finally a story were there are people who realise that you will only get better by doing hard work instead of some mysterious power that saves the day

Author's Response: That's how I saw it. Glad you like it. Hope to see more reviews from you.

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This is excellent! Plz r and r my own HHr fic! Thanks.

Author's Response: Thank you, glad you like it.

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Omg, the first chapter and already i LOVE this fic. I liked that you had Nevilles p.o.v, after Harry's and not Rons. It is a very well written chapter, and i can't wait to read the rest. so thats were i'm heading now, toodle pip.

Author's Response: Thanks - I chose those three characters very deliberately. So glad you were intersted from the start. Thanks for letting me know.

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i really like it to me the first chapter is the most important because if you have a good first chapter then you have the reader hooked so great chapter

Author's Response: I spent a lot of time on the early chapters, so I hope they're hooking people in. Thanks for the review and the interest.

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oooh, I like it!! you're the first person whose fic I've read to actually show how dolohov's attack affected hermione, good show! 10/10 because I totally support that!

Author's Response: Thanks, I figured she'd have a really strong reaction to it, and I wanted to portray that. Love the review.

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really good chapter. on to the next chapter!! :D

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Pretty good start!

Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the feedback. Hope you continue to like it.

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great first chapter!! i always thought i had read this story but i dont think i have!! ah well i will read it anyways!

Author's Response: Thanks...I stumble across stories multiple times sometimes, and it takes a moment to remember if you've read it. Hope you enjoy it.

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update soon please! please! PLEASE! I love this story.

Author's Response: I will try to. I haven't had time lately, but things are settling down again. I love that you are anxiously awaiting it, and will try not to keep you waiting too much longer.

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this was a really good chapter that let everything out in the open...and it is extra cool that harry and dud might become friends!!cant wait till the next one!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I haven't received one on this chapter in awhile. I hope you continue to like the story as you read more, and continue to review!

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very very very goood!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much, I appreciate the feedback. Keep reviewing to let me know what you think of the rest.

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plz update soon!!i am in love with this story it is my fav. so please put more chapters in and quick!!

Author's Response: I'm working on it. Thanks for the review!

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I love reading anything to do with Harry Potter, but I cant write to save my soul!!! I love the way you started off! Great!

Author's Response: Writing is difficult work, but I am a firm believer that what it really takes is lots of practice. Thanks for the review, and I hope you continue to enjoy the story.

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good chapter

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A very, very good beginninG! I liek they way you've made Harry mature. this whole "anger won't get me anywhere" thing is good. Keep the good work up!!!

Author's Response: I figure that he and the others have to mature, and one thing Harry needed to do after book 5 was get control of his anger. Thanks for the review.

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Ah, it would seem that our young Harry is growing up, growing past the rage that we all suffered in his fifth year, I couldn't be prouder of you for helping him along. Hagrid

Author's Response: For me, part of Harry becoming an adult would have to be moving past his anger and rage. Glad you like the beginning and I hope you continue to enjoy it.

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Ok here I go: Chapter 1: You write: “…and help her body recover more fully.” I wouldn’t write ‘more’ either your body recover fully or not… When you mention that Crookshanks is offering his comfort to Hermione you write: “…Offering its comfort to her mistress.” Crookshanks is a ‘he’… (look in PoA where Sirius talks about the fact that the cat has been helping him.) Chapter 3: When Hermione is being attacked you write: “…preventing her wand from flying out of her wand.” ‘Wand’ should be ‘hand’ but I think that it was just a typo… Chapter 4: I was wondering why Gretchen calls her own Grandmother Mrs. Longbottom… (unless it isn’t her Grandmother, and I just misunderstood something!) Chapter 5: You write “…the damage had most likely taken out…” To me that sounds a bit off… I would say something like: “…the blasts has most likely…” maybe that is just me though! Later in that same chapter it says: “We’ve a complicated but secure system set up here. Your friends.” Shouldn’t it be ‘You’re friends’?... Chapter 7: There is a typo here that doesn’t really matter that much, but I thought that you would like to know anyway! “…and either must die at the hand at the hand of the other…” I think you see where the typo is! Chapter 9: “…as the normal twinkle in his pale blue eyes was unusually absent.” I seems a bit double to me when you use both normal and unusually… I would delete normal… Chapter 12: “He doesn’t know you. I know your blaming…”I should be “I know you’re blaming…” Chapter 14: “Hermione, Harry, Neville, your to go down the stairs…” Again it should be “you’re”… Chapter 15: Hermione says: “What if wants me to move to France…” there should be a ‘he’ between ‘if’ and ‘wants’.*********************************** Ok that was all of my ‘negative’ comments… now to the good ones! I absolutely love the style you have chosen! It is refreshing to see a new approach! I miss the Weasley children a bit but I expect that we will see a lot more of Ron when he is back on his feet! And Luna is so sweet… I love the way you portray her! You have a huge talent for dynamic dialog, I must say! I could use a bit more description in what they are doing exactly… like at the end of chapter 15… “shall we keep practising” Hermione asked always ready to study… maybe you could add something like: ‘She straightened herself in her seat preparing for another round of concentration.’ Well it is just a suggestion! All in all I really like the direction this is going, and I think you have a lot of original ideas going! Nice work so far! ---------> Hiduras

