I liked that you wrote the Invisibility Cloak is one of the family secrets that they actually keep because I feel like things like the Invisibility Cloak and the Marauders' Map aren't just something that people know willy-nilly.
Not sure if I approve of stealing it because, let's face it. It's the Invisibility Cloak. I can imagine the uproar that it would cause and if Liz was caught and how the Wotters might be REALLY mad that she stole it just so she can go spy on James to help Savannah, someone that James probably doesn't even know. Like, if I was one of the Wotters friends with Liz, I wouldn't like it.
But then again, I suppose that her spying on James is when she finds out the secret? lol
I like how Tobias and Liz pokes fun at Jensen; their entire dynamic makes everything so funny and it's rare that I can enjoy a scene with characters ALL OC.
Great chapter! (: Can't wait for your next update. Report Review
I love the way that you wrote this. It was very descriptive without being over the top. And I liked the fact that it really had the feel of the old days when everyone was scared of witchcraft and religion was such a big deal.
It was interesting, that Nick is a ghost in the last moments of his life, he was desperately trying to cling onto life. The fact that he felt like a horrible Gryffindor was something that I liked because it showed that even the bravest are scared when faced with death and its finality.
This was an amazing one-shot and I'm glad that you did write it!Author's Response: Eek, I'm so happy you thought it felt like the days when witchcraft and religion were so important and caused so much trouble!
The idea of fear was something that I really wanted to get across in this story, because Gryffindors are characterised as being brave, but nobody can be brave all the time. Nick's always so proud of his courage but admits being a coward at the time he died, which was really interesting to write.
Thank you so much for a fantastic review!
Sian :) Report Review
I freaking LOVED this chapter!
All of the intensity when it came to the match and how Della had a breakdown too because she was forced to become captain since Alfie wasn't going to be there. AND the fact that Alfie LAST-MINUTE couldn't make the game was just INTENSE!
Not to mention the actual game itself and trying to take out one of the Lynches.
I love how incorporated Carlotta is with James's family; the bit with Charlie was so funny when Charlie confronted James about it and how Carlotta was so fascinated with dragons. Molly Weasley would have a complete fit if James didn't invite Carlotta to their Weasley lunch; it seems like exactly the type of thing that Molly would do xD
I loved this chapter!!! It was a great update(:Author's Response: I must confess, Alfie's no-show was totally contrived (mind you, isn't everything in fiction contrived? But I digress) so that I could move the Ryan/Della storyline on a bit, and I think it also develops Della's character a bit. I certainly enjoyed writing it! But on the whole it's really reassuring to know you enjoyed the match because it really was a slog to write!
I'm a bit concerned of running the risk of almost 'forgetting' that Carlotta is a Muggle - just because she knows about James' world doesn't mean she's suddenly going to become fully integrated into it, she's always going to be coming across new concepts. And for her, it must be the most bewildering thing in the world to meet a dragon-keeper! She's definitely incorporated in the sense that she gets on with his family and vice versa, but it will take a while for her to become fully accustomed to being in the magical world, and the next few chapters in particular have a bit of focus on that. Thanks for reviewing! :) Report Review
Wow. So, let me just say that you wrote Cho SO beautifully in this chapter about her.
In one of my college classes, we are talking about how Asian women are portrayed in literature, so obviously Cho was brought up. So many people (apparently) seemed to think that Cho fit right into the stereotype of an Asian woman lamenting over a white man and being so utterly helpless, etc etc.
Obviously, I had to have my input about how there was so much more to Cho than what people think of her, and I think you did an excellent job portraying how Cho became like she was in OotP and onwards.
The fact that she's still lamenting Cedric's death and the fact that it affected her that much because he was her boyfriend, her first love, her everything just makes it so much different than just some woman lamenting for a man. I love how you wrote that Cho thought it was unfair for Cedric to have to die when the others, like herself, who are less brave lived on. I think that really speaks to what Cho was and what Cho is now.
She wasn't inherently a brave person; she wasn't sorted into Gryffindor for a reason. In her "prime" youth days, she was surrounded by laughter and was a wonderful athlete. Then, all of a sudden, her boyfriend is dead, no one believes the truth about his death, she is thrown into the start of a War much bigger than herself, and somehow, no one seemed to remember that she was still so young when everything started.
