I've been meaning to read this story for so long! I keep seeing it pop up on recently added and I've always gone 'oh, yeah, I should check that out someday' but I never got around to it...until today. I'm excited to start this knowing that you also wrote The Wild, which is one of the fics on this site I've liked forever.
I enjoyed this opening chapter and I really like the characters you've introduced so far - Edie's a lovely narrator and Seamus and Dean sound like a hoot! I feel like a lot of people, myself included, attempt this sort of post-school story about young friends boozing, flatsharing and occasionally working, and it so often falls flat - here it didn't; it's written really well and the characters already seem so natural and real.
The only thing I'd say is that this chapter, at times, felt like a bit of an information dump - it was a lot of Edie's internal narration about her friends, introducing them one by one, which comparatively little action. But I think you're a bit too far into the story now to work on that, haha!
Really great opener and I'm looking forward to reading the rest! :D ♥Author's Response: AAHHH. I am so excited you read this! Fa real, I like your stories quite a lot.
And ohhh yes, the information dump :c Trust me, you're not the first person to mention it. I think it was the result of getting inspired for this story, not being sure how to start it off for WEEKS, and then churning out the first chapter in one go. I got so excited to post it that I didn't even have the second chapter written, where I could totally have spread out some of this information, haha. When the story is complete, that's one of my top priorities for editing... I'll be able to disperse it into the story a bit more easily.
Thanks so much for your review! I'm so flattered that you think it's believable (and, oh, that you like The Wild, which will always be my baby.)
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Oh my gosh Seamus was so cute! He wouldn't admit that he wanted Edie to live with him and Dean but he does! Oh, he's just such a sweetie -slightly perverted- pie!
I cannot believe that Rose kissed Oliver! Okay, she is officially on my hit list! Rose, I'm watching you! I just, I can't, I just can't! This is not right!
Shame on you Oliver for not pushing her away! I am fond of Jae though, I like the sound of that mischievous twinkle in his eyes.
Alright, let's see what's going to happen next!
This is my favourite Oliver Wood story, I just get so excited whenever I see an update for this! Keep up the awesome sauce work!Author's Response: Hiya! I also found Seamus to be quite cute... ;3 And, yes, slightly perverted. And I think it's really funny that all of my readers love Jae so much, as I find him kind of annoying xD Maybe it's that attitude of his that everyone loves?
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THAT BITCH AGAIN! Seriously? ARGGH!
UPDATE ^_^Author's Response: The next chapter is written, and just needs some tweaking before being sent into the queue. (Also, remember to keep your reviews 12+!) Report Review
OH MY GOSH!!!
So much happens in this chapter. OLIVER AND ROSE!!
EDIE AND JAE?
ER MY GAWD.
PLEASE UPDATE SOON
LOONYAuthor's Response: Hey! Yeah, this chapter was quite the overload x_x I've been trying to work on that, but it's like everything I have plotted out needs to happen all at once! I hope it's not too overwhelming. Thanks so much for your review! Report Review
I absolutely adore everything about this story. Seriously, I get embarrassingly excited whenever I see you've updated haha. It's wonderfully written and Edie is beyond relatable and basically it's just all-around fantastic. Sorry, I'll stop dorking out now. Long story short: you're an amazing writer, your story's brilliant, and I hope you update again soon! :)Author's Response: Thank you thank you thank you!! Seriously, I just, I just love getting reviews. Writing is the only thing I feel confident about sometimes, but it's still scary to put yourself out there with the potential of receiving bad reviews. (Most people could brush them off, I'm sure, but it's really important to me.) So seeing things like this just really makes my day, to say the very least. Thank you so much! ♥ Report Review
*Gasps* No he/she/they didn't!! (Rose and Oliver, I mean!) I've got this feeling that Edie is going to write that article now, just because she's so upset with Oliver. And a part of me wants her to, and a part of me doesn't... if that makes any sense.
I feel like Edie has every right to be upset and go kiss Jae and set up a date with him, and a part of me really hopes Oliver is there to witness it... But at the same time it really complicates things, I we certainly don't want poor, innocent Jae getting hurt!
I was surprised to see that Edie's not telling anybody what's going on, about her being sacked or losing her flat. I wonder what everyone's reactions will be when they find out!! And even though I know the situation's not ideal living with Lisa and Justin, at least Edie's got somewhere to stay (for now!)
Another amazing chapter, dear, and I can't wait for the next one!! 10/10!Author's Response: You just may be right about that article ;3 And the conflict with it does make sense. I feel the same way!
haha. I don't know why, but I just don't feel like Jae is so poor and innocent. I mean, (spoiler alert?) I don't have any plans for him to do anything horrible, but there's something a little off about him. He feels sneaky to me.
Yeah, Edie definitely has problems with talking about anything of substance. She can blabber on and on about Quidditch and beer, but that's it. Her passion for journalism and The Female Goblin Coalition is about as personal as she gets. You're right, though; I don't think it's going to go over well when everyone realizes she's been lying.
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SARAH WHAT ARE YOU DOING?
HOW COULD YOU?
WHAT IS THE POINT OF MAKING US SUFFER SO?
