Love the story, the last chapters are getting really good. You handled the action bit in this one pretty good, great writing! I would love to see more to come (: Report Review
I just started reading this today and I got so into it. Continue! I'm in love with your story it's really unique :) Report Review
Please, please come back! This is a great story, but we NEED more, please. Just let us know if your coming back or if you have abandoned this story & your writing. If your busy we understand, we just want to know if we should keep check on this story. Please come back, you are a great writer, thanks. Report Review
Please post the next chapter soon! I've been following this story since the beginning and it is one of my absolute favorites. I've always felt it was quite well-written, particularly the characterization. Liked the bit of action in this chapter but it's a cliffhanger so please update ASAP!!! Thank you so much for sticking with this story! Report Review
This is one of my favourite Ron/Hermione stories ever, please continue it soon :) Report Review
I would like to point out that this is getting cruel - don'tyou understand we NEED the next chapter. We can not survive without it , surely you want us to survive? Report Review
i honestly cant get over how much i love this story and your writing :D Report Review
Normally I don't rush the author. But I can't wait anymore! Please please please update this story has me hooked! Please! Update! Report Review
Hey! Finally saw all the updates! I love that this hasn't been abandoned and I can't wait to read more! (But seriously, so so so glad you are still writing!) Keep updating and I can't wait to read more. :) Report Review
Nah this isn't funny anymore,we've waited months.. It's felt like years! Searching the story and every time being struck down by the same 20 chapters.. Please I beg you, finish this! So I can move on with my life. Report Review
Please...we need an update...your story is fantastic!!! Report Review
Please update soon!
If not for us your devoted fans but for Ron and hermione. Report Review
If u don't mine me asking I would like to know how I see u updates. It says u updated like two weeks ago but it still says u only have twenty chapters. I'm new to this sit Report Review
You are a truly magnificent author and you simply must continue writing this. I'm not sure when you posted this chapter but I have just completed it and all the rest in one go , let me tell you I am gripped. You want critiscism? I can't keep reading because you haven't written it yet. Its worse than normal books because I physically can't keep reading. I hope you manage to keep this magnificence up and post the next chapter soon. Thank you for a delightful evening of reading on my part. Report Review
Hi! I'm back for a swap :P
I feel like i've read this story before, ages ago because it all just seems so familiar somehow... It's weird. I see that it's been up for a while though so i might have years ago.
Anyway, this is a really lovely first chapter. I love how you start with Harry and Ginny and i just feel for them. Feel for Harry because he's lost his best friends of 7 + years - the people he'd depended on for ages and Ginny keeps rubbing these wounds they both have. It would be so hard in that situation because you don't want to give up but then- when do you move on? It seems like there is never the right time to. It was heartbeaking to see this trauma in their lives almost tear them apart as well because they don't know how to cope with the loss two of the most important people of their lives. I'm curious about the three years previous, what Harry did to find Hermione and Ron and what evidence suggests they're dead. He isn't the kind of guy to give up so I hope I can see where he has lost his hope.
I liked the snippets of Ron and Hermione. It's clear that they both live very separate lives at this point but i like how they both know that there is some component in their lives that is unfulfilled. I also think you characterized them really well with how they dealt with that, Ron tries to just go with it, to keep moving as if it doesn't matter that he's lost most of his life somehow. Hermione on the other hand seems to have had a lot of issues with it and a lot of self-analysis over this loss (at least, that's what i gathered from her and the nurse's talk)
This is a really great beginning and the flow of your writing is so smooth. Really lovely job! Report Review
I've been trying to hard to slow down on reviewing so that I don't run out of chapters to review but I just can't help it! Ugh.
First of all. FEELS. You've attacked me with Fred feels and the pictures was so stinking beautiful. It was such a perfect thing for Ron to do. He's not good with talking about feelings, so just the small gesture of the picture turned me into a ball of smushy feels.
Backing up to Hermione's first section. She's such a mess right now, I just want to hug her. She absolutely doesn't belong in the muggle world, but how can she feel like she belongs in the wizard world whens he can't get anything to work?? Ron has his family, so even if it takes ages to remember and relearn everything, he still has his family there to anchor him and give him a place to belong. But Hermione, even though we know she's just as much as part of the family, doesn't get that. She doesn't have a family that belongs in the wizard world to help her along, well she does but she doesn't under how close they are and how close they've always been and bahhh. Please tell me this all ends happy?
Oh God. I love the idea of Johnathan getting owl post. His perfectly logical annoying structured self deserves to be shaken up a bit. I wish I could feel worse for him, but I just don't. He doesn't even know who Hermione truly is, so there's no way he can actually love her. Yep. That's my story and I'm sticking to it :P
You're writing is, as always, beautiful. I don't want to be almost out of chapterrsss ;(;( Report Review
Well hello! I'm back for yet another installment in this lovely Review Swap!
