Oh god, I LOVE Scarlett, she's bloody brilliant. And she reminds me of myself (Minus the pregnant with James Potter's baby part).

I like that James says congrats as though it's no big deal.

"I see now, that thickness runs in the family." - Oh my god, that line, talk about making me giggle. By the seems of things it definitely does. I think it's kinda sweet they both say congrats and it makes them seem like they have an invisible bond/in the way they think.

It will be interesting to see James' actual reaction when he finally realises/the news sinks in.

Oh and yay for the formatting thing!! It's been happening to me as well but I think I've fixed it as well so yay!!

Can't wait for the next one!!!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph xx :)

P.s I've never done the pregnant thing but if you need help I do know a lot about it. Find me on the forums (potterfan310) or my blog, (links in my author's page).

Author's Response: thank you :)
and yeah, help with the pregnancy thing would be good. Christian schools like mine dont give us real information hahaha
but thanks :)

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I LOVE Lily, she is one of my favourite next gen kids. She's brilliant.

Fred with a girlfriend, the shock. I've always read Fred II as a prankster along with James and half the time he's always chasing off fan girls with a stick so it's so nice to see him with a girlfriend, a serious girlfriend!!!

"with a frypan" - I was reading this bit and I got totally confused and kept thinking what the hell is a frypan and then I realised. I think you mean frying pan not frypan.

Oooh even better, I hope Fred's girlfriend is a muggle, I mean it's rarely done one of the Weasley/Potters with a muggle so it'd be really interesting to see. Aww Freddie, I love you right now. And you, Kayla that's so original!!! I really hope we get to meet Nicole, although it may be tricky to write???

"because Fred or Louis was getting" - Try changing 'was' to 'were' so it flows better.

I'm wondering is Jordan the daughter of Katie Bell, I know it might not make sense if she moved to France when Reese started Hogwarts, but maybe she went to Beauxbatons???

Jarissa = ♥ ♥
Lionel is just adorable, I love that he's stealing James' socks. Haha :D

Can't wait for the next chapter.

10/10
-Potterfan310

Author's Response: haha I love Lily as well! She's adorable!

I've always seen Fred as someone who just 'accidentally' gets into a serious relationship. He always tries to be flirty and a bachelor but then some awesome girl comes along and WTCHHH! (whipping noise) :p

Er, no. I call them frypans. I just asked my brother and he does too. Maybe it's an Australian thing? :p I'm pretty sure it's a word, as it doesn't come up with a squiggly red line in Word? :p I don't know, but yeah. Frypan=frying pan.

She is a Muggle. She's not that tricky to write (I've already written the next chapter) but yeah, I found something on sign language on Tumblr and I was like, "What if one of my characters was deaf?" So yeah, that little tidbit popped up! :D

UGH. Thank you! I usually write these chapters when I'm half asleep so thank for pointing that out! :D

Nah, she's just a normal Muggle. I really just wanted to use the 'Bell' pun hahaha :p

The next chapter will come when I have finished writing my essay. Those are the terms that I'm currently sticking to. :p But I've only got a little bit left, so hopefully it'll be up soon! :)

Thanks for the review! :)

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Ooo pretty new banner!

I love Bill, and Dom. I like that she is capable of taking care of herself rather than being a typical girly girl who can't fight her own battles

Horatio is a mad one aye, I love that he's sort of like Ron with his relationship for food and I think it really makes him seem like part of the Weasley family even though he's Louis' friend.

I reckon Horatio and Molly should just go for it, and they would make a good couple.

Ee! I am SO, SO, SO HAPPY RIGHT NOW!! I'm so glad that Freya turned up at Louis' house. Ok it's bad she and her dad had an argument and left her house but yay she's at Louis'!!

Argghhh, you can't just leave it like that. OHMYGOD!! That's just evil ;)

I honestly cannot wait for the next chapter because there is bound to be Leya action ♥ and I seriously can't wait to find out what Freya has to say.

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph xx :D

Author's Response: Yep a new banner :D I keep making them for this story, I really need to stop haha.

Oh yes Dom can definitely take care of herself, she was taught well by her father and uncles :D

Horatio is definitely mad, and yes you're right he does have a relationship with food, not as bad as Ron mind you, but yes he would really fit in with the Weasleys.

They should go for it! Sadly we just need to push them together to make it happen at the moment.

