Australia is not in Europe you numpty Report Review
Even better than the last Report Review
Thank you for this amazing chapter Report Review
When you said it was the end for the first time I felt the urge to go threw the computer, torture you with the "Cruciatus" curse and then kill you. Report Review
The prologue sets the tone for the work. I feel as if I am given the context for Draco's relationship with his family, his feelings about the Greengrass family, as well as his feelings on purebred life and expectations. Very well done. Report Review
Oh my gosh you fooled us!:) when I saw it wasn't the real ending, I said 'ahhh oh my gushness' tehehee:) great story! :D:D:D so happy oh my Oh my gushness!:D Report Review
To be honest, if we're going by their characters in this story, the faux ending would have been more appropriate, no matter how appealing a happy ending is to us dramione fans out there. It's like emotional abuse for Draco really, and the first ending would have been more empowering for his self worth.
Which brings me to my previous review. Like I said consistency. I haven't read your other stories, but for this one, consistency is seriously a problem.
1. Hermione wasn't supposed to know she will be having a date with Draco, well despite her being smart of course and figuring Ron's nervousness out.
2. There's no consistency in the grammar. i know that school is more important, but at least have someone check it. A plot, no matter how good it is, will be spoilt if it was not written correctly.
3. There's no consistency in Hermione's resolve. First she doesn't know, sex is only sex, she hasn't said I love you to Draco, they have this big life altering fight in which Draco seriously gets or should have been emotionally damaged, and then Hermione just comes in, demands to be asked and says that's all I ask for. We could reason out that she's just afraid, but from what she's been saying in the bathroom that she found it difficult to part with Draco, then shouldn't she have admitted by now her feelings about him?
I hope you see my point.
One can reason out that it's fiction, anything can happen, but even fiction has some semblance of reality in it.
Anyways, thank you for your story! Dramione lives :) Report Review
You know, there's only about 1 chapter left but let me tell you, I'm infuriated with this story. It's like the manhwa goong and the other mangas as well that I won't mention any further. Sure at first, the hesitation, the fights and makeups, their love, the confusion, are sweet. Heartbreakingly sweet. AT FIRST. But let me tell you, it gets old.
Keep in mind that I'm not flaming, I'm giving you constructive criticism. They never learn. Miranda constantly manipulating Draco. Draco who says yes to Miranda. Draco reacting to Hermione's return the same as before. Hermione always not concise. And she's supposed to be the smartest witch of her age, but she can't seem to just say it, do it, she has to make it harder than it is. And then sometimes you don't maintain consistency. Miranda, who's supposed to be a Shacklebolt, is always given the Caldwell surname, when it's Wesley's. There are other things as well, no matter how small they may be, that are not consistent with the next chapter or so. There's also not much closure. Sure, Wesley finally accepts, but only because it was written as that. Miranda says things like a loyal friend, but her reactions and plots after the dialogue will show otherwise. And what happened to the Malfoys' reaction to Hermione? Before it was a big force in their decisions, but now what? Maybe it's in the next chapter, I'll just read it.
At this story's length, there's not much character development, the problem's the same, the stagnancy is giving me a whiplash. Yes, Draco admits that he really loves Hermione, Hermione changes after her 1 year adventure, but other than that? Not much change. Maybe their reactions are realistic for their characters at a certain extent, but not to this point.
Lastly, despite the plot being cliche, you've certainly made it still interesting enough for the readers to keep reading it. That's a good thing. But in a sense, it's also a bad thing because it's that kind of interesting wherein you'd want to read this to know the outcome, not enjoying the parts in between.
