Oh, Kayla, this was really heartwarming.
Little Lily and James, so grown up yet so young. But then again, I understand the circumstances of why. I love this matured James. I wish people saw more of this James than his usual happy-go-lucky side.
And I love Remus' little speech. Big props to Remmy there. And Peter, such the innocent sweetheart and gentleman. I hate that I know he's going to end up being a traitor, but for now, I'll just savour his innocence.
Lovely one-shot dearie. It was beautiful! :DAuthor's Response: Awh, you're too kind! ♥
I've always thought that James and Lily never really had much of a childhood because of the war. So I wanted to put that in there.
(It may or may not have been influenced by My Big Fat Greek Wedding when Toula's mum tells Toula that they suffered so Toula and her siblings could have a better life :p)
Remus was always the most mature out of the little four. :p So he had to make the speech haha. I also hated to write Peter so innocently but uiggjhbkjdjfgsjls
I guess that I feel like the Marauders wouldn't have laid down their life for a crappy friend. And Lily would have had to trust him as well to be their secret keeper. So yeah... :p
I'm glad you liked it, you're always too kind to me! ♥
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Oh, you just got to love Ernie and his dorky little self! Do'oh. I feel like running over and pinching his cheeks! Ickle Ernie and Eloise, you wrote them perfect for each other. :)
You did a great job portraying him as the pompous twerp we all love him for. So good job on that.
I really liked this piece. Very light-hearted and not too drawn out. I think it was great!Author's Response: ehehehehehe hey thar
I'm glad you liked it! I really loved writing Ernie as a pompous twerp! :p
Glad you liked it, Pearl! :D
Thanks for the review! ♥
p.s. I'm going to read and review your new one-shot (another Barty one!!!) as soon as I do my homework. So that might be a few days. :p Report Review
Hello Kayla dear.
I though I should stop by and read something of yours, as a little break for my poor brain. These past few weeks have been terrible!
Personally, I think you did a wonderful job of writing second person! The imagery was seriously breathtaking and chilling. Your word choice was perfect. I can never really complain about your writing Kayla.
As for who I think Voldemort was murdering in this, I would like to guess, perhaps, Dorcas Meadowes? I think I recall reading about her being personally killed by Voldemort herself.
Lovely as usual Kayla. You write the dark/horror category rather well. I promise, once time allows I'll get back to you on your other stuff.
10/10!Author's Response: Hello Pearl!
(Fun fact: I spelt that 'Peraly' and then 'Parly' and then I finally got it right!)
I'm glad you thought I did a good-job of second person! I found it really easy for some reason haha. :p
Aw, you're making me blush! :p You're too nice! ♥
YES IT WAS DORCAS MEADOWES! Gold star for you! :D I'm glad both reviewers got it! :D
You're far too nice, and good luck with school! Thanks for reviewing! ♥ Report Review
Whut. In. The. WORLD?!? Lol, probably one of the best things I've ever read!
I don't even understand Edward's use of old english. He isn't even that old of a vampire--because apparently being a vampire for 112 years is still considered quite young. (...I think? Meh. Who cares.)
His chiseled jaw was the precise shade of a vomit-flavored Every-Flavor Bean"
Does this mean a shade of white, because for some reason, the color that popped into my head was a disgusting shade of green. But of course, because it was describing Cedric's beautiful jaw, green just didn't sit as the right color.
And the badgers! Poor Cedric. I could just imagine his abhorrence of being caught in that conversation. Poor boy. But star-crossed, oh gawd!
And when Cedric said this:
"It’s like me, but colored by someone who likes shiny metallic hues. Like a raccoon.”
Beautiful simile Cedric, because I'm sure that's the best you could've came up with. /raccoon/ *snorts*
And finally, this line of gold:
“Come hither, rest upon my bosom,” Edward demanded."
Made me choke on my cheez-itz. So utterly awkward but brilliant.
Thank you. Thank you so much for making my night!
(hopefully this ship will endure the shipping wars of Cho/Cedric and Bella/Edward and any other crazy illogical ships out there. S.S. Edwic was meant to sail the seven seas and beyond!)Author's Response: -hoists flag for S.S. Edwic-
lol, Edward's old English. I figured that if I was going to parody him, I might as well make him as ridiculous as possible. It was inspired by his pretentious personality, methinks.
