OMM (oh my merlin) you are an AMAZING writer the way you told that story wow, just wow. I was looking at your work on the forums (btw my birthday is January 11th too, weird) and I can across this and it blew my breath away. if I was you (which im not because I cant write amazing things like that) i'd write a sequel, about his guilt when he see's Harry, his grief and his love for lily. maybe a bit about Tonks?
Once again you are an AMAZING writer, so discriptive and deep thinking
~ Macy xAuthor's Response: Hi! It's always nice getting reviews on old stories. Most likely, I won't be writing a sequel to this, just because (and I'll be shunned forever for this) I really am not that interested in Lily. The whole reason this story appealed to me was because it painted her in a different light; she's not this saintly woman. Most likely (at least in my mind) she never told James what went on between she and Remus.
Anyway! Bit off track, there. I do love writing as Remus, and he's a main character in my kind-of-WIP, Lungs. So there's some more Remus for you there xD
Thanks so much! This review was so sweet. ♥ Report Review
It's beautiful. Truly.Author's Response: Thank you. Report Review
A beautifully written story. Thank you for sharing it with us.
xTanyaAuthor's Response: Thank you. Report Review
That was really good! Sad, but amazing.
I love the way you wrote it. It's really great :)Author's Response: Thanks, I'd like to go back and re-write it since it's been so long. Maybe one day :) Report Review
Interesting imagery. Very nice.Author's Response: Thanks, I appreciate the kind words. Report Review
Absolutely lovely one shot! I enjoyed it very much!Author's Response: Thank you, I greatly appreciate it. Report Review
I'm not sure what to really say to this. It was just... so eloquent writing. Effortless sounding, sincere, sad. I love how you paint pictures with his words, and you let the reader think for themselves to find out what is happening. It was almost like poetry... I loved it.
The Dark Temple of LightAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to read this story. It is greatly appreciated. Report Review
This is amazing! It's realistic (in the Harry Potter universe) and very well written. I really enjoy sad ending and this is one of the best.Author's Response: Thank you very much. I hope it wasn't too sad. :] Report Review
This is a lovely story. When I saw how short it was I was a bit hesitant, but this definitely proved me wrong. You told an extremely emotionally-charged story with few words. Congratulations. You really seem to have a knack for that.
The whole idea of Lupin reminescing over this while at the funeral...it adds texture to the story. As did the entire bit with Lily taking James into the rain. Ah! That tore my heart out. Nearly.
I've never been a supporter of this pairing, but this was beautifully written and I can safely say that I enjoyed it.Author's Response: thank you so much! isn't remus/lily just great? it would never happen, but we can dream, right?
i'll admit i have not even THOUGHT about writing fanfiction for so long, since the seventh book came out at least. but i'm sure that seeing the HBP movie will spark some motivation :D Report Review
Very nice indeed. This has been on my favorites list for a while, but I don't think I've ever left a review.
I think you have some lovely language and powerful imagery. I loved the "dripping red hair" line. It was spectacular. Also, nice version of the the James-Lily-Remus love triangle, it's fun--I think--to imagine the reationship between Lily and the Marauders, because they were teenagers after all.
Nice job!Author's Response: thank you very much! sometimes i think i rely too heavily on imagery, but i'm glad that you liked it. thanks again for the review. Report Review
I just clicked onto this website to see what it was like, and I didn't think I would leave it with tears in my eyes! The descriptions are beautiful.Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! That really means a lot to me. I'm very glad you liked it. Report Review
Wow, that was beautiful! I truly loved it, you are incredibly talented =)
Love xX mOoNdAnCe XxAuthor's Response: shankyou. :] Report Review
Beautifully written. I really enjoyed this story even if it was a first person narration and I'm not into that at all. Anyway, you did a great job describing the way they used to meet, I loved the rain and the umbrella. I think I jumped pieces at the end, though; it was getting too sad for me to bear. Keep up the great job!Author's Response: thanks! i'm glad you liked it, and sorry you had to skip around.. haha. i tend to angst it up every now and again in my stories... :] thanks for the kind words! Report Review
This is a powerful, beautifully written story. I absolutely adore it. Excellent job. I'm trying to think of critique, but I really nothing come to mind. It's perfect.