Author's Response: Wow...you must have been taking notes. I'll go back through and fix those mistakes. It may take a few days. I sometimes feel the story is lacking in detail as well, I will definately try to address this as well. The Weasley's will come back in, I promise, I have just gotten caught up in setting up the attacks, aftermath, and the beginnings of Harry and Hermione's relationship. I am becoming impatient myself to move on with the rest of the story, but I am trying not to overlook details that the readers will need for the future. Thanks so much for such a comprehensive review. I really appreciate it.

Author's Response: I finally finished fixing the mistake you mentioned. I am also trying to heed your advice of putting in more description. Hopefully, I am succeeding and striking a nice balance. Thanks again.

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good first chapter

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None needed from what i see. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Glad you like the beginning and I hope you think it gets better as it goes. Thanks for the review!

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Good start! I loved the parallelism of what was going in Privet Drive and the Granger's home. Both of them being haunted by that DoM fiasco and having the resolution, that is to learn more. I liked the way you pointed out the contrast between Harry's and Dudley's breakfast; the Dursley's haven't really changed much, do they?

Author's Response: No, and that's pretty consistent through the books to have the Dursleys treating Harry and Dudley vastly differently. That treatment helped define both young men. Glad you liked it.

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good start. keep it up!!

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Good first chapter, I like that you have him dealing with his anger ,very good ! DD

Author's Response: Thanks! I think that one of the signs of Harry maturing will have to be learning to deal with his anger and not letting it prevent him from doing what is right or living his life. Thanks so much for the review. I hope you like the later chapters as well,

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It was very well written!!! I loved it!!!!!!!!! awesome job!!!!!!!! How do you wrtie stories?

Author's Response: Generally, I see or read something that sparks an idea. Then I mull over it, thinking about how I would play that scene out if I were writing it. Finally, I sit down with a pen and paper or at my laptop and start typing whatever comes to mind. This takes longer than it sounds at times as I mull some ideas for weeks, and sometimes I type or write very slowly, other times it just seems to flow, almost faster than I can type. After I have a draft, I go back and read through it asking myself if I think that is really what a character would say or do. Finally, sometimes I call up or email my friend, April, who also writes alot and we talk about ideas with each other. I hope that answers your question, you can email me if you have more. Thanks for the review!

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Having Dudley as a wizard does not go with the storyline. If you decide to kill him off please have either Neville or Luna take him out. All that's needed is a Wingardium Leviosa and let it go at five, six hundred feet and let him go splat in Trafalger Square

Author's Response: I really debated the whole idea of Dudley as a wizard for awhile. I ultimately decided that I did not want all of the Dursleys to die at the same time and that there was a lot that could be done about the relationship between Harry and Dudley once the elder Dursleys were out of the way. Let me know if you change your mind about Dudley. I appreciate the review.

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Hey- Told you I'd leave some more comments! Bet ya didn't believe me, did you? This is a good first chapter. I like the way it starts out, and I like how you parallel Hermione's day and feelings to Harry's. The description of Hermione's reaction to the DoM and how she deals with it is great! Poor Harry...Uncle Vernon is such a jerk!

Author's Response: You've posted an impressive list of comments but I wouldn't trade them as they mean a lot to me. Thanks!

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