kk. i think that this chapter is actually pretty damn good@ but i didn't like the beginning all too much. the part where you said the whole thing about dumbledore being like a father to harry and stuff. it makes it seem like dumbledore was the first person since his parents who harry had lost. and that's not true. there was sirius. you should have mentioned serious. other than that, it was great!

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Hey, I hope you write more! That was good, but I'm confused about the end of the seccond chapter, where Harry heard something, but but he wrote it off, and he was wrong. What was he wrong about? Nothing happened.

Author's Response: I have decided to write more, so no worries. And as for your confusion, it will be clarified in the next few chapters, I promise. Thanks for the review!
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Good story, good plot, it seemed to me though that everything was going a bit fast, like not completly developed. I can understand though if you are just setting up for the main part of the story. The story is good though.

Author's Response: I know it's a little fast right now. But it'll definitely get better. Thank you for the review!
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i think you should definitly continue this story its really good

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Really good Can't wait for the next chapter
A+
10/10

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Good

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Fabulas !

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Hi, That was a great first Chapter WELL DONE!
Please do have a look at my story and please review it because it is my first fan fiction on this site. you can find me underthe penname of C D johnson

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Once again great chapter

Craig

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I will definitely have a look at your story.
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It's very good, I like it. Please keep writing!!! Please make it romantic!!! Im a sucker for the Hrry/Ginny and Ron/Hermione relationships!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review. If I keep getting support like yours I will definitely keep writing. The romance will get better once they get to Hogwarts.
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nice chapter, but what happened to the guy in the black robes that they spotted apperating?

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Ron is so crazy. LOVE HIM THOUGH.



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oh, so is this going to be a 7th year fanfic? it's really interesting so far, so I can't wait to read more! may good writings continue to you. ~Moni Jane

Author's Response: yea, it's going to be a 7th year fic. Thanks for the review!
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go ginny! she's my favorite character in the whole series! she kicks arse!

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good

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not bad, sounds like it's getting good. Keep up the great work!

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That was awesome! Update soon!

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Great story so far! I thought it was interesting. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

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can't wait for the next chp. hope the locket doesn't try to mess with them like it did in the book. sorry spoiler.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. Don't worry, it won't because they aren't stupid enough to wear it. They're just going to put it away somewhere safe. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
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ohhh...evil cliff hangey! Very god story- keep writing!

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Oh goodness! I can't wait until the next chapter...I wonder what is going to happen. I really like how you make Ginny and Harry play off each other. I hope Voldemort doesn't use Ginny to get to Harry...that would be awful! Great writing, keep it up! [9/10]

Author's Response: I wonder what's going to happen in the next chapter too, lol.
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
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I really enjoyed the first chapter of your story. You describe Harry's feelings very well and set up the entire story well too. It was short but I enjoyed it. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter. [8/10] =)

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It's pretty good so far, though a little rushed. I mean rushed in two ways. First of all, I mean that the flow of the story is a little rushed. Take more time with the action. Here's an example paragraph:

“Come on, you two,” urged Mrs. Weasley. “We have to be ready for the guests.” As everyone was eating breakfast, Bill appeared at the kitchen door. Mrs. Weasley burst into tears. “My baby! He’s all grown up!” After she calmed down, Mrs. Weasley ordered Gabrielle to take breakfast up to Fleur because the bride and groom weren’t allowed to see each other until the wedding.

That could have happened in three to four paragraphs. What I also mean by it being rushed is what is happening. It's chapter two, and Ron and Hermione are already kissing? Same with Harry and Ginny. They're confessing their undying love for each other at ages sixteen and seventeen. If you slow it down a little, this story has the potential to be great. I'm sure it'll turn out fantastic once it gets longer. Keep writing!

Author's Response: I know that it's a little rushed right now, but it'll get better once I hit the main plot. I just wanted to get to the action so I kind of hurried a bit. As for Ginny and Harry, I think it was bound to happen and love really doesn't have an age. Ron and Hermione kissing was an accident. He didn't mean to kiss her. They'll be together by the next chapter. I know that you think it should take a little longer, but I think waiting 7 years is long enough.
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This is an interesting story so far. Harry eagerly awaiting the letter is reiminiscent of Order of the Phoenix, when Ron and Hermione were keeping him in the dark about the Order. I'm guessing this is an introductory chapter and it'll get a little more suspenseful and interesting as the story continues. Hmm, I wonder what Peter's up to? I guess I'll just have to see.

Oh, and thanks for reviewing my story. I fixed Hermione's reaction so it's less dramatic. ;)

Author's Response: It will definitely get a little more suspenseful and interesting as the story continues. I wonder what Peter is up to as well, lol. Thanks for reviewing.

It was my pleasure to review your story. I'm glad I could help.
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can't wait till you add more chapters

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good story so far


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