Hey! Fantastic writing from you, as always, and this really is a brilliant example of bromance. I loved how you've covered the friendship from the beginning, including but not overdoing the differences between Lucy and Scorpius' social groups and the fact that he's not someone people would admit to hanging out with - that was very well done. I loved how they just fell into a familiar and relaxed friendship (based entirely on biscuits.) I'm assuming this story fits into the Starving Artists/Weather for Ducks universe (correct me if I'm wrong) but at this stage the relationship is purely platonic. Overall, this was just a real feel-good friendship story and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thanks for entering the challenge!Author's Response: thank you so much! well, biscuits are a sort of gateway drug into friendship, hehe. and no, actually! it has nothing to do with that universe - actually, I do write a hogwarts-era story for that universe, but Lucy only has cameo appearances and isn't friends with Scorpius at all in that. this is very similar, I know, but a totally different universe ;) thank you so much for reviewing, I really enjoyed writing it! ♥ Report Review
HOW DO YOU WRITE LIKE THIS OH MY GOD.
Seriously though, you've portrayed Remus so perfectly here - the inner workings of his mind, his emotions, everything that makes up his character. And the use of second person is FLAWLESS. Perfect one-shot is perfect. Report Review
Ten out of ten for glorious characterisation! You painted such a good picture of Edie here, and in such a realistic and humorous setting, ideal for developing the friendships between Edie, Lisa and the boys. You've really cemented her character, friendships and her place in life, and I love the little details like how much she hates Witch Weekly, her dislike for her best friend's boyfriend and this line: "It tastes like it always does: a mixture of shame for being twenty-six, a hybrid of unpaid intern and bartender, with no love-life to speak of, and getting wasted at a pub virtually every night--and also the certainty of knowing that I have the best mates in the world." This just sums up everything about her and speaks volumes about what she values in life. Brilliant start, can't wait to see more!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love Edie's relationship with the boys. I think that her loud and raucous behavior would be well-accepted by them. I really appreciate you taking the time to read my story. :) Report Review
Very good story here. Simple but powerful. It seemed to me the story of a war survivor, but you left it ambiguous enough that this could have been anyone, suffering from anything. You've stripped away everything else and left humanity, bare and broken, and that makes this piece so much more poignant. The final two lines were beautiful, particularly "I walked to the edge of the world." Insightful and evocative.Author's Response: Everyone seems to say a war survivor, I honestly never thought it of that way, but when I re-read it, it does seem that way! :p
I wanted it really ambiguous, so people could make their own decisions about who the character was and apparently I succeeded! :p
I'm so glad you liked this piece and thank you so much for reviewing! Report Review
I didn't see that coming.
So, amazing story. I nearly skipped my tutorial this afternoon, I was so engrossed in this story. It's gripping, it's original, it's intense, and it's amazing. And I don't really have any other words except that this is what fanfiction is all about and this was every kind of brilliant in the known universe.
10/10, sorry for not reviewing the other chapters, and you're my hero.Author's Response: considering that I read nearly every single thing of yours, this review means the WORLD to me, it really does. Thank you so much! I am immeasurably happy that you like my story, and no, YOU'RE my hero!
Thanks for reviewing! *squees* Report Review
This is was beautiful! So emotive, so poignant, and perfect imagery throughout. You've brought these characters to life so perfectly and the past and present were perfectly balanced - the start of their relationship contrasted with the bitter pain of his death, her lone journey of grief contrasted with the journey of their relationship. Incredible, breathtaking writing and the purity of emotion is beautiful.Author's Response: Excuse me a moment, I'm blushing so profusely that I think the blood rush is starting to affect my head.
Wow, those are some pretty big compliments, I must say. I wasn't expecting that sort of response when I posted this one-shot. I thought that yes, perhaps it would receive okay feedback, but I never imagined anything like the caliber of your review. Just..wow, thank you so much!
While I've had someone I love very dearly pass, I've never been in love with someone who's died, so this was a little difficult for me to write, mostly because I was afraid that I wouldn't be able to properly convey the emotional turmoil Emmeline was experiencing in the aftermath of Benjy's loss. So it pleases me to know that it struck you the way I intended it to.