This is your cue to cackle and rub your hands together like a fly. And yes, my comparison makes no sense.
Edie and Sealus bromance was adorable, though I wish she wouldn't lie to him.
I'm really happy you included some background info on Edie and her family during the war, because it was something I was really curious about. The way you made her aware of how lucky she was made me smile, because it makes her more accessible than she sometimes is. Also, why am I not surprised Lisa stayed to help?
Oh, Artie -- what was he calling Edie in for originally anyway? Just to carry around tea? He makes me laugh, with his repeated use of exclamation marks. Seriously! This type of phrasing exhausts me just by looking at it! It's just so chirpy and bright!
Obviously, I cannot believe Rose's attitude, and Oliver's even less. And of course we'll have to wait to find out why...
Naw, Edie, that is not a good idea! (I was very happy to see Hypatia back though). Kissing Jae Chang will not solve your problems. (Her reasoning as to why she kissed him makes perfect sense, and I'm happy you included that explanation).
RIGHT. If this review babbles and makes no sense, blame my sleep-deprived brain, and I don't know if I left a review on chapter but if I didn't then I will soon. If I remember.
Sorry for this messy jumble &heartsAuthor's Response: Haha, no the fly comparison totally makes sense! I do have an unhealthy obsession with awaiting peoples' reactions every time a ~*~plot twist~*~ happens. Although I wonder if this was even a surprise? Hm... I should have asked that question in the chapter.
YOU DID SAY SEALUS. At first I thought it was a ship name, but I couldn't figure it out. Except now I'm reading it as seal-us. Like the animal... anyway! I've been pretty conflicted about Edie's role in the War, and whether or not I should mention it. I wanted this story to be primarily humour, and it started out that way. But I found out the longer that I wrote, the less realistic things seemed if I didn't throw in a little angst here and there. So I'm trying to navigate between including her past and having this story take a "dark turn." I really want to keep things light, though!
I think Ward was just like EVERYONE GET HERE NOW WE NEED HELP IMMEDIATELY NOW NOW NOW without really thinking. That's something I've experienced from internship advisors; when something goes wrong, get the free labor to help out!
Oh Edie, you impulsive little thing you. Kissing Jae is not the best idea, you're entirely right Val! But she has this nasty little habit of not thinking ahead. (Edie and I may or may not share this affliction...)
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Hello! Yay, new chapterino! :)
Oh how Iíve missed Edie.
The sarcastic salute, I salute Edie for that. Because fit people just get on my nerves, stop jogging and just eat some cake for Godís sake!
Edieís inner dilemma on whether to do her job, and ruin not only Oliverís career, but undoubtedly their relationship, or to just gloss over that, and live in a cardboard box with nothing to eat and no hope of ever finding a job in journalism again, but still have her little romance with Oliver is rather complex, isnít it? Iím not even sure if all that made sense, but it did to me, so anyway.
I personally hope Edie writes her article, because we all know that Oliver will forgive her (cough, he wonít, cough, perfect opportunity to set her up with Dean or Simon! Letís not forget the Simon!)
SEAMUS! Of course Seamus had to turn up in the park, its where all the Seamusí of the world go to socialize, and have awkward encounters with their friends.
AH! SEAMUS IS A DEDIE SHIPPER! And, as we all know, what Seamus says, goes, so they have to get together now. They just have to. YOU GO SEAMUS. I didnít think it was possible, but I love him even more now.
Edie has developed a habit, of well, not lying because that makes her sound all manipulative and evil, but lets just say Ďhiding the truthí when really what she needs to do is confide in her friends, because theyíre going to get really angry when they find out all the stuff sheís been hiding from them (well, Dean will, Seamus will more than likely shrug and go make himself a cheese sandwich.
Oh Seamy, its okay, Iíll move in with you if Edie wonít, Iíll even ignore the spiders (even though I have a deadly fear of them. . . .) but anything for you, Seamy, anything.
I think I have a problem. Iím entirely too obsessed with Seamus. Itís actually a problem.
Now this is just freaky. I have been wondering ever since the last chapter what Edieís roll in the war was, and weíve just learned it now. Awh.I was hoping she would have stayed on and kicked some Death Eater butt, but I do understand that not every student was very keen on the idea of dying. Her mother did the right thing, sometimes when Iím reading DH, I wonder how on earth the parents left their children in Hogwarts, but this just shows that Edieís mother had her priorities straight!
Ah Edie and her apparating around Witch Weekly, even apparating is hilarious with this girl. Ah. . . . . .
HOLD IT! HOLD EVERYTHING!
Oliver is kissing Rose??? Well itís more like Rose kissing Oliver but still! I hate him, I hate her, I hate them both! Edie deserves more than that slime ball, I hope she writes the article and destroys him and runs off into the sunset cackling madly! Grrr... .
Awh, poor Edie. but what on earth is she going to Jae for, when Dean and Simon are both ready and available, that girl, Iíll never understand her.
Although thatís why sheís so endearing, she just mucks up so much its impossible not to love her!