Cedric's jaw is indeed green. ~ In that particular moment all of the greenery of the forest made his skin look green, as well. Or maybe he's a new breed of Smurf. Hard to say.
Utterly awkward is my favorite place to be. XD
Thank you for reading! Enjoy your cheez-itz. :D Report Review
First off, I want to apologize for not responding to your last message at TDA, and for not reading/reviewing any of your stuff lately. Just 6 more weeks until summer, but until then it's cram, cram, cram for exams and I've been so desperate to pick up my chemistry grade to avoid summer school.
But I've been able to cram some time, and this...this was beautiful!
I love the James and Lily bonding right here. I find it thoughtful how you used Transfiguration and Animagi to make it work, and I like how mature James is for once (apart from his little innuendo). And it's refreshing to see them both get along so nicely.
And Snape. I just...I want to feel sorry for him, but I can't. I never liked him at all.
Lovely writing as always! :DAuthor's Response: Pearl!
Don't worry about it! I understand! In October-November I doubt I'll be around either! I just have a break for the first time in ages! And chemistry is evil, I absolutely hated it. (I dropped it) So I completely support you in trying to get your grade up! ♥
Aw, I'm so glad you liked it! :'D
I really love James and Lily, and I hate seeing fanfictions where Lily absolutely hates James with a burning passion and James is a stupid-head. :p
Yeah, I don't like Snape. I tried making it as unbiased as possible but... :p
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Oh my goodness, this was hauntingly good!
It's so nice for a change to read about a Death Eater who's usually undercredited in fics.
This was absolutely wonderful. Though morbid and gruesome, it was something I wanted to read more of. It definately provides justice to Dolohov's character. The spider--oh how badly I feel for it, and that's saying something, considering that I absolutely HATE spiders, or anything else that crawls.
This was amazing in so many different ways! Report Review
Oh my bloody gawsh, this was beautiful!
I read this all in about two hours, just soaking in every word. The pacing was perfect, the plot twists were delicious, and the characterizations were realistic. Through out the whole fic, you had me on edge, just gripping my blanket as I sipped hot chocolate in bed. This was perfect.
I love how you split point of views of both Rose and Lily, good and dark. It was amazing how you managed it really. My favorite character was definately Lily. She was complex, and though she wasn't exactly "good", she emphasized on the tru meaning of "no one is perfect, we all have destroying flaws". And what I loved most was how Gryffindor she was. Though her dark nature would've defined her as Slytherin, Her Gryffindor colors really do show, to be able to defy what label she was confined to, to fight with her heart and mind, and in the end, proved great loyalty after finding out what she did was wrong.
I loved the use of humour in this as well. It had a slight touch of it, enough to make me smile and chuckle, but it wasn't so sugar coated with it. It was perfect.
Thank you for such an amazing read! It was definately worth two hours of my time! :) Report Review
Oh, poor Percy! Throughout the whole thing, I felt nothing but happiness and joy, to see Percy be happy instead of being his usual serious, proper self. It was so nice, to see a glimpse of him entering fatherhood. And then that ending? That shook me. He was going to have a son! And his baby boy was torn from him. And this line right here:
"He had failed as a father, just as he failed as a brother."
That was heart wrenching. He's so hard on him self, and I just feel so sorry for Perce.
Lovely work as always, Kayla. 10/10!
p.s.: I read you response to my last author note, and don't worry, I understand. Take as much time as you need. Good luck with exams and hopefully your break is spifftacular!Author's Response: That's what I thought about when I first heard the song. I was like, "Aww, so sweet - he's so adorable I love him, wait - no, nO, STOP IT, ED! I AM CRYING NOW OKAY THEN JUST BE EVEN MORE PERFECT ALRIGHTY DON'T MIND ME OVER MY TEARS AND EMOTIONS!" :p
Yes. His son was taken away from him. :'( It's mean but...
