Hi! I'm back again :)
(One quick thing before I start. It took me a while to realise it was in James' POV so maybe you want to mention it shortly at the beginning? IDK, it might just be me being picky :P )
Flashback! I love flashbacks because you learn more of a character's history :D (wait, would this even be considered one? meh) Oh Jimmy, you charmer you ;) Wow, I was not expecting him to have had feelings for Amelie before Amelie had discovered hers for him. (because honestly, guys can be a bit daft when it comes to those things haha)
I really like Amelie's character, she is so cool! I love her strong, independent, booyah girl power attitude. And she's feisty. I like feisty. RAWR.
And oh god, what have you gotten yourself into Jimmy boy? I feel like the last word pretty much sums up his life haha.
Now onto some serious stuff (kind of. I mean, since when am I serious?)
I like that this is in James' POV. I personally think that it is very difficult to write in a guy's pov, so kudos to you! I especially like the thought process in the end. So funny!
-Sankavi ^_^ Report Review
Hi! I'm Sankavi here from the BvB :)
I will tell you ahead of time that I wrote this down as I was reading so sorry if it doesn't really flow all that well at the beginning :)
Okay, so, the first thing I started wondering was, who is her mum? Also, is she some kind of troublemaker? (Amelie, not the mum) Is that why she didn't become Head Girl? You leave the reader wondering a lot of these questions which makes us want to read more to find the answers! Also, having this in just the first few paragraphs is great!
I love how you get right into Amelie analyzing what the relationship between her and James is. It gets right to the action (sorta) which I like because, well I'm not sure, but I think it's really nice! (or it's at least different from a lot of other stories I've read)
I'm not sure if you intended this to happen, but I got giddy when I saw the word raining! I feel like it's a good sign when you spot the title in the text ;)
Ahhh! So they've had past experiences smooching huh? (okay maybe not really. but still) And asdfkjlsdf SHE KISSED HIM!!! AND HE WENT WITH IT!!! Totally not weird at all ;)
I'm really excited to see where this story is going to go from here and what kind of plots unravel! Expect to see me reviewing a few more of these chapters ;)
-Sankavi ^_^ Report Review
Hello! Back again :)
Do I sense a ickle crush here ;) ('And suddenly, with Georgeís smile, my heart seems to go into overtime')
Anyways, who knew Oliver could get so angry? And what was up with the whole backed up against the wall thing? Oliver, you need to learn the concept of personal space.
I really liked the descriptions of Hailey's feeling when Oliver was doing his schpiel. How she was so nervous yet angry at the same time. It was like I could feel what she was feeling!
Also, I can't wait to find out what happens during the tryouts next time. I totally feel like she's gonna do something drastic and Wood'll kick her off the team (meh, wouldn't put it past him)
Bye till the next chapter!
-Sankavi ^_^ Report Review
Hello! I'm Sankavi, here from the BvB (yay team blue!).
The first thing that came to mind when reading this was why is she so angry at Wood? Like, is there some other backstory that'll come up later or is it just because Wood acts like a poo to her on the pitch? I think it's a great way to start the story because it's like you're starting in the middle of the action.
I also really like the group of friends you've got going. The way Angie, Alicia, and Katie interact with Hailey is really nice to read. They sound so close!
I think this is really nice start to your story and sets it up for quite a lot of conflict. Can't wait to see what happens in the broom shed ;)
-Sankavi ^_^ Report Review
Awh, poor Draco! It really sucks that his mom's trying to force him to be with Astoria (she sounds like a total poop :P) And Daphne reminds me of Luna! If they were stuck in a room together, they'd have quite the intellectual conversations ;) Anyways, going back to the forced betrothal thing, you'd think that his mom would understand because she was also forced (and ended up very unhappy) but she doesn't? I want to learn I guess more about why that is and if there's really a reason for that :/ Can't wait til the ball scene. I want to see what goes on between Draco and Astoria :)
Once again, really nice chapter!