Another wonderful chapterino!Author's Response: Hey, you snagged the first spot again! Nice ;3
Ugh, yes. Her dilemma is quite complex... sometimes I think almost too much so! I keep trying to simplify things in the plot when I'm writing, but there's so many things going on. So I guess this story is just going to be as chaotic as Edie's life!
I totally thought about you when I was writing Seamus in this chapter :P That bit where he realizes exactly why she's trying to get in shape has been in the plot for a while, but initially it was going to just be mentioned in passing. But I just have too much fun with Seamus! (I totally snorted at the cheese sandwich comment. Because he totally would. But it would be at Edie's flat, when she isn't there, with her bread and cheese.)
Edie's role in the war is actually important to the plot (BECAUSE I CAN'T JUST PICK ONE PLOT TWIST AND STICK WITH IT, GUH.) But it has a lot to do with why she tries to be so politically opinionated and active now.
Hahaha! I totally should have had her go to Simon, I didn't even think about that. Well, Jae is more important to the story, but I can't shake the image of Kate Nash and Simon Pegg--two gingers. Too cute. :P
Thank you so much for this review! It was so entertaining to read! I can't quite get over the cheese sandwich... ♥ Report Review
I'M BACK! And boy am I glad I'm back, because this chapter was fantabulous (I am seriously overusing that word at the moment.)
Anyway, this chapter was classically Edie brilliant! Her life really is quite depressing, isn't it? Everything seems to go wrong for her all the time - she's back to working at another terrible pub, her love life is heading in who knows what direction and she's just been evicted. If I was Edie, I would be screaming and throwing valuable items around right now. I think it's definitely a good thing Edie is able to persevere (sort of) even in the worst situations.
Aw, I just love Edie and Oliver! And I love their friendship, too, and their conversation in the two-way mirror was written perfectly. I think my favourite part of the whole chapter was when Edie tried to make excuses about why she was in the bathroom and blurted out: "Five more minutes, girls!" That was genius!
I also loved how Edie was getting so excited about the prospect of watching Oliver's Quidditch training. She is honestly one of the best, most believable and lovable and hilarious characters I have read in this site. In fact, I'm almost tempted to say the best. In fact, everything about this story is amazing, and I'm sorry if I've started sounding like a broken record, but I'm going to be telling you that in every review, I can guarantee it!
I'm only realizing now how waffly and random this review is, so I'm going to stop writing now. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Courtney:)Author's Response: Hello again! Thanks so much for coming back for another lovely review.
I'm glad that you like Edie's ability to (sort of) persevere. More than anything, she's probably just procrastinating even with acknowledging her life situation. I know I've said it before, but I really wanted readers to be able to sympathise with Edie, without feeling like she's begging for their sympathy. Y'know? I don't want her to be sad or depressed about her life situation... hence the title of the story ;3
I'm also glad that you're finding Oliver and Edie's camaraderie to be believable. I was writing this scene and was like "D'oh! She totally would have tried to crash a practise by now." But as I'm always editing, I'll be adding an earlier mentioning of this.
Gah, I just. Wow. I am so incredibly humbled that you think Edie is so well-written. Seriously, I actually hope to be a published author one day (~*~sHaRiNg My DrEaMs!!~*~) and you have no idea how encouraging this is.
Thank you!! ♥
PS: I am struggling with the next chapter (I've written, erased, and re-written the ending four times) but it's coming soon! Promise. Report Review
I have this theory why Edie didn't get to tell Blakeslee after all, and it's because you want your readers gnashing their teeth in frustration for Edie and in fury for Rose and because TEH BAD THINGS must go on for Edie. And before us readers can vent all our frustrations on you, you go and bring Oliver Wood in. And then gah it almost makes up for Edie not having that conversation with Blakeslee. Mmmmphhhmfff. Anyway.
OMG the Farting Charm really killed me. I suppose Rosie deserved it :P What really kills me is Rose running away and with each step her hoity-toity high heels emit some terrific farts. smmmasjfk;l AND BEACH QUIDDITCH. What is that. Is that played by women in bikinis? WOMEN IN BIKINIS ON BROOMSTICKS.
Am so glad you brought in a bit of Edie's family life to the story. Although it's a chaotic bit of family life in the form of Luke, Leo and Liam. I've never seen or heard of Edie's mothering side before so i was pleased to see new things about her. I wonder if the brothers will feature in later chapters, otherwise this visit would be a bit of a random unconnected event. I suppose that's normal, though.
And that's the smack that Edie bestows on Oliver. I know you were posting on the forums asking if such a matter could be taken seriously, and I'm pleased to see that you wrote it really well here. It wasn't melodramatic or farcical and so far from what I've read in later chapters, it does affect both Oliver and Edie a little, but not to dramatic extremes. So well done there :)
Anyway, whe. I'm off to reread and review the next chapter!
tehAuthor's Response: Hallo!! ♥
Edie's little trick gave me a chuckle as well, particularly the part you mentioned. I really wish I could see that xD
And yes, you've got Beach Quidditch right ;D I was poking fun at the way women's sports are widely ignored or disregarded, unless it's beach volleyball or something similar. It was my feminist (passive?)aggression coming out... I'm channeling Edie for sure!
