Oooh, tension. =) I don't hate you! I just want you to update faster. Lovely chapter, lovely story. Charisma rocks!
DarcyAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! You don't hate me! Oh my gosh, that makes me fell better - most were just annoyed with his reaction (strangely :P).
I will update soon, I'm glad that you liked this chapter. Report Review
Haha, my favorite part was when Ryke said "Lock her up somewhere, her voice is annoying." Nice job, sorry for not reviewing sooner...I was on vacation and they didn't have wifi. -_- Anyway, brilliant chapter! It didn't have any Albus in it...but I still liked it.Author's Response: Thanks very much. I'm glad you liked it. Don't worry, Al and Scorpius will be back next chapter. :D Report Review
Aww cute last sentence. ^_^ I love the whole 'Sirius' POV' thing. It really rocks. And it shows a totally new side of the story. I can't wait to watch him mature and all that fun stuff. Great chapter!
DarcyAuthor's Response: Thanks. I'm really glad you're liking his POV, since it's so hard to write. Thanks again! Report Review
Hm, I really liked that last line about the differences between law and justice. That was good writing. You portrayed Fleur's agony incredibly well, and I almost felt it with her. Amazing job, as always, and I'm thrilled that there's going to be a third!
DarcyAuthor's Response: Thanks so much. Hopefully it will only get better. We're moving closer to the big final fight. Report Review
No review can be worthy of this chapter. Therefore I shall say one word. AWED. O.O
Rating: Too high to count. O.O
DarcyAuthor's Response: Ahh! You just made my whole week by saying that. Thank you so much!! :D Report Review
I have a love-hate relationship with this chapter. It made me laugh, get depressed, sigh (for more then one reason) and stomp my feet in anger. Literally, I did that.
Al is the cutest thing ever! I love him and Noah. They are officially my favorite pairing from this story. And yes, I'm angry about the Rose/Scorpius thing. -_-
Your portrayal of Missy after she realized she was in love with James, was very realistic, so good job! *gives you a thumbs up*
I love Noah. So much. She reminds me of me, and therefore is amazing! (Not that I'm amazing, but just that she is, because I can relate. Get it?) Although, I thankfully don't know anyone half as crazy as the 'Freak Circus'...
My least favorite.Hmm...James. Because he went AWOL for this chapter. -_- Not cool. I'll love him again when he comes back.
Oh and my prediction for the next chapter is...*drumroll* Pink flying hippos are going to attack Hogwarts and the Freak Circus is going to have to fend them off. Then James and Missy are going to end up back to back fighting and James' new girlfriend is going to get kicked in the head by a hippo. After that Dom is accidentally going to kiss the Giant Squid who is going to turn into Apollo, because that's where he's been this whole time. (He turned himself into the Giant Squid because he was so depressed.) Noah is going to get dragged up to the roof and Al is going to save her with his incredible flying skills. They will live happily ever after. And then James and Missy are going to tell all their secrets and then at the end of the chapter the pink flying hippos will disappear miraculously, leaving everyone wondering why they were there and who sent them. I don't know what will happen to everyone else.
Sorry about my ridiculously long review. Hope it doesn't bore you to tears. =D
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He is kinda like Bagheera isn't he? I thinks that's very fitting. So let me get this straight: The evil lady has the centaurions, the Head Auror and 'Saviour of the wizard world' Harry Potter, is down, and Scorpius and Al are practically going off to their doom, right? Well, the next chapter should be verrry interesting. =)
DarcyAuthor's Response: Yeah, that about sums it up. Hopefully the next chapter will not disappoint. It's pretty long. :P Report Review
Wow that picture at the end is EPIC! I love it! Ok, so here's my favorite quote from the chapter:
'I mean, I thought I was being pretty clear with him, but since I usually turn into a puddle of goo whenever he’s around, I might not have spoken English.'
And my favorite scene was twenty questions with Al. XD I loved it so much! Ariadne is awesome, and I love how she calls them all made up names. It rocks. =)
Anyways, fantastic chapter.
Darcy Report Review
Haha, I love the intense action at the same time as the hysterical comedy. It's a perfect balance. Cool chapter, I'm liked how Scorpius called Rose his wife, that was cute. One thing I love about this is that Al is so different then his typical characterization. It's awesome!
DarcyAuthor's Response: I like stories where the next gen kids are a little bit different. Like in Whimsical Divas stories.
Thanks very much for the review. :) Report Review
That was a really good chapter, I was impressed. I liked the humor, relationships, and you put loads of emotion in. Good job! Rose is currently being obnoxious and needs to get over herself and get back to Scorpius. -_- I'm super excited to learn about how James got the info out of Lysander, so I can't wait until you bring that in.
DarcyAuthor's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I'm so glad that you enjoyed this chapter. I worked hard with this one (major writers block :D), so it's nice to know that you like it.
Rose is very strong minded, it wasn't originally in the story plan, but I think that in this story, it was a very-like-her thing to do or say, so it went in.
Thanks again, I will update soon. XD Report Review
I can so see that happening. Wow, I loved this chapter, it made me laugh. The Malfoy's were probably thinking, 'What the heck is this?' Haha, I loved it!