-Sankavi ^_^Author's Response: Hahaha I'm totally with you on his Mum's front, but I think that was just pureblood tradition, and this is him rebelling against it!
I have to admit Luna did inspire me when writing Daphne. I think I just wanted to show that even they were on opposing sides of the war, they were still the same, and could have been friends if they knew one another!
I think the reason why Narcissa is like that, is because her family has been so much, and has fallen down so much in society she just wants to reclaim their old position. I also think that even though she didn't like her marriage, those ideas are still ingrained in her, and she won't change!
I'm currently writing the ball scene, and it should be up soon! It has lots of, hopefully, funny moments between Draco and Astoria!
Thank you for another great review, and I hope to see you back soon :D
Kiana Report Review
Hi Kiana! I'm here for the BvB :)
So, I like the fact that it's from Draco's point of view because it's nice to see his thoughts. I feel like many people can make Draco's dynamic so much bigger if they add in what he thinks because of what he's been though and stuff. Like, as a former Death Eater, what life was like for him. I think you do a pretty good job on this. However, I feel that you could make him slightly darker? Like, seeing where he comes from, he can't be /too/ la di da about life and I think you're doing okay with that but I can see certain spots where you are kind of toeing the line. Does that make any sense?
This is really nice and I can't wait to read more!
-Sankavi ^_^Author's Response: Hi Sankavi!
I'm glad that you liked Draco's POV, as we never see much of it, so I wanted to explore! Haha yeah I know what you mean, I just didn't want to make him too dark, as otherwise him and Hermione would never get together as I don't think she would like an ultra dark wizard!
Besides, I don't think he was that evil, I think it was more of the situation he was in at the time, and hopefully since the first chapter was a couple of months after the war, he had become more reflective!
Thank you for the review, and I hope you enjoy the rest of it!
Kiana :D Report Review
Hello! I'm Sankavi here from the battle thread :D First of all, thank you for that lovely review you left me ;) Now onto some real reviewing, yeah?
Okay, I think you take on Pansy as amazing. I saw a glimpse of it in Limbo (and it may or may not be the same version of pansy, but still) and i think it's super clever. When reading the hp books, she comes off as a very snobbish girl who doesn't care for anyone but herself (her fawning over draco doesn't count because i honestly don't think she had true feelings for him)) but here you show how she went through so muich, just to be with blaise.
Very well written :)
-Sankavi ^_^ Report Review
asdjfhskldfjal THEY HAD ALONE DARBUS TIME :D That's right, i've already got ship names going ;) I kind of want to know why Dom was so insistant about Darcy not dating her family members. It seemed as if it was more than just ew, they're family. Anywhos, can't wait for your next update! (i only discovered this story earlier this morning and it's already been updated today. what the floop!) Ermahgerd, they're going out for dinner. even if they say it's completely business, it's totally a date ;) Love, love LOVE IT!
-Sankavi ^_^Author's Response: Darbus? Oh dear, we have a ship name! Haha :)
I think Dom was just bothered by the idea of her family taking in yet another person from the wizarding world. She probably gets sick of it being paraded around her all the time, and I would imagine that she wants it to stay out of her work life if possible. Still, I think she'd be happy for her friend if Darcy was really happy. (Hey, I couldn't have all the Potter-Weasleys be thrilled about having a big, famous family.)
This story is about halfway done and I post a chapter every Sunday. It's all pre-written, but I definitely appreciate input from reviewers, so please do continue to let me know what you think! Thanks for stopping by to review!
-Amanda Report Review
Hi there! I'm Sankavi here from the BvB :) Go team blue!! :D
So, i really liked first of all because it was from Tom's point of view. In the book, we got to hear some of his thoughts, but only the ones that were voiced. Here It's nice to see things like "
I canít wait until for the moment when Iím fully in control of my powers, then I can finally seek revenge. "
It kinda makes you think, had tom always wanted to turn out evil? Even at such a young age?