Sorry about that line. My version of Percy is always hard on himself and I had to make the baby a boy to kind of relate to Fred in some way. D:
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Oh, poor Lily! My heart broke for her. She was a bit silly, wanting James all for herself, but I understand that their bond was something she had once saw as unbreakable. And that Mary girl! I don't like her...one bit. She doesn't even sound like a Hufflepuff by the way she treated Lily when Lily exploded. And James...he was a bit silly too, disregarding his sister's feelings. But nonetheless, I loved it! It pulled greatly at the hearstrings, and its wonderful reading a story about a tender sibiling relationship. Great Job! Report Review
Oh my gawsh Kayla, this was totally unexpected. At first my thoughts were heading in the direction of Scorpius and Rose admitting to their parents they fell in love, but then I realized how Rosie's parents seemed rather tolerant of Scorp's presence, and then Scorp's parents showed up, and I was like, "whut?" And then I kept reading, and gawd, that circus part got me good!
I love Scorpius. He seemed like the slightly snarky guy I immagined him to be. Like a more mellow Draco. I liked it. And oh gawsh, Hugo! Lol,
"Do you not know how much effort that is?"
Best line. Period. :D
And I love the little Scrose moment in the end. It was the perfect way to tie it all together.
It was just the perfect combination of weird, adorable-ness, and just...I can't explain the happy feeling inside. It was a lovely one-shot dearie. :)Author's Response: Hey, Pearl! :D
ahahaha I wrote this when I was feeling a bit loopy. I'd read a Facebook head-canon where Draco and Ron bet on when their kids would get together and I kept thinking of their reactions ahaha. :p
hehehe Ron and Hermione were a bit tolerant, weren't they? :p
The circus! Ahahaha, I don't know WHERE that came from, but I quite enjoyed writing it. :p
Scorpius is adorable, I quite like writing him! :'D
ahahaha Hugo is basically me. :p I'm extremely lazy, I often say that to my parents. :p
Rosius is adorable. :'D I love them all! :D
I'm glad you enjoyed it, it was fun to write! :D
ALSO, I noticed you have 89764598658654 new things up!! I will review as soon as I get the chance which will probably be next month! I have exams, assignments and then holidays which is good, but then I'm going camping so I won't have a computer or Internet access! D:
BUT I WILL READ AND REVIEW EVENTUALLY! I thought I'd quickly respond to this to let you know. :)
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oh my gawsh, I've been anticipating for this ever since you've mentioned a little heads up for a sequel. This was perfect!
And Ellie. I like the way she thinks. And makes surprises. Wow, a wedding organized that Phoebe didn't even know about! That sort of surprised me.
And I'm so happy that Phoebe and Louis are together. I know that they would eventually marry, from where Blossoming left off, but I was pleased when I found out there was a sequel to it. It confirmed my wishes for the couple, and its so nice that there was a rather twisty, unusual way they wedded. I loved the idea of it!
Thank you so much for writing the sequel! It made me so happy, Kayla. It was a lovely read!Author's Response: PEARL!
aww, I'm glad you liked it. :')
Ellie is a bit loopy (just like me), but she's loveable. :p
Yeah, they're canon. ;) They just couldn't NOT get married. :p
I'm glad you liked it! And your welcome for writing the sequel, so many people asked for one! :D
Thank you for the lovely review! ♥ Report Review
Oh-kay, now where to begin? Well, first thing is first, I really, extremely hope she plans on telling James soon. She can't exactly keep hiding it from him, and while I know for certain he'll probably accept the truth with open arms (like Blake), it bothers me that she hadn't spilled the beans yet. Then again, I'm not a pregnant teenager, so I wouldn't know how scary it would be...
I love Reese's sarcastic attitude upon things. It's rather quirky and I enjoyed her little rant on the weather. It's true though, people over dramatize pregnancy scares in movies, and I can only imagine her irritation.
And the love of food! Oh my gosh, that's exactly how I am when I get bored.just eat EVERYTHING. I'll just be sitting there on my couch, and then I'll get the idea to have a simple snack, which then turns out to be an expedition of rummaging throroughly every corner in the kitchen. Yep, I can relate to Reese there. :)
And I love Blake being the supportive (yet over-protective) bro. It's so cute.
And I love the little things in the story too, like how there's some conflict between James and Lionel.
Anywho, it was a great chapter dearie! :DAuthor's Response: Hey, Pearl! Sorry for taking so long to respond! D:
James will be told soon, very soon, don't worry! :D
Whenever I read stories like that, I feel like screaming, "JUST TELL THEM!" but when I was writing it, it just didn't feel right. :p
Also, I'm quite different to Reese personality-wise. :p So that might be a factor ahaha.
