Nice title by the way, it caught my attention! I like this a lot and its off to a great start! Finally a vampire that does not sparkle.Author's Response: Woo! Go unsparkly vamps!! Thank you again, your seriously awesome!!! :D Report Review
I absolouty love this! Bill and his manly macho way of making beans and toast made me laugh. This is excellently done, and I've never really liked Fleur/Bill but I really like it now :)!Author's Response: Aww thank you so much!! I happen to love Bill/Fleur, I think they're such a sweet couple :) I'm thrilled you like it, thank you :D Report Review
I love this story! It's like my all time favorite and it always will be! You are an amazing writer, and you make such wonderful details. This is a James through and through, theres no reason for a clarke, because there is nothing bad about it. I love the character James, and Al is so sweet. I laughed at Lily because she is so much like her mum.
Wickedlovely01Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so much for the review. :)
I was worried about this fic, to be honest, because of how dark it is. I'm glad it didn't scare you off, and that you liked the characters. James and Albus are always my favorites. :)
ellie Report Review
Ok so this has potential but I think it needs more detail. This is something I have to work on as well, because like you, I like fast paced stories so I focus more on the plot more than the detail. I really like how they actually care about the kids on the train, but how did Voldemort or whoever killed those people get on the train?
WickedLovely01Author's Response: Wow! My first reveiw in like.. ages! Anyway, I know there isn't much detail, but I'm working on it :P I didn't want it to be slow either so I didn't want to drag it out with the detail. And about Voldemort... You'll see. Sorry I'm taking so long to put more chapters on here. Been really busy lately, but I'm going to soon! :D Report Review
First off, let me tell you your story is WONDERFUL, and I love it. Seconded off, you have potential to be a fabulous writer. This story is very funny and witty (Just like a Slytherin, huh wow!)
Ratings I would give you a 8.9 or a 9.1, because everyone has room for improvement, except for me, because I'm perfect. (Hehe AVPM pun intended) I'm just joking actually, my stories are not that good.
Anyways, I would tell you to use more detail, as I have problems with that. Just take time after you draft and add more. I would also tell you to watch for spelling!
But great story, I'll be giving this a favorite and reading it.
WIAuthor's Response: Hi! Wow, thank you so much! This is so lovely and it really brightened my day.
OH MY WIZARD GOD AVPM YOU ARE TOTALLY AWESOME!
Yeah, I never know whether I've put too much detail in, or not enough. It's one of my biggest problems.
Anywhoodle, thanks again for the review.
xx HogwartsKid Report Review
ooh I really like this! I wanna read another chapter can you make more?Author's Response: Oh dear I haven't been here in MONTHS I loved this story though xD You know what? Just for your review I,ll write the next chapter on the spot ;)
Thanks for being sweet ^.^ Report Review
ooh really good I enjoyed this story! But I think you should have made Ron and Harry, well I don't know, a little more death-like perhaps? Like one of those zombies from a Tim Burton movie? But I liked the way Draco was going to kill himself for hermione cause he coulden't live without her. Very Slytherin like. Keep up the good work!Author's Response: That's a good idea, thank you! And thank you for the review lovely, it made me smile! :) Report Review
omg really good job I absolutly love it! 'Her silky flowing red hair, like waterfalls of fire' was my favorite line the whole story, but overall good job!Author's Response: Thank you very very much, this review made my weekend! You deserve a really big hug, thank you so much for such an awesome review! :) Report Review
wow, I don't usually give reviews but I thought this one deserved one. I am a Green day fan and thought that this story went well with this seniearo (Yeah cant spell, I got that) but I also think you had some flaws. First off, even if Harry did feel remorse and guilt, he woulden't run away. Second, a suggestion for future stories. Try and add more detail. Anyways, this was a great story, and I can't wait to read the 2nd part! Report Review
oh my Snape! I don't usally read all the way through fan fics, but this got me hooked! Great Job! LOVE IT! Report Review
This is really good I think u need to write more :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)
Write more of this fic or write more in general? :P
Rach xx Report Review
I really like this one this is really good and caught my attention! Nice job!!! Report Review
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