:D I'm so glad that you're happy, she has finally seen sense and left the house to go to Louis's.

I'm sorry! I will have the next chapter out soon I promise, I just need to write it. I'm about two sentences into it so far.

You'll find out soon! Thank you so much for the review hun! :D

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Jarissa = perfect ♥

They are so adorable together, as well as Lionel who is a cute kitty :)

I'm kind of with James on this, I mean I was Christened and my Nan went to church but the sentence James said sums me up, "Well it’s not like we go to church every Sunday but… I don’t know, I still consider myself as a Christian"

Hehe, it's strange reading about Christmas when it's the start of March :)

I really like that Harry (and the family) keeps in touch with petunia and Dudley but happened to Vernon? I'm curious.

Dudley's wife seems a lot like Reese's mother, any relation? lol :D

I love Lily and Al, they're such great characters!! Especially Lily's reaction to feeling the baby kick and what she said to Reese about her Lysander breaking up, it made me giggle!

Can't wait for the next one!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph xx :)

Author's Response: haha I'm glad you enjoyed!

I was Christened (but as a Greek Orthodox) so I've just grown up with the notion that your baby gets Christened. Even though I'm not particularly religious (sentence with James also sums my religious beliefs up), I still feel like babies should be Christened. Just my belief though. :)

It was so strange writing it! I kept getting excited and then remembering it was April (that was when I wrote it) and getting sad. :p

DAMMIT I FORGOT TO ADD THAT PART IN! D:

Well basically, Vernon (sadly) died when Lily was about 2-ish. I was going to make Reese ask but I completely forgot! Thanks for the reminder!

No relation, just arrogant haha. :p

I love writing Al and Lily, I really do. They're so much fun! :D

I'm going to put the next one in the queue right now! :D

Thanks for another amazing review! ♥

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Insomnia is so not fun, but on the upside it means you can do a lot of writing and reading :)

I swear to god I nearly started welling up when Rose said she was bleeding, but I'm so glad her and baby Malfoy are ok.

Oh god, way to lighten up the moment Chase. "That’s a pretty nightgown,"

Oh my god, what!! I had to re-read this sentence at least three times, "Who’s a better kisser, Louis Weasley or Danny Boot? Or is Albus Potter a contender?" - Needless to say each time it made me laugh, just oh god...

The fact they even have a bet, oh god. I can't handle this right now.

Louis and Chase = Awww. ♥ ♥

CHASE IS JUST AWESOME SAUCE, I LOVE HER SO MUCH AND RIGHT NOW SHE REMINDS ME OF ME BECAUSE I AM IN AN INCREDIBLY WEIRD MOOD!! SO YAY!!

James and Maylin, how the hell did I not see that coming??

Can't wait for the next one, Chase just give it up and get with Louis already!!

10/10

-Potterfan310
Soph xx :)

Author's Response: I write from experience when I say that insomnia is NOT fun, but I can say that it's resulted in many of the chapters of this story x)

I heard somewhere that it's normal for pregnant women to encounter bleeding around the eight weeks stage, and I thought "Wow, that must be so scary" so I really wanted to write about that.

Lol I'm honestly not sure WHAT inspired me to write Minnie and Poppie as such a crazy pair, but it just kind of worked out that way.

I'm glad you can relate to Chase :D

I can't wait to write the next one! Haha thanks for being such a faithful reader, keep reading and reviewing! x

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This chapter is just one big bag of fluff, which is so good!! ♥

Aww Chase and Albus (Chase and Louis are so much better though) so awkward, bless them. Although I'm glad that Louis is jealous!!

"Don’t they know that that kind of activity as a teenager can lead to pregnancy? Leave it to overly hormonal kids like Molly and Ollie not to think about something like that. I know that girls like Rose and me are far too smart for things like that." - Oh god, the irony, although somethings do tend to have a habit of coming back to bite you on the ass so maybe it's just Karma :)

Oh god, I love James' story. Such a cocky twleve year old boy, randomly asking the first girl he sees to kiss. Sorta reminds me something Sirius would do or even James when he was trying to get a kiss of Lily. Haha oh the irony of Maylim being Cho's daughter, pure brilliance. At least it was as awkward as Harry and Cho's though. I think it's sweet they became friends after wards :D

Rose's middle name, if it was Hermione who suggested it, I bet Ron had a fit or it could work out the other way as well.