I can't NOT write a sarcastic character. Sarcasm comes very easily to me (a little bit TOO easily :p) so it's just so natural to write it ahaha. :p
Pathetic fallacy, it lives up to it's name. ;) So I put that little tidbit in there ahaha. :p
I'm half Italian, half Greek so I ADORE food. :p I just had a quick little break to eat before answering this review ahaha. And I'm about to have lunch soon as well! :p I think all my characters like to eat because that's just who I am and I have to relate to them in some way. :p
Blake is a cutie, I just love him. :'D
The James/Lionel conflict is throughout the whole story, I just can never picture them getting along. :p
Thank you for the lovely review! ♥ Report Review
Oh my goodness, this was so good!
The character of Barty Crouch Jr. has always intrigued me, and it pleases me to see a well written story of him on here. There's barely enough of him to read! To be honest, as sadistic as he is, I personally love him. He's my second favorite Death Eater, second to Bellatrix. (The fact that he's also played by David Tennant...oh gawsh!)
Anywho, I liked the little interaction between Umbridge and Crouch. When you started describing her toad-like qualities, I couldn't help but snort. And Crouch using an Unforgivable on her! But what I couldn't get over was that little scenario about the Doe, the Stag, and the Fawn. The imagery was powerful, and I can truly feel the insanity(?) that Crouch harboured. The way he described it...it was chilling.
And I loved his interaction with Moody. Of course it wouldn't end so well with Moody at the end, but when you flash forwarded there, my gawd was that haunting!
You portrayed Crouch's character perfectly, and I applaud you for that. His patronus though...an owl. That threw me off, but now that I've read this, I can totally see how that fits.
It was a remarkable read, thank you! And I favorited, just to let you know. :)
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Though this is short, this is really powerful for a one-shot! And what I adore most is that you had written it in Lupin's point of view. Poor Remus, the poor darling. He doesn't even rocognize Sirius at first!
I enjoy your emphasis on Remus' senses as well in the beginning. They were very detailed and precise.
And I like the transformation/shift of the story. It goes from intense, and should I say, dark (?), to playful and light-hearted. I couldn't help but scowl in contempt though at the mention of Peter. I don't know, but I can't ever enjoy his character without being reminded of how disgustingly unloyal he is. Selfish, undeserving...I'll stop. >:
Anywho, lovely one shot, dearie! :)Author's Response: Aww thanks, Pearl! :D
I'm glad you liked it, it was quite a challenge to write!
ahaha in my opinion, if people don't include Peter I get annoyed. :p I hate him with a burning passion (stupid rat) but I believe that in his Hogwarts days he must have been a pretty good friend if the other Marauders were willing to lay their lives down for him. *shrugs*
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Kayla! You're wrenching away my heart! :(
This was just depressing. Utterly depressing. I'm so used to reading a next-gen that's all fluffy where Fred's involved, but this is different. I'm aching for Roxanne right now, the poor love.
I also found it somewhat ironic that George lost his Fred...again.
But what's gut wrenching were all those bittersweet flashbacks that Roxanne provided in her point of view throughout the story. I admire the importance of the duck-tie and baret as well. You tied the objects in nicely.
Fred in general. I love your Fred. For some reason, I always have pictured Fred as a sweet boy, with a slight mischief streak, but was for the most part, mellow.
Reading this, I sort of am reminded the importance of sibiling bonding--the importance of loving the family you got. Me and my younger brothers have a humongous rift between us, but even so, it would kill me if one day, at random, they would be taken from me forever. It's bad enough that I never knew my older brother. We used to be so close. I can't imagine loosing one of my younger brothers as well.
