i really wish there were more cute marauder stories like this out there. i realised about halfway through that i had actually read this before, but i hadn't reviewed for some reason.
but anyway, i do like this story, its adorable.
10/10Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it even the second time, and I appreciate that you took the time to review. ^_^ Report Review
i love that the thing that makes day better is lily simply looking at him. its like a tiny detail, but its just so james. and the way you've written him sounds so right. i loooved it :DAuthor's Response: Haha, yes, she looks at him and he's happy for the rest of the day. :P Poor besotted James.
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I'm really glad that you liked him in this story - his voice just fits: slightly arrogant and full of himself, but utterly in love with her. :D Report Review
I LOVED IT!!! It was extremely well written. This is a favorite, hands down!!Author's Response: Thank you very much! ^_^ Report Review
very beautifully writtenAuthor's Response: Thanks! =D Report Review
ohhh this was so good! *squeels*Author's Response: Thank you! ^_^ Report Review
WE NEED MORE!Author's Response: LOL! If I could stand the LJ ship anymore, I probably would. Thank you for the review. :) Report Review
This is a very beautifully written story. I love the way it makes you burst out laughing, or feel giddy with romance. I am absolutely edging for a poetry book right now. All in all, a lovely story. :)Author's Response: Thank you very much! =D It was great to write a story that wasn't quite romantic, yet still held so much potential for it. Report Review
AW so cute
hehehe i liked it that was really sweet :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! ^_^ Report Review
This was a fun read. James' voice is very real in this, and I love the whole turn around at the end just because of the look he got. You're really good at filling in the spaces...or in other words, setting the scene. The 'flips' were very effective too. There was enough space between each one that they didn't get too annoying. Or would that be the opposite of the effect you were going for since it annoyed James? Hm. Either way, I liked it.Author's Response: Annoying James is one thing, but annoying the reader wouldn't have made this story turn out as well - like you said, there was just enough space between them. Enough room for James' thoughts to come through and enough time for Lily to actually read all the sonnets on one page. James' voice in this was hilarious to write - I could almost hear him in my mind, thinking away about Quidditch and Lily, complaining to himself about how woeful his life had become. =D If I ever get inspiration to write something like this again, I most definitely will, just to be able to laugh the whole time that I'm writing. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I've appreciated all your reviews for my stories, and it means a lot. ^_^ Report Review
that was great!
you should totally do a sequel! just to sum it up! or maybe im just a softy for happy endings! this ending was happy but it could have gone on more!
loved it! thankyou for a great read!Author's Response: I'm glad that you enjoyed it that much that you'd want a follow-up. Not sure if I could do one, though, as it's been ages since I did a proper L/J story. I will keep it in mind though. :) Thanks so much! Report Review
i love it! quirky. i should read spencer some time...Author's Response: Haha, you might like him - the storyline's very similar to the typical James/Lily plot. :) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
This is a nice little tidbit of the Marauder's era; it's just the right length and description. I was a little lost as to why there was such a sudden change in mood though; I mean I can understand that Lily's blush might lighten up James' day, but I felt like I missed a moment on Lily's part. Maybe I should read some of that poetry ;)Author's Response: Yeah, that's one of the major problems with this story, it sort of changes too rapidly, but you know, since the reader only gets James' thoughts, it could be something that he too missed. *hopes that it's a good enough excuse* ;-) It's amazing how close that sonnet sequence is to the tale of Lily and James - you should check it out. Thanks very much for reviewing! :) Report Review
aw susan ^__^ I couldn't resist, I had to read. I don't think I've read one of your fics in a long time, so this was a really welcome reminder as to why you're made of such complete awesome. I chose to read this one because you can get these little biscuit/chocolate finger things called amoretti and they are delish. thank you, I'm now craving :)