Cho wasn't brave, and she isn't brave, and I mean that in the best way possible. Being brave isn't one of Cho's strengths and it really affected her, having to go through this War and having to see all of the horrors.
It makes so much sense for Cho to marry a Muggle because then, he would not have been present for all of the things that she had to go through, and I think she really needs that break, something that you portray really well in this chapter.
She can never forget Cedric, never forget what happened, so if she's with someone who was tied up in everything that happened, she can never try to move on from her life. You portrayed her pain so well that after reading this, it really clicked in my mind why J.K. Rowling wrote that Cho married a Muggle.
Honestly, I think you did a WONDERFUL job portraying Cho. (:Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review, I appreciate all of your thoughts. I found Cho to be a really interesting character and I think because of Harry's interaction with her we get a very subjective view of her in canon.
She obviously cared for Cedric very much because she became involved with him after the Yule Ball and they were still involved when he died. For a fifteen year old girl that sort of tragedy must be absolutely horrifying.
I agree with what you say about Cho marrying a muggle, it just seems to make sense really. But I think she will always have a place in her heart for Cedric, and that's what I wanted to convey here.
Thanks so much for your review! Report Review
I think it's really interesting the way that all of them are just giving each other the benefit of the doubt despite the fact that they all are wary of who is the traitor. It's like, from each of their points of view, anyone can be the traitor but in the end, they're still family so they really stick by each other and you can see that hints of their old life when you see them together, trying to plan, and things like that. I love reading about the members together and planning their next move.
I also have a feeling that the Fraternity people are gonna get in MAJOR trouble for flying a broomstick in broad daylight. MAJOR breaking of the international statute of secrecy. It could potentially lead to more info on the Wotter clan's crimes, imo, if the Ministry handles it accordingly without interferences from Carrow.
This was an interesting chapter, I'm glad you updated! (: Report Review
I find it interesting that her older sister is a Squib. I would love to be able to read more about how their relationship developed over the years and what sort of troubles they had because it's bound to come up, two sisters.
It's kinda sad to think that Lily would ditch Hugo because he's in Hufflepuff, since I feel like that just wouldn't be the type of thing that she would do, but of course, that is where the flexibility with writing next-generation characters comes in. Lily being the type to ignore her cousin and not stay "friends" though is definitely new and interesting, despite the fact that I wouldn't write Lily like that myself. No matter, describing how they became friends was nice to read because they are just so different so having Addison telling how they became friends was fun to read.
The party scene was slightly rushed, so I would advise that you could have wrote it out for longer. The lead up to James's anger at Addison was well done, but the party scene could have been a lot less rushed and written either more in detail or explained more. It sort of came up out of nowhere, so that's one critique I do have of that, if you don't mind me saying.
One last critique I do have, I think you should be careful of having this story drag out for too long because for the majority of the last two chapters, it's reiterating on how much James and Addison don't get along, and I think that's just something you should pick up.
(:Author's Response: Actually, Bianca is Addison's younger sister. She's 19, and Addison's 22. I felt that it would be better if she were younger, as then the jealousy factor could be played out more. As for their relationship, I'll be bringing Bea into play pretty soon.
I should have clarified, Lily never completely stopped being friends with Hugo, basically, she never found enough time to be with him like she used to, and Addison somewhat exaggerated the entire situation. Nevertheless, I'm glad you enjoyed reading their friendship story.
I can completely agree with you on that point, the bit at the end was extremely abrupt and rushed, but I really wanted to complete and postthis chapter as at thattime, I had to go out somewhere and didn't want to keep this hanging. I'll edit it out, probably by the end of the week (school is so busy!).
As for your last bit of criticism, from the next chapter, I'll be introducing some new characters and we'll be getting a bit back on the entire 'someone's-out-to-kill-James' track. ;)
Thanks so much for the insightful review,
-Akansha. Report Review
James's humility in terms of how he views his own personal Quidditch-playing skill seriously makes me love him more because I REALLY love that in an athlete. The fact that it was obvious for Roxanne that James would be playing and that it was obvious for James that Roxanne had just as good of a shot really spoke to me about their characters and how they do try to find a balance between being competitive and being conscientious that they are family.
The entire bit about Roxanne talking about May 2nd and Fred and George's birthday really was interesting. I always thought that Victoire would hate that she was born on the anniversary of the Battle of Hogwarts, and although you did mention before you do like George and Angelina together, the way you explained that they didn't help each other was believable, everything considered.
