This was a fantastic read! I really quite enjoyed reading it. Typically, I find the "students forced to work on a project" theme to be quite cliche, but adding that Founders twist - what a shocker! This is really fantastic, and I eagerly await your updates. Your characterization of Rose is really amazing - I can't wait to see more of her, though I wish you had focused a little more on her thoughts and less on the project during this chapter.
Excellent writing. Please continue! :)
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Ooh. Now if that doesn't promise action, I don't know what does. I'm curious about Vandelia - is she Greek? Her last name does suggest that.
I really liked the dream at the beginning. It showed that Clyde was pretty much just as vulnerable as anyone else, despite his tough, hard exterior. It really gives him a lot of depth, which I definitely appreciate reading about in any sort of character. Here, however, you've pulled it off particularly well.
You were wondering if the plot was still fresh. Well, it's my first time reading this story, so it's definitely fresh for me! Characterizations are spot-on, though I'm a little iffy about the Neville/Luna deal. What House is Clyde in?
Oh, and I absolutely loved this line:
Maybe what I'm destined to be is exactly what I've become already: a bum. A loser. A nobody. I mean, look at me. I'm seventeen years old and I've already gotten myself addicted to drugs, I almost got my girlfriend knocked up, I live by myself, and I've already got gray hair.
It seems so true! A slap in the face for Clyde, so to speak, but self-inflicted. And then when he doesn't want to corrupt Vandelia ... aw!
Great story, great themes - congratulations again on a well-written chapter!
XOXO, KalinaAuthor's Response: =D Kalina! Thank you so much! She is Greek, actually, though that doesn't have anything to do with the plot. I just thought it would be an interesting tidbit to include for her character =P
The dream was actually a retake on a dream I actually had. In my dream, I went through the same thing (except instead of Death Eaters it was Nazis. I was reading Night by Elie Wiesel at the time) And when I woke up, the covers were over my head. I thought it would be interesting to include in a story.
Luna/Neville proved to be more difficult than I thought. Luna is by far the hardest character to write, and I'll definitely need more practice writing them.
Thank you so much! I can't tell you how excited I am that you are picking up on all the underlying themes I have going on here. Thank you so much! ^_^ Report Review
Hey Rin! It's Kalina here with your requested review. :)
So I read this a couple days ago and hadn't the time to review it then, so I'm doing so now. I'm so sorry about the wait! Stuff piles up and I got into this really intense writing mode and gah ... I really shouldn't be making up excuses. :P
Anyways, onward ho! Can I just start by saying I love the mood of this piece. Love love love it. Just the two of them, Lily and James, running up to the sunset and then diving into the water. It's not even romantic (well, yes, it is, but that's totally not the focus). It's the fact that they can get so separated from their lives, from the earth, from the war. And like Lily's thought at the end (that sentence was beautifully perfect), carrying such a weight can't be good. Either for your spine or for your whole self.
I loved the way you described the way they both ran. When you said her muscles ached, my muscles ached. When she dove into the lake, I dove into the sea. And that is your highest aspiration as a writer. Make your reader feel what the character feels.
I truly have no criticism. It was beautifully perfect. A simple moment, not stated when, that could have worked absolutely whenever.
Masterful, Rin. I truly enjoyed this. 10/10, and I don't give that out lightly.
XOXO, KalinaAuthor's Response: Goodness, Kalina, what a review? How am I supposed to respond to that? XD Bah.
Wow. I'm.. flattered! Absolutely flattered. I'm really, really pleased that you enjoyed it, and it means a lot coming fro man author like you. And my descriptions! I'm really glad you liked those, because sometimes I have trouble with them. Some fics they'll cooperate with me, and others they won't. :)
Thank you so much for the review, again. I'm really, really flattered.
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Sorry. I had to get that out of the way before I began the review properly. Yes, hey, it's psychee from TGS here with your requested review!
Your critique focuses mentioned plot, characterization, dialogue, and flow. That's a lot! :) I'll do my best.
Okay, plot. Well, I think it's safe to say that it's no sweeping, world-destroying plot, but the self-realization that both Scorpius and Astoria come to are very powerful. I like that she keeps writing her son letters - to me, that's very reminiscent of "The Notebook", and though here it's between a mother and son, the idea of an undying love through letters is a sweet and delicate one.