Although this was a little short, I really like bits like " After I dealt with the rabbit, neither of us could be near it." because it showed the cynical side of him. But then you contrast it with like "But I wanted them to see how I felt. To have something precious taken from you is never nice. But my parents did that to me, they removed themselves from my life. So I decided to inflict the pain I felt onto others, as they needed to be taught how I felt every day." which makes you want to just hug him cause you felt so bad.
Really good job on this!
-Sankavi ^_^Author's Response: Hi Sankavi, and yeah go Team Blue!
I'm really glad that you liked Tom's POV as I had so much fun writing it! I'm glad that you liked the last line, as I wasn't too sure about it, as it sounded kind of stilited to me, but yay anyway!
I do hope that Tom had wanted to turn out evil, and I hope that it was his circumstances, but I guess we'll never know!
Yeah I kind of wanted to hug him when writing this, which was a little worrying, but I guess it helped show a side of him that we don't often see. I think that's he a very complex person, so I wanted to reflect that, so hopefully it came through!
Thank you for this lovely review, and TEAM BLUE FOR THE WIN! (I get a little too excited in review battles;D) Report Review
Wow, I really like where this is going!
I swear, when the guy first said 'Ms. We . .' I thought he was going to say Ms. Wednesday, not sure why XD
This angle you've taken on Krum is really interesting. I've always wondered what happened to him after DH. Did he ever find a girl? Whatever happened to him? Di he vanish into thing air?
He's obviously done something bad to land in Azkaban, and I want to know what it is!!! It also makes me wonder who exactly would want revenge on Krum and how far will the go? (obviously pretty far)
This first chapter adds alot of suspense and relaly makes me want to know what happens next. Really nice job!
-Sankavi ^_^Author's Response: Thanks, MC. I'm glad you liked it. I always wondered what happened to Krum too. He couldn't go on playing Quidditch forever, right? And I'm really happy you found the first chapter suspenseful. That's definitely what I was aiming for.
Thanks for the review! Report Review
Hi there, I'm Sankavi! I loved this :) Never have I, personally, seen a Harry/Pansy ship, so I thought that was super cool! That added on to the fact that she is also working as Auror is also an idea that I've never seen. Or at least not done well. I really like the descriptions you used and although this was short, it totally gave me a picture in my mind about how harry felt.
Great job on this!
-Sankavi ^_^Author's Response: hi sankavi, how're you going? thanks very much for the review, very much appreciated it and delighted you enjoyed it and found it to be an original concept :) I haven't read that many Harry/Pansy ones, and I couldn't see it happening just "because they fell in love" - I would have to picture it being a bit more lust based than anything else if it were to happen at all, which is how this idea was born lol. Thanks very much, glad you enjoyed it! :) Bobby xx Report Review
you did it again! loved this chapter and can't wait for another!
favorite line: How can I tell him of my secret desire to become a Gryffindor and raise fluffy white puppies on a cozy little farm with Hermione?
-SankaviAuthor's Response: Next one is a Harry/Hermione. Hope you'll enjoy that, too. It won't appear too soon, though. I'm working on some challenges at the moment, so it will be up probably at the end of June. Well, it depends. If I don't have inspiration for those, I won't let the queue open, huh? ;) Report Review
i love this story so far! astorias attidude is hilarious. i've never this kind of take on her character before and i can't wait to read more!
~SankaviAuthor's Response: Thank you! Hilarious? Hum.. you can say that.
And I will ^-^ Report Review
Oh. My. God.
That was amazing! i seriously fell over laughing and it took me foreEVER to read the whole chapter cause i derpin and falling over.
i can't wait to see what other ship parodies you do! oooh, maybe a sirius/oc? because those can get [retty cliche and stuff.
update soon!Author's Response: The next will probably be Dramione or Harry/Hermione. If you're interested, I have a Sirius/OC one, too. You'll find it in my stories as "A very original title".