What Roxanne said about having to take a shot in love and relationships is so true and it reminded me of James and Carlotta taking a shot with each other. I love it!
Awesome chapter! (:Author's Response: James has never really had a chance to become big-headed about his talent and success, because he's always linked and compared it to his dad's own talent and fame. Besides, I don't think Harry or Ginny would let any of their children become too big for their boots! He definitely doesn't take it for granted that he'll play, especially as he recognises how good his competition is. And of course, if he lacked that humility then he'd never have had his breakdown in the first place because he'd never have let his hang-ups get the better of him! He would, however, be much worse off for it in many other ways.
I wanted to show Roxanne's side of things with their family issues to show that Freddie's own concerns aren't totally unjustified. Obviously Roxanne is more pragmatic about it all but it hasn't passed her by. I'm really glad you find the George/Angelina storyline convincing because it's one of those issues where people can go either way in terms of how Fred's death affected them, so it's reassuring to know that the stance I've taken here is believable. I guess this is me eking out every last bit of angst from the Voldemort years!
And yes, there's definitely a parallel here with Freddie being scared to take the plunge with Brigid, while James has managed to overcome that hurdle. Freddie could do a lot worse than to look to James for inspiration! Thanks for reviewing :) Report Review
MORE messed up...? :(
I thought they were just beginning to get there!
My guess is that James was attempting to tell Gwen that he has feelings for her :) that's my hopeful guess that to me, it sort of makes sense xD
I do believe James when he said that he didn't do anything else other than drink and pass out when he was at Freddie's and I do believe him when he says that he wants to ease up on the women a little bit. It makes a lot of sense considering the whole debacle with Kat.
Things with Josh are getting so serious!!! For Gwen, meeting the sister is still huge because it's like, she doesn't do boyfriends and seriousness unless she's REALLY serious because there was always James. I feel so bad for her that she has to go through these conflicting feelings because she's trying to forget the past and move on at the same time but her past isn't letting her move on.
When James made his entrance, I felt like I had felt the exact same agonizing wait that Gwen had. I didn't blame her at all for falling for James like that because I would have done the exact same thing (I mean, Merlin's beard, James sounds so hot and beautiful and wonderful that I wonder how can ANYONE resist?)
I loved the update! I do understand how busy life can be so I hope I'm slightly tactful as I wish you good luck on the next update (:
(P.S. The women must ALL be feeling a sigh of relief that James is NOT going to be a father... their reactions must all be like Melissa's xD)Author's Response: Well, we are only halfway through this whole story so there are still plenty of chapters left. It can't be that easy (x
Yes, he was sincere about those things. The drama with Kat really messed him up and made him think.
That's right, she's definitely a lot more serious with him than with any other boyfriends she's had. She's really trying to get over James, who in all his hotness and beautiful-ness and wonderfulness isn't making it easy (x
This time I'm going to update soon, I promise! Because the next chapter is already done! I think I'm going to put it in the queue during next weekend (:
Thank you so much once again for your wonderful review ♥ Report Review
I have to say, all of that bit about strategizing was really fun to read. I found myself thinking about the various different ways the Falcons can go about with strategies as well! xD
What I found interesting was that the Beaters were remarkably important in trying to win because of the threat of bludgers taking out a player. I loved that you really showcased the Beaters because sometimes, they're always forgotten.
I also loved the bit about the whole unabridged version of what happened with Voldemort. Definitely, I feel like there would be a lot of pieces to the story that the general public would not know because mass-educating people about horcruxes isn't a very good idea, but at the same time, it makes sense that Harry doesnt like censored history.
I like that James made the decision to tell Carlotta the whole unabridged truth because I think it's a step in their relationship. They don't need any more secrets so I'm glad that James decided to tell Carlotta everything.