Her brothers will be reappearing, although it's not a major plot point. You're right, it is a bit disconnected! But I thought that Edie's home life is a really important part of her character (said Captain Obvious.) It felt even more random and disconnected to be like "oh I have brothers and I had to take care of them all my life and THAT'S why I'm so bossy and opinionated about other people's lifestyles," but then not get into showing it. Plus this chapter was just a lot of fun to write... ;3
I'm so flattered that you're actually RE-reading my stories! Gah! Thank you so much for another lovely and very thoughtful review :D Report Review
I'm baaack! First thing's first, I read this in the morning and I'm drooling at the thought of iced mocha, or maybe a caramel latte? Basically, I need a no-calorie charm. Now you know what to get me for my birthday!
I loved this chapter. Edie is as funny as she ever was (Ancient chinese proverb :P) and her frustration at Wood only makes her funnier (I know it's not nice to laugh at another's misery... I've had to deal with people like that before and it's no fun).
I'm very curious at this point what happened to the Oliver who taught our Harry how to play Quidditch. Something must've happened to make him fall off the band wagon. I'm just curious what it was.
I dislike Rose. As a character, she is the kind of person who is so nice and smiley that you just KNOW she wants something. Really, nobody is that nice. I have a feeling she'll be trouble.
Oh and you ended it on a cliffhanger. I like how Edie is the kind girl that when she does something, it's like she has a sign popping out of her head saying "I'm guilty!". I wonder what she's gotten herself into this time!
Lovely chapter as usual, m'dear! Keep up the good work!Author's Response: Hello dear! Thanks so much for coming back to check out my story. Same here--I could really use one of those coffees right now! I imagine that the no-calorie charm has some kind of hiccup, like maybe it makes things taste really plain :P
Ah, yes. I finally touch on what made Oliver the way he is now (kind of) in a much later chapter... haha. But that's all I'll say for now ;D
I dislike Rose too. But she's so fun to write. It's really interesting getting into the head of a character like that.
Hahaha, that's a good point. Edie is definitely the all-signs-point-to kind of guity person... she's certainly lacking in the grace department.
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That was great. Definitely the horrible dead-end job a 20-something has to deal with. Her boss is atrocious and Witch Weekly is just sad. The cutie photographer is probably great to have around the office, haha. I love Edith, I love the way she thinks, and I love the way she deals with the people around - which she were real to be my friend! Haha.Author's Response: Oh gosh, I know. I would totally hang out with Edie, haha. And it's interesting how much just having some eye-candy around the place can make your job so much easier ;3
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Omg this was awesome! I love that you have chosen some not quite as popular characters from the hp world to use in this. Especially the hufflepuffs! But i love seamus and dean and edie. They have a really cute friendship and seem to compliment each other. I think this first chapter does an amazing job to set up both your characters and your story. I loved seeing the different friendships and that mention that hufflepuffs throw awesome parties but others werent invited which is why they think hufflepuff is boring. I think this is refreshing and fun and so far a great read. I really look forward to reading more of this story and seeing what you have in store. Great job!
~slytherinchica08~Author's Response: Hiya! Thanks for the review!
It's true: 'Puffs are sadly overlooked in fanfiction, and oftentimes pegged as vapid or obtuse. But I think they need some more love! I wanted to take the aforementioned ideas of Hufflepuff and kind of turn it around, and give them this secret glamorous-party lifestyle that others just didn't know about because they weren't allowed :P
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LOVE IT. I like that these are characters we know of but never got to really know and then a brilliant new OC. And we get to meet them plastered out of their right minds - AWESOME. Although, I'm fairly certain Lisa was a Ravenclaw? I could have sworn that.. but no matters. Great first chapter!Author's Response: Yes, Lisa Turpin is a minor Ravenclaw character! A lot of the characters in here are canon, like Justin, Theo and Rose (the last two you will meet in the next chapter.) I feel like they all deserved to have their stories told, too! :3
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I really liked this chapter, but the reason i'm writing is that it seems the letters a-s-s have been replaced by 'eyebrow'
Like glass is gleyebrow or sassily is seyebrowily. Was this you or is this an april fool's joke?:p i'm leaning towards the latter, I think ;) anyway i'm off to read the next chapter, hope edie isnt brought intotoo much of a scandal!Author's Response: hahaha, I didn't notice that! It is, of course, the April Fool's joke. I thought my story was safe xD I will definitely need to do some more reading. Report Review
Oh no; poor Edie!!
It's bad enough she's had her privacy invaded, and the whole business with Rose and the article and Oliver and her job and EVERYTHING, and now she's been evicted?!? I really, really hope things start looking up for her soon; I'm getting really worried!!
PLEASE update soon! ♥Author's Response: I was worried about the eviction just seeming unrealistic. Like, there's already been so much that's gone wrong with her. But at the same time it felt unrealistic that she could survive off such little money, and the next logical srep would be losing her flat.
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AAAh!! Another cliffie!! MUST. READ. MORE. NOW!
