Aw, thank you so much Cat! I was happy to help :) And for the record I thought this chapter was executed spectacularly. I loved everything about it! I am so happy for Addie and everything that's happened to her. Brilliant job! Report Review
You're back! Yay :)
I will admit it here and now: I'm a total sucker for random POV changes. So when I saw this was going to be a Sirius POV, I squealed. No shame.
I really liked the part where he was talking about falling in love with L.C. and Lenny at the same time and how his perception of L.C. really was like Lenny, he just didn't realize it. I thought that part was really well done.
I loved Teddy's protectiveness. He didn't care at all about what Sirius had to say - he only cared for Lenny, which was really sweet.
Love the chapter, love the whole story, and love seeing you update again!
-Laura Report Review
Hey Cat! I really liked this chapter, it had a lot of really great parts to it.
I really liked Rose's speech to Addie. I think it was just what she needed to get started in the process of moving on. I think it helped her to accept some of the mistakes she'd made in the past. There was one part I didn't agree with, that being some of blame Rose placed on Addie for her past with Al. It really isn't Addie's fault that Al spent several years kind of pining over her because he never made any attempts to be civil or kind to her, so that part is really his fault. But other than that, Rose was pretty spot on - if a little harsh, but necessarily so.
It's nice to see Caleb again. I always did like him, even if I didn't like him dating Addie. He's such a cool, nice guy and I think he's exactly the kind of support that Addie needs while she tries to straighten her life out.
My favorite part, though, was Addie's conversation with Cormac. I loved how she was assertive about the fact that Draco, Astoria, and Scorpius are her real family. Blood doesn't always equal love. I hope that Addie will be able to get to know her biological family better while still maintaining her strong relationship with her real family.
And now I'm in a dilemma. Because there is a part of me that doesn't want Al and Addie to work things out and get back together. Because I think it shows a more realistic portrayal of life - which I love - and it shows that you can come back from heartbreak without reestablishing a relationship with the person that broke your heart. But on the other hand, I've been shipping Al and Addie for a while and I really want them to work things out. I don't know which one I want more!
Once again, really great chapter! I can't believe this story is almost over!
-Laura Report Review
Hello, Akansha! Hooray for a new chapter!
Hm, a little sister, eh? A Squib, model little sister? Sounds interesting. She's seems very energetic. I have to wonder at her relationship with Addie. It sounds like there's a bit of resentment there on Addie's part, but also love.
I dislike olives on my sandwich and just in general. I also don't like onions.
I liked your story about Addie and Hugo and the relationship they have. It's nice to see a friendship that starts later in life, instead of when they were 11. I also like that Rose introduced them and Addie didn't really like him very much. They seem like they have the friendship that would really confuse an outside observed because they don't seem compatible, but that is exactly why they work. You know?
Oh, the party. And James. Poor Addie's definitely going to have her work cut out for her. I can't wait to get to know James even more.
And my favorite scene was Addie and Hugo :) Best friends for the win!
Also, I really liked your little inclusion of the CoA reference. I wonder what wonderful person influenced you to read those books... ;)
Wonderful job, love. Keep it up!
-LauraAuthor's Response: Greetings and salutations, Laura! :D
Yep, Addie's Squib, supermodel little sister, who Addie loves, yes, and feels protective towards, but can't help feeling jealous of, too. I guess I'd be the same, if I were in Addie's shoes.
I dislike olives. But onions are almost my favourite veggie.
The entire friends-on-the-first-day scenario was so clichÃÂ©d and overdone, I couldn't bear to repeat it. Hence, this hastily put together story, somewhat inspired by my own life (minus the trollish sixth-year) happened. I'm glad you liked it.
That has to be my second favourite scene. Right after James announcing it was his pet Flobberworm's funeral going on.
I think it was you who influenced me to read TMI. Maybe. Probably. Possibly.
Thanks so much, Laura.
-Akansha. Report Review
Greetings and salutations, m'dear!
Lovely, lovely chapter. I really like your descriptions. They paint a good image of things without being overly long and tedious.
