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Review #1, by StarryLauraDelilah's Black Book of Poems: The Animagus in the Library

28th August 2012:
The animagus was very clever. :) Although I think a wolf would have worked better, the black leopard was also fitting.

And it saddens me to see that Hermione's so insecure about the blood issue...I honestly think it's something Draco can help her with, even if neither of them can change the way society thinks. The least they can do is love each other, and hopefully that can be enough. Their world is changing soon, what with the war, and they can be part of that change. Of course, there will always be some people that hang onto their prejudices, but I think that they should fight for their love.

As for Blaise's sacrifice, I doubt that Draco's going to gain any comfort from being with Astoria. I mean, he's already in so deep with Hermione that she's almost the only thing he thinks about. Astoria's not going to sate any desire of his, even if she is kind. He only wants Hermione, as the behavior of his conjured flowers indicated; all of his energy is spent on Hermione now, and he doesn't care about anything else.

I can't wait to see how their relationship progresses and if they ever get to be together. :) Update soon!

Author's Response: StarryLaura,

Oh, how your review puts a wide smile on my face. :)

First, a wolf... I agree would've worked, but I'm pretty sure that I have read him as a wolf before and I wanted to write something different. I'm probably not the first to write him as a black leapard, but I haven't read any. I do love it though... especially for the black color, cunning, and pride. (But a wolf is beautiful as well - agreed).

Ah, yes, it is sad that she is so insecure about it and I am planning on Draco helping her with this in chapter 20 when they spend an intimate time together. ;) It is in the works.

Your third paragraph is what made me smile so much. You are so very right and spot on and I love it. Thank you so much for mentioning the flowers that were linked to his feelings. He is in deep with Hermione and Astoria would never compare, which is exactly what his dream showed in the beginning. He could care for her, but caring for someone is not the same as love. :(

You give me wonderfully thought out comments. Thank you so very much for sharing them with me. Truly, I love it.

The next chapter is awaiting validation as I write this. I'm so excited for it because Hermione dives into the book deeper and we see what happens with Blaise's offer.

Thank you so very much for your repeated reviews. And I'm pretty sure that I read a comment of yours on another unmentionable site, using quotes from this chapter. If that was you, your comments on blood status were right on again. We are so on the same page. :) If it wasn't you, then ignore what I just said. Haha.

I hope you enjoy the next chapter...
My heart thanks you,
Dark Whisper



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Review #2, by StarryLauraInheriting a Heart: Chapter 8

28th August 2012:
So much happened in this chapter...goodness. I can't seem to wrap my mind around it, but all I want is from Draco and Hermione to run into each other again so that they can figure out their relationship.

Frankly, it's saddening to see Draco so depressed and drunk out of his mind, and to see Hermione so distressed and angry. Both of them just need to fight harder...in fact, Blaise and Astoria need to fight harder too. None of them are trying to claim their love.

Anyways, your writing and character development has improved drastically since the beginning of this story, and I'm really excited to see what happens next. :) Update soon!

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Review #3, by StarryLauraPlaying House with Malfoy: The Morning After

28th August 2012:
Can I just say FINALLY? I don't even know how they made it through the sexual tension for that long. Hopefully they do choose to return to Hogwarts, though, after what Pansy told Hermione. And the fact that Draco has a book is quite interesting...

Either way, I can't wait for the next chapter. :) This fic is just so adorable.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!!!

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Review #4, by StarryLauraAll they want for Christmas...: Wedding

28th August 2012:
Hmm :) A fitting ending to a sweet story. The danger of Draco's father was fairly short-lived, and to be honest, that wasn't the general style of the story anyways. From the first kiss under the mistletoe to the kiss of their unbreakable marraige, the Dramione in this story hasn't been as tumultuous as in other fanfictions. However, the fluffiness has always been a refreshing break from dark plotlines and Draco's sweet words always manage to warm up my insides. :)

It's been a long time since I first got into this fic, but it'll always stick with me as one of the first Dramione fanfictions I ever read. You've done a great job and I'll definitely chexk out your tumblr sometime! :F

Author's Response: To be honest, I did the thing with Lucius because I felt the story was too much on the fluffy side. In the two years it took me to write this story, I grew to really appreciate the angsty Dramione stories as opposed to the fluffy ones. I evolved a lot as a writer in the time it took to finish this story. It shows. Regardless, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for following me on this journey from the start! I have always looked forward to your reviews. I hope you find more stories you love!