*Scurries off to next chapter*
(By the way, Seamus' line: "I'm an Auror!"? Hilarious!)Author's Response: Hello again! Glad you thought that was funny ;3 Thanks! Report Review
I finally got around to reading this! And much like you said when reading "Twin Wands", I did start this chapter once but never finished it!
I love Edie. She's such a strong female lead and has this ability to not put up with any of the nonesense Dean and Seamus bring to the table as her best friends. And she finally met Wood. Which was so funny! The poor guy has no idea what he just walked into.
You have a way with taking these situations that for any decent girl would be absolutely mortifying and making Edie pass through with such... I'd say grace but it's more like composure. You took your time to examine who you want this character to be and it shows!
I can't find anything to comment on as far as grammar or writing is concerned. This is a very good story and I'll do my best to keep up with it! Good job! You make Nano-mommy proud! *hugs*Author's Response: Yayy! Thanks, NaNo-mum!
Haha, you're right... "grace" definitely isn't the word I would choose either! I think she's just resigned to the fact that she's horribly awkward and bad things happen to her. It's like it's to be expected at this point xD
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okay so i actually had a review written in here because i read this like 3 hours ago, but then i just randomly left it unfinished and then went to other tabs, and got stuck on tumblr for like an hour and im not sure what happened but i closed google chrome and THEN I REALIZED I HADN'T SENT THE REVIEW YET SO - *SAD*
yeah so im sorry you ain't getting a nice long one. im not typing it again. ugh lyf.
but basically i just talked about how edie's life sucks with the lack of job and house, and HOW OLIVER SOOO LIKES HER! I MEAN THATS OBVIOUSLY WHAT HE WANTS TO TALK ABOUT HAHA SUCK ON THAT, ROSE.
and ehermm...ahh yes, so i think its literally so cute that edie actually bought the paper that has then (almost) kissing OKAY THEY KISSED OKAY. I BELIEVE IT. THEY WERE GOING TO ANYWAY.
yeah so CUTENESS.
also something else i wanted to say...
i think there should be more on the actually article. like say, rose finds it, or someone else at edie's workplace find it, and they're like "rose, you're interviewing him, ask him who the mystery girl is." and SO EVERYONE WANTS TO KNWO WHO IT IS, BUT ONLY EDIE KNOWS ITS EDIE. and then since rose isn't actually the one takign the interview - edie has to ask who the mystery girl is, but then she cant and just idk you're the write so PLOT TWIST.
also, i just really love yuo. and all the magical devices you slip in. i mean, with all the two way mirrors, and like the magical pubs, and 'awkwardly asking edie out for a drink'.
its like : SIMON = * AGGRESSIVELY ASKS OUT EDIE*
OH RIGHT! i remember now! i had written a bunch of ediver puns. like jumping into the ediver of shipping and somethign like that. idk. it was good though.
yeah thats all i have to say...but YAY UPDATE! maybe ples update soon again sil vous plait?
okays bye.Author's Response: Ugh, I think I spent roughly 43872971 hours on tumblr yesterday, so I totally understand.
I decided to have Edie buy the paper because I wanted to show how she is with guys. I go on to talk about it more in the next chapter, but this was a little preview. She looks down on Rose for getting attached too soon, but look at her going off and buying a copy of the magazine! That's definitely getting a little attached, isn't it? ;3
Oh, this picture is actually a huge plot point. And I want to talk more about it, but I can't! Sorry! It will all be revealed... like nine chapters down the road xD
bahahaha the Ediver of Shipping. I will think on some puns and get back to you. Because what's better than a pun? (Answer: more puns.)
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I can not tell you how much I love you right at this moment! Speedy updates are right up there on my list of favourite things, along with chocolate and Seamus!
Aah, Edie once again works in a seedy establishment, except this one is new and improved, with more cobwebs and a deaf landlady! And Rita Skeeter managed to worm her way back into journalism? That little bug (geddit? Bug? Because shes a beetle? No?)
Simon sounds like me in man squib form! I too would have a panic attack if I lost my parakeet in my flat. And I love the part where he never misses an opportunity to hit on Edie, even when he is badgering her to pay her late rent.
Simon, I salute you.
I loved the little dig at Rose! We all know girls like that, you know the ones who are already planning their wedding when theyíve only been out with a guy once. Or the ones who profess their love even though theyíve just met the bloke.. . . . . they get on my nerves. . . . .
Oh Edie, such a classy girl. Could you not have, oh I donít know, left the loo before answering your phone/mirror? And Olivers response, just so awkward and funny. . . .ah. . . .
Does Edie not realise that one day sheís going to have to tell Oliver the whole truth, and that heís going to be really annoyed. Although I am hoping for this novel to be different and for Edie and Oliver to fight for some really mental reason! Like, I donít know, Dean/Jae/Simon/all three bursting in at a really crucial moment and professing their love for Edie, to which Oliver gets really annoyed (as the attention is not on him) and he flounces out rather dramatically, leaving Edie free to date Dean! (Seamus is mine, if Edie so much as tries to steal my man, things are going to get ugly. Just telling you now)
Although that would make an interesting plot twist!