"I'm buying a pet elephant, Malfoy." - I might have to pop to a bookshop now, I never knew they sold elephants :D Lol

I think Rose/Scorpius is quite cute. Especially since it's sorta got a Romeo/Juliet theme to it where they hate each other but go for it anyway. ♥

"Hugo, the easily distracted kid he is, falls over and starts rolling around in the sand for no apparent reason." - Hugo is one of a kind isn't he :D This sentence reminds me so much of my one friend since it sounds like something she would do :) Then again I get easily distr- Is that a penguin?

Louis and Chase = perfection ♥ Their kiss is just perfect, I mean sun, sand and the beach it's just so romantic. I have to say their is my favourite by far.
"Smiling, I do what I always do. I chase after her." - This just about sums up Louis and Chase I think. It's so sweet and aww.

Nothing major but I spotted mom again, at the start of James' story and in Louis'.

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x :D

Author's Response: Yes, if you couldn't tell, I was in a serious mood for fluff when I wrote this, haha.

Irony is fun x)

Haha I wanted to make James's story kind of sum up his friendship with Maylin, since she's going to be a more prominent character in the story overall.

I thought that, after what happened to Lavender at the battle of Hogwarts, both Ron and Hermione would develop a deep sense of respect for her so I wanted to show that in the best way ^_^

Hugo is kind of based on my cousins... which I suppose is slightly unfortunate, lol.

The basic purpose of all these stories wasn't just to show the character's first kisses, but to represent their relationships with each other. That's why I needed Chase and Louis's to be cute and sweet and fun.

I swear, if it weren't for your cc's I would have a LOT more grammar problems, so for that I thank you and apologize.

So happy you liked it, keep reading and reviewing! x

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Whoop, whoop. Go Louis!!!
I'm so glad he stood up to Mr. Jackson, I mean he has a valid point. I'm so proud of him *squee* ♥

Mr Jackson is horrible, poor Freya for having to live/put with him. Not too mention he's putting mad ideas in her head and making her feel like she has to hide her pregnancy.

I'm hoping that Freya will leave her parents and turn up at Louis'. Especially since Dom gave up her room for Freya and the Baby.

This chapter is just asdfghjkl, I don't know whether it's just me but I was getting teary reading it.

Aww Arthur ♥ That's just adorable, making the baby a cot. I always feel that Louis is left out a lot in stories and the moment with Arthur is just perfect ♥

There has to be more Leya (Louis/Freya) action!!! ♥ Hopefully Freya will come to her senses and just leave home and move in with the Weasley!!!

Can't wait for the next chapter!!

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Soph xx :D

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I'm so glad Dom's taken it better than Rose. It sorta shows who Scar's real friends are.

I really hope that when Dom said she told Fred not to leave them alone that it means that James already liked Scarlett without having been under the influence of alcohol.

CC -
"She pulls out a screen and waves it at my stomach" - I though this sounded a bit strange, I think you've missed out the word 'wand'.

If she's 4 months/20 weeks then baby will probably be bigger than a peanut as you can normally make out the shape/arms/legs and their private parts.

"But Scarlett, are you keeping them" - Is she having more than one?

There were a few missing capital letters/apotrophies, nothing that a read over won't fix.

"And it's all Harry Potter's fault. Somehow" - This is one of my favourite lines!! Love that she blames Harry :)

I really love Dom right now for being so supportive, I hope Scarlett tells James soon. I can't wait to see his reaction.

Can't wait for the next chapter!!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph xx :D

Author's Response: Hey!
I've missed you and your awesome reviews!
Thank you for pointing that out. I changed this chapter around HEAPS so everything is weirdly out of place. Yes, I did miss out the word "wand" (corrected)
And thank you for your help with the baby and how it's coming along and stuff like that. Christian schools/colleges like mine never do S.E./health.
Ah yes, in the first drafts of the story, she was having twins, but I thought that was a bit over-the-top or cliché-ish, if you know what I mean.
About the formatting/grammar/punctuation, I'm really sorry. My computer is first-generation-rock-hard-thingy and I have to go through and put all grammar and punctuation in by hand, which is extremely annoying.
Also, that line is one of my favourites too. I really enjoy writing Scar and I feel like I actually know her, if that doesn't sound to creepy or weird or something.
Thanks for your awesome review
- RP

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Louis is a mad one!! I've never seen such a hyper Louis before. It'll be intresting to see how him and Nell work out. I mean did they just randomly happen or are there feelings somehwere deep inside of it all.