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Review #5, by StarryLauraDéjà Vu: Time Passes, Stuff Happens, and Life Still Sucks

28th August 2012:
Okay...I guess filler chapter? XD But I'm pretty excited to see what happens when they're down at the lake and I'm glad that James finally broke up with Sarah. I'm also waiting for Dom to go into labor because that is just going to be gold, with all the characters freaking out and panicking.

Either way, I guess not much happened in this chapter, except I find it quite amusing that James didn't kiss Artemis at the conclusion. :P Can't wait for the next update!

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Review #6, by StarryLauraStill Delicate: Epilogue

28th August 2012:
This was a stunning sequel to Delicate...the Scorose relationship developed naturally (albeit dramatically) and I liked it very much.

Although at times I seriously doubted if their love would last, you always seemed to make some kind of plot twist to connect them back together and give us hope. I think it's nice that the people in their lives understand that they love each other, even if it is a terrible inconvenience and quite a bumpy road.

Your characters are funny and heartwarming: they're true to themselves and even if they are slightly psychotic, they always turn out to be compassionate and considerate in the end. You're great with comedy in your stories and you never fail to make me laugh while I sit alone staring at a computer screen.

Delicate and Still Delicate do deserve their places as top fics on HPFF. The happy ending makes me happy, and ultimately, I think your writing is amazing. I look forward to reading more of your work. :)

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Review #7, by StarryLauraInheriting a Heart: Chapter 5

5th April 2012:
The suspense!! It's killing me. DX

I just read all five chapters through and I am absolutely stunned. Although you have jumped into Draco wanting Hermione as quickly as some other Dramione writers, I think you portray the confusion and frustration in their relationship very well. :)

The sweet things they say to themselves just make my heart clench and I really want to see them together in the end. :D Your writing is very articulate, powerful, and moving, I can't wait to see how their relationship progresses.

I kind of hate how they don't know or admit that they love each other but they constantly think about each other...but it adds to the story, definitely. Makes a Dramione what it is. XD Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Really made me think of how to follow through with upcoming chapters. I would have taken more time in progressing their feelings towards each other, but I didn't intend for this story to be this long at the beginning. In my opinion, I have always assumed there was more to Draco's feelings towards Hermione than meets the eye, or else he'd never had allowed their relationship to get farther than mere bickering. Furthermore, I must say that Draco's ego and Hermione's obstinateness wouldn't allow them to admit their feelings right away. Kind of like a modern day Pride and Prejudice.

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Review #8, by StarryLauraDelilah's Black Book of Poems: The Undeniable Craving in the Room of Hidden Things

5th April 2012:
These two frustrate me. XD They're too careful around each other.

Haha well I loved that they see the exact same thing in the mirror. It must've been distracting yet empowering at the same time. ;)

The spell and the conch seashell were cute, but I think you took a bit too long on them because when you brought the story back to their relationship I felt like you had gone off on a tangent. So stay more focused?

When they cuddled and talked, it was so adorable. :3 I love it when they're just being romantic together and they both have thoughts of truly being together.

And one more thing. Sometimes I think the story's too dark all the time...You might want to lighten up some chapters. Not like the ping pong game at the beginning of the story, but some filler chapters where we don't have to feel so suffocated by the darkness of the story. :)

Anyways, fantastically great chapter, keep writing!

Author's Response: StarryLaura,

Okay... finally I can respond. Geesh...