It would be rather interesting to read about James telling Carlotta, though xD
INGRID AND MARK!!! Ahhh, Brigid never got along well with Ingrid, did she? Well, James needed to thank the two of them anyways (:
Great chapter! I'm so glad you updated.Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked the strategy talk, because I did worry that I might have thrown too much in. It honestly came from nowhere; I came up with the idea for the match strategy as I wrote this chapter. And I liked how it turned out, it was nice to throw in something involving the Beaters. :)
I've given the matter of what-Harry-told-the-wizarding-world a fair bit of thought, and I definitely think that there are some elements of the story that he'd be unwilling to make public, especially if they're elements which people don't necessarily NEED to know in order to learn from the war. But yes, regardless of what is or isn't written in books, Carlotta HAS to know everything if she's going to be spending a lot of time with the family. There was a part of me that really wanted to write out the whole conversation between James and Carlotta, but I figured that would just become James' retelling of the books with the occasional input from Carlotta, and it would take up a lot of words for not much payback! But I think I know how it would pan out, and if I ever have the spare time and feel like writing it out, I may do so. It's on the list of potential one-shot material :) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I think this is a very interesting one-shot!
I did get confused by one, whether Audrey WAS Rita Skeeter (?), and two, was Audrey referring to Ginny at the very end when talking about her sister-in-law who was a lovely woman and a wonderful cook?
Aside from that, I like how you portrayed Audrey's insecurity about being in the Weasleys' family. Aside from the fact that they are such a tight knit family, it seems as if everyone in that family knew each other for the longest time (like, the Weasleys all knew Angelina b/c of Hogwart, Hermione and Harry have been Weasley family friends for the longest, and Fleur's been married to Bill since before the end of the war).
It definitely must have been scary for Audrey to get introduced to such a family and I think that I definitely would have been scared of how beautiful and wonderful Ginny and Fleur is, and not only those two, but the rest of this famous family.
Good job (:Author's Response: Hi!
No, Audrey isn't Rita Skeeter, unless she has DID, which would be... a fic I'd like to read, actually. And Audrey does narrate that Rita does ask her specifically about Fleur, so it's safe to say she probably isn't talking about Ginny. :P
Anyway, I'm glad you found my characterisation of Audrey decent - your analysis of her is pretty much spot on, IMO.
Thank you so much for your review! Report Review
What I think is very interesting is how hard Bellatrix tried to please her father in this chapter. It makes me think that Bellatrix's behavior here is almost like what she will do in the future, try to please Voldemort.
Her naive indignance at Muggleborns and the likes was well written because her shock was genuine; it was as if the thought that Muggleborns could think that they were equal was SO appalling that it was so shocking a thought.
Although we know that Bellatrix really got crazy later on in her life, this chapter sort of set up the foundation for her character later on because we see her strong foundation in her beliefs and the beginnings of the pureblood-supremicist attitude.
Great job, can't wait for the next update! (:Author's Response: I'm SO happy you picked up on how hard Bellatrix is trying to please her father! I think her need to get that sort of approval would have started long before Voldemort, though she's very selective of just who she wants to please.
I don't think there would ever have been a time where Bella *didn't* think Muggleborns were disgusting creatures. It's just like years ago in America when people though it was okay to own another human being, then thought it was okay to give those people less rights once they were free. Of course there were those that questioned slavery, but so many people just went with it because that's how it was. Then there's still the people who fully supported it and still insisted that anyone who wasn't white didn't deserve to be looked at as equals. Bellatrix falls under the latter for me. Not only was she raised to fully support the ideas of Mudbloods being worthless, but she relishes in it. It isn't something that she just accepts, but enjoys.
Wow. I don't even know how I got on that ramble, hahaha. Thank you so much for reading this second chapter and your lovely review on it ♥ I know it's so much different from the first, but I wanted to take us back to a little glimpse of how this all started.
♥ Jami Report Review
LOL I love that Liz and Roxy have discussions about how they'd date and how they're sick of all of the blokes. I totally had that exactly same conversation with my best friends back in high school.
Rather interesting that Liz would choose James, though. I suppose dating Fred's out of the question, but what about Liam? Is there something going on between Marge and Liam? I dunno, I just find it interesting that she chose James in the first place, though that can also be because the two of them aren't super close so it's weird.
I'm not sure who I'd be closest to. I think I have to get to know them a little more.
AND JAMES SNEAKING AWAY! I'm guessing that's the secret that Liz knows!
I can't wait for the next update! (: Report Review
It's always interesting, to read about people with affairs. I don't ship Teddy/Dominique because I am an avid Teddy and Victoire shipper, but it's rather interesting, the fact that Teddy thinks that Dominique should still be there for him when HE is married. I like that you explored what Teddy felt in Dominique leaving him because she was strong enough to want to have a life on her own and not be with Teddy when he is married to Victoire.
