Oh my merlin, it's over. That's terribly sad. I might just cry, but the ending was TOO PERFECT!
(get ready for feels and superlative use of caps lock :D)
This has been one of my favourite stories on the site for a while now :D
not only are they fun to read, they're also very well written.
Seriously, this is one of the fics that i (re)(re)(re)(re)(re)reread, forever, because it's just so darn good :D
So that's what I think of the story, as for the chapter. YAY!YAY!YAY!
Freddie catwalking... that's not new to me. Whenever i picture Freddie he's always in some sort of ridiculously flamboyant pose of some sort. (Can I just say that a absolutely ADORE Freddie/Amy?)
Second. Mr. Flynn is in jail. FUDGING. FLYNN. IS. IN. JAIL.
Absolutely perfect. The bloody flubbermuffin deserves it a thousand times over.
LILY! She is my second favourite character, for sure. She's gonna be the biggest slave driver as captain. LAPS ALL THE TIME.
I love how you just slipped in the fact that James now has a life in right at the end. Like, "no big deal guys, but I'm a fudging big deal"
Anyways, I'm gonna stop myself here.
I can only ramble for so long.
Thank you so much for writing this amazing story!
I can't wait for the sequel!
~GillAuthor's Response: Hey, Gill! I so, SO appreciate you reading this story. Really! It has been FIFTY-FOUR chapters. WHOA. And you're still here for the end. That's amazing of you.
I cannot express how amazing you are for reading it once, let alone multiple times! Flattery :)
Freddie makes me laugh so hard. To be honest, I have no idea how he turned out the way he did. He just had a voice and he was like... yep, this is me. Sorry if you had other plans.
LILY. So glad you like her. She is like a sassy/snarky/annoying-little-sister version of Avery, which is in part because Avery was around so often for the last 7 years.
So casual. Nbd just got signed to a legit team go about your lives, peasants.
OMG James should call someone a peasant. NOTE TO SELF.
Thank you so much for following along! I really hope you enjoy the sequel just as much! I have a LOT of things planned! Report Review
YAY! I'm glad I'm not the only one who ships Tyrinne :D
They'd be perfect together Author's Response: I have to be honest I am the biggest Tyrinne shipper. Like if I could, I would end the story with her and Tyson falling in love but sadly I don't think many people would like that.
Thanks for reviewing!
-Rebecca Report Review
Hm. She was snogging... Marcus Flint? Aiden?
James' backstory makes me sad :(
Great chapter :D
~GillAuthor's Response: You will find out who she snogged in the next chapter :)
I'm glad you liked the chapter, and yes James' backstory is sad.
Thank you for reviewing!
-Rebecca Report Review
So yeah, lysander is a jerk... but he's a kind and hot jerk. And Dom is a giant mess of wobbly-wobbly emotions and bloodlust and normal lust and lies.
So I don't see how this can end well.
The scene with the folder and Rose's letter legitimately scared me so much.
You sure can write suspense.
Anyways, great chapter!
~GillAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for your review! And yes, Lysander's and jerk and Dom's crazy... but there's only two more to go! Report Review
I really like this first chapter!
Just a few weird things: the formatting is super spaced out, which could get annoying to read.
Also, I'm a bit confused abut the use of the word 'punctual'. That means 'on time' but it doesn't seem to fit in context when you use it.
Also, 'adjourning the walls', i assume that's meant to be adorning?
Great premise, great writing, but it could use some editing :DAuthor's Response: Yeah, I noticed the spacing thing was an issue with a lot of my chapters. I don't intentionally do that, the formatting gets messed up when I bring it over from word and I'm too lazy to edit it at the time. Its very time consuming to do. Meh I probably did mess up a few words in there. I'm not grammar princess. I really suck at it, to be honest. I might have to consider a beta pretty soon ;). Report Review
Reviews, reviews, reviews. I like reviewing, and making people feel good about their writing, but it's always hard for me not to just state things that the author (being, well, THE AUTHOR) doesn't already know. You wouldn't know, for instance, that I think the idea of cupcake forensics is sheer genius.
I knew all this sugar would come in handy at some point xD
Also, Freddie finally gets some appreciation! The boy's obviously an extremely accomplished stalker.
I'm glad his skills of creepiness and deduction are finally being put to good use.
It's starting to seem much more grave and serious in here. I think possibly it needs more cupcakes.
Proving yet again that you can write anything
I love this chapter!
~Gill.Author's Response: Pretty much all of my reviews consist of me throwing the author's story back at them, but in caps and with a lot of keyboard smashing so it makes less sense 8D
and just when I thought I was getting away from sugar-addled antics...
