PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE ALREADY! Report Review
I really love your story, I didn't comment until now since I was reading all through before I comment. 10/10 (: Hope you update soon! Report Review
Read this story ages ago and re-reading it again, it's just as lovely and amazin as ever. I know it's been a while since you've updated, but I hope you continue with the story. Can't wait to read more of it. Report Review
I just did a complete reread of this story and it is great! I hope you come back to it at some point. I particularly have enjoyed watching the characters evolve and mature. Thank you for sharing it! Report Review
PRAISE THE LORD YOU UPDATED. Seriously though, I found this story a while ago and absolutely fell in love with it. Thanks so much for writing this wonderfulness! This chapter is as fantastic as the others are, and I hope you update again soon! Report Review
*does happy dance* I checked my last review of this story and it was 1/2/09. Crazy! Shows how long its been since I read anything on here! :(
But. this was an awesome chapter. Right from the start I was giggling away (also, my boyf agreed with Sirius' idea for the golden plaque lol). And Sirius is very devious indeed!
I'm too excited to write anymore except to say that this was fab! And I hope Sirius' genius plan works. Report Review
I'm glad I decided to come back and check the site again. I have really missed this story. Especially after going through and reading several other stories that really just don't compare.
I must say that i really liked how you handled the situation. I can't wait to see what James and Lily do to take their revenge.Oh the awesome awesomeness of this story!
I really liked your little story about Petunia. A lot of people seem to have missed the fact that they had been close in their youth. nice to see someone taking note of that.
Now, all we need is Julia to transfer in already and then true havoc can reign!
Please update soon! I'm running out of good things to read. Report Review
So I was sitting around studying for my midterms, and by studying for my midterms i mean eating cake and watching tv and on a whim decided to check the site and HOLY MOLY YOU ACTUALLY POSTED i almost dropped my cake because of you. Now it is late and I do actually need to study so the review will be brief (for me) First kudos on using the word diabolical it's a fun word i like the way it rolls of my tongue. And i loved lillys little childhood story and james's commentary, its nice to hear some one do something besides for just bash petunia no she isn't a modle sister but things are always deeper than some make it out to be. As for my favorite line in the chapter “Sounds like the two of you have taken on a battalion of trolls armed only with mischief and good intentions.”
Oh but I must say i loved going from this line which was very pretty and eloquent "Lily could feel his warm breath upon her ear, like a humid summer breeze that came before the storm. And ever so quietly, he spoke a word that crackled like thunder shaking her mind into ecstatic oblivion." to this “Bloody flaming pimples on Cronus’ hemroidic stinking arse!”
I am so happy to be reading this story again and age difference psh 14 is a perfectly reasonable age for her to be kissing up on sirius (it's legal in the czech republic!) I can't wait for hopefully more julia next chapter i have missed her and sirius and this whole story a lot. And i think you are under estimating yourself yes you borrowed a few things from jk but really the character development and the writing in the hard part you have a very creative mind to come up with this. Im sure you can come up with a story without Ms Rowlings assistance in any way. POST AGAIN AND NOT IN A YEAR. My birthday is feb 29th and i expect major progress in this story by then you hear me! Report Review
I love how you included the two firsties that Sirius saved earlier in the story in helping Sirius escape James and Lily's wrath here! Th Sirius/Shannon/Remus/Angelina debacle is heating up, isn't it? Too bad Angelina is involved - it would be sticky enough without her! No Julia in this chapter - I missed her. Thanks for writing - I really enjoyed the update. Report Review
I (hopefully) see some light in James and Lily's broom closet? The mirror interaction was really funny. I liked that the first thing Sirius did was write Julia. Angelina has reappeared - bummer. Shannon and Remus confronting their feelings will be ugly enough without her help. Thanks for writing! Report Review
What a fight! I can't believe Lily participated! Diggory really stepped up to the plate. Kettleburn's comments were really funny. I am anxious to see the outcome of the James/Lily plot. Thank you for writing - I am enjoying your story so much. Report Review
The dragon/monkey story was adorable. James and Lily are getting unbearable - it will be fun to see what Sirius concocts for them. Dorcas whould be a good ally for him. I have said it in other reviews, you write a Peter thaqt I don't hate. It seems so incomprehensible that he could betray them all like that in the future. Thank for writing the chapter! Report Review
What a great chapter! The Sirius/Lily chat was sad (as was the Dorcas/Sirius chat). The prank was ingenius (however I wouldn't want it to happen to me!). The Lily/James interaction was heartbreaking after the prank. Julia's birthday gifts were awesome! I loved the friendly howler! All the gifts were great. Such thoughtful gifts. I love long chapters - thank you for writing! Report Review
If Shannon only knew, I don't think she would be so worried (although maybe she should be). Julia's date with Brad was very sweet. The confrontation with Jill was ugly - could she be any meaner? I am nervous about reading more about James and Lily because things have been so awful between them in the last few chapters? Report Review
Amos Diggory? After his nose transformation? Ugh! Interesting assortment of gifts they picked out for Julia. She'll be thrilled. Poor Remus... Thank you for the update! Report Review
Dorcas and Remus? Maybe... I hope that James and Lily don't get any worse or I would think they might never get together! Brad is interested in Julia - has anyone noticed that Brad is the same age as Sirius? I look forward to seeing what James and Sirius find for her birthday. Thanks for writing! Report Review
Lily and James just get further and further apart - how sad. Good for Julia for not hiding away and facing Jill. Peter is a much more tolerable character in this story than he is often portrayed. His girlsfriend seems decent, too (if I can just get that library image out off my mind.). Good update! Report Review
James is awful - poor Lily. Poor Remus as well. Sirius' gift from Julia was great - especially the t-shirt. Genius! Thank you for writing! Report Review
You are so mean - you promised! I guesss that I can wait one more chapter. Shannon dressing in purple was hilarious. I am a bit worried about Angelina's threats. James and Sirius remarks to her were spot on and well deserved. Nice work! Report Review
I just ran across your story today - I love it but please don't make me EVER look at the back end of a rat (especially Peter Pettigrew's back side) again! I love James, Sirius, Remus, Julia, Lily and Shannon. You have done a really nice job developing their characters. Thank you so much for sharing your work. Report Review
I am beyond thrilled that you were able to update again! I honestly thought this utterly amazing story was going to be lost but alas, here you are once more! Welcome back, cant wait for the next chapter! Report Review
Welcome back, my friend. I have been off and on the site until your last chapter and I am extremely glad that I caught this one. I said that I would wait for this chapter. My loyalties have not changed.
