Um, I kind of just randomly picked this story of yours to review on, but I thout I should tell you how much I love your stories! You are an incredibly versatile author with excellent ideas.Author's Response: I'm so flattered! Thank you so much! I really love to write, so it means a lot that you would take the time to compliment me :) Report Review
This was so creative! I think Hero was probably the first person to jolt some humility or sense into Sirius Black, in this version of events anyway. Nice job!
classicblackAuthor's Response: Oh my goodness, I wrote that years ago! I'm glad you like it, though :) Sirius will always hold a special place in my heart! Report Review
Good story. A couple of spelling errors, such as ‘Gryffindore’, which should be ‘Gryffindor’, but proof-reading clears that up in no time :-)
I liked Hero Bagget very much; you’ve obviously spent a lot of time developing this character, even down to the origin of her name. Its little things like that which make stories that much more enjoyable, because it fleshes out the narrative. Your imagery was really adventurous too. I absolutely loved “her shoulder length black hair trailing her like an afterthought” and “marched through the halls of Hogwarts like a woman on fire”.
I was slightly confused about what exactly was wrong with Lupin. I’m assuming it centres around the time Sirius almost got Snape killed by sending him to the Shrieking Shack when Lupin was transformed? I know the whole point is that Hero doesn’t understand what is going on but maybe a little bit more explanation, just to clarify things for the reader, would be good. Perhaps it should be relayed through something Sirius says? Maybe I’m just a bit slow…;-D
Well, I think that’s all I can think of to say. I really enjoyed reading this one-shot and I hope I’ve been helpful :-)
Author's Response: I didn't even notice I misspelled 'Gryffindor', so thank you for telling me. I never see these things until I've published. I'm sorry that it was confusing. I really never intended to publish it, but I thought, hey what the heck. I'll work on it as soon as I can.
I'm glad you liked it. Thank you so much for telling me what you thought about it.
~Em Report Review
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