Well, I am glad that you liked the mirror bit. I'm sure there are stories with these two in front of the mirror, but I don't remember reading much. I didn't want that to be the main focus of the chapter, but I couldn't resist using it in my story. Anyway... glad that you liked it. :)

You think I spent too much time on the spell and the shell? Well... the spell is important later in the story and the shell was extremely important as it was my own 'magical element' in this chapter that brought these two together in a very romantic way. So, I'm not sure how you felt that I went off on a tangent. :/ The point is that even if they try to keep things light and on the surface, they are drawn to each and can't help themselves. Sorry, I'm not sure what you mean by 'stay more focused.' They are the ones that are having trouble focusing on anything but each other.

It sounds like you didn't really like it. Sorry.

And as far as 'too dark'. Well, I do try to have them laughing at each other a bit as they have glimpses of being light. But honestly... this story is dark and I warned in the Summary that this was emotionally sad.

It is not meant to be humorous or fun. I'll warn you now that the next several chapters are very sad and DARK with no plans of changing it.

It gets very, very serious... heart-wrenching truly. I'm writing Hermione's heart for this next chapter and Draco fights a friend. And then one more with them together romantically, then Sectumsempra, then the war. VERY SAD. Sorry, no filler or fluff. I've cried while writing pieces of chapter 19 and 21! If you feel 'suffocated by the darkness,' then maybe this story isn't something you are going to like. :/

Thanks for your honesty. I appreciate it, but I hope you understand mine.

Dark Whisper


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Review #9, by StarryLauraDelilah's Black Book of Poems: If My Eyes are Sad

3rd April 2012:
Wow, you've done it again, missy. :) Sorry that I haven't reviewed on time.

So generally I'm going to say that the scene where Draco helped her guess was dragged out too long, because there was so much dialogue. And I think some of her reactions to the letter were exaggerrated? I don't know if that was intentional or not, because some of the phrasing got awkward around there. XD

Nevertheless, the letter was written beautifully and I love that the word to unlock the vault was the same as hers. Also, the origami swan was creative. :) The kisses were once again, like Hermione's, perfectly done. Terribly romantic, I must say. My own heart melted too. I can't even describe to you how I feel when I read that.

I think you could press the return/enter button less, just because it's supposed to add drama or indicate a change of subject. But you sometimes use it regularly between single sentences and it gets distracting.

Otherwise, great chapter, can't wait to read the next one in a second! :D

Author's Response: StarryLaura,

Sorry it is taking so long to respond to your review. I wanted to take my time and think about what to say.

On the dialogue dragging things out... well, I didn't want to jump right in and neither did Draco. I think small talk was appropriate before things got very serious. I wanted them to discuss the 'Dark Valentine' title as well as lead up to his insult about his vault being 'simple.' So all of that dialogue was setting the stage to get to the vault. Sorry if you didn't like that... anticipation of the vault answer too much, perhaps?

As far as her reaction... She had to sit down. Her eyes became blurry for the pain of her blood status runs extremely deep in this story. (You'll hear more about it in chapter 18). And her hand went over her heart as it sunk in her chest. I'm not sure if that is exaggerated. I did try to convey angst by describing her reaction/shock in between the words of his letter. I mean, how would you feel if someone that used to hate you, wrote something so deep about you? Given their circumstances, I'm not changing a thing. I think her reaction is very appropriate... she didn't fall on the floor and go into convulsions or squeal so loud the entire school heard her. I think she did pretty good, considering. :)

Awkward phrasing? I double/triple checked for flow, but couldn't find anything that stood out as choppy or awkward. So, I'm not sure what you meant. Sorry.

I did go back through and change some spacing and one-liners, but not too much. I suppose this might be part of my style. Sorry if it is distracting. But I did go back and change some. So thanks for pointing it out. :)

I'm so happy that you liked his three kisses and the swan. I wanted to describe it carefully in such a way that readers could really feel what was happening between them. It was sweet to read that your heart melted as well. ;)

Thanks so much for your constructive review. And now I must get to work. I'll respond to the other one later. *must stop writing* Crap, I'm going to be late!