I know! I'm always sad for Fred because he's such a sidekick. It's what he loves being BUT STILL. JUST ONCE. And so we shall see how this time will turn out 8D
Perhaps they've zapped themselves into a bakery. That would be quite something.
♥ Thank you so much ^__^ Report Review
oh. well. I'm not quite sure what i'm going to write, but i KNOW that I have to leave a review.
This was... glorious.
i've read this poem several times, and I think i get it more and more after each read. But you, you seem to get it inside and out.
Caradoc and Rosmerta? Who would have thought that such a strange pairing could be this perfect?
I love what you say about caradoc: about the anonymity that seems to come from fame. And about Rosmerta, who is invisible because everyone sees her.
There is so much insight and beautiful writing in this, it actually took my breath away for a moment. At first, the dialogue surprised me: it seemed a bit out of place, but after re-reading, it actually flows beautifully with the rest of the story.
There's not much else I can say, and nothing I can critique,
so thank you for writing this beautiful story!
~GillAuthor's Response: Oh my goodness! This review caught me really off gaurd (in a good way of course). It thrills me to goodness that you have read this more than once, and even more that you took the time to read the poem. I knew going into this little story that I wanted to use Rosmerta... my choice of Caradoc was based largely on a fic I read a long time ago called Ripples by Margravine in which she placed Caradoc in Slytherin. A slytherin member of the OotP was just what this story called for. :P I do think I know what you mean, the dialogue is a bit jolting from the rhythm of the piece, but I'm glad you think it works! I still have mixed feelings about it. There are three more chapters of this story left to go that will explore other passages of the poem that I hope to get around to posting someday. :P
Thank you so much for this lovely review! Report Review
Oh godric xD
I'm actually dying from that last part. Rose is indeed a "skeleton key to mischeif". You could probably make her have a dance party with hippogriffs and it would seem plausible xD
Why on earth is she so obsessed with Julian anyways? Just because he's extremely attractive? Is she really that shallow?
Hilarious chapter, this made me laugh out loud. Can't wait to read on!
~GillAuthor's Response: I sort of love that phrase, just so you know -- "skeleton key to mischief." I might copyright it. ;) I'm glad you're getting such amusement of this story, though! It was a lot of fun to write, and I do miss it sometimes. I am very much considering doing a sequel!
Um, yeah. She basically likes him because he is every kind of hot. Shallow is definitely the word for it! But then, after five chapters, that's probably not /too/ surprising.
Thank you for taking the time to leave me a review on this. It really made my day! :3 Hope to see you back by before too long!! Report Review
Hi, this will be a quick review, cuz it's late and i'm tired, but I just wanted to say welcome back!
I'm so happy that writing bug crawled back to you, because I've missed your stories :D
This was a great chapter.
I love the line : The guilt was too heavy for me to carry but I had no one to turn to. I only had myself and she was (w)itch.
It makes me chortle :D
Anyways, wonderful comeback, don't take as long for the update this time, pwetty please!
~GillAuthor's Response: Hullo Gill! I hope you're okay. And aw, it's sweet of to to review anyway. Thank you so much, i'm glad you're liking my stories, it means a lot to me. Thanks! I'm so glad you liked that line :) Thank you and I won't :) Thanks for a great review and I hope you have a great day. xxx Report Review
i think just an epilogue... don't take this the wrong way, but when people do a sequel to a story like this, it usually just ends up being a series of awful muck ups in the main character's life that makes everyone unhappy. So maybe just an epilogue.
This is just my opinion, though :D
~GillAuthor's Response: that's what i was leaning towards, but i'm such an indecisive person that i'm still not sure. honestly, it's ridiculous. yeah, i don't want to make everyone unhappy, so i'm pretty sure that i'm just going to leave it here. thank you for helping me :D
ellie :) xx Report Review
the end of this chapter. I can't. i just can't.
too sad proceeding to unbelievable amounts of adorable.
I loved it.Author's Response: -feels returned-
ahaha, i had to go back to this chapter to see what you meant.
i think that shows something about my memory ;)
thank you so much!
ellie :) xx Report Review
so, james was going out with natalie... then she cheated on him with Al? And now almost the exact same thing has happened with summer? And nat wanted to ask james if it's ok for her and al to get together?
these are my theories. onwards to see if they're wildly incorrect...
