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Review #26, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Trouble on the Hogwarts Express

20th January 2015:
Her anger at Sirius was justified but she also doesn't understand his relationship with Regulus. However, I can't see Sirius attacking Regulus. He hates him, yes, but that's his brother. I think if they fought against each other in the war it would be hard on both of them because Regulus did change his mind about the Dark Lord. He cared for Sirius and in turn Sirius cared for Regulus. It was both in their own silent way. I don't think he would have hurt him. I think he would have probably hexed him but he wouldn't have killed him and he wouldn't have done any major damage to him.

Of course if he had gotten to his brother in time and changed his mind earlier and wasn't so prideful they could have had some sort of relationship again.

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Review #27, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Christmas Day

20th January 2015:
Swoon. That gift was amazing. I loved the sincerity. That's what I found myself coming back to and thinking about writing in the review. The prank was cute, the interactions and breakfast but the sincerity between Lily and James, and William and everyone else at the table and Mrs. Potter with the girls. That was powerful. It struck a chord with me. They fight darkness with the light, with love. And I think for the most part they don't realize that's what they're doing.

Author's Response: So for about the last six months I've been going back and forth with the desire to come back and finish book two. I've been talking to Dan about it a bit, actually just this morning, and nothing could have made me feel more sure about that decision than seeing these and you and I can't even tell you how my face looked when I saw 'dirty deeds' on the review name!!! I can't wait to take the time to give these reviews a proper reply, but have been in heaven reading each one!!!

IVE MISSED YOU. I can't wait to see what you think about the end of this book!!

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Review #28, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Surviving the First Defy

20th January 2015:
Why couldn't Bellatrix just be killed? I mean the way she dies is epic but uh, I hate her. I really do!

That was intense but see I have this inkling feeling the Potter's won't be around much longer. J, why are you doing this to me? I could be wrong. They could die from old age and all the curses that hit them but I don't think so. It's going to be devastating. Really. I felt myself starting to tear up at this chapter.

Especially because and I know this is a small thing but Peter. You make Peter a human here which I appreciate because he was strong, he was part of the pact, but then he wanted something more once they left Hogwarts. I wonder how you'll transition into that because I don't think I've ever seen anyone do that before. He's either omitted from the story or clumsy as heck or Sirius and James are beyond rude to him you can't blame him in other stories for joining the Dark Lord.

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Review #29, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Holding On To You

20th January 2015:
Bellatrix, you witch! Grrr...

Honestly, the wedding should have been the calm before the storm but I think Bellatrix appearing and grabbing Lily and threatening to kill them all (because that's what Bella does) was the calm before the storm. This is what they've been waiting for. And what we've been waiting for.

For one, they're going to soon probably find out about Aleck. For another, Dumbledore and Minerva knew (or figured) they would be attacked or it wasn't safe for them. I know two Aurors are there but still. This is the moment that defines for the two of them the war is real and it doesn't matter how old or young you are, they're still coming for you.

If anything I see James now starting to worry about his parents. Are you going to kill his parents? I see it happening towards the end of the story maybe. They're going to get attacked for who they are and for James rejecting the Dark Lord.

I know Belle won't die. At least not yet because she's going to have to be in your sequel and depending on how long you go, she would reunite with Sirius, Remus and Peter. I see her dying after that. I also see her ending up in France for some reason, at least for a little while. Not necessarily with her parents but hiding out.

She'll be completely broken over Alice, Lily, James, and Sirius. When Lily and James die are you going to show Petunia's reaction? That I would LOVE. It would, I think, be filled with pain but also distaste for Harry even though he is only a baby when she gets him.

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Review #30, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap When Past Collides With Present

20th January 2015:
“As long as it didn’t have anything to do with her cooking, I could have all the opinions in the world.”

^ HA!

Fantastic chapter. Where do I begin? First, with Sirius trying to reassure Belle that everything would be okay with story he told her that made me giggle a little right there. Or should I talk about her parents?

I was expecting them to curse her. I really was. I actually thought Belle would make it through dinner and then give it to them. I honestly wanted it to be longer because they were just so cold and calculated. To see more of their anger and disgust would have been great. I know Sirius wanted to help her but Belle needed to fight her own battle. I'm glad she did.