Thank you so so so much for your kind words. I don't feel I deserve them, but I certainly appreciate them as well as the time you took to read this. Report Review
Beautiful piece with a strong, poignant ending. You've written the relationship so well, so true to the characters of both men. Loved the map imagery, 10/10.Author's Response: Aw, thanks. Remus and Sirius are definitely my favorite characters to write so it's important to me that (despite it being slash), they remain true to their canon selves. Thank you so much for the review. :) Report Review
I'm pretty slack with reviewing, but I thought I might just drop a line or two to say how much I'm enjoying this already - I tend to avoid Marauder stories, especially those about James and Lily in seventh year, because I never feel like writers can pull off their reconciliation and falling in love. But so far this looks extremely promising - the characterisations are believable, the relationship between them at this point seems just right. I will definitely keep reading (even though I have an assignment I should be writing...) Good job on a great first chapter!Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much for taking the time to review. It's wonderful to hear that you're enjoying the story! :D
It seems like a lot of people avoid Marauders stories, and I completely understand why. They're by far my favourite type of story, but even I get discouraged sometimes! :P I really hope that as you read, you feel like I've done something good with James and Lily's story. It's one that's been stuck in my head (in various iterations) for probably about a decade now.
Holy crap. That was the first time I actually added that up in my head. O_o
Ahem. Anyway, as I was saying, it's a story that means a lot to me, and I've tried to make their reconciliation and falling in love as realistic as possible. I know it's depicted a lot, and usually it's not the most realistic romance...but I hope mine is in SOME small way. And I would appreciate if there's any feedback that you have--any points where it feels unrealistic or off. :)
I'm glad that so far, it seems good to you! I hope you keep reading, and I'd love to hear your thoughts as you do. No pressure to review every chapter or write big long reviews, though!
Thanks again! Report Review
I've never read your work before, but after this I'll definitely make a point of seeking it out. Your attention to detail is second to none and your characterisations perfect. A brilliant story, evoking pity for such a loathsome character. 10/10, well done indeed :)Author's Response: Hi there! Well, thanks for taking the time to read and review despite not having come across my writing before :) Your comments are so kind, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this! Please do feel free to nose around my author's page ;)
Athene xoxo Report Review
It's been a long time since a piece of writing truly left me speechless. Take the threadbare nature of this review as a compliment.
Beautiful. Stunning. Heartbreaking. And so incredibly real.
This is the best writing I think I've ever seen on this site.Author's Response: Now I'm the one who is speechless!
How am I supposed to answer to such a wonderful review?
OK, I'll try:
Thank you so much!
I'm very glad that you liked the story and that it had some effect on you... It means that I accomplished my goal, to evoke some feelings to the reader! This is why we write after all, isn't it? :)
Most of all, I think I'm flattered that you called it real. If anything, I try to be as honest as possible when I write. :)
Thank you for taking the time to read and thank you so much for reviewing, it's reviews like this one that keep me going! :) :)
so many feelings.
You wrote this beautifully, it was such a perfect moment and I enjoyed the brief foray into James' point of view. I apologise for having not reviewed recently, but I have been reading and enjoying it just as much as always :) Keep up the amazing work!Author's Response: Feelings are the best. :D I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter! Quite honestly, it's probably one of the fluffiest bits in any of the books (that I can think of -- and, of course, I've not written it all), so I guess it was one of those 'go big or go home' moments! :P
PLEASE don't feel the need to apologize for not reviewing! ♥ Honestly, the fact that you told me that you'd still been reading this put the biggest grin on my face. I don't want people to ever feel like reviews are required, because first and foremost, I seek to give people a good story. And if you're still reading, it makes me feel like I've accomplished that goal. So thank you, rather, for being so loyal and lovely to me.
Thank you so much for taking the time to review this -- it really, really made my day to see you'd dropped back by! Take your time getting to future chapters, of course. No rush! Report Review
I want to see more Frodo Baggins.
Other than that, it was pure perfection. I want to see this turned into a movie.
My reviews lack substance. Apologies.Author's Response: If you've ever seen the movie Green Street Hooligans, Elijah Wood becomes a West Ham hooligan, so that's what I was referencing with th Frodo Baggins bit.