~GillAuthor's Response: you've got it in one, my darling. well done! well, it was obvious, but still, well done :D yeah, natalie and james were together for three years and then she eventually left him for al, who she was cheating with. and now summer has done basically the same thing to poor james. /depression.
thank you so much!
ellie :) xx Report Review
*chucks a few rotten tomatoes at the author*
*changes to chocolate eclairs, cause no one likes rotten fruit*
oh no. I was so determined NOT to read this... but my willpower broke. Artsy Scorpius, how could I resist?
So, besides being yet another WIP to distract from weather for ducks (cough cough) it sounds like the beginning of a great story :D
It's so true that Hogwarts' curriculum is rather... arcane. The introduction of art to hogwarts could be nothing less than interesting, and considering the main character and the author, looks like we're in for some unfortunate happenings and outrageous fortune and whatnot.
i can't wait to read more :D
Love it so far
~GillAuthor's Response: *dodges rotten tomatoes, deftly catches chocolate eclairs one-handed, om nom nom nom nom*
heh - artsy scorpius, how can /I/ resist? it's got to the point where I can't write him any other way. (cough, cough, I am working on the last three chapters of weather for ducks but they are /long/, srsly)
I know...it disappointed me quite a bit when I was younger and still thought Hogwarts was real; the things I'm good at (art, english literature, music) barely even get a look in on the curriculum. I bet the only subjects I'd be good at would be herbology and history of magic! so, really, in my headcanon of the progressive next-gen world (hurrah for positive ministry reforms and whatnot) the Howgarts' curriculum would get an overhaul. haha, thank you! I love my unfortunate happenings and, now and again, my outrageous fortune - don't get your hopes up for scorpius, though. once again, I'm writing him reliably downtrodden.
thanks for the review! next chapter is already up :D ♥ Report Review
i thought his name was Owen Kane... it's a bit weird that Penny calls him by his last name...
i loved Fred in this chapter. This love of bootlaces he has certainly comes in handy for bribery, doesn't it? ;)
Great chapter. i'm really hating Kyle atm.
~GillAuthor's Response: no, his name is kane owen. people generally call him by his first name, even summer and james, etc, but every now and again someone calls him owen, so i can see how that might get all confusing. but it's kane owen.
yep. summer always has a knickerful of bootlaces at the ready... well, not really.
thank you :D
ellie :) xx Report Review
It's not just you. ickle Freddy-kins is truly adorable.
Penny and Fred should get together and be adorable as a unit.
Love the chapter!
GillAuthor's Response: ahaha, i thought so. he's amazing :)
and they would be so cute together, i think.
elliei :) xx Report Review
seems like all of the chapters end in the same way xD
love the story so far ;D
the plot thickens...
I already hate Kane with a burning passion.
anyways, love it so far
~GillAuthor's Response: ahaha, i noticed that when i got to about chapter six - they snog at the end of every chapter.
thank you :)
and yes, the plot does indeed.
and kane is nasty, so i'm not surprised.
natalie is also nasty, but in a different way.
ellie :) xx Report Review
Awesome chapter... though i am a bit confused as to the ages.
I know that Aimee is 20 and James is 21 (and i'm guessing that Molly is 20 as well), but how old is Lily?
Love the story so far :D
-GillAuthor's Response: erm, aimee is 20, as is molly, lorcan and james are 21, albus is 19 and lily is 17, same year as aimee's brother brent. mark is also 21. so yeah. lily will be a seventh year very soon :)
ellie :) xx Report Review
Ooooh, the plot thickens. Interesting so far. Although I'd like to know what it is about May that people like. So far, since it's first person, I don't really know anything about her.
GillAuthor's Response: So, like, about May? Like background, personality stuff? Alright, I'll do something with that for the next chapter :) Thanks for the advice :)
~Charlotte Report Review
This gave me chills. Really. i have goosebumps.
(although when Voldy and Bellatrix were dancing i did have an avpm flashback xD)
Anyways, this was positively beautiful. Bellatrix is such a complex character, and you did an amazing job in characterizing her. Voldemort was... surprising. My first thought was that the tenderness must be a ploy to get her to help him, but by the sound of it she's so devoted she'd do it anyways. It seems quite out of character for him todisplay any sort of tenderness or caring, but you made it seem believable.
My favourite part of this story is "It was her favorite time of day, the few sparse moments in which the sun succumbed to the horizon and night took over like a predator. The black patches played about her legs like the children she would never have, lashing out at one another in jealously each time she twitched or took too deep of a breath, but she paid them no mind, staring instead at the drizzle that fell outdoors. The shadows swept over her cool, pale skin daringly, coming closer to her than her husband ever would in their marriage of convenience, their relation little more than a shared name. The invading darkness hemorrhaging into the sky before her knew her better than almost anyone."