And the kiss. One word: HOT.

Now, Vernon the bore. This man just gets more boring as the years go on, doesn't he? And Petunia the terrible. Har-har. I commend James for making it almost through dinner with him. Who needs a car when you can vanish in thin air and go place to place or grab onto a can or whatever and go from one country to the other.

Calling him poor. James is so rich he could take money baths. Of course Vernon is so large it would take James and Sirius's fortune to let him take a money bath.

That was mean, wasn't it?

All well. Oh, and let's talk about Lily thinking about being naked around James. They haven't even been together that long! Makes sense though. Remember when you were a teenager and your emotions seemed right on point and you were convinced this boyfriend and that boyfriend was the one? Of course she doesn't know James is the elusive one but still, shows how young she really is.

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Review #31, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap No Turning Back

20th January 2015:
Oh, woah, woah! Belle is opening up to the idea of her and Sirius. Well, well, well that's saucy.

I love the Potters and strong fiery Alice and James and Lily together. Sorry this review is so short. It's hard tapping away on my phone and I secretly want to finish reading this entire story today.

My name is Deeds and I'm addicted to Before They Fall.

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Review #32, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Train Rides and Memory Lane

20th January 2015:
I thought the chapter was a bit of a filler but I always enjoy glimpses into the past of Lily and Petunia's relationship. I have a sister and sometimes having a sister is hard. Especially when you're two different people and do not have the same outlook on life. So to see their interactions I can kind of tailor it to my own relationship.

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Review #33, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Baby Steps

20th January 2015:
J, I loved the shift here! First, Lily figuring out about Remus. As they say, "Give the girl a silver dollar," for a job well done! It wasn't dramatic, overdone, just perfect. It was what worked in their relationship.

Now, Sirius and Belle. Her feelings for him are growing and I can see why but man. I have to feel bad for them. I know France is going to be horrible for her and Sirius will have her back but I can't shake this feeling that something is going to go terribly wrong. That might also be because of Lily/James and the plan Bellatrix and the rest have set out for them.

Such darkness and sadness in all of their lives and yet they are able to power through. It's like McGonagall said, it doesn't make it easier. They're strong and they have each other. They have the ability to feel different emotions and fight for what is right. Just wish they didn't have to and I think what I've realized from all of this is that they HAD too. They didn't have a choice.

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Review #34, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Breaking Curfew

20th January 2015:
I'm actually happy you didn't repeat the conversation with Belle and Sirius even though she told him more than the others. I was more concerned with Sirius's reaction and not hearing it over or seeing her cry again. I'm thrilled with his reaction to it as well. I didn't want that cliche I'll take care of you or he would try to kiss her or comfort her or something out of character. Yeah, Sirius will take care of her. We already know that. But what shakes him to his core is this pureblood purity stuff and parents abusing their children since he experienced that. He had every right to walk away from her because his anger and his hatred and his pain, not even her pain, but his, is very real and volitive.

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Review #35, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap A Day for Madness

20th January 2015:
For a second I thought something steamy was going down.


I think this was part filler, part the tables are turning on the dark side of things. Clearly they're still at school living their lives so little moments like this, Quidditch, injuries, fleeting conversations are necessary but man sometimes I just wish what was going on, on the other end.

But in your viewpoint. Although I'm sure it's just muggle hating and torture so you wouldn't be able to write 40 chapters on that. I'm getting sidetracked.

Bellatrix is a sicko. She really is. She makes my skin crawl. I think she would have married the Dark Lord if he ever needed to get married. Or she would bare his children if he ever needed children. And that just grosses me out my lunch might come back up.

Shudders to think of the two of them romantically.

I liked how Lily made her decision. It took a small push from her friends but I think she was getting there on her own anyway. Finally though, Lily and James are together. I've realized the focus has sort of shifted from everyone else to them and I guess that's to be expected. Would be nice to see little interactions with Sirius/Belle. I'm sure she's going to tell Sirius her secret soon. Or even more Alice/Frank/Moody.

