I really liked this :) It's awesome!

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Hey OneoftheWeasleys, it's notreallyblonde44 from the forums. You requested a review from me about er-forever ago, but I'm here to finally give it :) Dreadfully sorry about the delay! First off, must say excellent song choice!

'Coughs, one right after another, and wheezing voices traveled quickly towards George's ears, making his mind race with thoughts of turning back around and leaving the overcrowded hospital.' -Remember now this isn't the atypical hospital room. I would have loved to see some green and blue monster or a broken mistletoe or something just as ridiculous :P

I really like George's playful behavior and flirty ways. I can tell he is just being silly and it's quite nice to read.

'George felt someone enter his room.' -I feel that the use of felt here makes it seems less like he sensed another presence and more like someone touched him...

Also, you mentioned the throbbing a few times, is it a mere annoyance? Or is it actually painful? Maybe some more details about his problem would be nice to read. And same thing goes for the gloves. If they are so horrible I expect a bit more emphasis on what they look like and how ridiculous she looks always wearing them. I like the depth to her character with the whole afraid of germs but is a healer. It makes me wonder why she is a Healer and I love to think critically about a character, it makes them more real to me. So yes my suggestion here is to draw a bit more out of the scenery and what your characters are talking about. Because gloves in Mungo's doesn't seem like such a bad idea to me.

'Those pathetic little...' -Hahaha I can only imagine what he is looking at then, nice touch of narration

'when George whispered into her ear, "I can't imagine black lace and elastic gloves making a good combination. It would throw off the whole--sexiness of undergarments."' -two problems that I have. One is that I thought she was getting a jar and therefore not close enough to be in whispering distance. Another is George's big mouth lol. That boy is frisky! And walking a very dangerous line, if I were Prudence I would give him something to make his hands worse.

'that seemed to yell at Prudence, 'I have a superb life with a husband who is excellent at love-making, while all you have is a dog that doesn't answer when you speak to it.' -This is great! I love that she is so like messed up about the way her life is going and her day that she is somewhat delusional. This is very realistic OC :)

Very cute ending! I liked how George impacted her life in an unexpected way and how she responds to the change he made. The list of Eleanor's was quite a comedic end as well. The holding of the hands would seem forced/rushed in many other circumstances, but I feel that the fact that Prudence never really felt anything before makes this action of holding hid hand more believable. The only suggestions I have is for more emphasis on Prudence's life in terms of her phobia getting in the way of her life so the gift has more of a punch and dramatic impact as well. Also, maybe a mention of when this takes place would be nice. And I only say this for canon purposes, because I thought for a second that maybe Fred didn't really exist...

Hope this helped, feel free to hit me up on my review thread again!

Best,
Lisa

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This was a wonderful story. I loved how you brought the lyrics into the story. I also really liked how you kept George in character, and not having to change for anyone else. This was well written and flowed perfectly. Keep up the good work :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad that you enjoyed it. The twins are my favorite characters so I'm glad to know they stayed canon. Thank you again! :D

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Hi, I'm Rachel and I'm here from the forums to review for you. *reporting to duty and at your service, ready and raring to go. Tehe* So this was one of the best oneshot's i have ever read. I really like George now after reading it.

It was very sweet, and incredibly well written. I couldn't find anything wrong with it. It was excellent.

I really liked the name prudence, it's a different name. Very mysterious and it's not a name you hear in everyday typical speech. I like how you picked a different name.

You wrote this lovely. I truly enjoyed it. Feel free to request for another review anytime. keep on writing! Wow this is my review number 601. Holy macrel i've been reviewing a lot!:)

Author's Response: Thanks so much Rachel! And I'm glad to know you like George (he is one of my favorite). :D I really can't tell you how much I loved your review, it really made my night.

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Wow! Kudos to you for writing the best one-shot I've ever read!

But, let me say, that the first thing I noticed about this story was the girls name. Prudence. It thought that name was unique and mysterious. It speaks her character.

I was very surprised on the way that you went with it. I thought the healer/patient love interest was very cute and interesting which is what made me continue to read it. The anticipation of seeing what Geore was coming up with also keeps you reading.

I have never seen an OC character being a germaphobic and thought that as a very unique idea so good job. :] I thought that was very creative. And the way George always joked about the fact that she constantly wore gloves definetely would be his character. I believe you represented George Weasley's character very well.

I think the part of the story that made it all worth while was the ending. I loved it! With Eleanor crossing her off from the list. I've never seen that before.

Overall, to recap, I thought the story was very good! Unique, Creative, and very very cute. 10/10!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! :D The story was thought up because of a Beatles challenge, and I only thought it fit to name Prudence after one of the songs. And I thought the name was different from any other.

When it came to trying to find a reason for George wanting to hold her hand, I raked my mind for days for a good reason for her hands not wanting to be touched. And the only one I could come up with would to have her be a germaphobic.

Thanks again for such a lovely review, you really had me blushing. I really can't thank you enough!

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That was great! It was very descriptive and the ending was so sweet!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it :D

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Hello this is KaraBlack returning your review request (sorry it took so long)

But aw! I like this story! Its so cute and wonderful! It makes me happy! :D

I honestly didn't find anything wrong with it. It was so wonderfully written and I just have to love George now, seriously, who doesn't love the sacastic funny man? haha :D

He was great just like the rest of the one-shot. For this to be your first one-shot you did a wonderful job with it! (My first one-shot i hated/still hate! lol)

Once again an amazing one-shot great job in general :D

-KaraBlack-

If you would like another review, please, don't hesitate to ask :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it and it's fine about the wait. Haha, he is quite the funny man. :D I truely can't thank you enough for your kind words, you are too nice :D Thanks again for reviewing!

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Hey, I liked this story. It was nicely written and an enjoyable read that was different than other romance fics. I only found a few mistakes while reading through. Up near the top, when George had approached the dept. store with the old-fashioned dummies, you misspelled 'wandered' as 'wondered' when you wrote that his gaze 'wondered' around, or something of the sort. It should be 'wandered' instead. :)

I also noticed that you mistook 'quiet' for 'quite' quite a few times here and there in the story. But there wasn't anything wrong with the sentences they were written in, just that you put the 'e' in the wrong place and made it the other word instead of the word you meant.

And then I noticed that you wrote 'than' in a sentence when it should have been 'then'. A simple mistake as it can be sometimes hard to figure which to use, but both have different meanings. 'Then' is used often when talking about something happening in time and 'than' is used when comparing/contrasting anything. That's as good as I can explain the two. Anyway, here's the sentence--

'...leaving men to wait for you than blowing them off...' Just changing the 'a' in than to an 'e' to make 'then' would fix it.

Overall, excellent plot and flow. I thought you did a great job writing all of the characters. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it and pointed out those mistakes. I'll be sure to change them straight away (for some reason I always to the quiet and quite words even though in my head I'm telling my fingers to write the right one. :D) Again thank you for helping, I really appreciate it!

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