*runs off*

Dark Whisper


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Review #10, by StarryLauraAll This Time: Regrets

31st March 2012:
Hahaha this is too good. :) I'm loving these plot twists and Hermione's jealousy, keep on writing!!

I can't wait to find out who Ginny's cheatjng on Draco with. :P Update soon!

Author's Response: Aww why thank you!! :D Haha can't take credit for all of them, as I said it's loosely based off Something Borrowed but I think it fit perfectly for a Dramione so I had to do it. :P

I shall!! :)

Thanks for reading and reviewing, I hope you continue to do so. It means a lot to me. :)

Until next time,
~Mischief_managed18


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Review #11, by StarryLauraPlaying House with Malfoy: The Date

26th March 2012:
XDD Well I guess that was mostly filler, but it's fine by me. :) Except I think they were more OOC than usual in this chapter. Hermione is independent and should have put up more of a fight to go with Draco to Knockturn Alley...

Also, using saying that something wasn't right when she only threw up isn't very fitting. You set us up for a dramatic danger scene and we didn't get it.

Conclusion? I still adore this story very much but the chapters have gotten more and more disappointing. Nothing has happened...Conflict and adventure make a story interesting. :) Keep on writing!

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Review #12, by StarryLauraAnna Banana: Black, and not Sirius

20th February 2012:
Haha this was fantastically done. :D I am a Dramione shipper, but you captured all the points that make me not want to read a certain fanfiction. OOC characters, no plot, too much fluff, Ron-bashing, etc.etc.

Although this fic wasn't very fluently or well-written, I get that it's a parody, so it's okay. :) The part about dress-describing? Too true.

You kept me laughing throughout the story, great work! :)

Author's Response: lol, thanks! Dramione... well I suppose my opinions are pretty clear :p I tired to throw as much OOC generalized characterizations as I could.

The dresses.. haha.. that's one that always annoys me too :)

Thanks so much for reading, and leaving a review!


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Review #13, by StarryLauraAll This Time: Camping

10th February 2012:
Well. I'm definitely excited to see where your story goes, missy. :) I'm sorry to say that it's not one of the absolute best Dramiones out there, but there's definitely an originality to it that keeps me reading. :D

I'm keeping tabs on this story! And my advice? I guess...more sophisticated language, more detailed descriptions, less dialogue in some situations? And I guess the story should be a bit less carefree, and they shouldn't be accepting Draco's adultery so easily, even if they do love each other.

I do love Ron in this story though, he's so sweet and silly, just like in the books. :) Can't wait to see more of everyone.

Author's Response: Why thank you dear! I'm glad that you're excited. Oh believe me, I know that haha and I'm glad you think it's original enough to keep reading. :)

Aww I'm so glad to hear that! Yeah reading back through it I realize it's rather dull and dry in some parts. Definitely need to work on expanding my vocabulary when writing. Point taken. :P Haha I shall work on that.

Why thank you! He's definitely one of my favorite characters to write. He's such a caring, goofy, and laid back character. I absolutely love him.

Thank you, again, for reviewing these chapters and being completely honest with me. It really is appreciated and it's reviews like yours that allow me to improve. I hope you continue to read and review, it would mean a lot.

~Mischief_managed18


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Review #14, by StarryLauraAll This Time: Holiday

10th February 2012:
The tension of this story is definitely getting to my head. XD Their relationship is clearly a complete mess right now, and it won't be long before Ginny's suspicious.

But one thing. I don't think Draco cries that easily, he's always the one to remain calm and cover up his emotions. I don't think even a mindset change could change that aspect of his personality. If he cried, it would have to be a REALLY major moment in their relationship...

I can understand that he really wants to chase her, after what happened when they were Heads...my heart breaks for them. :'(

As always, I'm completely ready for the next chapter, can't wait to read it!

Author's Response: Haha uh oh. Hopefully no permanent damage. xD I know right?! Poor kids... Mwuahaha oh how I can't wait to get further into this story...