I'm guessing that Addison's nightmare has something to do with why she's not an Auror anymore, though of course, I can't be sure. Very interested to see how that all plays out.
Hooray for Hugo! He's a cutie and I think that he makes a very good friend for Addison. Kind of balances her out in a way.
Hmm. Unpleasant James is unpleasant. There'll be a reason for it, though, and I can't wait to see what it is. I also anticipate many heated arguements between him and Addison, so that should be fun as well.
Can't wait to read your next chapter! Much love to you!
-LauraAuthor's Response: Greetings and salutations to you too, dear Laura.
Thanks so much! My ability to write decent descriptions comes from lots of reading- and excessive nail-biting.
Addison's nightmare has something to do with her ex-Auror-ship partially. There are other things too.
Hugo is my absolute favourite. And also, a secret- I ship him with Addison, it's a guilty pleasure that may make an appearance later in the story.
Unpleasant!James, indeed. And since Addison and him have had such a wonderful first impression of each other, the arguments are going to be spectacular. Atleast, I hope so.
Much love to you too,
-Akansha. Report Review
Bargh! Jess! I loved it! Loved it, loved it, loved it!
Also, I'm not completely sure if you know this, but this is Laura of teamstarkid7 on tumblr. Hi!
I can't tell you how perfect this was. I could actually hear Matt Smith's voice in my head for all of the Doctor's parts. And all the other references to the show just made me smile like an idiot.
I really like how you portrayed Petunia. You gave her character a lot of depth and some of the emotional conflict in this was just brilliant. It certainly gave an interesting perspective on Lily leaving for Hogwarts.
Part of me almost wants a sequel, or something. Does Petunia ever see the Doctor again? Does Lily have any more communication with him? This was fabulous.
Much much love to you!
-LauraAuthor's Response: Hi Laura! And don't silly, I know exactly who you are! :D
Thank you so much for stopping by and reading this; it really means a lot to me! And I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! I was really nervous writing this oneshot because I've never written Doctor Who fanfiction before and while I've seen the entirety of the revival series, I wouldn't say that I'm as familiar with the universe as I am that of Harry Potter. I was also really comfortable and confident in my abilities to write Petunia, James, and Lily, but really nervous and unsure about the Doctor. So your comment about being able to hear Matt Smith's voice in the dialogue makes me so unbelievably happy!!! Thank you so much! I was so worried about that and now I feel so much better!
And I'm glad that you liked my portrayal of Petunia! I think a lot about her as a person and while I don't sympathize with her as an adult, I do feel very sorry for her as a child and teenager. It must have been hard to feel second best and to want to be a part of something so badly and not be able to. When I signed up for the challenge, I was hoping for the quote where the Doctor says that he's never met someone who wasn't important because I felt that really suited her and her situation. But I'm glad that I got the quote I did because I was able to explore a different layer of her and more of her relationship with her sister which I really liked doing.
I'm glad that you want a sequel, haha! Unfortunately there won't be one, but I can tell you that Petunia does not see the Doctor again, but James and Lily travel with him steadily for a while until they return to the real world to help with the war. Which then leads to Harry and then their ultimate deaths and the poor Doctor is heartbroken once more (I feel so mean saying that). I think that before their deaths, Petunia finds out that Lily traveled with the Doctor too and that drives a further wedge between them because even though she had moved on, he was still HER Doctor and Lily was supposed to have her magic and stop "stealing" things from Petunia. So yeah, to say that all of this ends happily would be a lie.
But thank you so very much for reading!! I'm so happy that you enjoyed it and I'm looking forward to reading your DW oneshot when you publish it :D
~Jess :D Report Review
Yay! I do love this story. I'm just so PROUD of Autumn. I feel like she's finally in a good place in her life - or at least, she's headed there. I hope she has some sort of communication with her mom, but other than that, I'm really pleased with everything.
Brilliant, brilliant chapter and I can't wait for the next one!