But anywho, lovely one-shot dearie. You write grandly when aiming for the heartstrings. :)Author's Response: I'm sorry, I don't mean to! D:
I'm aching for Roxanne as well, she doesn't deserve this pain. D:
Yeah, that's why I chose Fred instead of any other cousin/Weasley/Potter. I've seen heaps of stories where one of the Potter children die too early and I kept having this nagging plot bunny so I thought I'd post it ahaha. :p
The beret and ducky tie where meant to be showing their similarities to being children - they're completely innocent. D':
I love Fred II, I think any portrayal of him is good. :D
Yeah, I understand. My brother (2 years younger than me) and I are really close but there are times I just can't help but get so annoyed at him! And it lasts for days. But after writing this (and some other major tragedy I had ONE DAY after publishing this) I've tried to stop being such a whiny female dog. :p
I'm sorry to hear that about your older brother, I never knew my younger brother (miscarriage) so I can sort of relate (I think).
Thanks for the lovely review! Sorry for taking so long to respond! Report Review
Hello! I'm back again, *cheerily waves at my computer screen*
Oh, you've got my feels yet again, Kayla! Luna's one of my top favorite characters, and I wanted to reach for her, shield her, and start a biotch fest with Bellatrix. (Which is strange because I adore the sadistic witch as well) So the fact that you made me hate her here...well done!
I liked how you decided to write about Luna's torture. I haven't read much fics about that...well, to be honest, I haven't read any at all. This was the first one, and you did very well!
I am pleased how you started and also ended the story with the Luna we all know and love. Still peculiar and out favorite little oddity, still so innocent, but the mansion scene with Bellatrix...that was intense. It shows us the brave side to Luna, and her determination. You gave more to her character, and I liked that. Her maturity. And how war sort of stained, yet not stained her child-like innocence. (I don't even know if that made sense).
But anywho, lovely one-shot. I liked it! :D
10/10Author's Response: Hello again! Sorry for not replying to this earlier; I'm just too lazy. :p
Luna is just adorable, isn't she? I love her! She just inspires me to be weird and peculiar. ♥
I'll admit: I kinda like Bellatrix as well. I liked creating her as a sadistic psychopath. :D
I've NEVER read any fics about Luna's torture, which I think is odd because it was a pretty big plot thing. I'm glad you liked it though. ♥
Luna is really brave; we see that in the books. And I knew she wouldn't be airy-fairy when she was faced with Bellatrix, but I still tried to make her as canon as possible.
It made sense, don't worry. :p
Thank you for this lovely review; you're just too kind! :D Report Review
Oh, my feelings! My heart! I want to cry so bad for Larissa! x(
Her mother! I want to just grab her mother and wring her neck. To be honest, I think Larissa did just fine, putting her parents into place. How dare her mother do that to her, just blame her daughter for everything! That's proposterous! To be honest, I might've reacted the same way. The absent of a parent is damaging, and I can totally understand where Larissa is coming from.
I wish her dad could've been more supportive though. It saddens me that though he's dissapointed, and obviously still cares for Larissa, even for just a bit, he wasn't able to handle his biotch of a wife.
I just...I'm mad right now. I'm probably going to go scavage the internet for some crack-fics before I can come back and read the next chapter. Larissa's mom just pees me off!
But despite my crushed feelings, I just want to say, yes, I still liked this chapter very much. It was...intense!Author's Response: Hello there, Pearl. >:)
I'm deeply sorry for your feelings, I don't mean to crush them.
And ew, her mother. Yucky. But for some reason, some mothers ARE like that. I didn't think it was possible but I've indirectly heard it and it's just awful. :( I've luckily got both my parents by my side, but I know too many people who don't. And sadly, they're the ones with issues, like Larissa. :(
Her dad. I'm keeping my lips sealed for now. ;)
Sorry about the angry emotions, dear. I didn't mean it to be that bad.
(Jokes, I totally did but I still feel awful)
I'm glad you liked it though, thanks for the review darlink! (from the show Angelina Ballerina)
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How has the new year been for you so far? Hopefully it's been well!
Aaannnd, on forward with the review!
I love stories depicting the brotherhood of Regulus and Sirius and seeing that you have made one makes me really happy! I felt so bad for Reggie as I read through the descriptions of his sufferring from the potion. I wanted to run and hug him until he felt okay.
I also like the little memory you created for him as he was being sorted. He's nervous and tiny, and oh so innocent, still not exactly corrupted by his parent's view points and still looks up to Sirius. I like that. I always imagined them being close as children...the memory that followed really broke my heart.
And your second to last line:
"He just wishes his brother knew that."