Gah. I know... I know... and I've had people tell me that previously. I definitely need to go back and revise some things because the more I read back the more I realize how right you guys are..

*sigh* I know... but stupid Ginny comes along and ruins everything. I love her to death, but not in this story...

Why thank you dear! You are quite wonderful, I can't thank you enough for your reviews. :)

~Mischief_managed18


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Review #15, by StarryLauraAll This Time: Mistakes

10th February 2012:
Wow...well I think you could have slowed down the sex part a bit, I know it's uncomfortable to write, but speeding it makes it lose its significance as a turning point in the story...

The flashbacks are killing me. Ginny just went and ruined everything for them...sigh. Now it's going to be so hard for them to get together again...

I can't...time for the next chapter. By the way, I absolutely love Draco's POV. It completes me. ;)

Author's Response: I'm sorry. :P haha it's the first time I've written something like that, so I apologize. Haha definitely something I need to work on..

Grr I know... Stupid Ginny. She angers me sometimes, especially this Ginny. xD

Yay! I love his POV as well. There's just something about it.. I love him. :P

~Mischief_managed18


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Review #16, by StarryLauraAll This Time: Slipping

10th February 2012:
Oh my. :')

I though you were going to spend more time on the relationship, but apparently not. It's okay with me though. This chapter completely made up for it. No doubt.

When she let that slip...I can imagine his panicked reaction. I can't even...talk correctly. No words. THE EMOTION. I need more. Now. D:

Author's Response: I know. :P I didn't wanna get too sappy and too into little details, the whole story kind of skips around but I already know exactly where it's headed and where this is going. xD

Goodness I know. This is why drinking is bad. ;P *sigh* I love these 2 together.. It's one of those stories you wish you could just go back in time and fix so they were happy.

~Mischief_managed18


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Review #17, by StarryLauraAll This Time: Conversations

10th February 2012:
Here I am!

I really liked the summary for this story, it's intriguing and I can't wait to see it happen. :)

I love how friendly Draco and Hermione are to each other right now, but I find them to be quite OOC. Draco's not one to give up his pride easily, and Hermione isn't one to admit to falling in love so easily. I think it would actually take longer for them to get to this point, even if Draco wanted to change.

I know that this is the most challenging part of writing a Dramione, so don't feel too bad. Getting the to real relationship is always impossible to get perfect. :) So excited for more!

Author's Response: Why hello there! :)

Why thank you. :D I'm glad that it intrigued you enough to make you want to read my story. I actually don't really fancy my summaries. :P

Yeah, I know they aren't exactly like the characters we know and love, but sadly, I need to do a little tweaking. :/

They can be a challenge, that's for sure and that's why I figured I'd write one and see where that gets me before starting another. :P

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my story and for being critical and telling me what you like and dislike, it's exactly what I need and it's highly appreciated. :)

~Mischief_managed18


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Review #18, by StarryLauraNo Words: No Words

8th February 2012:
Wow...for the sake of this story, I'm going to say, I'm at a loss for words. ;)

But disregarding that, I think this story was very unique. Although not the best one-shot I've read out there, it's definitely one of the better ones. I like how there's no dialogue in the story. It changes the atmosphere a bit, shifts it into calmer, yet tenser territory. Describing the time spent staring at each other was effective.

The line where you Hermione felt him staring and knew he was staring because it was equal to her own time spent staring at him...speechless. Your snapshot of this relationship feels so slow-moving (because of the lengthy, descriptive, deep paragraphs), and at the same time, it's so real. Especially the scene where Hermione decided to sit at Draco's desk, since he had been gone for so long...

I think the kiss could have been avoided, it didn't add that much to the story...Nevertheless, it was a nice touch and the ending is perfect. It's so dark, but also promises more for their relationship. :)

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Review #19, by StarryLauraPlaying House with Malfoy: A Walk in the Park

8th February 2012:
So cute. :3 I love them together. And how they constantly think of each other sexually but neither wants to show it...also, I can't wait until Draco's mission succeeds. :P When he finally seduces Hermione. That'll be interesting.