-LauraAuthor's Response: Yay Laura! So gad that you liked it :)
I really love the fact that she's somewhere nice and solid and I can't wait to finish writing the last chapter. Thanks for being awesome! :) Report Review
I write to you now from the confines of my dorm room, miserably sick due to inescapable insomnia. I don't know if it's just my current state of mind, or maybe this wasn't as confusing as you thought, but this all actually made perfect sense to me.
I wish I didn't, but I can kind of understand some of what Rose is thinking and going through in this. The emotion was so raw and so disturbing that I could legitimately feel her self-loathing. Very well done, indeed.
Thanks, once again, for your wonderful shout out. And this time, I'll try to not wait two months to update Inventing Imperfection (yeesh. I still shudder when I think that I took that long.)
-LauraAuthor's Response: Hey! :)
Those are truly depressing conditions to read this story. I can vouch for that, as it was written in depressing conditions. And maybe I did underestimate myself, and it's not so confusing, but all the same, seems like I've acquired a penchant for dark, angst-y one-shots.
Thank you so much. I often feel very pressurised and a little self-depreciative myself, so I just took those emotions, some other common Rose faults, and exaggerated them to produce this, which is probably why the emotions are so bare and raw. Thanks so much for the compliment.
When I think about the two month wait for Inventing Imperfection, and the time Serendipity is taking, I shudder even harder. *feels guilty cuz she's worse at updating*
-Akansha. Report Review
Aha! The mystery of Tyler Gates is revealed! That was my guess of what happened, too, so I was right! Though, to be honest, I kind of wish I wasn't. Poor Gigi :( This kind of explains a lot about why she is the way she is.
They won! I really liked how when they were walking out onto the pitch, Gigi and the team were very disjointed, but as soon as Tyler made a comment about Gigi and James, they completely rallied together. It shows how much they really do care about each other.
Well, I'm very interested to see where this goes, what with Gigi going back to her former Quidditch Only mindset. Especially since James certainly seemed like he was starting to legitimately like her.
Can't wait for your next update, whatever and whenever it may be! And glad to have you back :)
-LauraAuthor's Response: Gigi throws herself into her Quidditch because its all she cares to know about. Sure, she loves her family, but when she was finally doing good in her love life and work life, it all came crashing down. Quidditch is her life and her love. She is convinced that is all she needs. I will update soon! I'm actually back this time ;) Report Review
Hello, Akansha, dear! I'm here with a review for you.
To put it shortly: I'm interested. You've hinted at several little things that I am very excited to see play out. First of all, I'm excited to see Addison's friendship with Hugo. Hugo isn't a character that gets a lot of notice, so I'm excited to see how you interpret his character. I also can't wait to meet James. Now he is a character that does get a lot of attention and I'm very excited to see how you imagine him.
And, of course, there's Addison herself. My initial impression is that she's not very happy with life. I'm guessing this has something to do with the life-threatening injuries and subsequent lack of job that Harry brought up - somthing else I'm eager to hear more about.
Basically, you've caught my attention with this chapter and I'm quite excited to see where you go with this. Also, I think you did a good job with Harry. He wasn't featured a whole lot, so there's not much to judge by, but he didn't seem to be OOC or anything, so that's good. Trust me, the most nerve-wracking things for me is trying to write him or the other Weasley adults.
Lovely, lovely, lovely work. I can't wait to read your next update - whatever it may be!
-LauraAuthor's Response: Hello Laura! Thanks for taking the time.
Originally, I'd planned that Hugo won't exactly be a major part of the story- his appearance was confined to the first two chapters. But lots of people are interested, so I may increase his part, do bits of, I dunno, cameo appearances. All I can say is, this is definitely not the last we'll see of Hugo.
James, hmm, he has been done so many times, but it never gets old, does it? As for my interpretation, well, you already know Addy's assumptions- a spoilt brat, so... ;)
Addison is my most ambitious character, in that I'm hoping to give her a life outside Hogwarts, so I'm equal parts nervous and exited. And no, she definitely isn't happy with where she is right now- sitting home all day doing nothing isn't her cup of tea.
The part with Harry took me the longest time, and there's yet more of him to come. *Cue wreaked nerves*
Thanks, yet again, for everything. Your insightful and sweet review completely made me forget about all those stupid haters.