I completely understand that life happens. But I am so glad that you decided to return to this story. It was well worth the wait. After two years (my, how time flies) I still remember this story vividly. While reading this chapter the pieces slowing came back to me. A testament to your writing I suppose. I have read many stories that I have now forgotten. But yours...yours is stuck in my head. A fluid and extremely well written story makes all the difference.
I do hope that you are doing well. And I am glad to see you have returned, if only to post this chapter. It really was well worth the wait.
Until next time.
orangezauber Report Review
Wow. I was so excited to see that you'd updated this story and this chapter definitely didn't disappoint.
I've probsbly said it before, but I really love the way that you're naturally developing the relationship between Lily and James. Too often people enter a broom cupboard as enemies and come out as lovers, so it's refreshing to see that particular situation have a more subtle effect on the characters.
I am extremely envious of your ability to take common phrases and make them magical, e.g. "promised not to spill the Bott's beans". Brilliant.
Thank you so much for returning to this story, and I hope that you may be able to update again. Report Review
I've been reading your fanfic for a while, but I would especially like to commend you on this chapter. This chapter is truly truly excellent. I have high hopes for the next one, so I hope it doesn't disappoint ;)
Not to say that this fanfic isn't alway excellent, it is, but this chapter is officially on one of my favorite chapters in fanfiction, of all time.
Sorry for my rambling, but you might not have wanted to mention that it was a dark haired boy who originally had the dragon stuffed animal. I immediately knew it was Sirius.
-AllinaAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for your review, and it was good to hear that the 'dark-haired boy' foreshadowment might have been too much ;) So happy that you liked this chapter, you really made me smile! Report Review
No there is still more james and lily in closetness to be had yet there are no more chapters to read! Im back and reviewing again so you must post, my return must e what you've been waiting for afer all because a long wait would just be cruel
Interesting lilly doesn't like people touching her ears thats a strange little quirk that has me thinking why would someone touch her ear
*James ostentatiously waved his wand and shouted with a ridiculously pompous accent, “open sesame!*
-Oh jamsie is a little testy though i did enjoy it i liked the common muggle magic thrown in by a wizard
*And don’t you even play coy like the unicorn who fancied his own horn.*
- i loved this whole part firstly cause it was hysterical and secondly because other writers try to slip in magical things but do it awkwardly the way you wrote this made it like something every wizard would understand and say when joking around not oh right there wizards so i have to throw magical stuff into there normal conversations
*the only regret I have is that you’re not here because I know that you’d be right beside me guarding the blasted door. But in every way, you already are…*
- CAN THEY FALL AND LOVE AND BE TOGETHER FOREVER YET GESSH
*she’d fainted from her own dreaded phobia of closed spaces in front of the one person who scared her most*
- it's interesting that he is the one she is scared of is it because she just can't control her self around him. He was so good though taking care of her even when he is not chasing after her he can't help but be good to her *sigh* love
Every time lilly says something diry i laugh so hard you write so well i can just see it all playing out in my head like im watching a fantastic movie
*The concentric circles he absentmindedly traced on the back of her hand didn’t help matters. Shannon could feel the ripples radiate outwards from inside her stomach to her toes.*
-Its so hard to be like no she is wirh sirius because remus and her seem so good to each other and we know sirius likes julia but you still don't want him to be hurt but these two are clearly meant to be together somehow, i can't wait to see how you work everything out because even with boys dating ur mates ex isn't always looked highly upon. Maybe sirius will be the bigger man?
*“Lily and James have hexed his sorry arse back to the Dark Ages. And knowing Sirius, he’d most likely be turning every witch-hunt topsy-turvy.”*
This was just witty i love the dialogue you write... if you were to ever pen a movie i would go to the midnight showing
angelina deserves to be hexed i hope she falls down a flight of magically moving stairs
i hope that you post again soon and i promise if you do it wont take me over a year to review, i really love this story and if it weren't for all the copywrite issues you could publish it it is truly that fantastic.Author's Response: So I did FINALLY post a new chapter, it's waiting in the queue as we speak. All of your comments are so wonderful, and it makes me so happy. I'd love to write a movie one day, but the hard part is coming up with an original idea. It's easy to play in someone else's back yard, JK really has one heck of one. But, I promise to keep working on this story, yet, I fear that you will be unhappy to know that Sirius and Julia will not meet for some time. Remember, she's just 14 at this point. The next few chapters will start to tie up some things so we can get to what everyone's been waiting for. Thanks again for your fantastic reviews :) Report Review
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