Thanks for aother review! Report Review
Ten points for originality. This was actually a lot of fun to read, not least because I don't think I've seen anything like it before. A fangirl meeting Rose Weasley and expecting her to be exactly like all the fanfictions? Your characterisations of Rose and said fangirl were good, and I really did enjoy the interaction. That fangirl would probably be me. I ship Rose/Scorpius. Thanks for the entry, and apologies for taking so long to review!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thank you so much for reviewing :) Report Review
Super Sexy Power Ranger Granger. Wow. I nearly died. And that's just the beginning of the story. I have a feeling I'm going to enjoy this one.
Oh god. Cedric Diggory. Twilight references. Win ALL the awards!
Are you trying to kill me?
Orbs. Quidditch toned abs. This is parody gold. I'm afraid all you're going to get from this review are regurgitated plot points and expressions of how I died, but take that to mean I'm impressed. Because I am.
"Baby, I never even tried to be in character."
Speaking of characters, Bartholomew Percival Castlerock IV has got to be the best one I've heard of in my life. I like him already. He looks like he could be fun.
Apologies for taking so long to review this one, and thanks for entering the challenge!Author's Response: Thanks a lot for th review, and thanks for starting this awesome challenge!
This was a really fun story to write, and I'm glad to hear you enjoyed reading it! Report Review
Oooh, risky business! Taking on the canon! Ten points to you for sheer audacity, though I must admit you made it work. You made the ship awkward and weird and not quite right, and that is a major feat because Ron/Hermione is my OTP within the Potterverse. Nice use of the narrators. A narrator narrating a narrator? Narratorception!
Apologies for taking so long to review, and thanks for the entry!Author's Response: You are welcome!
I really loved doing this as to be quite honest I never quite got what she saw in him.
Maybe it's like "The Simpsons". you know what I mean.
Love Pepper Report Review
I'm not sure what else to say in response. But your hatred for the ship certainly shines bright in this entry, which is of course what the challenge is about. You've covered a lot of the awful cliches (why is Draco incapable of doing anything else to his face besides sneering? Why do the Head Boy and Head Girl have to share a dorm?) and it was, of course, brilliantly contemptuous towards the Dramione ship. Good effort :)Author's Response: Oh. Well I probably did go a bit overboard on my hatred, but when I started I just wanted to cover every stupid cliche and my hate for them. I hope this effort was enough. :) Report Review
Apologies for taking so long to review this story, but thanks for the entry! Brilliant idea, I especially loved the twist with Fred and George at the end - very believable and you characterised them well. I haven't read a lot of Draco/Ginny but I imagine it's quite similar to the dreaded Dramione. At any rate, you did an excellent job of parodying it. Burning hair. I died. Great work!Author's Response: no worries :) I'm just sorry I didn't respond sooner! Thank you so much for this :) Honestly I haven't read too much of the ship either, its just always struck me as unrealistic and I'm not quite sure why. anyhow, thanks again for the lovely review :D
~Ria Report Review
Brilliant story! I loved the originality, and you included all the trademark Dramione horrors. Angsty Harry, a Yule Ball, sexy Draco, sulky Ron...and I loved "Canonius Maximus." Best spell ever. A very enjoyable and funny story, and once again, awesome originality. Fantastic.
Thanks for entering, apologies for taking so long to review!Author's Response: Thanks! I really enjoyed writing this, so thanks so much for posting the challenge!
Canonius maximus.. lol.. I thought it was just lame enough to work :p I'm so glad you liked it, and have fun reading the others! Report Review
Are you physically capable of writing anything less than perfect?
I love this so much. Like I love everything you write. I'm such a fangirl.Author's Response: N'awww you're ever so nice :D Thank you so much. You are both mega and zoomified and possibly also mega zoomified (treasure that accolade. It is not bestowed on many). ♥ Report Review
This was such a beautiful piece. It summed up everything I've ever thought of Snape and Lily's friendship and was wonderfully and delicately written. Loved the sun motif, very well done :)Author's Response: Thank you ♥ Glad you liked it and thanks so much for the review! :) Report Review
That is all.