So many ship possibilities! Will it be Edie/Oliver, Edie/Dean, Edie/Jae, Edie/Simon, Edie/ Seamus, Edie/Justin (it could happen!)
Edie fangirling all over Amelia Jones was so funny! Yeah Edie, just gatecrash Olivers practice, that wouldnít be odd at all! Although for Edie, that would be considered relatively normal. . . . .
Scrubbing toilets for self-realisation. . . .where do you come up with this stuff! *laughs uncontrollably*
The photograph! Eeeep! I hate the ground Oliver walks on, but it was so romantic! Just like something out of a romance novel, and lets face it, Edie needs some happy in her life, and if Oliver makes her happy, Iím okay with it (for now, but I still expect the whole ĎDean saves the dayí thing and then they elope and live in the Bahamas.)
Seamusí passwords. . . . oh that boy . . . . I probably canít type them here with the whole Ďkeep it 12+í rule, but they were pure genius. GENIUS I SAY!
Simonís howler! So funny and then at the end ĎMY OFFER FOR A DRINK STILL STANDSí. Yeah, because the girl you just evicted will totally want to go out on a date with you. Not. But you canít blame a guy for trying, and that is why I am now a ĎDedieí and a ĎSidieí shipper. Oh yes, they now have names.
Poor Edie. I feel like breaking out the violins at this point, because the poor girl has to go live with an engaged couple (who wonít want her there, I donít care how nice a person Lisa is, Justin will not be impressed) and one of them (ahem, Justin) enjoys roaming around starkers. Nice. Really nice.
Another wonderfully wonderful chapter, sorry for the incredibly long, ramble-y review (Iíve been working on the new and improved length!)
DEDIE AND SIDIE FOREAR! You didn't even have to ask that question, ship that is completely off the wall and won't work? Mine!
Update soon! ♥Author's Response: SUPER-LONG REVIEW WHOA! :D Thanks so much!
Simon was inspired by my friend's landlord. I've never met him, but he sounds hilarious. And I named him Simon in this story because I couldn't picture anybody but Simon Pegg in that scene! xD
Well, I certainly know in *my* mind that Edie will have to come out with everything. She's probably so in denial and so confused about what just happend to the way she feels about Oliver (honestly, she loathed the guy just last week) that she's putting it out of her mind. Although your 'ship possibilities are very interesting! xD I can tell you right now that there will absolutely not be any Edie/Seamus. Rest assured ;3
Bahaha Sidie. Sounds like spidey, yes? That's funny. It was never my intention to include him in the story. Originally I had just written him as "my landlord" and not gone into detail about being a Squib, and Peony. But I hate doing that! I love the opportunity to explore super-minor roles. Thus Simon was born. I dunno if he'll have another appearance in the story--we will see!
I churned out the entire next chapter in my coffee-induced craze yesterday. But the ending is awful. Like, horrible. So I'm going to do some tweaking and then hopefully will post within a week!
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All I have to say is that this chapter was absolutely hilarious. I had to shove my fist into my mouth to keep from bursting into laughter otherwise I would've gotten busted.
Anyway, the parts that I found absolutely hilarious were these parts:
"Only once or twice..." He quirks an eyebrow disbelievingly and I add, "...a month."
And the part where she asks Oliver to talk to Amelia Jones and he says "hanging up now Lennox." I was so amused by that and you can really tell that Edie and Oliver have become really close friends.
I also loved the parts where she started guessing a new passwords. I lost it at Veela tits personally.
The ending was pretty funny too. I couldn't stop grinning because it seemed exactly like something me and my bestfriend would do if we were in Edie's position.
Anyway, great chapter!Author's Response: Aww, I'm glad you thought it was so funny! I didn't know if the whole deal with Edie writing to Amelia would do well. Originally it wasn't in the story at all, but then when I went back and edited "The Proposition," I added it to the story. I was nervous that seeing it in this chapter would be too out-of-the-blue for people who hadn't read the edit!
I'm glad you liked the bit with the passwords ;3 (But please make sure your language in reviews is 12+)
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How are you such an amazing writer? Every single chapter in this story is just so perfect - your characters, your descriptions, your plot, the random details and funny lines that just make me start laughing like a lunatic. This story honestly deserves a Dobby and I am so glad you wrote it!
There was so much to love about this chapter that I don't really know where to start. The second half of the interview was great, of course, and I loved how Oliver mentioned his relationship with Katie. I don't know, it made him seem so much more real, somehow. And also took me back to the Hogwarts days...sigh.
I love how freely Edie and Oliver were able to talk - or rather, debate - about Quidditch. They really are two amazing characters and they have awesome chemistry! I still don't know how you do it...
Edie's awkward little lines like 'pish posh' are brilliant. I actually laughed out loud when I read that, merely because I could imagine Edie sitting there and saying that. And although we didn't see much of Seamus in this chapter, he was amazing! He always brings so much humour to the chapter and I LOVE the relationship Edie has with Dean and Seamus.
This was a perfect chapter - I loved every moment of it!
Courtney:)Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoy my story enough to think it deserves a Dobby :3
I think that a long-term relationship like that makes total sense for Oliver. He's so devoted to Quidditch, as we see in the books, that I imagine he pours himself into everything that he views as important. He's a really adamant person, which is why he lasted so long with Katie.