Otherwise, not much happened in this chapter, so I don't have much to say...just hoping they can preserve the relationship past this time travel incident. :') Update soon! (And let something major happen. :D)

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Review #20, by StarryLauraDelilah's Black Book of Poems: The Art in Dark Arts

5th February 2012:
That ending...mindblown.

I have absolutely no idea what the word is, and I reallyreallyreally want to see, so update soon! :D

I love how Hermione's stuck on only his vault. It has a certain...I guess...well, it fits. It works. It seems like something that would happen. And I love that she dressed for him at the Gala. :)

Draco needs to get over himself. Seriously. Getting himself drunk won't help his situation, and how does he know how Hermione's going to react if he won't even tell her?

I love how they both reacted the same way to the 'Dark Valentine' pairing. Draco, I guess, was much more...eloquent. Calling it 'the couple most likely to get killed for loving each other'. That was nice. :')

And finally, the break-up was nicely written. Pansy's not a bad girl and she needs to find somebody who loves her unconditionally and that she can truly love in return. I would be hurt too, if my partner constantly turned away from me during sex... D:

But yeah. I'm so excited to see what the poem of Draco's vault reveals...updateupdateupdate! (Just a suggestion, but in some paragraphs, you repeated descriptive words, and that's not very effective in writing :P)

Author's Response: StarryLaura,

I LOVE YOUR REVIEWS. Have I told you that lately? Yes, I think I have, but I just want to tell you again.

I love them because you totally called me out on my mistakes. How could I over-use overly-used words... kind, gentle, kindly, gently, kindness... YIKES! I cannot believe that I did that! I blame it on being sick when I wrote it. I must blame something, so ya... that's why. LOL!

So... what I'm going to do is... go back through my constructive reviews and make a checklist to look at BEFORE I submit my chapters. This will make me a better writer so that I can catch these silly things that can make my story boring! So see how your honesty truly helps me be a better writer? THANK YOU!

In saying all of that... I have edited the chapter and fixed a few things (repeated overly-used words and Draco does something more appropriate to Nott for making fun of him).

Okay... of the rest of your comments...
No guesses? Haha! You will find out soon.

Yes... Hermione is stuck. He wanted to make it extremely difficult so that not just anyone could figure it out. And more importantly, I wanted these two to come together in a very dramatic moment when it is opened. (hint)

Hermione dressing for him? Well... you are really onto something with that as he shows her just what that means to him.

I think he assumes that eventually everything that he has done will surface when he finally kills Dumbledore. I think his feelings were a general statement of how, in the end, she will truly hate him and never forgive him. ;(

I'd written their reactions that way because in my mind, Draco is more in touch with the grave consequences more so than she understands at this point. (And in my story, he is more eloquent with words than she is).

On the breakup, I wanted Pansy to finally love him so that she could understand her error and feel regret for a long time to come.

I really hope you like what his vault reveals. *crosses fingers* I am working on the next chapter and want to be sure that I get it right.

I cannot thank you enough for your awesome words that have encouraged me along the way.

The edit is currently in queue that will correct my repeated words and ultimately make it much better for future readers. I truly appreciate the 'kind' and 'gentle' honestly! LOL!

With sincerest appreciation,
Dark Whisper



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Review #21, by StarryLauraHunting The Hunters: Getting out of Britain

1st February 2012:
Oh, and sorry to bother you with another review. :P This has nothing to do with this chapter specifically, but...