Thanks for the review.
Ramona Report Review
Poor Vic :'( gosh, it must be hard having to repeat the same story over and over again to people.
i can't wait for the next chapter! will it take place in hogwarts?Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)
The next chapter doesn't take place in Hogwarts, no. I considered it, since Louis is still in school, but I think I've decided against it. Given how much Vic didn't want to talk to her parents about it, I think that she probably would avoid confiding in her kid brother (well, seventh year, but still) until she knew one way or the other.
Thank you for the review! :) Report Review
i love how you portray Lavender in this story :) i always feel like people think she's jsut a blonde bimbo just because of her relationship with ron, but there's just so much mroe to her than that :)
a sheild charm produced by WWW, tricky tricky. gosh, i wish i knew who the werewolf was, but i have no guesses :S
this was a great chapter and can't wait to read the next one! see you in the reveiw section of chapter six!!!Author's Response: I'm really glad you like my portrayal of Lavender. I completely agree about there being a lot more to her than that - I find her to be a fascinating character, personally.
Thank you so much for the review! I'm really glad you're still enjoying the story. :) Report Review
Awww :'( this chappie seems so sad to me for some reason . . .
i realize i have not reveiwed in a long time, but im back! ;D
k, so, teddy and victoire are adorable! im glad you decided not to make them so sappy because i 've seen that in other stories (not ones by you) and im like NO ONE ACTS LIKE THAT IN REAL LIFE?!?!?!?!?!
" . . .Potion or not, I don't think I'll be interested in having sex with you while you're transformed, but other than that, I think we're good."
i love this part, it made me burst out laughing for no reason.
but anywhos, off to reveiw your other chapters, bye !Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm really glad you're continuing to enjoy the story. :) I'm glad that part made you laugh - it made me laugh, too, writing it. :P Report Review
o.O DUN DUN DUN.
okay, so this chapter was VERY action packed. i like it :) but uno question-o: doesn't Victiore technically have some wolfish qualities because of bill? other than that though . . . me likes:) how many more chapters of this do you think you'll update of this before you update CINAS?
Update soon :DAuthor's Response: I don't think she does, no... Bill wasn't actually a werewolf to begin with, and if Teddy doesn't have any wolfish characteristics (and I think that JKR said that he doesn't), Victoire definitely doesn't, you know?
Chapter 4 of this is in the queue now, and then I'll probably update CINAS. :)
Thank you for the review! :) I really appreciate it, and I'm glad you're liking this so much! Report Review
this chapter was kinda sad, but . . . i like where this is going :) and . . . IS THAT SOME SEAMUS/LAVENDER I SPY?!?!?!?!
-ahem- i love van. there's just something about him, that makes him seem super friendly i guess.
-imperio- mmwahahahahah o_O now you HAVE to update :)
Kavi, VANISH!Author's Response: :) Thank you so much! I'm really glad you mentioned Van in particular - he's one of my favorite OCs, and I keep trying to work him into my stories because he's a lot of fun to write.
It's actually not Seamus/Lavender. :( I hope that doesn't disappoint you too much! Seamus and Lavender are very close, but Seamus is married to Parvati. (I actually have another fic I'm working on about their friendship and Lavender's recovery right after the war called "Ghost in the Machine," if you're interested! :) )
I put the next chapter into the queue as soon as this one was validated, so hopefully it'll be up in the next few days! :) Report Review
yay! new story! kind of excited for this one :) haven't read many werewolf stories around here except for wolfsbane by loopyluna so i'm excited to see how this will turn out :) update soon!Author's Response: Oh, I'm so glad you liked it! :) Thank you so much for reviewing. Chapter 2 is in the queue now, so hopefully it'll be up soon! Report Review
AMAZING i tell, just AMAZING. can't wait for the next chappie :)Author's Response: Hehe thanks :) Report Review
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