Oh my gosh- Hermione is going to call of the Greece trip? I can't imagine that Jonathan will be pleased with that... Especially not since he likes order so much. And she won't even be able to give him a satisfactory reason since she's following a whim. I'm sensing a rupture in their relationship appearing any moment...
But though I'm sure that will be painful for Hermione, she will be working with Ron! (So that kind of makes up for it. Definitely makes up for it).
I really enjoyed their interaction in this chapter. Their every word, their every action... Everything felt natural and once again I was reminded of why they're such a great couple. They fit together, more so than she and Jonathan ever would.
It was very interesting to see Hermione trust her heart over her brain here as it's not something she does very often. She's going into a place where the kind of research she has available won't be of any use (and I do wonder how she'll react to that piece of news). Furthermore, she's going into a place she's been avoiding for the past few years and I can't imagine how frightening that will be. At least she'll have Ron beside her, though. :D
As well, I thought that you did a fabulous job with the interaction between Harry and Ginny. Harry's reactions do make sense because, as you said here, he didn't give up immediately. He searched and searched and searched until he had exhausted every possibility he could think of. Unfortunately, I still suspect that he will feel guilty when Ginny turns out to have been correct with her sighting of Ron. It's in his nature.
As well, his proposal worked so beautifully within the framework of the scene. They didn't need something big or elaborate- they just needed each other and the strength of their love for one another. Great job!
All in all, I think that you did a great job with this chapter and you're continuing to move this stoyr along a very nice pace. It's impossible to feel anything but entranced here. Great work! :D Report Review
Jingle bells, jingle bells, jingle all the way...
Back again for another ho-ho-holiday review!
It's hard to even find the right words to explain how difficult and wonderful this chapter was to read. It dipped through such low places and ended on such an amazing high. This is the reason I love reading stories about characters that I know so well and identify with so strongly! For a time, they can take you places beyond the reach of everyday life. Thank you for that.
In the first scene on the chapter, I thought you did a brilliant job of capturing Hermione's swirling mess of conflicting emotions. There's just so much wrong in her life at that moment, it's understandable that it takes her a while to sort it all out. Anger and embarrassment and hurt and guilt and through it all this desire to have Ron back. Throughout the time they've known one another, I'm sure anyone would have lost count of the number of times that she and Ron stormed off in opposite directions, swearing that they would never speak to one another again, but she can't possibly know that, so she's left with only the empty feeling that she's wrecked everything. From her point of view, I guess Scotland would seem like a sensible place to begin sorting the whole mess out. That was where this journey began and she has lots of unfinished business there.
Molly was awesome in this chapter! The love and sensibilities of a mother came through so clearly as she smacks a bit of sense into Ron. I'm sure she was very hurt by Hermione's outburst, but it doesn't take her much time at all to put her priorities in line. The only thing that felt a bit odd was that she didn't go looking for Hermione after she realized what Ron had done. Maybe she did and Hermione had already found her way to the Lovegoods' house, but I think a little bit of clarification from Molly would close that small gap in her reaction.
Finally! Yes! A chapter where I can actually begin to like Ginny. Thank you, thank you, thank you! Not only does she complete Molly's riot act to Ron, but she actually owns up to her own culpability in the great scheme of things. The new information she reveals was very ominous. I'm suddenly very worried about Hermione traveling to Scotland by herself. If the kidnappers know that Ron and Hermione have learned about their past and she's there all alone, then I hope those magical protections Harry gave her were strong, indeed!
To wrap up that section, I really, really loved the way you characterized Ron and Ginny's relationship growing up. A couple of my favorite fics involve an adorable 11-year-old Ron sending letters back to his little sister, admitting how much he misses her and telling her about the exciting things he's doing at Hogwarts.
You probably thing that I was cheering out loud when Hermione lowers the boom on Jonas. Don't be silly. I'm at work. ;) But as much as I wanted to dance with glee, I couldn't help but feel terribly for her. It had to be an awful kick in the gut to realize that this entire life she had built for herself suddenly means nothing to her. She really seemed to be trying to find something, anything that would spark a reaction: sadness or anger or love or guilt. In the end, all she felt was empty. Like reading a poorly-written paperback. It was really sad for her. Jonas can go take a long walk off a short pier. It's like he's more angry than hurt, almost inconvenienced by her leaving.
The scene were she destroys her office gave me a lot of closure. I assume it did for her, as well. She puts the last nails in the coffin of her "new" life. I loved the way that, once the emotional turmoil passed, she actually felt better. You wrote the emotions of this section brilliantly!
So just to balance out this review a tiny bit, I did see one typo:
"Hermione briefly though how strange it was how sometimes one readies himself up for something, the decision is made and in that certain moment the courage, determination or wants just fail, and the person doesn’t know what to do." - "briefly thought". I love this paragraph, though!