What you could also do is explore Teddy and Victoire's relationship as well; obviously, they're married so if Teddy doesn't want a divorce, then he might still love Victoire in some way, yet he is cheating on her with Dominique.
I think this one-shot is good. You could take it a little further, but it's very nice (:Author's Response: Heyyy Claire!
Im glad you like it :P Personally I dont ship Teddy/Dommie either but this story kinda just fit for them =)
Actually they weren't married, they were only engaged but I see why would you mistake tht since I probably didn't make it too clear :P
Im glad you liked it! I was thiking of writing another sequel OS so thank you! Report Review
oh my gosh! So I normally don't like to read 2nd person POV because soomething about it just doesn't sit well with me, but I got SO interested in this because it's all about Bellatrix and I just love exploring her characteristics and personality. You pleasantly surprised me by writing this 2nd person POV really well! (:
I love that in this first prologue you really managed to capture the thought process behind Bellatrix's craziness. She's blood-thirsty and scary to all those around her but in here, it's almost as if her thinking MAKES SENSE.
This is wonderful, and I look forward to the upcoming chapters you'll be putting up! (:Author's Response: Hi Claire!! I'm so happy you enjoyed second person point of view!! It's something I've been playing with a lot more lately, and it just felt right for the start of this! Though we will switch in and out of third for the remainder of the chapters.
AHH I can't tell you how happy it makes me that you said her thoughts make sense!!! One thing I want to do is show this through *Bellatrix's* mind, and not as someone exploring that this lady is crazy, haha. So I want us to see what Bellatrix sees.
Thank you so much for reviewing! I'll have a new chapter posted this week sometime :)! I haven't decided what days I'll do updates. I'm thinking every other Thursday.
Thank you again for putting such a huge smile on my face ♥ Report Review
this is DEFINITELY not the James Potter that we all know/think we know. But, I do love how you really pointed out the problems and pressures that James would be facing as Head Boy. I do think that James would be the type to beat himself up if anyone got hurt whilst he's Head Boy and he would be the type to want to try to fix everything because he just cares that much. That said, it seems obvious that James would be facing so much struggles.
I think it's interesting, the argument that James and Sirius are having. I think it's really a point that you're making about how difficult the war was and how much internal problems that they were facing as well.
The way that you wrote about James struggling to get through the war is really powerful and I love it! Report Review
I LOVE the way that you wrote this. When I first thought of the beginnings of a love potion, I thought that it would have something to do with how she REALLY loved someone but they didn't love her back, or something along those lines. I think it's interesting how you made her insecurity about herself and her desire to have a "beautiful romance" the reason why she came up with the love potion in the first place.
Also, the added touch that she's a werewolf was rather interesting because it really spoke to me WHY she was so undesirable, so to speak. Of course, we do konw that werewolves aren't monsters and they aren't horrible and all of these negative connotations that comes with being a werewolf, but of course these stereotypes would take ages to be erased, and the fact that you wrote that she IS a werewolf really was quite an added touch that I enjoyed.
Overall, I love the way you wrote this one-shot and I just love everything about it. Great job!Author's Response: Yeah, I felt like it would be an unexpected twist for Lavender to be drinking the love potion in order to help her really learn to love herself. I thought of it almost like a drug; she has to have the potion in order to feel comfortable with herself, in order to get through these moments. I don't know if a love potion could actually be used for that purpose, but I liked the sick sort of poetry about it.
Well, she's kind of a werewolf. She doesn't transform, but she has lingering, desultory symptoms of lycanthropy, sort of like Bill and his newfound affection for rare steaks. She's still on record from her time in St. Mungo's, though, so she has officially become a pariah, even if she really poses no threat to others. I meant for the experience to kind of capitalize on the sense of unhappiness she had already experienced in not getting anyone to love her.
Thanks for your kind review (and favorite)!
-Amanda Report Review
Unexpected plot twist!
There are so many things that I love, and I don't know where to start. I suppose I'll start by saying that I loved it when you wrote how Hermione and Astoria got along. Somehow, I'd always imagine that Astoria was the one that really grounded the Malfoys into acceptance after the war. Because Astoria was two years younger than Draco, I imagined that she was so far removed from that entire crowd and even from the crowd that Ginny was around in her year that it would be so much fresher for everyone to see her with Draco.