DarcyAuthor's Response: Yeah if I were the Malfoys I'd be pretty scared haha. I'm so so happy to hear that you loved it! Thanks so much for letting me know your thoughts :D Report Review
Interesting. Very interesting. I like it! It's cool that you're doing Sirius's perspective on the whole thing, although I hope he matures. He's incredibly shallow.
I like Ivy, as always, and how you show her character from Sirius's point of view. It's very cool. Seriously. Or maybe Siriusly. =D
How long are you going to make this one?
DarcyAuthor's Response: Shallow, oh yes. Definitely shallow. You know he's gonna change though. He can't be that shallow with Ivy.
This one will probably be around...30ish chapters? Like Nobody Sees Me Wishing.
Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
*sniff* I tried not to cry.it didn't work. Wow, you know how to write a story. So, first of all, I suppose that does work, because I don't know if Sirius would let her her break up with him in the first place! It's ridiculously sad, but it's so fitting that I'll just deal with it and be depressed for the next week. Hope you're happy. -_-
CONGRATULATIONS! You finished a story!! And it was amazing!! You are going to write more stories, right? Because you need to. Some stories where the main character's don't die. Anyway, that was wonderful, amazing, and one of the best I've ever read on this site. My favorite chapter was the one where Sirius asks her to dance for the first time. It's just, really amazing. AMAZING. That is how I will forever think of you.
So, to conclude and summarize...
This story = AMAZING
You = AMAZING
Your writing = AMAZING
This Epilogue = Not so amazing, but fitting
Everything else = PHENOMENAL
Rating: Off the charts, with so many zeroes that I can't put them all here!
Author's Response: Hi Darcy! Thanks for reviewing again!
Yes, sorry about that. I knew that there would be some people who cried in this chapter, but it couldn't be avoided. Unfortunately, as you recognise, having them break up just wouldn't have worked as well for the story, not to mention the problems I would then have with canon (where WAS she when the Order re-formed?). I hope you weren't really depressed for the past week, though, that would be awful. :(
I smiled a bit at your request that I write some more stories where the main character doesn't die ... I'll see what I can do for you. First, though, I'll be loading up a series of one-shots based on the HTM universe so that's the next thing that will appear on my author page, and in the meantime I'll see if I can't find some inspiration somewhere.
And thank you so much for saying such lovely things about me and my story! That really does make my day. *beams* I'm so pleased you liked it so much, that's fantastic, especially since this is the first time I've attempted a story this long.
thanks again, Mel Report Review
Congratulations on finishing! It was a very nice ending, in my opinion. You wrapped it up well, and put some humor in too. Great job on the story, and I can't wait to read more from you in the future.
DarcyAuthor's Response: thanks! it always feels good to know that a story is fully conmpleted. makes me feel complete :) really happy to know that you like my story and i hope to see you on some of my other fics :)
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Cliffhanger! But isn't every one of your chapters a cliffhanger somehow? Have I ever told you how much I love Al's puns? They make my day every single time I read one of them. XD I really liked this chapter, because of the new character intro's and James and Fred, even though I prefer when they're nicer, it worked.
DarcyAuthor's Response: James and Fred are nice, they're just immature. :P I'm trying to think up some good puns for later on in the story so there should be more to come. :) Report Review
I might have to not read the epilogue. This is just the perfect ending. Of course you know I will read the epilogue anyway, but I like this the best. =) Seeing as there is still an epilogue I'll save the capitol letters and exclamation points for that. You'll be getting plenty, don't worry. Lovely final chapter, lovely story, and I'm sad to see it end.
10/10 for the final time,
DarcyAuthor's Response: Hi Darcy! Thanks for the review!
You know, if this wasn't a fanfic then this would have been the last chapter, because the epilogue is only there so I can explain Laura's absence from canon. *grins* So, I guess I'm saying that I'd understand if you chose not to read on. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it, though -there was a lot of story to get through and it's lovely that people thought enough of it to read all the way through. *beams*
cheers, Mel Report Review
The next chapter is the last one!? Aw, I'm going to miss this story. I really hope Laura just breaks up with Sirius, and doesn't die. Really really really. Of course I'll understand either way, and I'll probably shed a couple tears and then read something angsty to get over it. Anyways, I like that last part from her mom. Mom's are so perceptive like that. =D The graduation speech wasn't all that bad, actually, just so you know. And I liked the whole awards giving out thing. It worked very well. Okay, that's really enough of my clipped sentences and long review, so I'll just give you a 10 and move on with it.
PS: I hope you like long reviews, because if the next chapter is the last, then my review is going to be...um...very long. With lots of exclamation points. =)Author's Response: Hi Darcy! Thanks for reviewing again :D
Yes, next chapter is the last one. Aside from the epilogue, so there will be 2 more updates. So, you can hold off on the long review (which I love, by the way) till the epilogue if you like.
I'm glad you liked the graduation speech, I just felt like it was about a paragraph too short. Then again, Laura's comment about it being short and sharp meant that it didn't feel so bad so I was happy to post it. But I'm probably rambling. I do that :)
cheers, Mel Report Review
I'd rant, but I actually have been feeling angsty lately, so this totally matched my mood. I'm not thrilled with Artemis though. -_-
Favorite quotes? Oh, those are.
