I love this story. Who did you use for the girl on your banner? I like how there's more Rose and Scorpius in the story now. Can't wait for and update!Author's Response: Thanks- Loads more Scorpious and Rose coming up. Al and Becky will take a bit of a backseat to them for a few chapters as their story takes centre stage.
I honestly don't know who the girl is, the banner was in the Up For Grabs section at TDA. :) Report Review
I'm so glad you finally updated! I've been anxiously awaiting it. This chapter did change perspectives a lot, but I think it all flowed together pretty nicely. I'm also glad there was ample Al/ Becky time in this one; I can't wait for more of that! I hope your shoulder is ok, we can't have you taking this long to update again! hahaAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review. Next chapter will be submitted later today, just editing now. The rest of the story is coming along so updates should be much more regular from now xxx Report Review
wohooo i love this chapter update soon please :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! Another chapter is on its way in a couple of days! XXX Report Review
I just stumbled across your story on here today, and found that I could not stop reading it until I had finished your latest chapter. I really enjoy it so far. At first I was a little put out by Becky, and that is why I held off reviewing until I read all of your chapters. However, I loved the way she (finally) handled the situation with her scumbag (ex-.. YAY!) boyfriend. Anyway, I think you are a very good writer, and you have managed to get me invested in not only Becky and Albus, but Rose, Scorpius, James ect. as well. Which says a lot for your characterization abilities. Anyways, thank you for an enjoyable read. I do hope you update again soon!Author's Response: Wow thanks very much! I am smiling from ear to ear now :) xx I am starting to bring in the other characters more as Becky and Al begin to get over their past (maybe!) and there will be lots more going on from now. Thanks so much for keeping with the story! Another chapter on it's way in a couple of days. Thanks again xxx Report Review
Are you continuing this AMAZINGLY, AWESOME, STORY?!
-Naomi.Author's Response: i have been rubbish! Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review. I back and my latest chapter 'New Beginnings' is up. X Report Review
Well, what can I say... good story!!
It is set when most of the characters are out of Hogwarts, which is a good thing to make the story different from others :)
I'd really like to read how things are going to unfold, so I'll be here waiting to review!
The only "critic" I have to make is about Rebecca:
during these 10 chapters you still haven't really described her personality. I know she's changed, because of Josh, but I don't know how she was before and the most I've seen of her til now is just her being pretty weak.
I mean, she reacted just fine after New Year's Eve, which is surprising, but she had really chosen to close her eyes before. So I don't really like her that much, as for now at least..
But the rest is really good, I like the plot, your style and I can't wait to see Beck and Al back to how they were XD
italian girlAuthor's Response: great review! Thanks!
I know what you mean about the personality thing and I think I have been far to slow with her. I have been writing her reactions to the break up and how she gets back on her feet and I think you will see a significant improvement! (I hope anyway!). Im glad you like the plot. I have so many ideas for this I keep having to rewrite! Thanks again! xx Report Review
i like astoria in this story and draco,s dads not as bad as ron ,i think albus love,s his friend but does not know well i think he doesAuthor's Response: Thank for the review...
I like Astoria as well and I enjoyed writing her. Albus is a typical guy...clueless! thanks for checking out my story x Report Review
Great Great GREAT job!
~MarciaAuthor's Response: Really? Thanks very much! xxx Report Review
Hehe...I love Hugo! His lack of spy skills is really eduring :)
I'm glad that Al and Becky are making a little progress. I hope she goes to the get together...that would be interesting.
But I'm worried about Becky going back home. I hope Josh desn't convince her to take him back. She needs to get her independence back :)Author's Response: I totally agree with you about Bevky. We'll see what happens in the next chapter with that.
Thanks for the review xxx Report Review
When's the next chapter coming?Author's Response: thanks! ugh i have had a bit of a nightmare lately to be honest! Next chapter will be submitted today!
Thanks for the review x Report Review
Hey, great story!! One of my favourites. Keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next chapter.Author's Response: wow thanks! next chapter on its way.
Thanks for taking the time to review xxx Report Review
You know I like the story but I'm getting kind of tired of Rose always jumping on Albus and acting like the split is all his fault.Okay I get the whole 'in love don't want to believe he's cheating on me' reaction by Becky,but to just have Rose dismiss that and blame Albus for it all is not making me like her very much.Author's Response: Rose is a little nosy isn't she? Haha. She does care about Al though in her own way. Bless her. Sorry; but theres more of her to come soon...hopefully you will see a bit of a different side to her.
Thanks for the review! xx Report Review
That was great chapter again! Now I'm not mad anymore at Josh, I think I'm mad instead at Becky because I'm starting to wondering if she's smart because going out with friends that much and her spending all this time alone should make her suspicous. Maybe Al is better without her??? Sorry I don't really think so but she's pissing me off right now. I hope she will wake up really soon. Good job!Author's Response: Thanks for the review, this one made me laugh because I totally agree with you! I had a friend that was in the same situation as Becky is and she was totally blind to it all no matter what we said.
Becky is just a fool in love.
Thanks again for the review, Im glad you liked the chapter xx
Hey! well, i think this chapter was pretty damn good!
can you please just hex josh to death?