on to the story - it's beautiful! I love fics that are centred around little, seemingly insubstantial moments, and this one fits just perfectly. it's like the beginning of something, and started so simply. I love the casual banter between lily and james, how it's hardly even there but seems so... familiar to them? like they're so entirely used of hardly ever saying anything to one another. it's brilliant, well done you! Author's Response: Aww, thanks Rena. *hides* Sorry about making you hungry - those biscuit things sound delicious! You'll have to send some over, haha. :P Thank you so much for reviewing this. It means a lot that you enjoyed this silly little piece. ^_^ It's so insubstantial, but it's got a lot hidden between the lines. =D Report Review
And now I have to go find this Spencer chap and give him a good walloping for not inspiring any kissing. D: Lovely fic, though, really. I propose a sequel!Author's Response: Haha! No kissing was sort of the point, you know. :P But thank you for reviewing and enjoying this little piece! ^_^ Report Review
Aw so very adorable. I enjoyed reading that (:Author's Response: Thank you! ^_^ Report Review
I loved this! Hilarious!Author's Response: Thank you very much! ^_^ Report Review
that's cute. poor sirius. he is simply amazing and can't help it. :DAuthor's Response: Yeah, Sirius is siriusly amazing, that's for sure. ;-) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Oh wow! This has to be the best representation of James/Lily interaction I have ever read on the net! It just felt so appropriate and very in character, even though we don't know all that much about the two. It also seemed like something JKR would write. I don't think thats what you were aiming for, but thats a big compliment coming from me!
I wish I had some criticism, but sadly, I don't =(
So I'm sorry, this wasn't all that helpful to you.Author's Response: Oh wow, thanks for the compliment! ^_^ It's amazing that you thought JKR could have written this, and also that it was such a perfect L/J interaction - it's certainly nicer than those hate/hate relationships fanfics usually contain. ;-) Report Review
That was very good. I don't read many James and Lily fics, for fear of reading them yelling at each other, I guess. But here they are in their Common Room, having a rather polite conversation about poetry.
I liked the way you portrayed them. I think you wrote James' feelings very well. And the end was very sweet. A shared moment, at last! Good job!Author's Response: It is a rather strange scene - two Gryffindors discussing poetry, of all things - but I'm really glad that you liked how it turned out. =) Thank you very much for reviewing! Report Review
I am so adding this to fav's. It was so funny, with all the little comments after the 'flips'. The only thing I felt was a bit off was the fact that Lily was blushing for no apparent reason. She doesn't exactly seem like a quidditch fan, and if James is always looking at her, was she randomly blushing or was she bludhing because she likes him...? Other than that, I am in love with this fic, figuratively, of course. Author's Response: Yeah, that is a bit of a mysterious blush. Guess even this story couldn't be perfect, haha, but no worries. Thanks very much for reviewing, Vatina. I'm glad that you enjoyed this story - it was great to write with all the little jokes in it. =) Report Review
This was nice. I loved the humor in it. Well done!Author's Response: Thanks very much! =) Report Review
This was very well-written. It felt like a glimpse into their everyday life, and just as quickly as we came in, we're out again. Very good. I loved this. 10/10 :)Author's Response: Thanks very much! I really took the one-shot for what it was - a single moment in time - and of course it was lots of fun to write it from James' perspective. =D Report Review
Cute.Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
this was amazing you are like such a gereat writer ive read like so many of ur stories ummm i was wondering did u make ur banners cause i was wondering if u could make mew one for one of my stories or maybe alll three ya but anyways get back tome on that. Keep writing ur amazin at it Author's Response: Thanks for your review. If you want a banner, you'll have to go to the-dark-arts.net to request one from me, though. =) Report Review
This was a beautiful story. I loved it.
Both your James and Lily were phenomenally portrayed. I adored the concept of this story, just loved the whole thing to pieces.
I hate to ruin this wonderful review, but who was used for Lily on the banner? Perfect capture!Author's Response: The girl in the banner is Laruen Ambrose, and I agree, she does make a perfect Lily. =) Thanks very much for your review. I'm so glad that you enjoyed the story. =) Report Review
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