Characterizations. I thought, personally, that they were spot-on, especially Draco. Since we don't read much of Astoria in canon (ever), I can't really tell you anything of her, but I actually thought she was quite touching. I'll expand more on that later. One of my qualms was that you didn't go into detail about Scorpius's relationship with his father during those five years ... at all. It made me sad, because I don't imagine him to hate his father - quite the contrary. Astoria, on the other hand, was very sweet and touching, but one thing annoyed me. She kept crying. There was no grit, no anger, as I imagine there might have been. But every person is different, I suppose.
Dialogue. Hm. For some reason, I thought this was a weaker point in your fic. There were a good deal of grammatical errors, specifically which I will not go into, but I felt that the dialogue as a whole was a little ... trite. Well, not trite, but it was expected. There wasn't a moment where my jaw dropped and I thought "He did not just say that!". I know going for the oomph! effect with dialogue is especially hard, so I don't blame you. It worked well.
Flow. It flowed very well! There wasn't a moment out of place. The only thing I wished could have been added would have been a Draco moment. You have Astoria at the beginning, and Scorpius at the end, but I suppose it's as much about the three of them as about a mother and a son.
Overall, excellent job! 9/10
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Hey hey hey, Susan! I'm here with your requested review. :)
You know, I'd been following this story for a while, wondering what exactly to make of it. I do adore the premise - it's an ambitious and original one. Rose going to China I especially love, and I still think the scene in which she receives Lily's letter is my favorite.
Hm. I think I'll tell you this straight up. Most definitely not my favorite of yours - the "young adult" themes are often fantastic for a light read but since I know you're capable of so much more (especially with darker romance), I kind of have to reserve my judgment. I'll make the final call once it's finished or the wedding scene written. :P
But that being said - I must reassure you! It's not without qualities! :) It's light, it's funny, your characterization of Rose is really quite endearing, and I simply love the way you intertwine your stories together. Soon I'm going to expect Rose to have a nightmare about Teddy's murder story. :P
My favorite character at this point would have to be Lily. Though we haven't actually met her, I can just imagine how thoughtless and frivolous she actually is. What's more - I'm really curious as to why Scorpius chose to marry her. Was it to spite Rose?
In any case, you've done an excellent job, as you always do. :)
XOXO, KalinaAuthor's Response: Wondering what to make of it! XD I'm having much the same problem myself. It's supposed to be a light story, romantic and humorous, but I keep sneaking in deeper psychological themes. Like you said, the darker stuff is more my thing, and this story keeps heading down that road. Perhaps once I get into the Teddrose section, things will take that turn a little more. ;)
It's not a problem that this isn't your favourite, so don't worry about saying it. It's great that you're honest and not just squeeing. :P But it's equally great that there are still parts that you like, especially with the characterization. The storyline and characters are rather alien to me, yet I do enjoy writing them. There's something very addicting about the next-generation, perhaps because they allow for greater interpretation. It ends up being more like an original fic. :D
Rose having a nightmare about the murder story?!? I rather like that idea. It's easier for me to think about the stories all taking place in the same universe. They technically are anyway, since they're all HP, but it lets me reuse characterizations and plot points without getting into trouble.
Wow, reading your paragraph on Lily gave me this sudden image of her trying on her wedding robes, all lacy and frilly, when Rose goes to visit. A house elf (borrowed from the Malfoys) would be there helping her, shocking the SPEW-bred Rose. XD It's a great image, haha! Thanks for that, Kalina.
And thank you for the review! I appreciate your honesty and it's wonderful that you can still enjoy the story, even without it being what you'd expect from me. ^_^ Report Review
Oh, Susan! Despite the length (well, it was intended to be 500 words), you've managed to capture such longing! I think that's what you do best, actually. No wonder the Minerva/Grimm story is titled "This Longing". Bittersweet, heartbreaking love is most definitely your forte.
I love the way you stated that Lily was Snape's shield against Potter and Black. In a way, she's like his light in the darkness (forgive the horrible metaphor), like Earendil. Oh God. I really need to stop rambling about Lord of the Rings. It won't to me good on a Harry Potter fanfic site. :P
In any case, I loved the idea that her famous eyes saw all and nothing at the same time. :) It was a beautiful concept. Not my favorite one-shot of yours, but still. Absolutely heart-wrenching.
XOXO, KalinaAuthor's Response: I seem to have a thing for writing love stories that either don't work out, are unrequited, or likewise bittersweet. Oh dear, it can't be a good sign from a Freudian perspective. XD But they are the most interesting to write!
