*Excited gasp* That was AMAZING! I finished this story in a record (for me at least) 8 hours. I was enthralled I couldn't stop reading. You are amazing!
Since I'm a meany I'm gonna add in a few constructive criticisms.
The whole bad luck spell seemed a tad far fetched in my opinion. I didn't find it particularly believable. But it was a big part of your plot, well really it was your whole plot.
I also think you should have had a bit more focus around Albus. Yeah you had Katie being obsessed with him, but we didn't really find out much about his character throughout the story. Which I found a little disappointing.
But really it was very good. I'm a tiny bit disappointed that Fred and Katie didn't get married for real. I could just see them watching little Michelangelo and tiny Pez playing in their backyard. Of course they would name their child after the Frouse that brought them together.
Anyways my tiny daydream is a little of track. I really did love your story. I think Katie was an amazing character, and I'm impressed with the character development she had going for her. You're a good writer. Be proud. Thanks for the amazing story, and for giving Hufflepuffs a better name for themselves. They are not cowards, and you proved that.
Good job Layla. Report Review
Wow, just wow. I can honestly say I fell in love with this novel. It's breathtaking. I've read hundreds of books and hundreds of fanfics and a total of 2 have made me cry and feel the strongest emotions for characters. Those 2 novels are Finding Faith and The Art Of Breathing. I think you're an amazing writers. I think you're going to write a novel and have it published and change peoples lives with it. I'm beyond impressed.Author's Response: EscapingExpectations, thank you so very very much. You are very very lovely and I adore you. Thank you sooo mucchhh :D
I swear to Merlin, if Alex and Erik don't get married and have a dozen children I will hunt you down and Avada Kadava you *brandishes wand*.
This story is really great although it can be a bit difficult to distinguish which POV at first.
Can't wait for the next chapter :D Report Review
I really, really, really love this novel. It's so funny. I can't decided who I want Tiff to be with more, Nate or James. I'm leaning more towards James at the moment.
I think Jen needs to be put in her place and so does Addie. Tiff did nothing wrong and they are acting like 2 year olds! I hate jealous girls.
Can't wait for the next chapter. Report Review
I think I might be in love with Ro. I've been laughing so much while reading my brother came in to see if I was dying. I don't have an attractive laugh :/ I should probably fix that.
I can't wait to see your next chapter. STAY WEIRD AND EAT CHEESECAKE Report Review
Truly amazing. You're a brilliant writer.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
I love your writing! I think you have the starts of a really great story so far.
I think maybe you need to edit your work a bit more though. I do tend to notice a few spelling mistakes. If you need any help with editing I'm willing to help. Contact me on my authors page and I'll give you my email address.
I can't wait till your 5th chapter comes out.Author's Response: This story's been long abandoned, as it's pretty much the oldest thing on my author's page - and as I'm sure you can tell, the writing's pretty appalling, haha. So unfortunately there won't be a 5th chapter. Also, I'd advise that you don't go offering to send out your email address as sharing personal information like that is actually against the rules. Report Review
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