I somehow have a feeling that Jake's surname might be Creevey?

Aww poor Coral, I think her backstory is pretty intresting, not too mention her brother Seth sounds like a hunk! ;D

Big brothers: a pain in the bum but at the same time you can't help but love them, not matter how annoying they are. Seth seems really intresting and I like him so far.

Albus, Albus, Albus. Where do I begin, he's such a troubled person, bless. I think deep down he might want a little help but being 1) a boy, 2) a teen and 3) upset/angry all the time he is probably not going to admit it.

Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x :D

Author's Response: Ahh. Yes, everything about the Louis and Nell relationship will be explained :)

Actually, Jake's surname is 'Matthews'. I mentioned it in the first chapter!

Ahaha i love Seth, he's just too awesome :) I'm glad i got their relationship portrayal right! I'm an only child so i was finding it a bit difficult to write out that part.

Ahh Albus. The boy's got some issues. But that's what Coral is there for - to help him out :)

Thanks for reviewing! :D

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"beautiful young mattress-tulip" - Luna, what's not to love!! :D

*Grins manically* Me thinks I have and idea who Gabi's father is!!! But who knows, I might be wrong :)

Aww Louis, so much love for him right now. All his feelings for Chase, just awww! Can they get together already! They're so perfect for each other.

Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x :D

Author's Response: Hehe, Luna is such an adorable oddball x)

Guessing is half the fun ;D

Louis IS a sweetiepie, isn't he?? haha

Glad you enjoyed it, keep reading and reviewing! :) x

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I Love that Dom's going crazy about baby stuff and she's not even the one having it. And poor Al having to get dragged along, although if eveyone's thinking the baby's his then it's probbaly a good thing he went.

I'm glad James is taking an intrest even if it is only for show and to prove to Ginny he cares. Although part of me hates him for not caring like Al does.

YAY!!! I can't believe Al and Lexi kissed again. YAY!! They have to get together, I mean everyone thinks the baby's Albus' and it's perfect.!!!

There were a few missing apostrophies but other than that, perfect!

Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Soph x :)

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"Sherlock came over to my old apartment and found that I had left the baby there, along with Merlin. And John just sat in the corner sipping tea as Arthur tried taking the sword out of the microwave." - AHHH, SO MANY FEELS!!! I LOVE THESE SENTENCES SO MUCH!!! Yay Reese!

"So then I turned to Muggle television shows. And it may have been the worst decision of my life." - I feel for Reese I really do, not only do I agree I feel her pain as well. So many Tv shows/books have ruined my 'life'.

Aww bless James, for sorta keeping calm. God knows what he'll be like when Reese is in actual labour.

Poor Reece having to put up with her mother, who seems like such a cow. *Hugs and squishes her tightly*

Zoe's dress sounds so pretty!!!

I liked the wedding and thought the henna and stuff was cool! :) Nate is as awesome as he normally is. ♥

Can't wait for the next chapter!!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x :D

Author's Response: ahaha I had just finished watching Sherlock that day and I always cry/talk about Merlin so I needed to put it out there. I was having a very feel-y day that day. :p

Ah yes, that is a quote from my life. I just sit in a ball and sob over everything now. It has also ruined my 'life'. :p Good to know we're both fangirls! :p

Reese's mum is a cow. I considered having a reason as to why she's a cow but I was doing some stuff for school and found out some people are cows for no reason. So yeah... Reese's mum is a cow for no reason. :p

Thank you for your amazing review! :D

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OHMYGOD!!! YAY! :D

Bless Louis for taking the bull by the horns and deciding to go to Freya's despite knowing her dad may be there and not let him see her.

I'm so, so, so glad that Louis got to see Freya! I'm so happy for him right now.

N'awww, so much Louis/Freya I can't handle the cuteness and their having a baby girl!! *Insert me awwing about a zillion times here*

Shame her dad had to ruin the moment, It'll be interesting to see what happens next since Louis has been caught. I hope he allows Louis to be a part of Freya and his daughter's life.

I can't wait for the next chapter and fore more Louis/Freya action!!

12/10
- Potterfan310
Soph xx :D

Author's Response: Louis really wanted to see Freya, so he didn't care what he would face in going to see her.