I love the word choice and the description. It really paints a picture in my head.
All in all, this was exquisite.
~GillAuthor's Response: Hello! Thanks for the review, and I'm sorry it's taken me a little while to post a response!
I did try to play around with Voldemort's character a little bit in this story, in terms of trying to make him more a figure of desire and attraction. It was almost like I tried to see him the way that Bellatrix sees him. Your first thought wasn't wrong, though; it is part of his plot to get her to help him out, and she definitely fell for it hook, line, and sinker!
I like that paragraph, too. The challenge this story was written for (well, one of them) required me to use imagery, and while I ordinarily love toying with description, it was fun to just go all out in this one-shot.
Thanks for your lovely review :)
-Amanda Report Review
You left me a review a while ago and mentioned this story, so i decided to check it out... And boy am I glad I did!
This was a fantastic beginning! I love this glimpse of a young Helena, before her demons caught up with her. I also love how you made them meet in the innocence of childhood, young and still eager for bedtime stories :D
You packed this chapter with so much information, about the history, about Quidditch, the founders EVERYTHING, but you still managed to make it flowing and fun to read.
I like the beginnings of Helena's problems: an absent mother. Simple as that.
I also like how the characters are revealed so much in one chapter. The Baron, who is a bully but inquisitive, intelligent and caring... a strange paradox.
And helena, Hogwarts' princess, spoiled but not spoilt.
I can't wait to find out what happens next!
-GillAuthor's Response: Aww you actually checked it out? *Hugs* Thank you so much :D
I'm so glad you liked it :D I know, I haven't written in a long time, what with exams and all. But I'm starting now and I'll keep on reading. I hope you keep in touch with the updates as well :D
thank you so much for the review, and more than that for looking this story up. But hey, this is nothing compared to yours :D
*Hugs* Report Review
Awwwe, poor Ollie :( Lexi's got to be the most clueless ever if she can't tell that he likes her :(
I'm not sure about Noel. He seems like a bit of a womanizer (for lack of a better word)
Anyways, great chapter! I ship Lexiver (or Olexi?)
~GillAuthor's Response: I know... Poor Ollie indeed :( Wait - Oliver likes Lexi? WHAT? *gasp* Where did you get that crazy idea from?
Noel is... well, he's Noel. And you'll find out about him soon enough. Interesting thoughts, though.
Thanks for the lovely review ♥
P.S. I'm liking both Lexiver and Olexi, haha. Report Review
teehee, i love the line: Oliverís crazy level is larger than Gilderoy Lockhartís ego in a room full of mirrors.
it makes me giggle.
anyways, i'm reredaing so i remember what happens for the new chapter :D
~GillAuthor's Response: Ah, I love that line too ♥
Yeah, sorry about the long wait... But at least since you're rereading it'll be fresh in your mind :D
Thanks for the review! Report Review
*can only express her joy about this chapter through interpretive dance*... or something.
I loved this chapter so much! It's my favourite so far!
Tough Lily was the highlight for me.
"you're a fudging quidditch player!" she's marvellous, really.
And I really like Avery's mum. She seems like such a kind person.
My favourite quote from the chapter is:
"You see that goal to take it to eighty? Boom. Right past that Russian son of a witch."
Rodulov should be drop-kicked through the middle hoop, into a briar patch and then attacked by a manticore...or something ;D
I love the end of this chapter. It's just absolutely perfect.
I can't wait for the party! hoping for Javery action and/ or the above violent actions towards Rodulov and Mr. Flynn. Just a thought.
Great, great chapter!
~GillAuthor's Response: Oh interpretive dance for the WIN!
This was definitely one of my favorite chapters of the entire story. It was so much fun to write.
Let's talk about Rodulov's name. Brilliant naming by me. Toot toot.
Thank you so much for the wonderful review! Report Review
This was lovely.
It was interesting to read it from Draco's point of view, to hear his take on Luna. She's such a mysterious character, it must be hard to write what others think of her, especially in a situation like this.
I really love the expression "a splinter of a creature".
I'm not sure why, it just seems... right?
Anyways, beautiful story, very sad too.
~GillAuthor's Response: thank you so much! draco/luna used to be a favourite pairing of mine, but I've never quite got used to writing either character - they're both incredibly hard to pin down.
thank you for reviewing and I'm really glad you liked it :D ♥ Report Review
This made me laugh out loud like an idiot... everyone else in the house must think there's something terribly wrong with me. I love it so far! Report Review
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