And…the guilt floods in. Nice to see you again, guilt. How have you been? Busy? I thought so.
Stupid heart. Shut up and keep beating! No one asked you, anyway!
Pretty amazing. Yep. Okay, I'm sorry for this lame review. I promise to be a better reviewer next time. =)
Darcy Report Review
Awww, Lily and James! I almost like squealed at the part where James went to the Evans'. It was adorable! And POOR SIRIUS! He is so not going to take this well...Sami, sami, sami.*sigh* How do you manage to make me feel depressed yet giddy at the same time? I just can't figure it out...
DarcyAuthor's Response: Hi Darcy! Thanks for another great review!
I'm glad you enjoyed the James and Lily scene, I feel like I've been neglecting them a bit so I figured they should be included a bit more in this chapter. As for Sirius...he knows something is wrong and I think he anticipation for him will only make it worse, unfortunately :(
This chapter was meant to go back and worth a bit between emotion, just to show that while things can be good (James and Lily for examply) there is still so much going on with the war and such, and vice versa.
I'm thrilled you liked the chapter and thank you again for the great review! Report Review
Oooh, the suspense builds.
So, I'm sorry I didn't review on the last chapter, but I seriously, thought I did...and then apparently I didn't. O.o Yeah. The last chapter was phenomenal. This one, I liked it, but not so much as the one before. Don't take that the wrong way though, because the writing for this chapter was spot on, it's just the whole "Sami leaving Sirius for his own good" thing always gets under my skin. He's a big boy. He can take care of himself. =D So, anyways I'll just say that this was brilliant as always and 10/10 as always and I really need to come up with some new ways of praising your writing...XD
DarcyAuthor's Response: Hey Darcy! Great hearing from you again, thank you for reviewing!
First off, I'm really glad you enjoyed the last chapter, ecstatic actually! So thank you! That being said, I can totally understand why you would like this one less. After all, I'm just as frustrated with Sami. I really enjoy writing her character, but she definitely has that hero complex going and it can be a bit tiring. However, that is one of her flaws, and that was something I tried to make sure I included with all the characters.
I'm glad you enjoyed the writing in this chapter though, I'm always happy to know that that is going well, so thank you so much! I hope you enjoy the next chapter, I just posted it! Thanks again! Report Review
I love this chapter! It's hysterical! What I've noticed is that you have successfully managed to bring nearly every character from the ENDLESS line of Potter-Weasley's in the next generation. Good job! I love Al's 'slip-ups' and Scorpius' constant obliviousness. It kind of rocks. =D Alright, I'm done boring you with my review that basically involves me gushing about how much I love your stories...yeah. I'm really done now.
DarcyAuthor's Response: James and Fred Weasley will turn up pretty soon. They won't be in this much but they will make an appearance.
There will be more of Al's hints as well but Scorp isn't going to catch on too quickly unfortunately :P
Thanks very much for the review. :D Report Review
Haha, lovely chapter. I really liked several lines. This one: "It means sudden and painful death in the form of losing excessive amounts of house points and serving multiple detentions. With Filch (he's got to be at least a hundred and fifty by now. We think he's alive just by pure spite or something, at this point)."
And this one: "Yes I do give myself prizes when I do good deeds like speaking clearly and properly. How else am I supposed to improve upon my public speaking and vocabulary?"
I laughed out loud. That was a very fun chapter and I love all the Al/Mara-ness of it. Brilliant job and keep it up!
DarcyAuthor's Response: I cheered a little when I saw that you put your favorite quotes, not going to lie. I love hearing what you guys liked best. I'm so glad you liked the chapter. Oh yes so much Al/Mara.
Thanks for the review!
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Ooh, unexpected twist. Rose is pregnant! Well done, I really am interested in the Centurions. How you manage to come up with brand new species and make it realistic I shall never know. Anyway, brilliant chapter, I loved the ending and the suspense of what Rose and Scorpius saw. Btw is this story going to have more of them in it? 10/10!
DarcyAuthor's Response: Yeah. R+S are a big part of this story. Rose will get alot more page time, especially later on.
Thanks very much. :D Report Review
Sweet chapter, and just so you know, if you kill off Laura, I may have to find you and make you rewrite this whole thing. Just saying. XD Anyways, I did enjoy this a lot and what Sirius said at the end was very sweet. Snape is annoying, but what else is new? Only a few chapters left! =O
DarcyAuthor's Response: Hi Darcy! Thanks for the review!
You know, I've actually written both endings - the one where they just break up, and the one where she dies - and, while I'm not telling you which one I've decided on, I hope you understand the decision when you get to it. I do admit though that there are a number of people who feel the same way you do so, if I do go down that path, I may need to join Witness Protection. *grins*
Thanks again, Mel Report Review
I don't have much time so this has to be short, but I adored this chapter. It was sweet, dramatic and James proposed! =D Lovely job, 10/10.
DarcyAuthor's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed all of my craziness in this chapter. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
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