Aww Louis and Freya are cute together, but there's a lot of issues at the moment that they need to sort out, which her father won't let them do. And yep a little girl :D

Her dad is not a nice person at all! The next chapter is up my lovely! So I hope that you like it.

Thanks for reading and reviewing Soph!! :D xx

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I wondered where this had gone, but I'm glad it's back!!!

I LOVE Seraphina, she's awkward, determined and head strong and I really like that's she head girl and has never done drinking/parties before.

Albus is really nice and I really do hope she tells him soon. I think he'll make a really good dad and I hope he and Phina will get together. Because who doesn't love a happy ending. :)

CC -
Britpicking - There were a few things you mentioned such as the couch, cot and making out that are American terms that can be easily changed to the British versions.

Backstory - I think you said before there is more of Phina's homelife in later chapters

It'll be intresting to see how Phina's mother reacts especially if Phina says its her fault for telling her to go to a party.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph xx :)

Author's Response: OH MY GOSH HELLO AGAIN! IM SO GLAD YOU FOUND YOUR WAY BACK!

Okay, anyway, moving on from my excitedness (and if that's not a word it just became one).

I always find it unrealistic how a lot of fanfictions have these characters that dunk all the time. I don't really understand why there's always alcohol (which sounds hypocritical considering this chapter but it was important for the story!) There are teenagers that exist who haven't gotten drunk in their life.

I'm not entirely sure how everyone will feel about the ending but I can tell you that there's going to be a sequel (and maybe a final book after that) so there's always that to look forward to!

Thank you for the Britpicking! I was hoping someone would point out any stuff that I could change! I'll get right on fixing that!

There will indeed be more backstory as more chapters are produced!

I had the scene where Phina tells her mother all written out but I lost it so I'll have to rewrite it again!

Anyway, thanks for reviewing!

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I LOVE George, he is like the most awesomest father in the world. He's amazing and I can see it now, he would be the 'cool, hip' dad.

Ooh I sense that maybe Roxy and Scorp are in a relationship, that's why their always together. It'd be an intresting thing to happen since it's normally Rose/Scorpius.

Aww, Freddie is so adorable bless him. Reading up on pregnancy and telling James all the different things. Well done him! :)

I feel bad for Annie since Freddie is sorta leading her on, because deep down he knows he really loves Ryan. Fryan for ever! ♥ ♥

"Painting my chest was a bad idea?" - I think this just about says it all about George!!! Crying with laughter :D and this is why I LOVE the Weasley family. ♥

They should definitely get a dog 'shop mascot' and it should be a Lab. ♥ It'll be fun to see Freddie trying to take care of a dog before he has to take care of a baby.

Just one little thing, 'my pants were torn' Britpicking, it would be trousers not pants.

Can't wait for the next one, I'll certainly be on the look out for the Doctor Who referance!! And I have and inkling that the something that catches Freddie off guard is Ryan, maybe?

12/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x :D

Author's Response: Reviewzilla! YUSS.

George is definitely one of my favorites. I love writing future-George. He's so complex, which I love.

I'm sick of all the Rose/Scorpius. Just becasue they are almost the only canons of a similar age that aren't related. More Scorpius/Other Characters! Revolt!

FRYAN.

Freddie would just sort of poke at the dog. "What do you want? USE YOUR WORDS." and so on.

Britpick away :) I am not British and therefore most of the story will have plenty of words I am very used to. I have also never been to Great Britian. I should have disclaimered that. but thank you all the same!

Thank you so much for the review :) Hope you enjoy the next chapter!

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Hey,

I am a huge fan of James II stories and teen pregnancy ones so this is great!

Oohh I really like that it started off as a summer fling, that's really original!!

I really like your OC, she seems to have a great personality and it's nice to see she isn't from a wizarding family as well!

It's really original that James and Scorpius are friends rather than Scorpius and Albus which is usually the norm, so it's nice to seem something different. :)

CC-
- There are quite big gaps between sentences and paragraphs and it can sometimes make it ard to read.

- "So we are completely" - Might just want to change the 'we' and 'are' around so it makes more sense.

- 'my mom who' - Brit picking, I notcied you did it a few times, I'm guessing this is set in the Uk so it would be mum not mom.

- 'are over I reminded myself' - To make this flow a little smoother, perhaps add a common between 'over' and 'I'.

- 'I don't normally shag around' - Again to make it flow a bit better try sleep around rather than shag.