Chocolated-coated almonds and raisins,
-Akansha. Report Review
There's nothing quite like the craziness and insanity that is the Weasley family. You know, they really WOULD have a cockroach cluster eating contest, would't they? They're all ginger nutters, the lot of them.
I really like your portrayal of Scorpius. It's so different from many of the other ones, and it feels so much more real, too, based on the (very little) that we know about him from J.K. Rowling. The part about his childhood was so heartbreaking. I can't imagine growing up without all the crazy little things I did with my brothers and cousins.
D'aww. We're getting so ScoRose cuteness :) Once again, I really like how you're developing their relationship. It really is different from anything I've ever read - but of course, all of your stories are like that. It's why I love them so much.
-LauraAuthor's Response: LAURA! Hi. Welcome to my NaNo :D
Yup, absolutely nutty. I was wondering whether I'd made them too mad then realised that I most definitely hadn't, ahha. I LOVE the Weasleys xD
One of the things I liked most about this was my Scorp - he's just so useless and lovely and I want to give him a big hug. And I wanted their relationship to develop in quite a normal way, as opposed to something dramatic and huge - relationships never seem to do that in real life.
Thank you for this lovely review! :) Report Review
Ahem. Please excuse me for one moment while I fangirl like crazy.
SCORPIUS AND BEA! ZOMG, I'M SO HAPPY RIGHT NOW! AHWIELFLEIWNVGEROAIDMKAIJEOKGOREIA
So much love right now. For this story, for those characters, and - most of all - for you. Also, can I get a WHOOP WHOOP for Bea for being all awesome and non-compliant hostage and stuff? Because she was kick-butt in this chapter. GIRL POWER.
Side note: this chapter is extra awesome when being read while listening to Hopeless Wanderer by Mumford and Sons. Just something I noticed.
Brilliant work. Now I'm just counting down the days until Bea skips off into the sunset while holding hands with a purple argyle blazer clad Scorpius. I still haven't forgotten that.
Again, much love!
-LauraAuthor's Response: *excused*
SFhdjgdsjf!! It only took 24 chapters for the blatant romance right? And then I proceed to smash everyone's hearts to pieces.
If the characters in Capers were ever compliant and did what was safe, there would no story. It would be a cooking show about cupcakes, and even then, Bea would probably end up blowing up the castle anyway.
Ohhh yes this chapter is very much a melancholy/hopeful song chapter. I have oodles of cheesy lyrics to go with it.
♥ I have not forgotten it either! c: Report Review
Akansha! Hooray, an update from you!
All right time to answer every single one of your questions!
Ships: Hmmm... I'd probably have to go with Al and Genesis at the moment. (Alsis? Genbus?) That, however, could be subject to change. At the moment, I don't know the other characters well enough to really start shipping them with anyone.
OCs: I quite like Trishna. She seems sassy. I like that. As for the other OCs... once again, I think I'll wait a bit to pass judgement on them. I look forward to reading more about their characters!
I really liked Gen's letter from home. She has three brothers (who are all older, yes?). I have three older brothers. How could I not love it? And her brothers seem really awesome too. If there's one thing I'm a sucker for, it's sibling interaction.
I think it's really cool that Gen is a Slytherin, but is also a Muggleborn. (Unless her mum is a witch? I noticed she wasn't mentioned... interesting...) Either way, it definitey breaks down the whole pure-blood Slytherin stereotype.
Do I like this story? Why yes! Yes I do! I very much enjoy it, and your others as well (Where is my Serendipity update? Hmmm?)
Of course I like you. What a silly thing to ask. Who else would draw me an extremely adorable picture of James and Faith? (Which, by the way, I absolutely LOVED!)
What? You watched AVPM because of me? I turned you into a Starkid? YES! Another convert! You are now officially the seventh person I've ever gotten to watch (and love) Starkid musials! WOO! Who's your favorite? How many of their musicals have you watched? Just AVPM? TELL ME EVERYTHING!
You're the best!