She is his light in the darkness! :P It's a corny metaphor, but I've always found Snape/Lily to have a little bit of corniness attached to it. When I first read that chapter in DH, I was rather horrified that JKR could do that to the (by then) dark and evil Snape. It's taken a while to get used to the idea of Snape being eternally loyal to Lily. If he loved her that much, wouldn't he have given up anything to be with her? It's a question that JKR answered in an interview, but I wasn't satisfied by her answer. *sigh*
End to ramble. About the eyes and the idea of blindness, which I'm pleased that you liked! It came from my research paper, a paragraph of which was on how Snape used Harry to look into Lily's eyes (a striking scene). He needed to see those particular eyes looking into his, and that had to mean something significant. Her eyes are a huge part of her character, anyway, so I thought that would make an interesting focus for the story. :)
Thank you very much for the review, Kalina. It means a lot to hear from you. :D It's a nice little one-shot, not quite like "Astute Observations" (which even throws me for a loop when I re-read it), but I'm glad it came across as heart-wrenching (terrible as that sounds). ^_^ Report Review
Hey there Ilia - this is Kalina (psychee) from TDA here with your review. :)
Man, this Clyde guy, he's really a piece, isn't he! I love the way you've characterized him. You can sense the rebellion within him, but he's also very grounded, and, obviously, very loyal. What I wonder, though, is how precisely he changed so much. You mentioned he was a pipsqueak in his earlier Hogwarts years ... what made him change? You simply state that he did. I'd like to know precisely why.
To be frank, I thought Clyde and Neville were a lot older when I started reading this. Clyde I pictured as twenty-something. He's definitely got the maturity. And Neville is level-headed enough that I can imagine him as a twenty-something-year-old too.
The flashback with Jessamine - gotta say, I think that's partly why I thought Clyde was so much older. He says "I was sixteen", as though that excuses his madness. He's still only seventeen! Also - watch your tenses. In the beginning paragraph it's in present tense, but the rest of the chapter is past. Just keep an eye out for continuity.
Over all, this was a very well-written chapter. Congratulations on what I'm sure is a fantastic story. I'm curious as to how it ties into the Ultimate Horror theme you've been challenged with.
KalinaAuthor's Response: Thank you! Yes, Clyde certainly is one of his kind, eh? XD It was really fun writing him - I'm glad you liked reading him. You'll have to read on to find out how he changes =P Maybe I'll make another stop in your review thread. =)
It's interesting that you mention their feeling older because I felt that way too. To be honest, when I was writing it, I could see them as in their twenties as well, but I just didn't do anything about it for the sake of the story. This was my vision, and I wanted to go with it.
The tenses switch throughout the story. I know I should stick to one, but when I'm writing first person, I sort of let it flow more than when I'm writing in third. I feel like in first person, that freedom is allowed.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your review. I care about your opinion very much because I respect you as a writer. =) Thanks! Report Review
You always amaze me. Every single time. Never mind that it's 500+ words, it's beautiful. Possibly one of the most beautiful pieces of short fiction I've ever read. And because I am as repetitive as a cat's meow, I must again cite how beautiful this line is:
There is no fun in burning a moth's wings without an open window watching.
It's so singular! So captivating, so haunting! I would die for that line, Gubby, because it's so poetically you. The imagery of the moths throughout is absolutely entrancing. I cannot express much more how much I liked this. You've brought mythology together with my meager prompt - and you have the lyricism of a young Virginia Woolf within you, my dear. :)
I'm astonished that you were able to pull this out of my silly little prompt. Needless to say, your genius is boundless. I loved it. It was, in one word, divine.
Make of that what you will. ^_^
XOXO, KalinaAuthor's Response: Is there a reason you continue to inflate my sizable ego? Every time I've read this review (and I've read it a lot) I feel shocked into silence. The moth's wings line was actually edited just before I put it up - before it was "without providing an open window," which was much clunkier, I think. But you absolutely cannot die; what are the rest of us mortals to do without you? Nor can you compare me to Virginia Woolf (no matter how much I detested To the Lighthouse, it was beautifully written); I don't deserve it.
I am so grateful for this prompt. I was iffy at first, but it was so nice to get out of my comfort zone and do something that's actually short, and that I actually quite love. Thank you so much, for everything. Even if I can't thank you enough. Report Review
I KNEW IT! Well, of course I did, you being so gracious to let Rita share the outline. But aw! I love Maxime and Artemisia! They are truly the ultimate couple. Goodness, but I am squeeing like a mindless little fangirl. See what you have reduced me to.