It'll be intresting to see how things turn out, if they're just 'friends' and Claire finds out she's pregnant. I have a feeling that James will stick around since he really seems to like Claire and Claire really likes him back from what I've gathered.

Your charcaters are really interesting and I like your take on James so far, and Dom. And your OC's Claire and Emily are great too!! I can't wait to read more about them all.

I think this is a really great start and I can't wait to read more. Deffo adding this to my favourites!!!

12/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x :D

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Gosh you're so nice. My poor American speaking habits--yikes haha. I'll try to fix those for the next chapter ;)

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Hey,

Aww Maisy is adorable!!

N'awww Neville, is so asdfghjkl. His speech to Emerald, aww.

ASDFGHJJKLASFDGHJK! THIS CHAPTER OHMYGOD!!!

I can't believe James knows and how calmly he took it. And that he's always loved Alice!! Jalice for ever!!! ♥ ♥

"Albus that Maisy was his nephew" - Think you mean niece not nephew :)

I can't wait for the next one, is Draco really coming back?? Please say he doesn't Emmy and Scorp are happy, Maisy, James and Alice are a little family and it's all perfect!

12/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review ^_^ I'm so glad you liked the chapter! Thanks, I didn't see that, haha, I have to concentrate better o_O Your reviews always make my day :) Thanks again! :) xx

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Aww, this chapter. So sad :'(

I really hope theres more Jallow, because they really need to get together!!!

CC-
Up until Willow and James entered the forest the spacing was fine but after that it sorta bunched up and was slightly hard to read.

-Potterfan310
Soph x

Author's Response: Yeah, it is :( !
I cried :'( .
Jallow... there are more... complications, I guess? They do need to be together, though. Making it a priority.
I'll have a look at the spacing. It's a real pain in the behind. Probably can't do anything about it for a while, as this computer doesn't like the whole thing. I've tried fixing up the second chapter, but I only got a quarter of it done, if that.
Cheers, SW.

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I really like your Dom, she seems aboslutely insane!

Haha I love Scarlett, first talking to her stomach and now her hair, I definitely think the pregnancy hormones have got to her. :)

I think the fact Scarlett trusts Rose alot when she tells her who the father is the second she asks. I did think it a little odd, wouldn't Scarlett have some inner thoughts about whether she should tell Rose or not. E.g she might not want to tell her because she might tell James, she wants James to find out first or she might hesitate a little before saying it's James. But it's your story so it's up to you!

Rose's reaction was a little short, and possibly a tad over dramatic but who knows, that may just be Rose's personality. Instead of her just barging past and out the dorm perhaps she could confront Scarlett and ask why her cousin, or how it happend? , again it's up to you since its your story.

Tips - your formatting/layout seems a bit off. The first half was fine but then once found the test it sorta all bunched up. It can make the chapter flow better if the spacing is all equal.

"a towel wrapped around her waist" - Did she not have a towel over her top half? Perhaps say 'a towel wrapped around her body'

Descriptions - Again add a little detail here and there, it'll also bulk out your chapters as well.

There were a few little things like missing apostrophy's, capitals, missing letters and full stops, nothing a read over won't fix.

Looking forward to the next one!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x :D

Author's Response: thanks for pointing that out.
mistakes are all fixed :)

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A'www so freakin' cute. I love that Tyler now knows James is his daddy and that he actually called him daddy for the first time. So adorable!! ♥ ♥

Hopefully James and Nikki will get closer and eventually get together. Maybe something will happen when they get back to Hogwarts?? and I wonder if Alexia will cause trouble when they're back by telling the whole school Nikki's a mum.

Can't wait for the next one!!

-Potterfan310
Soph xx :)

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I've said it before and I'll say it again JAMES IS SO GOD DAMN SUPERMEGAFOXYAWESEOMEHOT AMAZING!

"I present to you the man who killed Voldemort. Frightened of his own wife." - I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE this line especially since James is not only a mummy's boy but just like his father he's scared of Ginny. Not too mention most of the other girls/women he knows ♥ ♥

Aww I love Ginny, she's just such an awesome mother. I think it's great she's all laid back and is like 'go do whatever, "Selene's already pregnant, so what’s the worst that can happen."

Love George!!! and drunk Ginny!! "I had an odd aversion to clothes and was prone to stripping down and running about the neighborhood starkers." - The funny thing is I can actually see James doing this, bless him. Laughing so hard it's unreal! :D

N'aww when Harry and James had their little moment awww. I'm sat here awwing out loud, it's so adorable.