Loved the last line, i think it summed up pretty well.
Keep this up!
xxAuthor's Response: Thanks very much for the review! I really wasn't sure about this chapter. Hexing Josh to death would be quite fun actually...he is getting on my nerves a bit now! Maybe in a couple of chapter down thee line I may consider it!
Thanks for reviewing again...much appreciated! xxx
i nearly lost hope for this story! but you i'm glad you found that memory stick!!
i like the flashback sequence and loving the characters.
can't wait for more !!
keep it up.
xxAuthor's Response: aw thanks very much! Im amazed that people actually like reading my story!
Im glad you liked the flashback, it was really neccessary and i have another one written for later on in the story and that is also necessary!
More to come with Josh Im afraid...
Thanks for keeping an eye on this story I really appreciate the comments! xx Report Review
You're right, it's been a long time but that is such a good story so that was worth the wait. The chapter was good and necessary I think because you mentionned that row in the past chapter. So keep going because I feel bad for Al and I can't wait (especially after the wait) for Becky to finally realize the fact that Josh is cheating on her.Author's Response: Aw I know I feel really sorry for Al as well. He is a little grumpy of late, but he is a charming guy really!
More to come on the Josh front, but things will pick up action wise in the next couple of chapters!
Thanks for looking out for this story and thanks for reviewing...much appreciated! xx Report Review
hey amazing chapter once again. When are you going to update? I'm dying to read the next chapter. ChelseaAuthor's Response: hey i love prongs (me too by the way) it's been ages since i was on here. I had major pc probs and I lost my memory stick with the next 6 chapters on it. I started to re write, but then I found it the other day!! I tweaked chappie 5 and I am well on my way again!
Thanks for taking the time to review, especially when I have been so rubbish at updating! xx Report Review
i was checking if you updated...and i was sad that you haven' yet :(
your story is in my top 3 favs atm. =D
anyways, after re-reading this chapter, i fell inlove with it even more!
well done. update soon ;)
xoxoAuthor's Response: aww thanks very much! I will let you into a secret...I have lost my memory stick with the other chappies on so I am frantically trying to re-write...hopefully this week will be the next installment!!
Thanks though this has actually made me more determined to keep going! xx Report Review
hey, great story!!
i'm looking forward to the story getting more developed.
the characters are great.
keep it up.
xoxoAuthor's Response: thank you!
More to come soon...watch this space!
xx Report Review
hey! great story, so far. its got great potential :)
i loved the twist and i wonder how its gonna impact Al and Becky's relationship.
Rose is cool :) can't wait to see a bit of Scorp! you write wonderfully.
great work.Author's Response: aw thanks ;)
Rose is definately my fav character at the mo, so lots of her...theres is definately lots of scorp to come as well so whatch this space! x Report Review
i love how this story is developing :)
i despise that josh. hmmm. always, knew there was something up with him...
anyways, great writing. greatly anticipating the next chapter.
xoox update soon!Author's Response: ohh thanks!
ah Josh...im sure every girl knows a Josh...but then many girls may also know an Al as well.
Thanks again...update on the way! xx Report Review
the characters are great! i'm liking this story :)
hoping for some rose and scorpius tho...
xxAuthor's Response: There will be a Rose/Scorpius backstory to this...not till a few chapters time though- once everyone has got to know Becky a bit more.
Thanks for the review! xx Report Review
hey, great start!
can't wait for more!!
xoxoAuthor's Response: thanks! more on it's way...it's in the queue! xx Report Review
Hey, I don't have an account because I don't write which also means that I rarely review stories, but I read this and I just felt like I needed to tell you that I really like the way the you've started this story. I particularly enjoy the way you're building the story, quite often people just go in and explain the situation straight away, but the way you're revealing information keeps it interesting and I'm left wanting to read more.
I already like the character of Becky and I'm itching to find out more about her and Al. I hope we learn more about their childhood because it appears they go back a long way. Josh doesn't seem like a complete idiot yet, so it would be an interesting triangle if there is actually nothing wrong with him as a person just Al being jealous. Also it's really good to see Al actually working, it's not all happy and easy as other authors make it seem. I can imagine it being hard following in the footsteps of Harry Potter!
I really like Rose and the way she helped make the situation less awkward. Will we see a lot of her in the story. It's actually really good to read about the whole Wealey clan and the real family atmosphere you've created.
Well anyway, enough of the rambling (sorry! that's why I don't review lol), I just wanted to say that I'm enjoying this and hope to read more of it soon!Author's Response: Hey, thanks for such a great review!
Im glad you like the beginning, I was worried everyone would think i was too slow!
Plenty more of Rose to come so no worries there!
They do go back a long way and that will definately be explained!
thanks for taking the time to review!
xx Report Review
I really like the beginning of this. It actually reminds me of one of the main story ideas I have for my next Novel. I love the sense of family in this chapter.
The only thing I can say is that the spacing of this looks kind of intimidating.Author's Response: thanks there will be a big focus on family in this story.
thanks for the spacing comment, as it's my first novel on here I would love feedback, so I will look at that for my next chapters. xx Report Review
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