I found that rather touching, because though it's simple, its the rather harsh and cutting truth, that he died and Sirius would never know he died for the good side...to help better humanity. There would always be that bitter resentment for Regulus, despite the hidden good in him and Sirius would never know the truth.
All in all, this was wonderful dearie! Thank you for the great read!Author's Response: PEARL! HELLO AGAIN! :D
The New Year's been quite swell (pun intended because I went on a cruise ahaha :p) I hope yours has been fantasmagorical! :D
I love Sirius/Regulus fics, I never thought I'd be able to write them though. :p I'm so glad the thing with the potion was written well (unlike this review) because that was quite hard to write.
I really wanted the comparisons between the two memories. That when they were young they were besties and what not, but then they grew up. :'( (excuse me as I go attend to my feels)
Sirius NEVER knew about Regulus and it makes me want to cry because good ol' Reggie was really a good guy and Sirius died thinking he was an evil psycho like his parents were. (My feels)
Thanks for the lovely review! You're just wonderful. :D Report Review
I don't know if you've read my response to your last review yet, but before I wanted to proceed to my review, I wanted to let you know that everything's been alright. I've just been caught up with school, life, and the such. Anyway, on forward.
I'm feeling for Resse right now. The poor dearie doesn't even know if she wants to keep it! But I'm sure she will. I personally think she'll be a good mom.
Blake's so sweet! He seems like an awesome brother, but Pansy hitting on him? That's quite...disturbing...But how can she be so stupid as to think that Blake's Reese's father? *facepalm*
And I like the chemistry between Reese and James. I really want her to tell him soon. By the way he's acting, I think he'll take the news quite alright.
And the bit about Madame Pomfrey. She really DOES need to retire. I wouldn't be surprised if she was around Hogwarts durring the Marauder Era as well.
Anyway, I'll come stop by again to read the next chapter sometime soon. I was lucky enough to cram a bit of reading and hopefully time will let me cram some more. I'm so sorry for not coming around earlier, and you'll be seeing me in your reviewbox (hopefully) soon! Luv ya'! ;)Author's Response: Hello again!
I did read your response to my review, don't worry. I don't mind that you don't leave reviews, but there weren't many updates and I think I stalked the reviews you left and they're hadn't been any new ones! I was just a bit worried. :)
The Pansy thing - I was just having fun writing her ridiculously dumb. I had watched DH and when she says that they should hand Harry in I just ugh. I don't like her at all. :p
You'll have to wait and see about her telling him. ;)
I always imagined Madam Pomfrey to be there for ages. In my head she started about 3 years before Harry started and she just lived forever ahaha. :p
It's okay if you don't review, don't worry about it! I understand that RL can get in the way! Take your time really, it doesn't matter if you don't read the rest. :p
Thanks for reviewing, lovely! ♥ Report Review
I'm utterly just at a loss for words at this ending. I'm litterally just crawling on my hands and knees in the depths of my brain, just wondering how to cram how I feel into words.
It's over, and and now that the story is finished, I feel as if a heavy weight has been lifted off my chest as a reader. This was the perfect closure to it all, a proper epilogue, and it's nice to know that it's official that Voldemort will never come around again. I mean, yeah, his death scene was well constructed last chapter, but I just...I feel sort of comforted that this epilogue sealed that officially. I can't exactly explain...
But within all this happiness, I still feel sort of stiff inside, I suppose, because again, I am reminded that Harry isn't there to celebrate. That all his years as a youth, sacrificing, and he would never get to see the greatness that came out of all his, Ron's and Hermione's effort. But that's what makes it a great ending, because even though the good side won, it came with a heavy price, and... it's almost miserable, I suppose is the best way I can explain it.
I suppose you can say this ending had me acting rather bi-polar, stirring a strange mixture of happiness and sadness. It's so nice though, the Ron and Hermione are together forever now, with no dangers to tear them apart. It's so wonderful, and I enjoy them so much as couple. It's so...bittersweet.