"I don't understand why tea is always associated with England and the U.K. in general. We're not a bunch of tea-obsessed nutters like other countries..." - I agree with this so much, I hate tea with a passion and I live in the UK. I really don't understand all the fuss about it, coffee is so much nicer.

Ohmygod, the book. Crying with laughter!! And James "The terrible book of horrors."

Al and James bonding, *insert me awwing about a hundred times here* The Potters brothers are so adorable. And I like that Al's giving James advice even though he went for advice off him.

'Mu mum's, especially' - My instead of Mu.
'in a pool of jello' - Jelly is the UK name for Jello.
'Book of Horrors of my bed' - Off my bed instead of of.

Oh god, James never fails to make me laugh. Can he just get over his awkwardness and ask Sleene out.for.gods.sake. she's.already.carrying.his.baby. Can they just get together already??

When James metioned C'est La Vie, all I could think of was the song and it was playing in my mind as I read the end of this chapter.

So much Jelene ♥ ♥
I LOVE THIS CHAPTER SO MUCH!!!

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-Potterfan310
Soph xx :D

Author's Response: Hello dearest! I always look forward to your reviews. They're so wonderful and amusing and you're just fabulous.

Yes, James really does take after Harry when it comes to that whole "fear of women" thing. Although, in their defense, the women they tend to associate with tend to be rather intimidating.

I'm glad you liked the tea thing! I am not from the UK, I'm from America. But I figured they're really not as obsessed with tea as we jokingly purport you all to be. I don't like tea either. Or coffee, for that matter. Like James, I drink hot chocolate.

Thanks for pointing out the mistakes! Like I said, this chapter was completely unedited, so I'll have to go back and fix those.

The thing about James is he's a horrible procrastinator. He puts things off for as long as he can. So he might need a bit of a push (read: a giant push many many times) before he asks her out. IF he asks her out, that is ;)

Thanks again for such a fabulous review!

-Laura

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Ohmygod, I love that they've gone to different restaurant's to get free food.

Nate is really adorable *squishes him tightly* and him and Reese together, they're brilliant!

The cousin who smells like soup, haha nice touch. There always seem's to be one person in a family who smells of something. :)

Oooh I really like that Nate works in the magical world and for Harry, it's a small world eh. It seems like a really interesting job.

Aww no, fighting between Jarissa :( THEY HAVE TO GET THROUGH IT!!! THEY JUST HAVE TO!!! Jarissa for life!!! ♥ ♥

Can't wait to see what happens next and if Jarissa have sorted their problems out.

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x

Author's Response: ahaha I'm glad you liked it! :p

They do get through it, don't worry. :D

Thanks for the lovely review! :D

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I LOVE your take on James because as you may have noticed I have a little obsession with the Potter brothers. He's great even though he can be slightly annoying but I think he's got a great personality!

It's intresting to see that James isn't the 'hottest guy at Hogwarts' which is really nice and original!! :)

Me thinks Jamesie has a little crush on Maeve hence the compliments but who knows, he just might not want to lose a chaser ;D

I think Dom's an interesting character and she's totally differnet from other Dom's that I've read!!!

Please, please don't say Maeve is the one who breaks James' heart. I hope it's someone else and then Maeve comes in and BOOM! they get together! ♥ ♥ :)

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph xx ♥

Author's Response: I'm afraid I can't tell you anything, you must keep reading ;) -Thank you so much for taking the time to review and please stay tuned for the next chapter x

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Why hello new chapter. It's great to see Vivian again!!!

I really like that Scorpius has a sister because he's normally an only child. And that she's named after Lucius.

I love that she and Scorp are really close and that he stay with her. I was upset with Albus because her didn't turn up when Vi needed him the most.

I was slightly confused when Vi was by her mum's gravestone. You said she was sobbed into Albus' robes but if Al wasn't there, then how could she? Or did you mean Scorpius/James?

One other thing, Lily has brown eyes not blue.

I think the Vi and Lily bonding is really sweet, especially as we haven't seen a lot of Lily. I was nearly in tears, there are no words to describe this chapter. All of Vi's feelings are spot on and I feel so bad for her. And the fact the Potter's and Some of the Weasley were at the funeral as well, I thought that was a nice touch.