I also imagine her to be a very warm lady with a charming and easy-going personality that would make anyone get along with her.
I also love that you don't clue us in to what Rose feels like is missing from her and Scorpius's life, until later it was discovered that she couldn't have a baby. The fact that we discovered that she not being able to have a baby was what's wrong coupled by the fact that we already know by the point of discovery that Rose IS going to have a baby lessens the whole degree of sadness, if that made any sense at all.
I also love what Scorpius said about embracing and being grateful for miracles, because it's so true.Author's Response: Hello!
This story is very dear to me, because I took my inspiration from a friend who went through the same thing and she's expecting any day now! We couldn't happier! It's truly a miracle when against all odds life finds a way to pull through!
I imagine Astoria to be everything Draco isn't. Calm, compassionate, kind and friendly. Not that he wouldn't change, but really. He needs somebody like that in his life!
Thank you so much for the lovely review! I really appreciate it! Report Review
RICHARD. IS. ALBUS. POTTER. OMG. WHAT.
HE. HAS. TO. BE. I mean, it's not possible that Richard isn't Albus. There would be no other reason why James would marry Emy.
I have so many questions right now that it's ridiculous how many questions I have.
1)Why did Albus leave her?
2)Does Albus know that he got Emy pregnant and that James married her?
3)Does the rest of James's family know at all about Emy, the babies, and their marriage?
4)Why do they keep moving?
5)Is Emy going to have to find out the hard way that Richard is actually Albus and that Albus and James are brothers?
6)I suppose that Emy has no idea what Harry has done, or anything about the First and Second Wizarding War, correct?
7)Why do they have to move back to Britain?
Seriously, I can't even... SO many questions, and you're just leaving me hanging for more!!! LOL
I do love this novel so far though; I love where you're taking it; I love the suspense; I love the whole ambiguity between James and Emy; and I love their family even though Albus is the dad and it's going to make everything SO messy once everyone realizes.
I love everything about this story, from the plot to your writing to how similar Emy and James are (they need to realize how similar they are and just declare their love for each other).
It's really exciting, and I can't wait for your next update!
(P.S. Emy's father sounds horrible.)Author's Response: OMG. hahahah :P Well I can't tell you now can I :P
very interesting guess though Claire... very interesting hahah :P
Now for the sake of your questions, Im gonna pretend you meant Richard and not Al :P
1) Time will tell :P
2) No Richard has no idea :P He knows nothing at all!
3)Um.. tht comes up in the next update so just wait for that? Yeah thanks hahah :P
4)hmm... Well we will see why soon!
5)O!! You are killing me with these Claire. Srsly bahahah.
6)Nopee she has no idea about Harry or how famous James is
7)Well you should ask James that :P Hes the one who moved everyone :P
Im so glad you love this!!
I will update really soon! Just need to edit the chapter a bit and then the update will be in the queue.
Yes he is a horrible man!
Hello love! I'm here with a review for you.
It's quite interesting, all the little pieces so far (:
It seems like a puzzle piece that we have to put together, and I can see where you got the inspiration for your title from.
One suggestion though, to make things a bit clearer and to keep everything in order.
Make a vague timeline for each of the sections.
For example, a date (or just a year) for her being interrogated for a crime, a date/year for her parents kicking her out, a date/year for her being in Knockturn Alley. That way, it's a bit clearer. I followed it just fine, but it's a suggestion (:
Also, I find Roseanna's personality very interesting. Having a child? Being a pureblood? Being a Seer? Accused of a crime? A strange society wanting her?
There's a lot going on with just Roseanna herself that it seems like there is a lot more to this whole story. If she is just one part of the entire puzzle piece, this must be one grand scheme xD
It's interesting so far and very mysterious, which I do like for story genres like this. (:
~ClaireAuthor's Response: Hey Claire! Nice to see you !
They are three different characters, which might help w the people clarification :P
I will totally add a timeline, I didn't realize it would be this confusing :P
Im glad you liked it!! This is like my baby hahah so let's just hope I can help it make more sense from now on :D Report Review
I have to say, this is an interesting development (:
well, one, I think I feel much better that Addison did feel guilty for treating Harry that way. I feel like slowly, my feel for her personality is that she's just very sarcastic most of the time and she seems like the complete opposite of Hugo, from what I know of him. Hugo is the type that you feel like anyone would get along easily with but Addison has a more difficult personality. She has that loyalty inside of her and I do get the feeling that she'd rather act on her feelings, however negative, than to just keep them inside.