You'd better rush off to that next chapter, dearie, because I simply can't wait. You write with abundant mastery, and I can only bow down to your talent. Congratulations yet again on another superb chapter!Author's Response: Hello Kali!
Yay!!! I'm so glad you liked this chapter (even though you were already spoiled, hehe). I always feel nervous when writing romance. I haven't written it in ages and I'm so out of practice. ^_^ And of course, I was worried that this chapter would be too fluffy. Your review made me so happy, you have no idea!
The next chapter is in the works and hopefully, I should get it up within a week. *crosses fingers* Thank you SO much! Have a lovely week!
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And she does it again! Spectacular chapter my dear - I am quite a fan of Philippe's, whether Artemisia likes him or not. A slight touch though - Britannique isn't quite ... British, the French would more likely say Anglais which just means English. Britannique is more like ... the culture there? Gah, it's hard to explain. :)
I'm off to read the next one! This fic has me totally hooked! Has Rita spoken to you about her Bourbon restoration fic idea? And I'm planning a Marie Antoinette one centered around the Diamond Necklace Affair, of which I am certain you are aware. I have only you to cite for inspiration - that trailer you made had me off plotting like a shot!Author's Response: Hi Kali!
Yes, Rita has told me of both her fic and yours. I think it's great! The 18th century has unfortunately been ignored by the HP fandom and I'm so excited to see what you come up with. Please keep me updated on your progress! ^_^
Gah! Thanks for letting me know about the French typo. I'm embarrassed to admit that I actually took French for three years in high school, but I had some pretty horrid teachers and I learned almost nothing. I shall fix the mistake right away. ;)
Thank you so much for taking the time to review, Kali! Your feedback is awesome! And I'm so honored that you find this fic inspiring. Take care!
celticbard Report Review
Hahaha! Like I told you in the IM, I like the rough and ready feel of this chapter. Fiona is very angry at Elle, as I can imagine ... but did she have a personal tie to Julian? Cos I'm not sure they would allow any Aurors with emotional interference on a case as strong as that. O.o
But your story. ^_^
The car scene I thought was really well written. You had great description and because of the broken image, it really gave the impression of a car crash. Kudos to you for that!
I can't wait for chapter six! Corrupted government officials wahoot!
KAuthor's Response: Aha, rough and ready. That pretty much sums this chapter up in a nutshell, doesn't it just? n_n
Her ties to Julian weren't exactly personal, but I plan on (hopefully) expanding on that later in the story.
Thank you. I've never been in a car crash or anything traumatic like that, so writing that was a cool experience for me, I'm glad you liked it so much! ^.^
YAY FOR CORRUPTION ;')
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I am intrigued. Melting bodies? Ick! I had the oddest shiver when I read that line. Poor Dratty. You've really managed quite a spectrum of emotions in a single chapter, Susan: horror, terror, guilt, shame, pity, fear ... it's admirable.
But then again, when reading your works, of course it is. I am excited to discover what the disease is precisely and how it works! Knowing you, of course it'll be absolutely brilliant.
Congratulations on yet another spectacular chapter, my dear! :)
KalinaAuthor's Response: *glomps* Thank you, Kalina!
Yes, melting bodies. *grins widely* It comes from watching way too many CSI reruns lately - I get more gruesome. :P It's also the only thing I could think of that would cause Hermione to be really disturbed by this case. She's forced to work faster in order to maintain the evidence.
It's great that the emotions worked out well in this chapter. I wrote this until almost 2am, so it sounded all muddled to me. Hermione was very emotional here, all the memories from her torture coming forward, bringing out the worst in her. We'll see how she handles this now that she's stuck in the house with Draco. :P
Thank you for reviewing! I really appreciate hearing from you, and seeing this review this morning made me very very happy. ^_^ Report Review
JEALOUS. THIS IS ME BEING ENVIOUS.
Your talent has no limits, Jenny darling. You managed to pull off a potentially cliche scene with absolutely flawless spledor. ILY! Author's Response: thankyou thankyou thankyou! you know how happy your reviews make me, ms awesome. Report Review
I've been meaning to read this for quite a bit of time, you know - since it came out, actually. And I'm so glad I finally got around to it! You've brought such a fresh and lovely edge to Tonks and Molly both - they were both distinctly in canon and yet amazingly unique in their characterization. It was truly inspiring, and, selfishly, I'm inordinately vain that you are a Ravenclaw - with this, there's no way we couldn't win! A stellar job, my dear. Really, truly, amazingly written.