I absolutely adore how sweet Draco is when he gets into a relationship with Hermione. How he blushes when he compliments her, how he's protective and jealous when she's around other men, how he shows his feelings through hugs and kisses rather than words...and his constant care of her, even though I can tell that he gets quite tired of tending to her injuries so frequently. XD But I also liked how you began the story with him slightly hostile toward her even after their sexual encounters...I really liked the one where he thought she was a prostitute and that she actually had the skills of one. XD I also absolutely LOVED the Amortentia bubbles scene, how he had to bring her back by making the better reality. ;) I can't imagine what trying to turn a sleeping person on would be like. :P

And...I LOVE THE BANNER. They look so fierce in it, especially Hermione. I think you could tone down the dark factor a bit for Draco, because that's not his true character in this story, but I still love the design and the coloration and the general technique used. Even if you didn't make it, good job getting it. :D

Anyways, I won't annoy you with another super lengthy review again. :P Once again, this story is fantastic.

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Review #22, by StarryLauraHunting The Hunters: Perhaps a Vacation

1st February 2012:
Wow. Uhm...this story has rendered me speechless. It was one of the best pieces I have ever read, and I like that it doesn't revolve around Draco's and Hermione's relationship as much. Instead, it focuses around the action, just like J.K. Rowling does. :)

Your ideas were so imaginative and the plotline was so intricately planned. For example, I actually thought Mark was a pretty nice guy and that it was going to be the age-old scenario where Draco got all jealous and they had to compete for Hermione and then at the final showdown, Draco does something really sappy or heroic and wins her over. But when you made Mark the enemy? I was totally not expecting that, and when Crookshanks died, I was pretty creeped out too.

Backtracking, I really liked the beginning of the story, what with Harry's protectiveness. I think the best part there was how Hermione set the Hunters up to capture her and by then, Draco was already feeling an obligation to keep her with him. I really liked how determined she was, and she kept coming back to Malfoy Manor intentionally or unintentionally, even after her memory was wiped. Starting the sexual stuff then was a nice touch too, because that's a reasonable way for the attraction to blossom. :P

Moving onto Hermione's raid...oh my...that was...quite overwhelming. The spells they were auctioning? So gruesome, and even though I can't see them, I already feel disgusted. The idea of the auction and the origin of the spells was very creative, I don't think I've ever read anything like it. :) I also like how quick-witted Hermione is when her cover is almost blown, and she even manages to cater to the audience through her stress.

Also, I must admit, this story has made me develop a stronger hate for the Ministry of Magic and even Harry. XD I loved the touch of Hermione's nightmare about choosing between her heart and her mind...incorporating the Weasley twins to help her make that decision was definitely effective and very believable, as it was canon and that's their character.

And finally, the ending was slightly abrupt and cheesy, because she just had a near-death experience and the ending recalls a memory that Draco would not have realistically remembered at that period in time...But that's just specifically for this chapter. Overall, the story was absolutely beautiful and I love it to death. I might even try more of your writing! :D

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Review #23, by StarryLauraVertigo: Meet the Parents

28th January 2012:
asdfghjkl. They're technically kind of sort of officially engaged now...that's interesting. Draco would actually sacrifice his entire reputation just to get the book...

He's willing to tell everyone that he's engaged to a Muggle...hmm...I can't wait to find out how everyone reacts. :D Updateupdateupdate!

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Review #24, by StarryLauraDelilah's Black Book of Poems: Wolves, Rabbits, and Snowy Constellations

20th January 2012:
I think I just died. :') This chapter was flawless. No doubt about it. And just a warning, but this is going to be a really long review. Just because I love this chapter so much.

The wolf and rabbit metaphor was really beautiful. Both their interpretations of it. I can see how Draco's convincing himself that he's not a monster, but Hermione sees the wolf as vicious no matter what...No wonder Draco's afraid to confide in her...

The snowflake constellations? Beautiful. And when Hermione asked him about naming his children after them...ASDFGHJKL. My heart. And his offering for her to curse him... D: Why is he so perfect.

The confession about his sad eyes... :') No words. Both their confessions about wanting to fall in love...that was...so perfect. I can't even talk correctly right now...cardboard boxes...things you can't control...hope...safe, protected, important, wanted, loved.

I have so many favorite quotes here, you don't even know. :') The feeling of love is so prevalent in this chapter...