This chapter is full of feels!!!

When Ginny said "You know you can always call here you home, don’t you" It just tipped me over the edge and I had to wipe away a tear. Vi's never really had a home apart from Hogwarts and it's so sweet of Ginny to say that. ♥ ♥ ♥

Aww Albus, Ohmygod!! I can't believe he said he would always be waiting for Vi. He's so adorable, where can I find a guy like him?

The moment between Vi and Al at the end, awww. I am literally awwing out loud. It's just so adorable and I love it. I'm so glad that Al no longer hates Vi and he's taking an intrest in her and the baby. ♥

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-Potterfan310
Soph ♥ xxx :D

Author's Response: Hey Soph,

It's nice to see you again too :) sorry it took me so long to update, I hope the next update will be quicker.

I loved giving Scorpius a sibling because somehow I don't think Draco would have wanted only one child because of what he went through on his own as a kid. I think he would have wanted his children to at least have someone else, a sibling, who was going through the same things as them, especially with all the stigma attached to a Malfoy name. And Luciana is such a sweet little thing. I can't really say why I named her after Lucius but the name just seemed sort of fitting.

Scorpius is like Vivian's brother, they have known each other since birth and he is the one person in her life that she would trust all her secrets too. Hell, he's the only one who knows all her secrets. Albus is going through a lot of mixed feelings at the moment, he is torn between loving Vivian and hurting from her betrayal.

Thanks for pointing that out, I might have to make that a little clearer. It was actually Albus who was the last pall bearer of her mother's coffin so he was actually there, Vivian just didn't see him properly. He was just not sure if she wanted him there, or how he should act around her. I'm going to do a one shot from his point of view of Vivian's mother's death which might help clear up what he is thinking.

Ah yes, I don't know if you've checked out my blog but it has picture of my character's face claims and the one for Lily has blue eyes. I know it isn't strictly cannon but I figured it wasn't too much of an issue, especially as a lot of people on her mum's side of the family, if not her mum, have blue eyes. So yeah, I took a bit of writer's freedom on that one.

Lily seems a bit forgotten in my stories which never strikes me as fair so I thought this would be the perfect opportunity to introduce her and give her perspective on things.

The Potters (and therefore the extended Weasley clan), despite all the circumstances, view Vivian as part of their family and therefore would be there for her whenever she needed them, especially at a time like this.

There is a lot of emotion in this, I am never sure how much to put in before it goes completely over the top. So thank you very much for that.

For me, Ginny is quite a mother figure, much like her own mother and she watched Harry grow up without a real home and she just wants Vivian to know in the same way that Harry knew, that she is a part of their family. I loved writing that bit.

That whole part was completely unexpected, I hadn't intended for them to talk for a while yet but this just popped into my head and it fitted much better than my previous plan. Despite everything, he loves her and he always will be there for her. He just need to sort out his own life first. (As for where to find one like him, I have no idea but if you manage to find out, please let me know).

Awww... Thank you. I don't think he ever really hated her. He could never hate her. He was just really hurt. But things are far from over yet.

Thank you so much for a wonderful review and I hope to update soonish,

With love,
GirlOnTheSidelines x

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OHMYGOD!

Neville and Hannah = no more :'( So sad, poor Chase

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Brit picking - "My mom has" and you said mom instead of mum a couple of other times.

"Louis’s" - You don't need the S on the end after the appostrophy.

My favourite part was Louis' closet. I love that he's a secret One Direction fan. :)

I think the I.L is really cool and original. I've never heard of anything like it before!! I'm guessing the I.L stands for instant letter?

Aww Molly's talk with Neville = so sweet. I love that she's trying to get him and Luna together. It was very Molly-ish of her to cook for an army of well!!!

11/10
-Potterfan310
Soph x :)

Author's Response: Oh dear, I always forget to translate my American speech for British sayings ;(

As for "Louis's", it's grammatically correct either way, and I like to write it that way so that it's clear that it's the French pronunciation :) Thank you for the heads up, though!

I always saw Louis as a One Direction fan, not sure why x) I picture him having Liam as a favorite, I must say.

I'm not quite sure where I came up with the idea for I.L., but once I did I thought it was a great idea and immediately wanted to include it in my story. I'm glad you think it's cool!! (:

Ah, yes, I LOVE Molly. It's to the point where I practically picture her as being semi-omniscient, haha.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!! x

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