I'm so close to the last posted chapter! You have to get another chapter up before the queue closes, you just have to! I don't know whether I can make it til January. The air is getting thin. I hear dead relatively calling out to me from a distant point of light...
OK, that was a little over-dramatic, but please update soon. Beautiful chapter! Great job and Happy Holidays! Report Review
I loved the Weasley reunion! Molly's tearful hug, Charlie crashing through the window, Percy's awkward handshake, all of it was great. The little nods toward Fred missing were really well done and added a twinge of sadness to the otherwise happy scene.
When Harry first apparated to Godric's Hollow, I thought he was taking Hermione to his parent's grave...which would've been a little awkward. I love the idea that Harry had Hermione's parents buried there, near his own. They've always had this brother/sister relationship (which I adore), so Harry taking care of her parent's burial arrangements just seems really right to me. It was such a sad scene, but it was really beautifully done. Report Review
Yay! Happy and confusing reunions ftw! I think you did a fantastic job with this chapter. I can only imagine how difficult this chapter was to write, as it is a terribly complicated situation. Where do you even begin when trying to recreate a lifetime of memories?
I think you wrote all four (well, five if you count Crookshanks) of the characters really well. Their reactions seemed very natural. I love how accepting Ron is right away and how ambivalent Hermione is. It's so very in character for both of them. Especially because Ron is returning to a world that he has always been a part of, where he has this huge family that is amazing and loves him. Whereas, Hermione just found out that her parents weren't magical and they're dead. I mean, the Weasleys accept her and love her as family, but she doesn't know that and it's not quite the same.
I applaud your skill and can't wait to read more. :D Report Review
Ok, so it is really, really difficult to stop at this point and leave a review (dang cliffhangers!), but I wanted to comment on this chapter.
As previously mentioned, I adore the budding relationship between Ron and Hermione. The little hints of canon you throw in and the memories leaking through really make this story for me. Their interactions and conversations are just so perfect, especially the one after Hermione's shower. You've somehow managed to write them with a certain level of awkwardness, but also a familiarity. It so incongruous, but fits perfectly with their relationship at this point. Then, of course, jealous!Ron has to show up and ruin everything. Oh, Ron...
Ok, I can totally see where Ginny is coming from, especially since we know that Ron and Hermione are alive and right around the corner, but she is seriously being unreasonable. Harry is kind of a saint at this point.
Side note: the three of them searching London is a hilarious image. You have Ginny in the front with her map, muttering spells under her breath. A few steps behind is an increasingly agitated and impatient Harry. And a few steps behind him, is a fluffy ginger cat, trailing them through the streets. Hilarity!
Wait...can't you accio living creatures? Harry accio's Hagrid in the Seven Potters chapter of DH and it seems to work, at least a bit.
Anyway, I need to cut off this review so I can read the next chapter now. So excited! Report Review
I apologize in advance for how disjointed this review is. I'm kind of writing it as I go through, so bare with me.
I just loved Ron's reflections at the beginning of this chapter about how he had never had close family and friends, and how it doesn't seem strange to him since he was an only child. It was pretty heartbreaking. Of course you miss them, Ron. You have the world's best friends and family!
Can I just say, that little tidbit about George seeing a therapist after bouts of wandering around naked was pure gold. I laughed out loud. Priceless :D
I love how tidbits of their old relationship are slipping back in without them really understanding or even being aware of what is happening. Hermione scolding Ron about his table manners, Ron goading Hermione about always being in the library. It's so great to watch them get to know each other and (hopefully) fall in love again.
Gah! It kills me that Harry was right there and didn't see them! Dang stubborn Harry, if you would have just given in to your weird feeling for three seconds you could have found them! I am glad that Hermione had a twinge of familiarity when she saw him. It would have broken my heart if she hadn't felt anything upon seeing him.
The scene of Ron and Hermione in the Leaky Cauldron was so fantastically written. You really captured what it would be like for two "ordinary muggles" to accidentally stumble into the Leaky Cauldron. Leave it to Hermione to be so logical about the entire situation. I loved what you wrote about Hermione feeling like denying magic is a lie. Especially the part about how it's the same type of lie as her life with Jonathan. She's denying who she truly is, even though she isn't aware of that yet. It was a really great, touching, well-written moment.
And then you threw in a foul-mouthed Jarvey. Hysterical. This story is just getting better and better.
Ah, Harry and Ginny. I really like the way you are writing their relationship. You really get a feel for the depth of their feelings for one another and for Ron and Hermione. I found it a bit surprising at first that Harry had moved on from looking for them, but the more I read this story, the more sense it makes. Harry is used to loss. His whole life had been a series of losing the people he cares for the most, so he knows how to push it aside and move on. It's the only way he could still be functioning at this point. That being said, I'm so glad that Ginny is keeping up the search. And now that Crookshanks is involved I sense a very confusing, but hopefully happy reunion in the future! *fingers crossed*
This was an absolutely fabulous chapter. Definitely my favorite so far, which is saying something since I'm kind of in love with this story :D Report Review
Well- I'm back for another chapter in another installment in the Review Swap!