Yesss Seamus. It's hard not to include him in every chapter xD
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So we back to Edie on her mission how exciting! Haha so weíre already thrown into the drama with her having to get the drinks, then spotting Wood, then Rose jumping out of her chair, I knew this chapter was going to be a good one! Thank god Edieís a good liar because Rose would be on the warpath!
He asked to see Edie! Aw how cute! No Rose, how could you say she had diarrhoea! Thatís just mean, and embarrassing, Oliverís going to find her even weirder now! Poor Wood I agree he did act very awkwardly. Yay Edie though, she should become a professional prankster it would be a much better job than having to work with Rose, at least she got her chance at revenge though.
I liked their conversation it seemed as if they got closer. Oliver speaking his dad in the past tense made me wonder about him as well. Then Edie announcing she watches quidditch, and Oliverís shock about that was great.
Hahaha and we meet Edieís brothers, they seem just like her being all lively and loud. I really liked Liam and the way he was such an enthusiastic quidditch fan. I liked how they all had names which began with the letter l, the alliteration seemed to suite them. Even though Edie doesnít want children I think she would make a great mum and it would be fun to have her as one, because she seems as if she would always be up for a laugh.
A brief thing you werenít consistent in capitalising the m of mum, so itís probably best to keep it all lower or all upper case.
They ended up in a strip club? I never would have expected that! I agree with Edie those three words would make me give all my feminist beliefs too! Haha I agree the brothers are definitely spirited, and the way the stripper was offering a dance to Edie, poor her! This day just keeps on getting stranger and stranger for her! Luckily she managed to get out of it, though it would have been funny to have seen her reaction to it.
Wood tells Edie not to smoke when heís drunk out of his mind, talk about double standards! I did feel bad for Edie having to see her brother get a lap dance that must have been awkward! Then her slapping Oliver, he did deserve it but he seemed so pitiful after wards!
Another great chapter!
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I couldn't just let Rose NOT embarrass Edie. She knew that Edie couldn't reveal herself, so she took advantage of it because she's just that spiteful. Edie was feeling spiteful too, and Rose got SOME comeuppance, at least.
Yez, Oliver was indeed trying to ask Edie out for a pint. But his awkward tendencies, and the whole issue of her being a "professional journalist," made him all tongue-tied.
Liam is totally my favorite too. I just imagine him as this really serious kid who's horribly socially undeveloped because of it. But then he gets around his brothers and that mischievous side comes out too. I know Edie's not allowed to pick favorites, but I am ;D
So the Mum thing. My grammar skills are escaping me right now, but I thought that if you were saying "my mom" or "my mum" you wouldn't capitalize it. But if you're saying "Hey, Mum" because most people wouldn't call parents by first name, then it is capitalized? Because to them, Mum is a nick-name and thus a name? Right? I think? Maybeee?
OMG I hadn't even thought about that. Oliver telling Edie not to smoke while he's completely blitzed. Hmmm. An interesting double-standard indeed...
I know, I totally don't think she should have hit him. Even if he was being a jerk. :P
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I don't think I've ever told you exactly how much I like Lisa. She's collected, she's nice, she's modest, she's even pretty -- basically, she's perfect, but she doesn't realise it. She's also Edie's polar opposite, which I find makes their scenes together even more fun.
Deamusdie (because, admit it, it looks grammatically interesting) action, heehee. I'd missed that.
I cannot believe Edie referred to Lisa as a particularly scrumptious-looking, dead weasel. She really is a petty human being, isn't she? Particularly when this was supposed to be a compliment...
Hmm. Out of curiosity, how does Edie know Fleur? Is it because Fleur would be a famous Weasley after the war or are there other reasons that are relevant to the story?
HERE COMES OLIVER. Here come Edie's troubles too, hooray!
don't know a good beer from a broomstick Well, I'd like to see you fly on a can of beer or try to drink a broomstick. I wonder which one would be most painful!
I've just had a lovely mental image of Oliver Wood singing I Will Always Love You, bahaha. That and the centaur in Belize are going to follow me for life.
HAHAHAHA "I think you're in the wrong loo!"
Oliver drunk, I'll say it again, makes my entire day.
After this first kiss, I've got to say my expectations for the awkwardness of the next one are high. I hope there's a lot of nose and teeth bumping, and a lot of stammering.
I like the way Rose and Edie are so different. I wonder how Edie can ever have thought that they were something close to friends -- those two are like night and day. Knowing what happens further on, it's no surprise Edie can't stand Rose at all.
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I'm glad that you like Lisa. I know she seems too perfect but I swear she REALLY IS BASED OFF OF A REAL PERSON I KNOW WHOSE LIFE IS SO STUPIDLY PERFECT IT DRIVES ME INSANE. I do want her to have faults, though--one of them being that she's a bit of a pushover, another that she puts Justin above almost everything else in her life. Of course the person I know IRL is even more perfect in that neither of these weaknesses apply to her ;P
Deamusedie, hahaha. What about Deamudie? It rolls of the tongue quite nicely...