KAuthor's Response: Hi K! Wow what a compliment *huggles* You are way too kind :) I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed this story and that you thought Molly and Tonks were in character. Being a big fan of sticking to canon, that is a high priority for me when I'm writing! If I change the characters too much, it'll feel kind of wrong to me - JKR made them the way they are and I want to keep them that way. I really appreciate your review and honestly, I think Ravenclaw's got the House Cup in the bag ;) Woo-hoo! Thanks darling. Report Review
Dear me! You've brought Sands of Time into the TL canon! Helen is Mad-Eye's mother! Wow. Okay, I can only stay for a little bit - but I loved this chapter. Truly. The kiss, the confrontation, everything. It was pitch perfect. Great job, Susan. *huggles* And thank you so much for your support.
KalinaAuthor's Response: *grins* Yep. I'd been planning that for a while, but it didn't come up in this story until now. Hence Helen's paranoia and Moody's gruffness, haha, both coming through in the son here. It's so bad of me, but for some reason, it's nice to have some of my stories connected, happening all in the same universe as they are.
Thank you for coming to read and review this, Kalina! It means so much that you took the time to do so. *huggles back* I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter! ^_^ Report Review
Hey hey! This is psychee from the TDA/TGS/HPFF forums, here with the lovely review you requested in "Review the Above!" at TGS. I must say, this is a fascinating story! What a career for Rose!
It's great the way you've managed to pair Scorpius and Rose together without them being desperately in love (all or nothing, my-life-revolves-around-Scorpius-or-woe-is-me kind of thing). She's more focused on her work. Very much like her mother in that respect, and I love to see that in Rose fics. :)
You've definitely set up a prominent and recognizable voice straightaway, and that's amazing. I must admit, I've never read any of your work (but Unsinkable is on my list!), so I've nothing to compare it to, but from reading around, this definitely stands out. Bundimuns! What a name! I kind of wonder what they are - are they canon? I suppose they're some kind of slimy little creature, aye?
Parmenter and Angelo definitely had me laugh. God, this is so realistic, even if it's absolutely hilarious. And it's got - goodness me! - a plot, which God knows not that many humorous fics do have. It's a fabulous job you've done here, hon - your characterizations were spot-on (Ron, especially, and Scorpius).
Great job! 10/10
KalinaAuthor's Response: Thanks for stopping by! I appreciate it :)
This is the first time I've tried out writing Scorose, separately or together. I'm trying to make them different from the Molly/Arthur I usually write, and not focusing on the romance. This story has a sharper edge to it than the Unsinkable series, too. I did want Rose to be like her mum, though she thinks she's like her dad.
Bundimuns are canon, yes! In the Fantastic Beasts book, they're described as green algae with eyes, and they eat at the foundations of houses. Yuck.
I do have a plot! haha. I'm kind of winging this one a bit right now, but I have an idea where it's going and may outline it soon. I had a good time writing Ron, and Scorpius was fun. I was trying to put a new spin on our Next-Gen regulars, and Rose as bounty hunter and Scorpius as painter seemed to be playing against type. Hopefully it works out.
Thank you so much for the great review!
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Ah, how I've been waiting for this chapter to come out! I love this fic so much, it's impressive. I hope you don't mind - but I've been using it for extensive inspiration in my own historical fic. While not centered during the French Revolution (rather, World War I), your approach to the past has me absolutely captivated.
You never displease, my dear, and you never disappoint. I absolutely loved this chapter. Maxime and Artemisia are two such people that I could absolutely envision together - a rare thing in fanfiction, I tell you! They react and interconnect so well with each other, it's flawless.
If I had one bit of criticism, it would be the last line. I don't know, but for some reason, I feel as though the 'wild abandon' sentiment might have been pushing it a bit much, and it somewhat ruined a great and beautiful ending for me. But I can't criticize, because this fic is by far one of my favorites right now.
How do you come up with these ideas? You're impressive, there's no doubt.
Please do continue this fic and keep updating! I'm hooked!
KalinaAuthor's Response: Hello Kali!
Wow, your reviews never fail to blow me away. I'm so thrilled to hear that you are enjoying this story. Really, it's an honor. And your feedback is so thoughtful. Thank you, from the bottom of my heart!
