious prat.

Otherwise, apart from a few typos and sentences that seemed to be the result of a fouled up edit, your story was awesome. I really enjoyed reading it and I look forward to reading the sequel.

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Review #2, by Dinthemidwest Farewell to Prince Manor

23rd March 2016:
But we know there's a sequel-I can't wait to start it! What a great story!!

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Review #3, by Dinthemidwest Brothers By Choice

23rd March 2016:
That's a very nice touch adding the fishing into the story...

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Review #4, by Dinthemidwest The Scales of Justice

23rd March 2016:
Unnatural harpy-good one! This was a very well-done chapter!! Off to jail with them!!

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Review #5, by Dinthemidwest Unexpected Tidings

23rd March 2016:
I can barely stop to review! It was a nice twist to see Sirius in a more grownup role-as always, good dialogue...

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Review #6, by Dinthemidwest The Wizard and the Warrior

22nd March 2016:
Sarai needs to throw in the towel-ha! What a sweet storyline...

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Review #7, by Dinthemidwest Hedwig's Surprise

22nd March 2016:
Ooohhh. Great chapt.! Hedwig & Stormy!! Owls , owlets, and fun dialogue with the food fight!

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Review #8, by Dinthemidwest The Dark Bond

22nd March 2016:
Very well done-I was glad to see Harry rid of his demons! Lily was such a wonderful character... It was sad that she didn't live. I read Irresistible Chem. before I read this story; it's why I started this one!! It's a 10/10 for anyone reading this review.

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Review #9, by Dinthemidwest Smidgen's Solution

21st March 2016:
Such a touching chapter-I enjoyed it!

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Review #10, by Dinthemidwest A Healing Touch

20th March 2016:
Winged cats are always a good addition to a magical story! Good chapter! Too bad Severus didn't become a healer...

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Review #11, by Dinthemidwest Shame and Envy

19th March 2016:
I can hardly stop to write a review! Very touching & believable!

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Review #12, by Dinthemidwest Lessons and A Letter

18th March 2016:
Classic Snape! Very interesting turn of events-I can't stop too long here-got to get back to the story!!

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Review #13, by Dinthemidwest Misunderstandings

18th March 2016:
I enjoyed the pace of this chapter-Harry & Severus's relationship is moving at a cautious, but easy pace. Your stories are well done!!

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Review #14, by Dinthemidwest Spirited Away

17th March 2016:
Again, a well-thought out chapter! The dialog between Harry & Severus is terrific...

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Review #15, by Dinthemidwest Ties That Bind

17th March 2016:
The story has such a gripping dialog! I'm really enjoying the way this is playing out...

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Review #16, by Dinthemidwest Not Such A Spoiled Brat

17th March 2016:
Priceless... Such an enjoyable turn of events!! 10/10!

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Review #17, by Dinthemidwest Petunia's Secret

17th March 2016:
Wonderful chapter! I do like the softened tone of Petunia! Not totally okay with Severus, but not completely against him!

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Review #18, by Dinthemidwest An Unexpected Visitor

17th March 2016:
Good chapter!! Just had the the time to start reading this story-I'm glad I did. Snape at Privet Drive; this is going to be good!

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Review #19, by guest An Unexpected Visitor

12th January 2015:
Nice. Good start to an awesome story. I think it's Aunt Petunia coming down the stairs.😆

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Review #20, by Emily The Wizard and the Warrior

13th December 2014:
Three words about Sev and Sarai
What the hell?!

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Review #21, by Emily Misunderstandings

12th December 2014:
I loved this chapter.. Reminded me of my own dads reaction when he caught me drunk the first time.. Sadly it wasn't the last but I, like Snape here, rarely indulge.. But I am still underage by quite a few years.. Not going to say how many though.

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Review #22, by UnicornandYew Not Such A Spoiled Brat

10th December 2014:
Wow, very good chapter- I like that Snape stood up for Harry!

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Review #23, by Narcissamalfoy394 Farewell to Prince Manor

26th August 2014:
Yes !! Will you do a sequel of what happens actually Iin school??

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Review #24, by pat wood Farewell to Prince Manor

3rd January 2014:
Good story line, just a bit to heavy on punishments

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Review #25, by Tierra Telder An Unexpected Visitor

29th December 2013:
I could not figure out where to do an overall review, so I am just going to post this here.
Good work with this story! It is really fun to read. You managed to portray a wonderful atmosphere which I really enjoyed and which definitely motivated me. I loved all the fun family scenes between Snape, Harry and Draco and once more, good work!

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