Anywho, I just want to congratulate you as well on completing this wonderful story, and I thought I should let you know that I'll be reading your other stuff as well. :)Author's Response: That is one of the more creative -- and, by extension, flattering -- mental images I think I've been witness to, where this story is concerned. And surprisingly accurate! :D
I'm so glad that you thought this was a fitting closure to the story; I wrote this solely for that purpose, and seeing everyone's reviews is really making me feel good about it. I think I know what you mean about closure, if I'm allowed to say things like that about my own story. Voldemort died in chapter 14, but in chapter 15, you get a sense of life to balance that out: That the soldiers of the war WILL continue to live, even while others won't. But you're right, too, about the bittersweet edge to this, which I just mentioned: There /are/ people who won't get to see the victory, and it will undoubtedly be hard for the survivors to just pick up the pieces. The difference with the addition of this chapter, I think, is that you know they have a chance to, and that is the key. It /is/ miserable, even though it is a victory. I'm floored at how adeptly you're getting this story!
Thank you so much for being one of the best reviewers for this story, and always returning so promptly for updates with such lovely reviews. It's been an honor, hearing what you've had to say! ♥ I really hope to see you back on other works of mine, too -- I can't thank you enough!! Report Review
I can't believe it. Just one last bit is left and then there will be no more chapters to look forward to. This is quite saddening. (If that's even a word?)
Anywhat, on forward with the actual review. I like the little showdown between Ron, Hermione and Voldemort. To be honest, I never fully grasped how Voldemort was becoming so weak until now. It does makes sense though, through Hermione's explanation, and I like the reasoning behind it. Harry's blood being in Voldemort, I found that very clever and something I would've never imagined. Perhaps this was already covered in a previous chapter/author's note, and I apologise for not catching it until now.
And I like how you made it Percy to be the one from the crowd to stand up and speak. I feel like it's sort of like redemption to his character in a way. For as long as we known him, he was always that annoying, pompous prat, and here, here he's gained my respect. The fact that he even said his name! I felt so proud for him. So thank you so much for including Percy. It was a small but huge role.
And the epilogue. I'm really curious to see how that turns out! I can't wait.
Lovely chapter as always and I shall await it's ending!!!Author's Response: Isn't it weird? It really doesn't feel like we should be so close to the end of this story! Saddening is most definitely a word, and, I think, a very appropriate one to use here.
It's actually sort of a good thing you didn't grasp his weakness until this point -- mostly because HE didn't. Voldemort of course didn't understand what was happening, that his blood was basically dead, or that he was essentially a dead man as soon as Harry died. I'm so happy you liked the explanation for it! Overall, that was probably the trickiest bit of this entire story: Finding a plausible reason for Harry's wanting to go on, and then making sure Voldemort was still able to die somehow. No need to apologize!
Redemption was exactly what Percy needed, and I'm so pleased I got to give it to him. He WAS a prat, up until the point (in my opinion) when he confessed to his family how wrong he'd been, in the Room of Requirement. That took a lot of bravery, which isn't something to overlook. You're very welcome for including it! :D
The final chapter actually should be coming out this week! I know that I normally wait too, but it'll be a nice way to make up for the holiday break, and with only one chapter to go it seems a bit silly to wait longer. :P Looking forward to hearing your opinion on it! ♥ Report Review
4-5 Chapters more?!?! Wow, so much must be going down in the next few last chapters, huh? I'm honestly gonna cry when this ends. It's one of my FAVORITE fanfics.
And thank you, thank you for not making Scorpius dead. The thought of him dead made my heart stop and go cold.
And I read your author's note, when you said you had no experience in writing the grieving, dead bodies, and kidnapping- - -I thought you did a magnificent job! Everything was written so nicely, and litterally, had me gripping the blankets of my bed.
Everything was just so...good. Just so good, like...I can't even think of how to compare this to something equally good, it's that great!
I need an update! Just...period! I want to know what happens next! I want to know where Emeric takes them! I want to know if Draco's really dead or if it was all bluff. To be honest, you have some of the best cliffies. Your cliffhangers leave me yanking my hair in frustration 'cause I just need more! GAH! MOAR! :)
Sorry, I'm just spazzing out here. Don't mind me.
And I hope that your holidays were grand, and I wish you a happy New Years! :DAuthor's Response: 3-4 chapters left actually :'D But there's lots of silly side stories that I'll post too, so it's not /over/ over.
I'm glad you liked it c: I was worrying so much. Now that I think about it, the action actually wasn't that hard to write. It was all that grieving. It's a comedy and I put dead people in it, what was I thinking? D: Well 'Four Weddings and A Funeral' did it.