I don't want to hurt your feelings, I'm giving you my opinion which I hope will help you improve your stories. Still, thank you for having the passion to write Dramione :) Report Review
I think the main plot of the story was really interesting and I enjoyed reading it but there were many grammar mistakes, especially in regards to tense (switching between past and present), a few inconsistencies within the story and also I think the characters were a bit OOC. Overall I did like it but it needs more editing. Report Review
Oh my gosh I almost freaked when I thought you ended the story like that!! Great story! You are an awesome writer! Report Review
Wow!I mean it's hard to capture a characters voice especially when you didn't create it. Its just wonderful because you truly captured the voices to the characters! Report Review
urgh!!! i hate Miranda!! :( She's a horrible character an i really want Draco and Hermione to get on with life with out any complications. :D Report Review
i love you and hate you at the same time. a fake the end, really? i swear i stared at the screen for ten minutes then scrolled down to make sure it wasn't really the end. Report Review
First off, I really like the story. But seriously? Australia and Europe? Nowhere near each other, please check an Atlas! Report Review
style of writing for chapter 16 and 17 changed all of a sudden and I am getting a headache reading again and again "Hermyi.. Hermon... bloody hell, why didn't they call you something simple, like Janet".Its irritating and grating my nerves...a friend of mine had warned me about it but I didn't know it would be this bad.what does Astoria and Daphne "greengreyebrow" mean??why use "puppies" for something as simple as eyes??This is really spoiling the mood. Report Review
DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA WHAT YOU PUT ME THROUGH I WAS CRYING AFTER THE FIRST ENDING THINKING THAT WAS IT AND THEN T TURNS OUT TO BE A FALSE ENDING! I congratulate you this was a really good story but try not to do that ending thing again (just a word of advice) Report Review
You should put this story up at fanfiction .net and at Dramione .org!! Loved it! Report Review
you know ur not as cruel as i thought u were Report Review
Hi there! I've read your story in the last day or two and I love it! Also I absolutely HATE HATE HATE you to the point where I could murder your family and your neighbor's dog just to get back at you for that fake ending! Kidding! Still I started swearing when I saw that and fully intended to curse you out in a review. Good job. For real, no sarcasm. Its takes a really good author to get me that emotionally invested. Anyway, thanks for the fantastic read!
Elleinad Report Review
There are so many hesitations and foolishness that were enforced or acted in the book. Hermione being a know-it-all girl did not even know what she feels about Draco and super-duper-califragilisticexpialidociously dense. And Draco, on the other hand, became an - well, it's my opinion after all- extreme idiotic possessive man over Hermione. There are times that I roll my eyes at them when they take it out and refuse to be happy. But well, I cannot deny it, my eyes stayed glued on this magnificent book you have written, dear author. Contours is basically one of the most memorable book I have ever read in this site. Report Review
Literally had a mini panic attack with the fake ending.
Thankyou for writing this, i think that it's one of my top ten (I've read alot in the short time I've been on HPPF so be proud of yourself :) ). Report Review
Iv just read your book after a very long time and its still absolutly amazing. Iv cryed sad and happy tears jumped for joy and just down right wanted to punch someone. Thank you for writting this amazing book it'll always be one of my favourites, i hope you have more time to write more amazing book. Report Review
When you write fanfiction the characters are supposed to keep their personalities and defining traits you daft bimbo. Hermione would never do majority of the stuff in this story and if she loved someone and knew that they love er back she would be with them, not play stupid little games. Your writing style is nice but your organization is complete shit. Report Review
I read this story in a day. OH MY GOSH, you put me through so many stressful moments when I just had to go take a break from reading. It was phenomenal. Really, it was. Just amazing. I could have throttled something when you said you were just kidding at the fake ending, because I was FREAKING OUT. Like, I seriously stood up and jumped in frustration before I scrolled down. Grrr.
Anyway, I really liked this story.
Hopefully you'll update at time of cupids soon?
Shindig :D Report Review
so i read this story awhile ago and i love draco and hermione but I've just registered an account so i went beach and reread it and once again I'm blown away by how good it is! even though its slightly cliched but its very well written. i thought id just tell you that. [next time try adding the five senses, like what the characters smell or hear when they walk into a room or wake up or something, it gives it that slight edge to your writting but it might not be your style, you pick.] please write more ! i think you're talented < have you ever tried some original stuff? oh well. enjoy your weekend Report Review
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