I love your writing style, so eloquent. This is going on my favourites for sure.
Again, excellent job.Author's Response: thanks myriad! i really appreciate it. :] Report Review
oh thats so sad but I love it! Going in my faves most definetely!Author's Response: thank you so much! :] Report Review
oooh! aaaww! that was so sad! i loved it though! so much emotion in so little words! i think htat remus and lily or Sirius and lily should have made the front couple, not james and lily. but i do love james. but remus and lily does seem to fit better.Author's Response: i know what you mean. james and lily are like, THE perfect couple. so you kind of want to ruin it via fanfiction.
or maybe that's just me...
thanks for the kind words! :D Report Review
I was conflicted reading this because I am very canon and my brain was saying "this isn't right" blah blah, but another part of my brain really liked it. It was written very well and the way it was written let the emotions come through so much more then if they were written in third person or something.
I like how it starts and ends with basically the same idea about "not getting to wet" it shows a continuation even thought the story has ended. I hate stories that just stop and leave you with nothing.
So, even, though I don't like the idea behind the story I still think it was a very good story :)Author's Response: haha, thanks. i'm getting a lot of that, from lily/james shippers. :] i'm glad you liked it though! Report Review
That is so sweet.
I was on the verge of crying.
Hit me emotionally thanks mate.
Author's Response: :] thank YOU. Report Review
Wow, that was beautiful. Lovely, lovely, story. I really enjoyed it. I've never considered the ship myself, or even deemed it possible for that matter, but this was... touching I guess you could say. Realistic, in a sense...
The ideas you came up with were very sweet and un-cliche; their meeting in the rain and the umbrella, at least. I loved that it closed off at the funeral, too. Bittersweet, and tragic, ending for Remus. It's really a closure to what they had... compared to just the marriage of James and Lily being the 'end'.
And last but not least, I'm in love with the banner - it's amazing.
-DanaAuthor's Response: oh, i know. she did a wonderlous job on the banner, didn't she? i'm glad you liked it! this fic has been getting a lot of reviews lately, i'm not sure why they just appeared all the sudden. hmm! anyway, i'm not complaining. thanks! :] Report Review
Wow. That was beautiful. Amazing. 10!Author's Response: thank you! :] Report Review
Wow, that was a really beautiful one shot. I don't really know what to say, except that it was just great. I'm pretty much speechless. Wow wow wow. I loved it. Keep on writing!Author's Response: thank you so much! i'm glad you liked it. :] Report Review
I cried when reading this. I do not support this ship, but this story is amazing. I can accept this ship only in this story. =) This was utterly wonderful. Raw and realistic. 1,000,000,000/10 from me.
--Kate/RPAuthor's Response: haha, yes, i've turned somebody! i always thought it would have been really easy for remus to love lily, but too afraid to say anything and too loyal to james. it's really weird but remus reminds me of my boyfriend and i just kind of played off of him while i was writing this. anyway, thank you so much for your review! Report Review
She loved him.
But she needed me.
This fic was so beautiful, yet, there was such a sadness in it that I wanted to cry...
10/10Author's Response: Tissues for everyone! I really probably should put a warning in there... Thank you! Report Review
Oh my God. I swear, I just started sobbing when I got to the end. Even while I was reading through the middle bits, I didn't think I would cry. But then that ending part at their graves with Sirius...
Sooo good darling. :)
Because if they really were together at any point, Remus wasn't just losing a best friend and another close friend...Dear Lord I had better stop now. Definitely adding this to my favs sweetie. I just loved this. :)
xxAuthor's Response: thank you so much! i didn't mean to make you cry...haha. maybe i should put a tissue advisory in the author's note? :] thank you very much for your comment and the add! how kind. Report Review
This is such a beautiful story, and so enchantingly written...I love it!Author's Response: thank youuuuuu... remus/lily wooo! :] Report Review
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