-LauraAuthor's Response: Hooray for me, indeed. Procrastination, it seems, is my middle name.
I quite like the name Alsis. Or Genbus. Either case, you're better at them than me, that's for sure. I understand what you mean about the other ships and OCs. In time, you'll come to know and tolerate, or love, or hate, all of them.
When I was writing about Jeff, Jake and Jason, I remembered you too have three older brothers. That, my dear, was pure serendipity. However, even through this short interaction, i've come to adore Gen's siblings.
I was kinda hoping that people would pickup on the mysterious absence of mentions of Gen's mother in the letter. It has a very twisted backstory. As for breaking pureblood stereotypes in Slytherin, well, for that matter, Eva McLageen happens to be a Muggleborn.
Dear old Tea June and her crew's crazy shenanigans are giving me loads of trouble these days. Just a little sneek peek, Lily is going to get hammered. And bookstores are visited. I know, woefully inadequate.
And i'll end this novel by saying, YES! You introduced me to Starkid, you wonderful creature. I figured I needed to check it out, if only to understand your references better. I've only managed to watch AVPM so far, but I guess Joey Walker is my favourite. Him as Voldy is too adbdddfgedgg for words. Lauren Lopez as Draco and the Snape-person are close seconds.
Thanks for everything, Laura!
-Akansha. Report Review
This was beautifully, wonderfully, utterly perfect. I love the realism of it all. You didn't suddenly make everything in Grace's life perfect and normal and completely in-order. You still left her with some growing room, but it was all still nicely wrapped-up. It's amazing.
I have loved this story so SO much. It is easily one of my favorites. Grace's journey was so heart-breaking, so touching, an so real. You have such a talent.
I'm so happy to have this ending, but I will very much miss this story. But even though I'll never be able to leave a review for this story again, I'll still be sticking around.
As always, I look forward to whatever your next update may be. Cheers!
-LauraAuthor's Response: LAURA.
Thank you so very much! I have loved this story too and I'm so glad that you did too. Life rarely works out all completely perfect and I didn't want an ending that was really fake but... so I'm glad that you appreciated it :D
Next update... suffering with the worst bout of writers block I've ever had (hideous affliction for someone who needs writing as much as I do) but hopefully it should be coming at some point soon!
Thank you :)
-AC Report Review
Hello! sour_grapes_snape here, from the Jily Challenge.
First of, I would like to say that I love the basis of this story. I feel like Remus (and Peter) is often neglected amongst the Marauders, most of the focus being on James or Sirius. So I think a story in his POV is a great idea and you write it very well.
My only complaint, in regards to my challenge, would be that there wasn't much James/Lily interaction.
However, I did genuinely enjoy the story. Remus has a good "voice" and the story seems really interesting. And, by the way, I absolutely LOVED the prologue. It was very well written.
Thanks for entering my challenge! Results will posted on the forums soon!Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. I did try to avoid some of the cliches present in the majority of Marauders' Era fanfictions, so I decided to write from Remus' perspective.
With regards to the challenge, I had received jealousy to write about, and wasn't exactly sure how to incorporate that into a fanfiction. I thought this chapter, however, portrayed James' jealousy when he discovered Lily and Severus were dating, and the events that ensued.
Voldy Needs a Hug Report Review
Hello! sour_grapes_snape here with your review! Thank you so much for entering my challenge.
I thought you wrote the Quidditch match very well. James seemed very in-character and the scene was well-executed. The only complaint I have is that it could have been a bit longer.
I loved the conversation James had with Lily. It showed that she was starting to care for him and provided a bit of a background for their relationship. I also liked the way James told Lily that he was still interested in her, it was very sweet.
Overall, I thought this was short and cute, with good attention to detail. Winners will be announced soon! Thank you again for entering
-LauraAuthor's Response: Hello :)
Thanks for leaving the review :) I enjoyed taking part in the challenge!!
Gah - I found the Quidditch really hard to write. I know I picked it but that was because I had the plot in my head but the match itself was really hard to write so I may have chickened out slightly and made it shorter than I orginally intended!!