James is very closed off to me. His shades and his attitude towards Addison's remark just makes me think that there's a lot about him that people don't see and there's a lot more to him than being just rude and arrogant. It seems like that's his mask of trying to hide whatever it is that he's hiding. That's not to say he might not be rude and arrogant because James certainly does not leave a good first impression, but I do still think that James doesn't feel like he has a need to make a good first impression.
This caused him to make Addison judge that he's unpleasant, an accusation that isn't totally unfound because she probably based that off of his attitude towards Hugo, which Addison's loyalty to him makes him rash in her decisions, however reasonable they do seem to her.
That'll probably be difficult for the two of them. Addison doesn't like to hide anything and James likes to hide everything. At least that's what I think so far xD
It should be interesting for the both of them to live with each other. The prospect of having to live with a "babysitter" probably doesn't sit well with James (who probably doesn't know that he's in danger) and the fact that James appears so arrogant and unopen is difficult for Addison.
(:Author's Response: Hello! :)
First and foremost, I literally love your reviews to death. While I like all the reviews that tell me the story's amazing and whatnot, I think all authors have a special place in their hearts for reviews that feature in-depth character analysis, talk about the story and offer concrit. Thanks so much. :)
Secondly, you're not very far off in your perception of Addison, James and Hugo. I mostly view Addison as a bitter, sarcastic person who would be reluctant to accept new people readily. Hugo, like a previous reviewer said, balances her out. And James, like you very correctly said, is a closed off person, but there's,more to him than meets the eye.
That being said, though Addison is easily guilt-tripped and /is/ definitely very loyal to her friends, etc., she is not a very /open/ person, or atleast, not at first, or with James. James has already made a rather bad impression on her (he was /definitely/ not trying to make a good one) so i'm sure Addison won't be very eager to chitchat with him about her life secrets.
Having a 'babysitter' is definitely irking James, which is why his relationship with Addison will be...interesting.
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing,
-Akansha. Report Review
Actually, the thought that Carlotta was just using James for magic hadn't appeared in my mind at all either. I didn't even think of that possibility lol
I'm glad that Carlotta is going to stop punishing herself and finally let herself be happy; I see a lot of resemblance between James and Carlotta to Harry and Ginny. If Harry and Ginny can make it work out, I have full confidence in James and Carlotta to make it work.
I honestly just think that they're so cute together! They have their serious moments but then at the end, they're just so hilarious and so cute and just so perfect together that I'm so glad that James is so happy because Carlotta has finally stopped being stupid about thinking that she doesn't deserve to have happiness.
What I loved was that James still was so nervous about the game; it just shows to me that he is still so humble and I just love that about him. There are the players that are so confident like McLaggen that it just bugs you. There are also players that fake it till they make it, but then theres James, who doesn't hide that he is nervous but in the end, he just does what he does best at: which is play Quidditch and play it better than anyone else.
I love this chapter. I sincerely hope that things between James and Carlotta stay this good.
Next Friday's Quidditch match is going to be intense though.Author's Response: It's not in Carlotta's nature to go around using people for her own ends, and the thought obviously didn't occur to James either so you're not alone in that! She HAS given in for the moment, but this isn't the end of her punishing herself, unfortunately. If it was then it would be a pretty quick fix! Certainly things are good in James' camp for now, though.
James knows that he has talent, but he doesn't expect to be good in every match. A lot of that attitude is down to his upbringing; in Harry and Ginny he has two parents who aren't going to let him get too big for his boots and take his talent for granted! And actually, because of that, he doesn't realise just how good he is and UNDERestimates his talent. But it's still better than thinking too much of himself.
The Bats match will indeed be intense! Hopefully that will be written and posted soon :) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
short and powerful. I love it.
what I also love is that your description here was wonderful. I felt like I was really feeling what Mary was feeling as she was waiting and that is just really powerful because you got the point across in not so many words.
I also love how she is going back and reminiscing on memories from before because that part about how the dementors for just one second don't affect her because of how happy she was is just so bittersweet because we know how horrible her confrontation with Umbridge went.
Good job on this one-shot and keep it up (:Author's Response: Hello!