I loved the part where Draco debated whether or not to take her hand...how that tiny physical movement became the decision of whether or not to risk becoming the unconditional love Hermione spoke of, or to play it safe and not tell her about his mission, live a life with no hope. :'(

Her question and him grabbing her scarf...Let me die right here. His statement that he would rather die the last Malfoy than to repulse her was so...I am rendered speechless. No words in this language can convey what I'm feeling right now. Him confessing that Hermione's presence was his light. His longing for the child of theirs. :') Wondering why there was anything wrong with loving her.

And last of all, her vault. That riddle was flawless. The way only he could have thought of the answer so quickly, and her question for love...how she was the only one who actually cared enough to ask for love. I can't wait until we see Draco's vault.

And Ron... D: What if this exposes Draco? UPDATE SOON. Your new chapter has caused me to reach an inch from death in anticipation and love and all the good Dramione stuff.

Author's Response: StarryLaura,
Wow! I'm sorry that it is taking so long to respond to your review. It is because I died when I read it! And I keep dying everytime I read it over and over again!

You give such wonderful reviews that render me speechless. I'm so elated that you like so much of it... the quotes, the snowy constellations, wolves and rabbits, and what they talked about. There really was a lot put into this chapter... talk of hope and love and cardboard boxes and if he would name his children after the stars. Awe...

And I love that you mentioned her question. It was a question that went unanswered.

I think, in this chapter Draco became more in-character than in others... a bit elusive and mysterious and definitely deep, deep, deep and sincere.

He grabbed that scarf and reeled her in because he wants to be close to her. He wants to feel her next to him, but is holding back. ;(

They will come together soon, but Draco has some loose ends to tie up first at the Art Gala.

You liked her riddle? Yeah! She stills harbors pain... hurt just doesn't go away so quickly and she wonders if a heart that is taught to hate is capable of love. And if it is... would he let her in, a Mudblood? ;(

Oh, StarryLaura... Thank you so very much for your wonderful review. Words cannot describe how I feel in reading your words.

You show me excitement for my story, which means the world to me. It makes every hour I work on it 'worth it.'

Bless your sweet heart for every encouraging word.

The next chapter is in queue, but I'm editing it today, which will send it to the back of course. But know that it will be up soon! Yeah!

THANK YOU!
Love and hugs to you,
Dark Whisper


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Review #25, by StarryLauraExpecting Otherwise: Empty Classroom

20th January 2012:
Sorry! I haven't reviewed in forever, but...here I am. :)

Well, I have to say your writing makes me smile all the time. Adella's just so bipolar and Slytherin that I can't help but laugh.

On the other hand, Brayder and Deuce are still bastards...yep. That comment Brayder made was just...cruel. And Deuce is definitely a whore. XD

Otherwise, I still love Chase (and his newfound oranges) to death, Clover is adorable, and Adella as annoying as ever. Heathcliffe and Al? LOVE. :D

I can't wait until Adella tells her parents, I really want to see some of Draco and Hermione! :) And their reaction. XD Update soon!

Author's Response: StarryLaura! :D

It's alright, I haven't really had time to answer my reviews before recently, so...even?

Hahah, yeah, she is a Slytherin all right! But I hope you noticed that she's got some of her mum in her as well ^^ And I love that I've made you laugh!

Yep. They are. Not gonna disagree. But you have to admit...Deuce IS a funny character? ;D Even though he definitely is a man-hoe.

Ah, I love Chase too, is is super sweet, and funny! And he is also very easy for me to write, seeing as he is sort of like a combo of both Martin and Draco from OE.
I'm happy you like Clover! She's a lot like my own best friend, so I had a lot of inspiration for what to write where she is concerned ^^
Yeah, Adella is annoying. She's sort of an anti-hero xD Heath and Al are super cute! I'm so glad you like them too!

Hahah, yes, that WILL be interesting ;) And especially so because I'm going to write parts of it in Hermione's pov!

Thanks for reading and reviewing, hon! :)

*Maria



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