I'm really glad you liked the conversation between the two of them though! I loved writing this part and it kind of made me want to write more about it!!
Thanks again for reviewing :) It was a great challenge!!
Lauren Report Review
Yup. Autumn totally owned Benson. Cue the sassy finger snap. Oh, he so had that coming.
Every singel time Autumn does something, I just keep swelling with pride. She's come so far. I'm so happy to see her taking a stand for herself and getting her life in order and just taking charge.
I do hope she takes the time to really talk with James - something she's clearly about to do with Dom. I think that she really does need to have a rational discussion with him. And then hopefully stay together, because I really like their dynamic.
I'm still not super happy with Dom. I'm not quite so upset, but it hasn't completely gone away. I'm really looking forward to the Weasley family-induced talk the two are about to have.
Lovely chapter, as always.
-LauraAuthor's Response: Ahha, i enjoyed writing that bit with Autumn and Benson ^ although I'm thinking she might have been a bit harsh but HEY.
I'm proud of her too! I do think of my characters as akin to my children, and it's so lovely to see them grow and develop and change :)
Thanks for reviewing Laura!
-AC Report Review
All I can say is: this.
Darn it, Helen, how do you do it? I'm sitting here, having just read the beautiful collection of words that was this chapter, and I'm crying. I'm crying. Do you understand how big a deal this is? I don't cry. I don't. It's a very very rare thing for me to cry. And now, this is the second story of yours that I have ever read that has made me cry.
I don't know how you do it.
And oh my good God - James told Grace he loves her! Please give me a moment to fangirl over this. I loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved this chapter. Times a million.
-LauraAuthor's Response: Laura! Thank you for this lovely review!
I actually wasn't planning on James bringing THAT out in this chapter, but then I realised that we'd go through the whole scope of the story without James saying the L word and I thought that might be a little bit stupid.
BUt thank you so much! You are lovely. :D
-AC Report Review
Giinaaa. Giinaaa! You're killing me here. Killing me. I can't take it. Gah.
You're brilliant. This story is brilliant. It's all just brilliant.
Words. They escape me.
You mad genius, you.Author's Response: I'm on a killing spree! 8D
♥ I am most definitely mad. Report Review
When did this story update and how the heck did I miss it?
Late review is late. Again. I do this a lot. So sorry.
Apologies for not sounding very eloquent, but I'm well chuffed right now (I can't tell you how long I've wanted to use that term). This chapter was lovely and perfect in every way possible. Normally, I would expound upon how wonderful it was, but it was just so beautiful that I don't have words. I loved every bit of it. Flawless, my dear. Flawless.
-Laura Report Review
You... Ellie, you... I can't... I mean it's just...
Coherency. I don't have it right now.
That whole chapter, I was just stewing. Simmering, if you will. Like food. Because I was just thinking, "Don't do this to me. Don't do this to me." But you kept doing it. I knew Summer was going to be all irration and freak out - I knew it. But even so, I was just sitting here, reading this chapter, just... not quite angry. Irritated? Displeased? Something like that.
And then the fight with Dom made me all conflicted. Because she does have sort of a right to be upset, what with the whole secret snogging for over a year and the date and everything that she didn't know about, but Dom has also not been a good friend to Summer for a while either. So that just made me more irritated.
But then that ending. That. Ending. It made everything completely worth it and wonderful and I loved it so much that I can't think straight. Summer just casually announces that she's in love with James too - after the HUGE freak-out she had - and then walks away like it's no big deal. And now I am grinning like a fool.
This chapter was worth every minute of waiting. I loved it so much, I can barely stand it. I just love this story. I love it so much and I'll be so sad when it's done. But also happy, if that makes sense. It probably doesn't. I'm still a bit incoherent from the sheer levels of awesome contained in this chapter.
-Laura Report Review
What can I say, Jess? I love awkward. I live for awkward. And Spencer is nothing if not awkward. I would just like to say that, overall, I completely adore this story. It's fantastic.