Wow- you've certainly move the story along quite nicely in this chapter! To begin, I really enjoyed the first scene in the story because it showed that there were more cracks in Hermione's relationship with Jonathan than just her missing past. It's not that he's a bad person... But he seems rather uncompromising and he doesn't seem to realize that Hermione doesn't enjoy the parties. He's stiff and rule-bound... And now I truly am making him seem like a bad guy. Ah well- at least Hermione has good reasons to give when she breaks up with him. Because she will. To return to Ron. And her proper life.
Ron's section was also very well done. It's nice to know for sure that the connection was felt on both sides and that he wants to figure out what's missing from his past as well. The nurse was mean, but I do understand why she wouldn't give him the information. Ron had no legal reason to be asking for it and I'm pretty sure that I wouldn't want my private information to be given out willy nilly.
And then here I thought Ron was going to have to wait for two weeks before he would be able to track Hermione down at the hospital... You've certainly made their lives a lot easier with this accidental bumping-into. Something tells me that Hermione may end up cancelling the trip she's taken with Jonathan (or at least be a lot less enthousiastic about going on it).
I liked Ginny's section in this chapter as well, especially since it means that Ginny's found a link to Ron! They're all coming together, slowly but surely, and she also has a hint about how Ron and Hermione forgot their past! Yay!
However, I do have one small piece of critique. I suggest that you include more emotional detail during the part where Ginny discovers the Memory Dust because it seems a little odd that she would go straight to the cupboard. I think that a little description about how she found the glow very curious and she couldn't deny her curiosity would really help to explain why she approached the cupboard.
All in all, I think that you're continuing to do a great job with this story! It's very interesting and definitely fast-paced, which is great because it means that we're getting much closer to Hermione and Ron's reunion! Great work! :D Report Review
Well, this is you 96th review on this story, so my guess is I will say absolutely nothing in here that you have not already heard.
I absolutely loved this. What a unique idea. I really don't even want to write this review, I just want to keep reading what you have here, but I shall refrain :)
First of all, one thing I really liked about the characters of Ron and Hermione was that even though they were living completely separate and seemingly Muggle lives, they both felt this component that was missing, something that wasn't entirely right. This of course could be due to the fact that they are missing all their memories, but it serves just as well to say that they miss each other. The void in their life is large.
Believe it or not, I also really like that they have moved on with their lives, gotten jobs, perhaps relationships. They are making it on their own, despite their family looking for them this whole time.
You build suspense so very well, and this is such a shocking beginning to the story, what with Ron's car accident and all. I felt completely captivated throughout the entire thing. The writing was smooth and the transitions between each POV was flawless. Sometimes that transition can feel clunky but I didn't get that feeling here at all.
I also think you have good transitions between dialogue and narrative. The dialogue feels natural, and again, adds to the overall flow of the story
I thought this was brilliantly done, excellent job :) Report Review
Hellloo there Liz! Returning a review for the Holiday Review Swap thing :D Thanks for your lovely review; I'll get down to replying soon! I was initially undecided on whether I should review the first chapter or whether I should carry on reading from where I left off with this fic :) In the end I was really curious about where your story was heading to, so I went right on to this chapter.
So...wow! The tension and the drama and the conflict and everything are really building up here. You've managed to do a lot of things with this chapter; the pacing is wonderful and very controlled, and even with all the emotional highs and lows, you also managed to reveal new information! So the Malfoys are coming into the picture now; this just gets more and more intriguing. The scene in the shop was done very well; the exchange between Arthur and Harry was convincing, and at the same time, I think Arthur reacted very realistically. You've managed to portray his anger as well as his grief at Fred's death and Ron's memory loss very nicely. And I especially love the sense of umm...'partnership' (for lack of a better word) between Harry and Arthur! It was an interesting combination, and I think it worked really well and certainly did give your story variation in character interactions and dynamics (I haven't read the earlier chapters so this might be a recurring thing, apologies!).
And that bit with Ron and Hermione was so lovely :) I was sort of grinning like an idiot! Their high and low moments with each other are handled so well. Such lovely contrasts :) And that final scene was just too painful - Ron telling Hermione to leave when she's in such a vulnerable moment. It's really sudden, but not unrealistic, given Ron's very strong sense of family and that inherent Weasley protectiveness toward family.
All in all - a great chapter! I love the drama of this chapter and all the unresolved tension...and the characterisation as usual was really strong. Great work - I hope to read more soon :D
-teh Report Review
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