I'm so flattered that you find this fic inspiring. You'll definitely have to keep me updated on your WWI fic. Rita always speaks so highly of your writing and I've been simply dying to read "Saharan Lies". Now that exams are over, I finally have the time to enjoy your stories. ^_^
And I'm so glad (and relieved) that you were able to envision Maxime and Artemisia as a couple. Their relationship has been tricky to write, with the historical Robespierre being infamous for his "virtue". I was quite worried that the pairing would come off as awkward and unrealistic.
And as to the "wild abandon" bit, you are right. After I received your review, I went back and read that line and I must say, I completely agree with your assessment. The notion of abandon doesn't seem to fit Artemisia's calculating nature, as it is. Thank you so much for pointing that out! I have already edited the last line to read differently. ;)
Again, thank you for everything, Kalina. I cannot possibly express how much your reviews mean to me. I do hope you have a great weekend! Take care!
Lee Anne Report Review
God, Susan! First, let me say something.
That single name makes the fic. We all saw how angry she got at Moody for calling her by her given first name, and not 'Tonks'. That she doesn't blow up in Remus's face is a true test of her character and of love. And Remus, similarly, is not afraid of calling her such. It's a mutual understanding on their level that is impressive and flawlessly executed on your part. A superb pas de deux, if you will.
This was just ... sigh-inducing. I've never loved Remus/Tonks, thinking they were so absolutely wrong for each other. This fic is just heart-wrenching. Because I know they're going to die - OH MY GOD! Look at me! I'm crying! My throat is constricted. No, seriously, I am. It's the effect your writing has on me. Absolutely addictive. It's like a drug. I could get high off of your writing. XD Forgive the crude metaphor.
Yes, in any case, continuing my rambling line of thought - I've never really liked Remus/Tonks, but this has made me truly appreciate the fic. Mainly, I think, because your characterization of Tonks, while still in canon, had such a touch of you in it, you know what I mean? Not necessarily tragic or clumsy, but there's just that perfection that she has, this angelic (eurgh, forgive the word) aura about her. It's so sad, especially, knowing that they die.
Good God, but I'm rambling. To summarize, it was superbly, brilliantly touching. Flawless. But then, with you, that's hardly a surprise.
XOXOAuthor's Response: Alright, I admit that I like that line from the story - "maybe it was the way he said her name". Although I've used it in another story, I still love that idea of the power saying a name can have, very romantic. And for Tonks it does mean more, like you said. She lets Remus get away with things that no one else could.
It was a surprise when in HBP they got together, but it still managed to catch my interest. It's a wonderfully unlikely ship, and their wrongness is what makes it worth while. They complete one another, in a way.
Arg, now you're making me sigh romantically.
I'm sorry that this made you cry. I didn't even think much of DH while writing this, as HBP was the focus. Though, I can understand why it's affected you so: perhaps if Remus had "given in" sooner, they'd have had more time together. It's a heartbreaking thought.
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Kalina. I always love hearing your thoughts and appreciate what you say. *huggles* Report Review
Oh, Jamie. Jamie Jamie Jamie. What are we going to do with you? :P God, it's fabulous, and you've got your Hermione down to a tee. The fights with Ron - they're in canon, but OMG! For once I sympathize more with Ron than with Hermione. He's so big-hearted but brash, the poor sod. What a pity she can't see that. Fabulous story, do continue! :D
And if you are like - ZOMFG who is this random person who knows my name ... it's Kalina/psychee from TDA.
9/10, marvelous job!Author's Response: Lol, Kali, you freaked me out, very few people at HPFF know my name - and I'm not good enough a writer to have stalkers :o
I'm really glad you liked it, I'm finally letting myself explore the gloomier, darker stuff I like writing after fluffy romances... or this might just be my reluctance toward marriage finding its way out?
Thanks loads for reviewing (: Report Review
Every time I read this story, I'm amazed. Lee Anne, (I hope you don't mind my calling you that - Rita has spoken of you in very high regard, and I think we've talked maybe once or twice) I must say, this is truly inspiring. It's so ... captivating! And to have Artemisia infatuated with a man who is not godly, not handsome, not Sirius-esque! That, I think, makes the fic. Good god, but I can't wait to read the next chapter. Please update soon! Definitely my favorite fanfic at the moment. :)
Kalina (Elesphyl/psychee)Author's Response: Hello Kalina!
