aw. this was precious! I always love stories like this! :)
breezieairAuthor's Response: awe, thanks. I have to let them have a happy time for them, I just felt so sorry for them. Report Review
awawawa but can u just explain to me what happenned with sirious,and harry?y did he get so upset? Report Review
It was a nice story of what could've been an average day for the Potters. Although I have to ask, why Iceland? And the plate of raw meat was rather unsettling. But perhaps that was because I cooked pork chops tonight and had to deal with the blood. Who knows.
I found a few mistakes for you that I've put the corrections in italics for you.
Lily grumbled in agreement as her eyes scanned over all
“I saw this lovely necklace and James wouldn’t buy me it.” (this sentence I felt would've sounded better as "I saw this lovely necklace and James wouldn't buy it for me." But technically speaking your sentence isn't wrong, it just doesn't sound right to me)
Hope I helped a little bit.
=^_^=Author's Response: I dont know Iceland, I just picked it... just another one of those random things.
*shivers* I can't stand bloody meat, it just give freaks me out. Yet again, Remus is a werewolf and would most likely have the urge to eat bloody meat even if he has been a werewolf for a couple of years by this stage.
Yea, im with you on the sentence, now that I re-read it, it totally doesnt sound right. I'll go back and change it. thanks for pointing it out.
~sarah Report Review
That's really sweet, honestly. I loved the Mother/Son affection that was present throughout the story, and I loved how you included ELVENDORK. *revels*
Nice job. Report Review
omg, the end is SO sad! I'm like, i don't know, sad.
I know i sound really stupid but...
well, anyways, i luved this! Report Review
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