It sounds feasible. It has the possibility of being either a love triangle, a tragedy, or even a comedy(maybe a little dark comedy). Update soon.Author's Response: Thank you! :)
I've never written an OC, I've always written one-shots before (and have never posted any) so I was pretty nervous.
Thank you for reviewing, my next chapter is waiting for validation :)
~ Gemma x
i see you stayed close to canon with the story so far, or at least are planning to bridge your story from canon. I am interested in what is happening between Harry and Ginny.Author's Response:
Yes I'm trying to keep quite canon, although I think my characters and plots go a bit astray a bit later in my story! ;) Thank you for leaving a review, I hope your enjoying reading.
~ Gemma x
Good Start, but a formatting note. When writing dialogue, each person's dialogue should be a seperate paragraph. You shouldn't mix people's dialogue in the same paragraph.Author's Response: Thanks for the tip. In the second chapter, I have put the dialogue's in different paragraphs. Report Review
Hmmm! We now have background in Harry and Ginny's relationship. Which seemed to amount to not much difference from what we have read already. Maybe that is the thing about this chapter that bothered, or annoyed me; they sat down for one evening to talk about their relationship and where it is going. At the end of the meeting, they decide to divorce. Doesn't sound like either one really cared that much, if it was that easy to throw away. Even dysfunctional and abuse relationships take more than one night.
The only thing I gathered from this chapter is that Ginny can now futher her relationship with Draco with a free conscious, like she did before with the Quidditch player.
She also doesn't love Lily that she was willing to negotiate her away like that.
Harry is a real milktoast to let his wife walk away like he did. He was upset at himself when he read Draco's letters. No jealousy there, but was there love.
I am curious now that I have put this much time reading this story how it will end. As far as the characters, I couldn't care less about them. They are all too distant and narcissitic for my liking. Each wants what they individually want, but gets jealous when the other over shadows them. Report Review
Interesting sing along! Do you also sing "Hey, what can I say" by Zeppelin. I liked it, but it needed beta-ed or double checked for word usage. Everything was spelled right, but the word seemed to be misused.Author's Response: I know I really need to find one, one of these days. I sukinda suck balls at writing Report Review
Funny story! I liked the title.Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked it. Report Review
A little excessive there Ginny, but believable if we take into account her fiery temper that her brothers say she has. Good job.Author's Response: Thank you! I thought that an excessively fiery temper would be more fun to write about! Report Review
Short chapters, mate. I think it is Ginny in the forest.Author's Response: sorry, i know i have short chapters, but--school and stuff :P Nice guess ;) Report Review
The first eyebrow raising thing in this chapter was the picture of Ginny. There was slit in her dress that revealed the half moon freckle. As a freckled individual that must be rather large freckle to be scene in a picture. Or it is an extremely close up view of Ginny's inner thighs.
Somehow seeing Draco as a martyr in the fic is a little difficult. He had provoked Harry in front of Dean. Did he actually expect nothing to become of it.
So how much longer before Harry gets nasty with Ginny and pulls all security and shuts her out of all access to bank accounts. Or is infidelity and abandonment not a justified reason in England. Report Review
The story isn't bad, but the characters and actions seemed a little robotic. Within a sentence or two, a character would go from sobbing to being happy, or extremely angry to calm. Report Review
Hello, I thought i would drop a review on you. I am intrigued with the story so far. It has a very real feel to it. I am curious about some of the things that was "said" in the past few chapters.
Ginny stated that she doesn't want to be in the public eye, and yet she goes to these big openings for the Quidditch museum. She also had lamented about not be a Quidditch star anymore in previous chapters.
She had told harry that she gave her approval for him to run for Minister. Yet, in previous chapters it was said or inferred that he never asked her, and she was forced into this life.
She also is trying to uphold this perfect life of theirs to her friends. Even though she was miserable.
She complains about harry never being around, and yet she has barred him from their bedroom and she has shoved him away on multiple occasions. She seems to hate him, or just bored with him. After all, she is the one with others in her life. Her only justification for fidelity is because of duty of a wife.
I am curious if she will be angry at Malfoy for implying that he had shagged her in front of others beside Harry Report Review
Is Harry jealous or has he completed a lot of work at the Peace conference and he doesn't need to be at the Ministry as much.
Well, it looks as if Ginny has made up her mind. As the saying goes; be careful what you wish for, you might just get it. Report Review
Well it looks like ginny has definitly made up her mind. It appears that she is going through a mid life crisis and wants something special in her life again. Harry has become a workaholic and doesn't care for her at all. (At least in her mind) Or is it that she wants to hurt him. Report Review
This was an interesting chapter as Al's not-a-relationship relationship is developing with Raliegh. It seems that everyone believes that Ginny and Draco are having an affair. Report Review
I have been reading this story, but not reviewing with each chapter. I must say that I am sorry. I just started reading it yesterday and read through all the chapters in a sitting. I have enjoyed this story. It is original in both storyline and the way it is being presented.