Well, actually, that's not all because I made this challenge and I probably have an obligation to review your entry properly rather than the keyboard equivalent of an open-mouth gape.
This was brilliant. You incorporated all the horrible cliches of a spectacularly bad Dramione (the mask! the mudblood! angry Hermione! ORBS!) but somehow managed to sandwich that within the gloriously matter-of-fact humour I've come to associate with your stuff.
Please tell me that the "tricksy" Nargles was a reference to Gollum. Tricksy Hobbitses? Yes? No?
And the Twilight parody! It's like a parody within a parody! PARODYCEPTION.
And the daydream potion? That was good. That was very good. And a nice way to incorporate your OTP. Ten points for cleverness.
I don't know what the protocol is for discussing placings in reviews before anyone else has submitted their entry, but it's looking good, I assure you. Lookin' reeeal good.
Thanks for the entry, this made my morning.Author's Response: Don't worry; the keyboard equivalent of an open-mouth gape is basically how I write these days, haha.
ORBS! The best word in the Dramione canon. Not that, like, there is a canon. But you know.
TRICKSY HOBBITSES. Yes indeed! :D
PARODYCEPTION homg we are truly upon the same level. -ception is my favourite suffix in the entire English language these days not that it's really a word or anything but.
Thanks so much for reviewing! :D ♥ Report Review
Another brilliant chapter, as always, and a definite change in tone, especially towards the end. Sirius' were actually chilling, and you've really captured the atmosphere of the beginning of the war. Really looking forward to the next chapters, keep up the great work! (Though I don't really need to tell you that :P)Author's Response: This story definitely shifts in tone towards the latter part of this book, and maintains that sort of more ominous feel for the next two -- that's my hope, anyway. :) I'm so glad you think it worked, though, because I've never had to write anything dark long-term and I'd be lying if I said I wasn't a bit apprehensive!
As always, thank you so much for reviewing -- it just means a lot to me that you return for each chapter. :) You're amazing! ♥ Report Review
I love you for writing this.
I don't think I've ever actually read a story with an overweight OC and it's so refreshing and realistic and relatable and gah. I'm a bit on the chunky side myself, so I can so relate to this. And the 'memory of the friendship I'd had once upon a time.' I've been there. So thank you heaps for writing this and I really look forward to reading more, this is the kind of story I wish I could write myself, and you have restored my faith in fanfiction.Author's Response: Oh my gosh, this review has me blushing like crazy. You are just too nice. I am seriously, like, dying. Also, I just realized who you are (Southern Cross?!) and I squeed a bit. I wrote Gus cause I got a bit bored with the usual suspects, and I really didn't know if anyone would like her, but the positive reviews I've gotten have kept me going! Chapter three in the queue, chapter four is in the works and I think I'll be sticking with this for a while, so I hope I see you back! Thank you thank you thank you, this reviews was just e :) Report Review
A really nice one shot you have here! I love the insights into the relationship, and how you show things aren't always 'happily ever after.' A sweet, realistic resolution, and you've captured Ginny's character and thought process well :)Author's Response: I'm really, really happy you liked it! I loved writing this one-shot because for once I felt like I was being real, and honest with a real relationship, because we have flaws, but I never show that, so this story was something to show that.
Thanks for the review,
Lizzie Report Review
I loved this chapter, and I would agree with you that it's my favourite as well. This is exactly why I think so highly of your work - it felt incredibly real, incredibly relatable, and especially in that exchange with Severus it felt like Beth's thoughts were my own. Amazing chapter and as always I look forward to the update :)Author's Response: This completely made my day to wake up to! :) The past few chapters, while rather necessary to the plot, have been a bit lacking in action and Severus both, and I was really excited to post this one because I knew that it was so different.
I am so glad the emotions and dialogue are translating well, though -- I feel that used to be my absolute worst thing, writing-wise, was making everything believable. Of course, I also like to think I've gotten better since then. :P But you have reassured me beyond belief!
Thank you for being such a loyal and supportive reviewer -- it just really does mean a lot to me to see that you keep coming back, and I can't ever tell you enough! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story! :3 Report Review
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