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Ah, when I saw you had a Dominique story, I jumped at it because Dominique is one of my favourite characters and I love writing her, so I am always curious to know how others portray her =) Needless to say, I wasn't disappointed.

You had some beautiful imagery here and great metaphorical descriptions that I enjoyed immensely. The angst, the pain, the tension is palpable throughout the narrative and I loved it. The plot seems to be very interesting and I am curious to know what is wrong with Dominique and what has happened. This seems like a great first chapter to a promising story, so keep it up!

I hope to come back for chapter 2 soon!

10/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

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The 'making it up as you go along' thing is definitely working. I love this story so much! Dom is an agnsty cow when she wants to be, but what dying person wouldn't be? Also, Finn seems like a real cutie - desperate to know his reaction to Dom's unintended confession. Thanks so much for sharing!

Author's Response: aw aren't you just lovely! i do have a vague idea of where it's going, but then finn seemed to butt in and go 'i wanna know!' and well, how could i say no? :P yes, dom is a mopey thing isn't she? so glad you like finn, i reckon he's pretty cool. thank you so much for the lovely review :)

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Nice job with Dom's characterization! I'm also liking Rose and the others' dynamics so far - great work! :)

Author's Response: characterization is one of my weak points so i'm so glad you like her! thank you so much :)

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I realyyy like this. Please continue and update soon! x

Author's Response: thank you :) next chapter is in progress!

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Really great start :) Keep up with the good work and I'll definitely be reading! :)
xxx sofia

Author's Response: thank you so much!

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Ah, it's very sad to read about Dom's frailness and her possible death looming near... As a character she is written very well and I have very clear mental images about her, thus it's even sadder to read about her. I hope she gets better and will live :)

Author's Response: well we'll have to see won't we ;) thank you very much :)

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your story is very nice. i hope to read more ahahaha good luck!

Author's Response: thank you :)

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This sounds like it is going to be a really good story. I'm looking forward to the next part xx

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ahh i like this. update soon!

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Hello there! I saw your post in the review threads and decided to help a fellow Gryffie, yay!

Fabulous imagery in your writing here. Your metaphors are also fantastic and really add to the mood of your story. There is a darkness to it, but I sense a tinge of sarcasm at points which was lovely to see.

Very intriguing first chapter, it peaks the interest and makes the reader want to continue on. Excellent job!

Smiles~Leent

Author's Response: Yay! Helping Gryffs out is always a good start, bonus points if it's giving someone a review cos, well, reviews rock. Majorly.

Mwahaha, I am the queen of sarcasm (or so I've been told), I didn't intend for it to be sarcastic but, huh, sarcasm rules. It's like the best thing since sliced bread. Which is saying something, cos sliced bread is like the best thing since. they invented sliced bread.

I love it when people pick up on things I never even knew where there... Thank you so much for reviewing!

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Absolutley excellent writing, I"m utterly hooked, Cannot wait for more! I'm desperate to find out what happened, what's wrong with her. I like that it's from Dom's POV, I haven't seen that done before, so nice original concept. I love the description that you put into each sentence, I feel like you're really enjoying writing and that we get a sense of exactly what you're conveying.Excellent Job, I look forward to more. Thank YOU! xx

Author's Response: Wow... Thank you just about sums it up. I do love writing it, I'm glad you get that idea, it's a bit angst but I suppose thats what girls do best :P No, thank YOU for reviewing and making my day!

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This is amazing. Update soon. It seems like a unique story and I can't wait for more. I am a fein for descriptions and your descriptions are the best.

Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I'm a fein for descriptions as well, can you tell? :P Thank you for reviewing!

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Very good. Great descriptions.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! They make my day :D

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This is really great, very well-written. I liked the plot a lot and I hope you update soon.
Keep up the good work.

xox

Author's Response: Aww thank you! The next chapter is in the queue and has been since Sunday so here's to hoping it'll be up soon!

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Oh my goodness. This is amazing! It's so discriptive, I think that is totally what she would be thinking.

I also like the Teddy Lupin aspect.

The only grammatical error I noticed was when you said. 'gently she pulled her arms away gently.'

Great job, please update soon!

Cheers,

-Rosie

Author's Response: Haha, that's so typical of me, I'll edit that ASAP. Gently she pulled her arms away gently... trust me to make no sense! And thank you so much! I love reviews and reviewers even more!

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The description in this was almost horrible, in the loveliest of ways-of course. A really wonderful job, I can't wait to read more :]

-Rose.

Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I think I get what you mean, lol, horrible in a lovely way?... This chapter has just been put in the queue to be edited slightly, but I'll put the next chapter up ASAP. Thank you so much!

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wow.
That was intense. So good! I can't wait for the next chapter.
10'/10

Author's Response: Aww! Thank you! I will try and update ASAP, hopefully it'll be in the queue some time tonight! Thank you again!

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I love your descriptions here. You do a very good job of painting a picture. Okay, I get that Dom's a werewolf, so she's having a hard time with the transformations? And Teddy's a werewolf too? I'm just making sure :P I'm wondering who this person is at the end of this chapter. Is he a new love interest? And how long is she going to live?

Good chapter. I'm looking forward to more!

-momoe

Author's Response: Thank you! I have been told more often than not that I'm too descriptive, but I personally love a descriptive writer so do tend to go a little.. overboard XD Yup, Dom's a werewolf and she's having problems with transformations, and glad you like him =D He might be popping up later.. I haven't decided yet, hehe. Ahh, to tell you how long she's going to live would be telling wouldn't it?! I suppose you'll just have to read and find out :P

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I really liked this story. Really captured the inner life of this stressed, agonized, disturbed young girl. What, indeed, must it be like to be a werewolf? I think your story lets the reader have a good idea of what it must feel like to be inside an adolescent werewolf's head.

Excellent writing.

Author's Response: Aww! Thank you so much! Reviews like this make my day!
I was wondering it myself one day so here it is, I can't imagine the pain and stress it must be so it's quite a challenge trying to write it out. I just hope I portray it as the majority of people imagine it.. if they've ever imagined it...
Thank you yet again!

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