Great job, as always! I like how you kept the tension high between Harry/Ron and Draco. Hermione seems to hav eaccepted him, which I guess is her choice. Keep up the good work!
10/10Author's Response: Thank you for your encouraging words! In my story Hermione is trying to be a liaison between Muggle-born and Pure bloods as the same as a liaison between house-elves and wizards. Report Review
I felt the magic...haha, very nice job! Harry/Luna fics are always interesting, and you did not disappoint!
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Nice job! Very light and relaxing, the rainy day had a nice effect. Poor Teddy, I can remember the time I tried to fly. Didn't go too well either.
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This chapter is probably one of your best so far! You've got a way of keeping me interested..I think a little more Harry/Ginny romance would do you well, but hey, it's your story. Nice work!
10/10Author's Response: Thank you again, hpffisawesome for your honest review! Many good authors wrote about Harry Ginny Romance, so I feel like awkward to describe about it, but I'll try in the recent future. Report Review
Great chapter! Looks like we're starting to get somewhere. Just a couple errors I spotted:
"Your girlfriend is the most cleverest girl in Hogwarts, Said Anthony --- "most cleverest" is a double positive. Remove "most" to correct it.
No, thank you. We are on duties, said Harry. --- "duties" should be duty. Just doesn't sound right your way.
There are probably a few more, but I just wanted to list a couple. Keep up the good work!Author's Response: Thank you again, hpffisawesome! I missed to check sentences you spotted. I'll rewrite those parts, it will take more days to be updated though. Report Review
Another great chapter! Keep up the good work! Feels like you are still trying to set the setting...I'm interested to see where you take it.
10/10Author's Response: I like the image of Harry at work in Auror Headquarters. I wish J.K. Rowling would write details about Harry's career. Thank you for your words of encouragement! Report Review
Great chapter! "Harry felt like a gleam of light in the distance turned into bright sunshine," ; that's my favorite quote yet. Very creative.
10/10Author's Response: I love modest Harry, his awkwardness. I would like to describe his character like that. His magic is very powerful , but he always behave discreetly, I think. Report Review
Harsh...well written though! Update soon! Very soon!
10/10Author's Response: Yay two reviews :) I have the next chapter already submitted it should be up in a day or so. I have several chapters already written for this story. Report Review
You've got me hooked! I'm curious to see where you go from here. I like the POV changes, keeps things varied and interesting.
10/10Author's Response: Well thank you :) Report Review
The huge paragraphs (in my opinion, of course) make it a little difficult to read. Breaking them up might fix that problem. But otherwise, great start!
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Very interesting start...this is the first "founders" story I've read, so however you write this will probably stick with me for life, no pressure :)
10/10Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try and keep it up to date, but I'm a huge procrastinator so... :/ Haha, but it's nice to know someone's interested! Report Review
Great start! I like the names, very colorful...of course, maybe their just uncommon around where I'm from lol. Oh, and nice job fusing your characters with Rowlings :) 10/10 Report Review
Did you want me to review? Haha, I like the first-person pov, I usually don't read these, but you did a fine job. 10/10 :) Report Review
Nice chapter, short and sweet. I knew they would decide to get married right from the start. Great job! 10/10Author's Response: Ya i changed alot with this story from j.k.'s view but i had to keep that...i originally was going to put her with Sirius, but i decided to put Sirius with Tabby...I thought with how i described Tabby they two made a good couple...glad u liked it plz keep r/r Report Review
Great chapter, ton of stuff happened but it was all interesting. Hope Blake never turns up again, or I think Lily would eat him or something XD Excellent job, off to read the next chapter! 10/10Author's Response: lolz...i havent decided whether to bring Blake back...but Lily is very angry at him, but i don't think should would eat him for risk of the baby...lolz...but ya never know...lolz...plz keep r/r!!! Report Review
You had the ending perfect. I hope you continue to follow the story line just like this...except I want Sek to get back w/ Remus. Just leave Tonks out of this, k? XD I'm kidding, what you'll do is best, Excellent story! I will read the sequel. 10/10Author's Response: Thank you for reading our story and for all the reviews! Not everyone does that and we really appreciate! Thank you! Report Review
It's amazing how much this story has changed. From the light, easy-going pranks and stuff to the more deeper and emotional conflicts everyone is going through. I'm really glad I chose to read this story, it's intriguing! Excellent chapter! 10/10Author's Response: You're back! We thought we lost you! When Chaos and I started this story it was an RPG with almost no direction. We weren't sure what exactly we wanted to do, but eventually it all came together. We are very glad you chose to read our story as well!
Thank you for another review and another 10/10! Report Review
Draco Malfoy is a man! Ha! I'm glad you didn't have him go running after Hermione to kill her or something...Great job! 10/10!! Report Review
Now this is gonna be good. Can't wait to see what'll happen. Wow, if Harry could see his godson now...the look on his face. Harry should be so proud...and Remus Lupin himself! Well, if he were alive. Lol, I'm being crazy. Great job, 10/10!!Author's Response: I know. Harry and Remus would be most unimpressed...
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All time favorite Oliver Wood fic. I don't read many of them, but every now and then i stumble upon a good one, like this! Excellent job, I was hooked from the first word!Author's Response: Thank you so much! Oliver Wood has been my latest obsession :) Thank you again. Your review made my day :D Report Review
Real deep. I like fics that take place during the hard times of the war. Really great job!Author's Response: Thank you! :D Report Review
Hmm...idk, it didn't really go anywhere. Maybe this was for humorous purposes. I did laugh a couple of times, but it didn't really do anything for me other than that. Report Review
I was about to say...too many proposals at one time can be unhealthy XD Great twist at the end for Sirius. Can't wait for James/Lily's wedding!Author's Response: I can be, but once again we were playing off the idea that everyone was in a hurry to get married because of the war that was going on. Still we are happy you enjoyed this chapter as well :)
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Now everyone's getting married! Now that school's gonna be back in session, what's next? Guess I'll be reading and finding out shortly, huh? 10/10 as always!Author's Response: Yep pretty much everyone is getting married. As Molly Weasley said people were getting married right out of Hogwarts.
Loving the 10/10 and all the reviews! Thank you so much! Report Review
Poor Peter, he's just there, with no one to love. I think you should dedicate a chapter to Peter, even though he betrayed Lily and James...on second thought, let him die alone for all I care XD I'm so evil, call me Voldemort II XD Great job, I'm in the xmas spirit though...Author's Response: Don't worry we are evil when it comes to Peter as well aka we so don't care about him he is just there. Yay for xmas spirit!
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