I have noticed that you Muggle-ized the characters so they are not using robes. There have been other minor changes from canon, but none that are detracting from the story.
The one thing that I found extremely interesting was Draco being in charge of the Department of Mysteries. There is forgiveness, but to allow a former Death Eater into a place with that high of security. That would be equivalent to putting a mobster in WPA in charge of the FBI.
The characterizations of Harry and Ginny are not what i had imagined from the books. Harry seems too much of a workaholic. That seems more like a Hermione thing, unless he is actually involved in something groundbreaking for the magical world. Ginny's characterization has left me wondering if it wouldn't be better if she would divorce Harry and leave the kids. She loves them, but she has made it known that they are her second priority after work. In many ways she is as bad or worse than Harry. Most partners of high level politicians give up their working jobs and only do charity work. There is a reason for that!
A few chapters ago, I was sure that Ginny and Draco had moved to an actual affair. Now, I am not sure. I guess we will wait for the next chapter. I am assuming that the gallery owner is someone of significance, like Astoria Malfoy or possibly Draco. Report Review
This story has Angst with some to spare. I usual don't like stories like this but I like what you have done so far.Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I hope you decide to like it:) Report Review
A Ginny/Seamus ship is more likely than the Ginny/Draco ones that I have seen. I could even see it being a relationship of convienence for Ginny. It would prove that she wasn't with Harry anymore and would deflect the questions elsewhere. It could have developed into something more over time.Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the Ginny/Seamus, a lot of people find it impossible. :) Report Review
This sounds so good! Report Review
I liked it. It had some humor in it with "operation Harry and Ginny". Hope you can keep getting ideas for future chapters. Keep up the good work.Author's Response: Thanks! I am glad to you found it to your taste, and I do have ideas for some future chapters, so be sure to check back. Report Review
Now the reason why she hates him...
It isn't Fred's death, so what could it be.
Good chapter, but short.Author's Response: The next chapter is up for verification, but i'm not sure how long it will take because the staff take a break for christmas. i'm starting to make my chapters longer, i know they're very short. thank you for reviewing :) Report Review
Cool Cliffy! The plot is really interesting. I suppose Hermione will help Ron figure all of this out. Report Review
Good chapter, I liked the tension between Ginny and Luna. It should also be interesting to see how Ginny will react to the story. Report Review
A very interesting start! I am hooked to find out what the project is that Harry has to complete.Author's Response: Thanks, hope you enjoy the rest of it. I've posted the next chapter but it says 5 days before posting. Report Review
A curious twist on the final conflict. I like the fact that the Ministry is trying to proclaim Harry dead to get his money. It makes things more interesting.Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I think greed always throws an interesting twist into things.
Hello, I just wanted to leave a review. As I have been reading this fic, I was getting the strong impression that Harry/Bolton had been written out of the story. I remember from an earlier chapter that Harry told Draco to watch out for Ginny and support her. He thought it was too dangerous for him to do that right now.
I am having a hard time understanding his motivation for that action. If danger was lurking for Ginny specifically, then wouldn't she be safer with Harry/Bolton around. If he is in disguise, then he shouldn't be drawing any "potter" danger to her. He could have stepped in at anytime and helped to support her.
Another thing that has been bothering me is why or how does Draco know who he is, and Ron and Hermione are clueless. (or they seem to be clueless) Shouldn't he have learned that they could be trusted?
Did Draco guess who he actually was or did Harry tell him. If Draco could guess, then why hasn't anyone else. If Harry told him, then WHY? what has Draco done to earn more trust than Ron, Hermione, and Ginny.Author's Response: First off, I'd like to thank you for the review. I really do appreciate it! :) Now let me try to clear a few things up for you.
Ginny wasn't in any danger. Harry told Draco to have Ginny fall in love with him (Draco) so she could move on and be happy. Harry's plan isn't involved around him coming back into any of the lives he left behind since everyone thought he was dead - something else he had planned on his own accord.
You have to understand that Harry isn't around Ron or Hermione. The only time they have seen him is at the conference. They didn't talk with him though, except Hermione at the end. And if you noticed at the end of the conference, when it was just Bolton and Hermione alone in the Great Hall, he called her Hermione when they've never been introduced. So she knows that there's something going on. Now, whether Harry did that on purpose, or just accidentally slipped up, we will have to see. Later chapters cover this, I guarantee it. I don't want to give too much away and ruin what'll happen in later chapters.
Now, the case about Draco finding out about Harry. Again, I don't want to give away part of the story because this part will end up coming out near the end of the story. BUT Draco hadn't done anything to earn more trust than Ron, Hermione, and Ginny. It's more of the fact that Draco had his guesses that Bolton was actually Harry. He decided to play upon it and confront Harry. It was Harry you confessed to what was really going on because it was vital that his secret stay under cover. Although, if you remember, Draco wanted to tell Ginny and everyone when he confronted Harry about it, but Harry told him he couldn't.
Hopefully that clears a few things up! If you have any more questions or anything, feel free to ask, it's no problem! :)
Thank you again for the review! I really do appreciate it! :) Report Review
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