The next chapter is all in Bea's point of view so hopefully I can write that quick c: her PoVs tend to be easier to write.
You know me, I love shoving everyone off cliffs :'D
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I loved this! It was very...what's the word? Err...seductive? Sexy? I have no clue, but I loved it anyway!
So the woman Draco married...Was that Daphne? Considering that Astoria was his secret all along? (Rhetorical question, don't answer that...it MUST'VE been Daphnes, unless Astoria has any other sisters...) *face palm*
I liked how you took tiny snippets throughout their relationship. It shows how dedicated they were towards one another, and justifies your last couple of lines:
"She's been the constant throughout his life, he knows that it was wrong but he didn't care.
After all this time, Astoria was still his dirty little secret."
I really liked this one-shot. It was beautiful. And Happy holidays to you too! I forgot to add this in my last review, but I can't believe you finished you fic with bullied Clara in it! But then again, I'm glad it ended the way it did. It couldn't have ended in a better note, it was perfect as it was. :)
Anyway, HAPPY HOLIDAYS TO YOU MY DEAREST FRIEND, AND HOPE YOU HAVE A MERRY NEW YEAR'S AS WELL! :DAuthor's Response: It was a real challenge for me to write, it was for a Secret Santa and one of their OTP's is Draco/Astoria, so I decided to give it a go. I'm glad you liked it though! :D
Yes, the woman he married was Daphne. :D
I'm really glad you liked it, it was actually really fun to write! :D
Thanks for the review! ♥
MERRY CHRISTMAS AND HAPPY NEW YEAR! :D Report Review
Hello Lovely! :D
*sighs* Where to begin, where to begin? First off, I want to start with the Smiths...like father like son...I can't believe Smith's father is so...arrogant! But I can't hate on the mother. I love Smith's mother. She seems to be the heart and sense of the family, I see.
And I love the Wood family! I think you characterized Oliver as a dad pretty well and Katie...does that mean he married Katie Bell, or is she a different Katie? Just wondering. :)
Oliver is such a great dad! If only my dad was as cool as him...
And Clara! The poor darling, I just want to run up to her and hug her! She did a great job sticking up for herself, and that Smith boy really had that slap going for him! The damn...turkey! (because that's the cleanest insult I can come up with for this review). I hate that boy so much!
Lovely chapter as always, hun! And I bid you a very cheery holidays! :DAuthor's Response: DID YOU NOT MAKE THE CONNECTION?!
Maybe I should have made it clearer... :/
IT'S ZACHARIAS SMITH! THAT'S HIS FATHER! :D THAT'S WHY HE'S ARROGANT YAY! :D
I was originally going to make the mother evil but I couldn't have two evil parents... :p
I'm so glad that Oliver was portrayed well! I was like, "NO I DON'T WANT TO WRITE YOU BECAUSE I'LL SCREW YOU UP!" :p
Yes, it means he married Katie Bell, I really adore the two of them together. :'D
Oliver is amazing, I based him off parts of my dad, because when I was getting bullied he kinda acts like that (but with a LOT more swear words - every second word is the f-word! :p) and the rest I just took the good bits of all the other fathers I know. :p
I'm going to answer a bit from your next review, about the end.
I'm glad it seemed a perfect way to end, I was really unsure of it. :p
Thanks for the review! :D
MERRY CHRISTMAS AND A HAPPY NEW YEAR! :D Report Review
Yes, and update!
I've honestly waited so long for this chapter, and the ending...Oh, gawd, I need more!
I like Lily's little hostility towards Florence going on in her head. It makes things realistic, and honestly, through everything she's going through so far, I want to reach through my computer and hug her.
And Florence. She's so bitter, and it kind of annoys me that she refuses to accept help. I can relate to her in some ways, yes, but her bitterness...I guess it just unleashes the reality of mental sickness. Not everyone can be helped.
I liked Cheyenne and Florence's bantering in the beginning. It's true. Being in a mental hospital myself, there is a fair share of squabbles that can get pretty nasty, but for the most part, everyone does try to hold each other up.
I just...I don't know. This story really does hit it home for me. Thank you for the update, and I shall await the next. :) Report Review
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