As for this chapter, could James be any cuter? He "accidentally" tells Spencer about his being a wizard so that he could bring her to Harry's birthday party? That is so adorable I don't know what to do with myself. Blah. I want one.
And Spencer, the dear, completely forgets about the whole wizard thing because she's too busy freaking out about being in a loo with James. Priceless.
This chapter was beautiful, and wonderful, and definitely worth the wait. I can't wait to see how Spencer's going to react to all the magic and most especially to meeting the Potters! So excited!
I hope you have a wonderful holiday!
-Laura Report Review
I don't know what it is, but there's just something I love about the bad tempered, uneffeminate female character. Probably because I see something of myself in them, to a certain degree. I liked seeing Al's perspective of Gen and I think it will add a nice touch to the story to have both their perspectives.
I think you pulled off a male POV very well (and thank you for the shout-out!) My best advice for doing this, and I've mentioned this before, is, when writing a male character, to not focus on trying to make him "sound like a guy." You just need to figure out what it is exactly that makes Al who he is, and write from there. Everything should then go smoothly :) And you already seem to be on the right track, so kudos to you!
The part I really liked was how Gen helped Al to escape from the crazed Hufflepuff girl's. It shows a good balance to their friendship. Al helped her with the unfortunate tampon problem in the last chapter, and Gen helped him here. I can't wait to read more about their friendship.
Wonderful work, Akansha. Can't wait for the next update!
With much love,
-LauraAuthor's Response: I agree. Uneffiminate, angry young characters are very relatable to me as well, because they resemble the tomboyish part of me. And i'm planning to do every other chapter or so in Al's perspective. It really is quite nice to think what he thinks.
Thank you so much. Part of the credit rightly goes to you, and yes, I will seriously keep your advice in mind, make him sound like Al, rather than focus on the gender issue.
That part was so necessary, like, because I really needed to show that it's not always the girl who needs saving. Like Gen put it, she is no damsel-in-distress, but they act as each others' knights-in-shining-armours. And don't worry, i'm planning to explain their friendship's beginning in the next chapter. As well as introducing a bunch of other new OCs.
Update will be as soon as possible, because i've already started writing the next chapter.
Thank you, thank you, thank you!
-Akansha. Report Review
Oh, Helen, you really had me going there for a moment! I was completely freaking out in my head, thinking she'd be pregnant, wondering who the father is, blah blah blah, and... negative.
You're right, that ending could have been a lot worse, and I am infinitely glad that it wasn't.
The thing I found interesting was that second-to-last paragraph. From the way it's written, it almost sounds like Grace wanted to be pregnant. Which, you know, would definitely throw a nice little twist in there. I guess I'll just have to wait and find out.
Can I just say how wonderful and adorable I find James? It's so obvious how much he cares about Grace and he just makes me melt sometimes. He's just too cute.
And I loved the parts where Grace visited Connor and Romilda Vane. It was very neccesary for her to do that to find closure.
Overall, you are fabulous and awesome and I absolutely adore this story.
-LauraAuthor's Response: HA BET I DID LAURA.
I think the way it could have been a bit crueler would just be to like... leave it... not tell you what the answer of the test was until the next chapter... I mean, yeah, could have been much worse.
YES YOU WILL HAVE TO WAIT. Although I think it's more... she got attached to the idea and then suddenly its like WHAT another curveball but yes James is lovely.
Thank you for another lovely review! I adore you :D
-AC Report Review
Props to Professor Vector. She took the words straight out of my mouth.
I found the part about Autumn's struggles with her height very interesting. I myself am unusually tall for a girl (6 foot... so not quite as tall as her, but still up there) but I quite like it. Then again, I have three older brothers that I have no chance of outgrowing. So that may make things a bit different.
I must say, I do like Ethan. Although, part of that may have to do with the tact that he's an Aussie. Hmm...
I do hope we have an explanation from Dom coming up. As I've stated before, I don't exactly like her at the moment but I would like to hear what she has to say for herself. And Autumn could tell her off, too. That would be fun.
Lovely job, as always. Everything you write is magic (no pun intended... sort of). Can't wait for the next update!
-Laura Report Review
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