I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed this one-shot! It was definitely something that was spur of the moment, and I randomly got the inspriration for it before just sitting down and writing the entire thing, so the fact that you found it powerful was really wonderful! Thank you so much for the lovely review!
Cassie :) Report Review
hello! I have to say that I've always seen this story but never read it till now, and I'm glad that I read it! I think you wrote this SO well; I just love the idea that the entire Wotter gang, the Scamanders, and Scorpius are a part of this secret criminal group. And the roles that each of them have is just so realistic and I love how all of them do have this really strong bond together with each other.
The thing is though, I really think that Hugo is the traitor. As sad as it is to have to pick someone out in the group as the traitor, I have to say that its Hugo. as much as Rose does not want to believe that her brother can be the traitor, I think that he is because of how suspicious it is.
Also, I hope Draco and Astoria don't still think that Scorpius is dead. Hopefully because they can't produce his body they'll realize that he isn't dead and have hope.
I also don't know what to make of Zach. His character seems dodgy and even though Rose wants Scorpius to believe her and trust her on Zach, I think Scorpius is right to be wary about him. It doesnt matter that he had helped her out at the trial; he could be doing it for his own/the frat's reasons. Just because he helped her out once doesn't make him completely trustworthy.
I love how you wrote out Rose's character because she's SO flawed but at the same time, you can see her cling to this wish of naivety for things to go back to the way they were when it was good. I love to see that even though she's such a flawed person and she doesn't seem very likable at times, she has this goodness deep down inside of her and she has that goodness that Hermione believes Rose has to do the right thing at the very end.
I love this novel, and I hope you update soon (: Report Review
oh my gosh, can I just say that I want to cry after reading this?! oh my gosh. I've always loved reading about the Slytherins' POV during the 1st and the 2nd Wizarding war because they truly believed in their cause. Voldemort was pure evil, as was his cause, but the fact that the Slytherins truly believed what they were fighting for and truly believed in their way of life just makes me so sad. Especially reading about Narcissa's reflections makes me so sad because she was part of the original era of those whose pureblood lives had a point in which they hadn't been tainted in the nonsense of ridding the world of Muggleborns and Muggles. its so depressing to read about it because it's so true, as you wrote. in the end of a war, sometimes, it doesn't matter who won or who lost and the losing side just has it so much harder because they aren't comforted by the fact that they had fought, lost so many, but won the cause for which they were fighting for. the losing side dedicated their lives, fought so long and so hard, lost so many, and lost the entire war.
sometimes, it makes me depressed for purebloods who fought on the other side because of how sad it really is.
I think you did a wonderful job portraying what Narcissa is thinking and making that delicate balance between wanting to maintain the pureblood ways of life and thinking that Voldemort had it right. the part that you wrote about entire houses being eliminated is just SO true. from Narcissa's point of view, you can really see why she mourns all of those people. there WAS so much legacy and so much history in those houses, even if they had slowly lost sight of what Narcissa called 'the light'. the fact that all of them are wiped out like that just makes it really depressing. it's not even about keeping the severely pruned family trees completely 'pureblood' but its the fact that all of those old families are COMPLETELY gone. just that in itself is so depressing and sad.
I think you did such an amazing job with this one-shot. I think its so amazing. Report Review
this really broke my heart.
reading this just reminded me of two painful thoughts. 1) how painful must this first transformation have been?! to have to transform and suffer through a full moon alone after having his friends by his side for those many years... 2) how sad the new year must have been because only months ago, all of them were alive and somewhat happy, despite the dark and difficult times.
reading this also made me truly realize how happy Remus must have been when he realized the truth of what had happened that night, that Sirius didn't betray them, but how heartbroken that he must have been to know that another dear friend that he had held in his heart for so many years to be a martyr was the true traitor and put another one of their dear friends to suffer in Azkaban for all those years.
As much as I love Sirius (whom, btw, along with James are my favorite characters in HP), I don't think people really realize what Remus had gone through during the two wars, and I'm really glad that you chose this scene to write about. to me, there are so many things that we don't realize. how much Remus suffered in those two years, the heartbreak and happiness he felt that one night in Harry's third year, and the pain he felt when Sirius died. it must have been horrible, and I don't think people realize that. I'm glad that you wrote this, and I think this is a very well-written one-shot. it's short and concise, and I think it's very well written (: Report Review
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