update much? either delete it, update, or abondon it...Author's Response: hey, when you read it the update had been validated yet. So shut your trap and re-read, again. Report Review
ok..you should SOO totally make Lily go to the Shrieking Shack with them, she can ride on James back when he is a stag, and something happens, and someone gets hurt (you will have to think of who,how and where) and,like the other person said, you should have them sneak into Slughorn's office to get the stuff for the potion, and get csught or something. Report Review
Nice so far. umm Idk what to say othwise...lol better than I could do. I sucks at writing Report Review
YOu've done really well so far!!!
Maybe next you could have them all break into Slughorns office to get some ingredients and Snape's in there and they all get detention and can't go with Remus to the Shrieking Shack so Sirius gets anoid with Lily or something!!
There are a few parts that don't make sense like when words are missing or there are too many so you should proof read outloud to yourself or get some1 else to read it.
Can't wait 4 da next chapterAuthor's Response: Thanks for the support and ideas. I will make sure to re-read them several times to make sure they make sense. I think I will definately use your idea for having Sirius get annoyed with Lily. That's sounds like it will be fun to write. Report Review
this story is amazing
but james, sirius and peter found
out 'bout remus's furry little
problem themselves and
dumbledore didnt tell themAuthor's Response: I know. I just felt like adding that when I wrote the story. Plus I would think that Lily probably would have figured it out early, but that didn't fit with the plot so therefore it did not turn out that way. I'm glad that you like it. Thanks for reviewing. Report Review
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