I think Edie would remember her from the Tri-Wizard Tournament. I also imagine Fleur to be this pop-culture celebrity in a Princess of Wales kind of way. She's beautiful and thin and famous for the "right reasons." (I'm not even going to get into that.) But I'd imagine that she's a bit of a celebrity at this point.
It's funny, at the time I was writing this chapter, I was actually decent friends with the girl who inspired Rose. haha. I think that L. turning crazy IRL inspired a lot of Rose's character--I never intended her to be so malicious and spiteful. But now that she is I love her so much more! :D
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Hello! I'm back again for the second of my two reviews as a prize for winning Hufflepuff's Writer's Duel!
I'm still really enjoying this story and the little developments you're adding. The relationship between Edie and Oliver certainly is rocky, which, of course, just makes it all the more interesting. I'm finding that Oliver is a very difficult character to figure out- he has a very rough personality on the outside, but we know nothing (or at least very little) about how he feels on the inside. He lets little bits show through, like his comment about preferring to be alone, and his long-term relationship with Katie Bell, but the majority he keeps hidden. It makes me wonder how on earth Edie is going to be able to write an entire article on his personality.
I still feel that he's mostly "good", that through his rough patches he's a nice guy. I'm having mixed feelings about the angle Edie wants to write in her next article... Though I understand why she's angry with him, I don't think she should be digging solely to find the nasty parts of his personality. Who knows... Perhaps the time she spends with him will make her hesitate before publishing another negatively-toned article.
By the way, I think that you included a fantastic detail when you wrote that Oliver wanted to get back on the field as soon as possible, even though he knew that it might mean possible permanent damage to his limbs. It did a great job of showing the depth of his love and fascination with Quidditch, without coming right out and saying that Quidditch is his life. I just hope that he won't reach the point of permanent damage... Enjoyment is great and all, but what about afterwards, when you can no longer do what you love at all? (I do doubt that you'll let it get to that point, though).
This chapter was particularly interesting because Oliver was very adament that he wasn't going to discuss the Christmas charity event. I was curious as to why he'd brought it up- he obviously has a very low opinion of the types of articles that Witch Weekly and just about every other magazine writes and I doubt that they typically write derogatory articles about celebrities like him.
I really liked the inclusion of her brothers. They seemed like really fun people (especially when her oldest younger brother grabbed her from behind), though I definitely agreed with Edie about the whole club idea. I understand why she went "mother-part-two" on them- I probably would have done the same with my own younger brothers.
All in all, I think that you're continuing to do a great job with this story. I'm very conflicted over the characters- you've done such a great job of humanizing them without trying to make it obvious that that's what you're trying to do. (By the way, I'm curious about Dean's reaction when she got dressed up for the restaurant... He seemed oddly quiet). Congrats for winning! :DAuthor's Response: Hello again! ♥
Yes, Oliver is quite hard to understand isn't he? It's one of the dangers of being somebody who has been misunderstood by the main character. It's safe to say that Edie has wrongfully judged him. But we're in that state of limbo where we're not entirely sure exactly what Oliver is like, so he is difficult even for the reader to understand. I've been trying to find the balance between sufficiently mysterious and too vague. Hopefully he's not the latter!
I'm having mixed feelings about her article too! haha. She's a very impulsive person, and she felt like everything in her life was falling apart so she's decided to take it out on him. Of course some of the bad things that happened are his fault. But she's so angry and quick-tempered, and sees this article as an outlet for her frustrations, that she hasn't really stopped to think. Then as she gets to know him better, she begins having second thoughts. She's in a very rough place right now. She has to choose between the chance to finally advance her career, or acknowledging that she could be entirely wrong about this person, and not writing the second article.
Yeah, I liked that bit about Oliver wanting to get "back on the broom" too. I guess he and Edie share their impulsive qualities, eh? ;3 Not to mention how much he values and loves Quidditch.
I think I understand your comment about the St. Mungo's charity, and I hope I'm answering it correctly xD Edie thought that she was going to be doing this huge, earth-shattering move when she decided to try and expose his decision not to donate. But when she got to the interview, and he was the one who brought it up, she realized that he's been asked time and time again. He's consistently refused to comment on it. Clearly he doesn't value a lot of pop-culture journalism, as he doesn't even read his own publicity. He has a bad taste in his mouth because everybody has tried to figure out "the answer" of the donation issue. And then Edie had to face that her "crusade" against him wasn't this big unique idea, like she thought it was. She kind of views herself as this vigilante, in some ways. A big part of this story is her realization that she's not as politically charged as she thinks. I hope that makes sense! I want to give a good explanation but I also don't want to spoil anything.
As the eldest sibling myself, I feel very protective over my sister. Without getting too personal, there was--and still is--a lot of pressure from my parents to be "the good example" for her, at times to the point of their negligence to me. So while some readers disagree with Edie's harsh reaction to Oliver, I totally understand and even sympathise. I know what it's like to try and direct a younger sibling away from something harmful, and only to be laughed at and called a stick in the mud. I don't think slapping him was the best decision she's made, but I can understand why she felt so frustrated.
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