Oh, wow, hmmm.
I'm very curious what this boy has to do with the marauders. Very curious.
Excellent first chapter. : )
-RosieAuthor's Response: Oh thank you! I am glad you found it excellent! Things will begin to get more clear as the story goes on. Some things will still stay mysterious for some time but I suppose that is the joy of most stories! Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
Oooh! So Riley's a painting!
Love the fic!
Keep on going!!
elliexoxoxoxoxoxAuthor's Response: Yeah, he's a painting! However, how he ends up as such will be answered soon so do not dwell in your confusion!! I am glad you love it and keep going I shall!! Report Review
Wow, I'm sort of understanding this. I'm not going to go into what I think happens/happened, because it might take a while, but I've got a bitof an idea.
It's really very good so far. I really like it :D.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
9/10!Author's Response: Its ok not to understand everything yet. Its a confusing story and it has a lot of twists and stuff. I am glad you like it and thanks for support on a story I'm still trying to get a firm gasp on. Thank you! Report Review
guess it doesn't make much sense right now, but still I like it. ;)
please update soon! :]Author's Response: No, it doesn't make much sense, but its not really supposed to right now. Thanks for the review!!!! Report Review
Wow, that was ... stunning. Can you believe that even though this chapter had pretty much nothing to do with the Prologue at the beginning and I knew it was going to have to, I STILL didn't get that the painting was going to be Riley? *smacks self* When he said his name, I actually went "ohh!" out loud. A twist this early on!
So you're craving feedback, eh? Well I'm craving another chapter, Kira :P so I hope you give us one soon! I loved your protrayal of Remus, he was just as I imagined him and that whole not-having-a-girlfriend thing made me want to laugh and cry at the same time. But I'm pretty emotional ;)
And then the painting! The guy (Riley ...) was so ... deep, kind of. I mean, he was perceptive as well as being uber cool and just generally a fantastic character, even though we've barely met him. This is SUCH an intriguing story, and I really can't wait to find out how everything ties up. I'm so glad I stumbled across the Prologue when I did.
10/10 for this chapter. Great work.
- EmAuthor's Response: I'm sorry, so very sorry. You asked for another chapter and I have failed miserably. Sorry again. So honored taht you love Riley. I love him too. Thanks for the really sweet review! Thanks for reading! Report Review
Oh the guy in the painting is the brother of the guy in the first chapter! Ah it all makes sense now, well sort of, it kind of explains his detached attitude- probably all pent up sadness :( But aw poor Remus, I love him so much, and you write him so well! Update soon, can't wait to see where this goes!
xxxAuthor's Response: YES! I am so glad you commented on Remus. Most people are caught up in the confusing, intriguing story of Riley ect..and forget that I wrote Remus too. He is one of my fav Harry Potter characters and that always makes me nervous to write them. So I am SO flattered to hear that I did a somewhat good job with him!!! You just made my day! Report Review
So I'm trying to connect this story with your summary... I like it so far, but hurry and update so I can understand! It sounds interesting, but I would really like it if you explained more of the symptoms of this 'Vanishing Sickness' plez :)
~ CarolineAuthor's Response: Yeah, good luck trying to connect it. I wrote the first chapter and then looked at the summary and was like...what??? But I published it anyway so I'm hoping for my sake and for yours that it actually does end up making sense. I think explaining the symptoms sounds like a great idea. I'm pretty sure its actually a magical disease that JK mentioned, but I'll have to go back and look. Thanks so much not just for reviewing, but for giving advice! You rock Caroline! Happy Summer! Report Review
well, i am intrigued. update soon!Author's Response: I shall certainly try!! Thanks for reading! Report Review
Well, I'm certainly intrigued and can't wait to read more.Author's Response: Well, I'm certainly flattered! Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
write more. I'm excited(:Author's Response: Well good!!!! I LOVE excitment! Thanks for the review! Report Review
Wow, this is all so strange!! But in a good way I assure you! I have no idea where this is going but it seemed quite funny from the summary with James being like 'I'm still stuck on the guy part' or whatever it was! Riley seems like a nice bloke and I feel sorry for him :( But yeah I am very intrigued and I think it's going to be very good because your writing is wonderful and that always helps! Update soon (I want to know what's going on)!!
xxxAuthor's Response: Riley is a nice guy, he'll come off as somewhat of a jerk in the next chapters but trust me, he's got a good heart. Glad to hear that my writing is wonderful!!! Thanks bunches! Report Review
Fantastically witty summary, brilliant!
The prologue lives up to the expectations of the summary! Cant wait till the update!Author's Response: The summary is my favorite part of this fic so far..which is good but somehow not good at the same time. Maybe my writing needs to step up a notch. Thanks for giving such a nice review! Report Review
Okay, I think I can safely say I'm intrigued by the weirdness ;) It was orginally the summary which drew me to read this story (I was like ... whaat?) but after reading this prologue I'm dying to know more.
I'm not even annoyed that the marauders don't feature yet, and I adore them :P because this is a stunning opening: full of so many questions but also written beautifully. I feel so sorry for Riley *hugs him* and I can't wait until you expand on their situation and this mysterious disease.
10/10 and favourites, if you couldn't guess :D
- EmAuthor's Response: That is so very sweet that you want to give Riley a hug, good luck though. I've tried and he doesn't want to have anything to do with it. Perhaps he'll warm to you better. This was a really sweet and encouraging review and I could not be more thankful! Report Review
loved it... very intrigued by the prologue and the summary... can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: Good! Intriguing the audience was my main objective! I will get on the next chapter soon...exams are coming...yikes! Where did the year go? Thanks for the review! Report Review
I really love the beginning to this story. It's so sad! Oh and I love weirdness, it's what get's me through the day! Anyway update soon I'm interested see where this is going!Author's Response: I'm interested to see where it is going as well. This was one of those stories where I was just struck by the idea and I couldn't get it to go away. I do not know exactly where this story is off to, or how it will end up but I like it, I like the characters and I think it has great potential. I feel I have gotten a bit off topic. Thanks for the review!!! Report Review
In some ways, if that was me, I think I'd like to die first.
But anyway, your summary is way to interesting to be legal.(??? Sorry, i don't think that that makes sense :( Sorry)
But, moving swiftly on, i LOVE the idea!
Update soon pleases (sorry, random and silly mood)
elliexoxoxoxoxxoxAuthor's Response: I must say I am quite proud of my summary as well. It is short and sweet, something I normally never do, but it really is interesting. I would read a story with that summary, so like I mentioned I am really proud of that. Riley is an interesting character, and this definitely is an aw moment. Thank you for taking the time not only to read my story but to leave a review as well! Report Review
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