It was so wonderful to hear from you. (And yes, please do call me Lee Anne ^_^) From what I've heard from Rita, you're a beta reader extraordinaire and I must say I agree with her assessment from the few times we've chatted. ;) You have no idea how pleased I was to receive your review. Thank you! Your feedback was both gracious and inspiring. Needless to say, it truly made my day.
I'm so very glad you are enjoying this fic so far. I do hope you have an enjoyable week. Take care!
Lee Anne Report Review
Love it! And you dedicated it to me! *giant squee* Oh, Jenny, I can just see it'll be fabulous! And darling, don't you ever change that banner; it is perfection.
KAuthor's Response: KALIPOO! of course i dedicated it to you! and LOLstfu about the banner XD as if you couldnt do better. thanks kali hon, ily a lot and your reviews make my day < 3 ily! Report Review
DRUE! MY GOD!
OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD!
BEST. AU. FANFIC. EVER. WRITTEN.
I kid you not. This is ... wow, I can't even begin to describe it. But I will tell you this - what the hell is up with the love trysts?! I love them, but wow. Carter/Claire and James/Claire ftw (I have a general aversion to all things Lily). God, I'm so intrigued.
Keep writing and I am begging you for an update!
KalinaAuthor's Response: Kalina!! YAY! Thank you so much.
Wow. Haha, you're really enjoying it, huh? Thanks for expressing that so much!
Come back for more!!
-Drue Report Review
Liam Liam Liam! Love it, hon, this is fantastic.
Your action sequences are so enthralling - this plot is really captivating! I'm so addicted to the whole ambiguousness of Elle's character. She's obviously very violent of nature and very ruthless, yet she's innocent. She does nothing to clear her trail, but rather she worsens her own condition. Brilliant!
Something else that was amazing - the three cups line. That was spectacular. I loved it - very clever and very well-done. Congratulations.
One thing I wanted to mention was, no matter how involved you've gotten into writing your action sequences, never use exclamation points in descriptive writing. (For example: the armchair flying towards Scar Face (brill name, btw) line didn't need a '!'. A period would have done the trick). There was an error at the beginning where I think you meant too instead of two, but other than that, not many.
Great job! :D
KalinaAuthor's Response: You're joking, right? I used an exclamation mark? *prays you're joking*
I can't believe I did that. That's one of my rules! Full stops only, to keep it pacy and to not cheese it up! *groan*
Sorry about that, Kali!
You're right about Elle being ruthless. There is a reason for that, and it's not just her natural personality. You'll have to wait and see ^_^
Anyway, I'm going to go fix those things now. Sorry about that, and thanks for much for the review hon :D Report Review
Yes! Yes! GO DOMINIQUE! *cheers for Dominique*
Seriously. I know this is a Teddy/Victoire, but honestly, can you turn it into a Teddy/Dominique? *puppy eyes* I love that ship so much! Victoire is so unkind to her sister. I hope Teddy says yes. Dominique deserves someone.
Great story!Author's Response: Haha, the puppy-eyes are scorching me :P No, but seriously, who knows? I mean, Teddy and Victoire are bound to find out sooner or later that they can't be together without the risk of dying, so who knows what will happen then?
I'm really glad you liked my Dominique XD
Thanks for reviewing ^^, Report Review
Someone should write you an ode someday, you know that? Maybe I will. Because I was literally sh!tting in my pants from laughter during this chapter. I don't think I've ever laughed at a sentence so hard as I did this one:
Please, please, please don't let me die at the hand of a Weasley pissed, who Hell has no fury like.
Brilliant, Gubby, just positively brilliant. You have a knack for rolling humour and sarcasm and just general goodiness (yes I did just say that) into one like no other. I hope you set your (writing) bar high. You'll go places, I can tell you that. ^^
Again, another amazing chapter and I hope we see some more soon! Or I will have to put the Weasley pissed and Hell's fury to shame. (See? I fail at writing humour XD)
KalinaAuthor's Response: Holy crap, Kali XD I've reread this review countless times because I completely love being flattered and humbled (especially because you are brilliant yourself, which makes me feel even MORE humbled!).
I honestly cannot take full credit for that line, though I like it very much. Guess where the inspiration came from? POTC. That's right. Jack Sparrow inverted lines like that, so... er, yeah. But thank you so, so much. You have no idea how huge my ego is now... just, thank you thank you thank you! -adores- Report Review
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