I just have an Alice/Frank obsession that needs to be filled. You've given me an idea for a one-shot. Shame on you!

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Review #36, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Not Just Friends

20th January 2015:
It hadn’t been until after he’d removed all the hair that he realized it would only make a difference if he played Quidditch naked.

^ Good golly. I tried to convince my boyfriend to shave his legs too for sports and he is not easily swayed, says he's not a polo swimmer. Haha, I just want him to do it so I can make fun of him. I'm a bad girlfriend.

Anyway, yes! The feels! I found myself beaming as I read this chapter and it happened so...quietly. No loud fireworks or crazy expectations. Heck, I thought they wouldn't get together until chapter twenty or the end at least. I liked this better. It was quiet. It was thought out and James still tried to control himself, as much as a man of his age can.

I thought the conversation they had of "friends" but "not just friends," was a classic. We've all been there trying to DTR our relationships or non-relationships. It was very real. I suppose that's what I'm trying to say. Relateable.

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Review #37, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Build Up

20th January 2015:
Oh no! J, why couldn't you spare the owl. Hmph! But Petunia wrote back to her? I'm guessing it's going to be something horrid or maybe it won't be. Or maybe it'll be her telling Lily she's engaged or something and she doesn't want her there. Or that she's been seeing things, odd things, bad things.

Or I'm just looking into this too much because that's what I do.

And uh, Alek. Gross. Seriously, he's a slimy character. Anyway, I thought the potion scene was very well thought out. I actually quite enjoyed reading it! Normally I skim those parts because I can tell you for a fact I would not have been good at potions. I burn everything I cook.

...I still eat it though.

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Review #38, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Revelations

20th January 2015:
supporters of the Dark Lord’s in Easter Europe

^ pretty sure you mean Eastern unless the Death Eater's like to celebrate easter. With those little marshmallows that are shaped like bunnies, oh peeps! And they wear bonnets and...I'm going to stop myself there.

So the hint you gave us in the last chapter I was right sort of. I never think of miscarriage because I just don't like to think about it. I know too many people that have experienced that in real life so it was heart breaking to read her story here. I think because I guessed she was pregnant in the last chapter it didn't impact me as much like other scenes have, which is fine with me to be completely honest.

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Review #39, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Hogsmeade

20th January 2015:
Finally a chapter without bawling my eyes out. I have to stop reading now but I'll pick this up again later. Oh the feels! I just love their love even though they aren't in love exactly yet.

Was Belle pregnant? That's what I'm thinking. Or she hurt someone. I'm trying to figure out. I'm pretty sure you told me before but I have a bad memory! It wouldn't surprise me if she was. I'm interested in what route you're going to go. I could be completely wrong but her reaction to what was happening revealed a little something something.

The attraction between Belle and Sirius is obvious. They like each other. Great. But for some reason I don't see them together. I just don't. Obviously Sirius wouldn't care about whatever it is she is hiding but I don't think she's ever going to be able to let it go.

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Review #40, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap The Order

20th January 2015:
There was never a thing wrong with extra precautions.

^ That sounds kind of off to me. Doesn't read well.

Oh Minnie! I'm still a little emotional from the last chapter I might have to take a break and stop reading but I really don't want to. Poor Minnie, calling her Gryffindors her children. You know I think the way you captured Dumbledore is perfect because he changed after the first war. Lily and James were dead, Sirius was in Azkaban, Peter was a traitor (though no one knew), Remus was barely living and all these other students of his were dead but there was no option to not fight. So he had to protect Harry. That's why I think he was so adamant about him trying to stay out of everything from the beginning and even when he started Hogwarts. He was just a young boy whose life could have easily ended any number of times. Lily, James, etc, they're still young as well. Like she said, they're children but in both generations they were all forced to grow up too quickly. I think he did a better job of trying to protect their son and the rest of the students the second time because he knew more of what he was dealing with.

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Review #41, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Constant Vigilance

20th January 2015:
More than a few glistened with the tears that often fell when you realized that life doesn’t care whether you’re ready to grow or not.

^ You have me on an emotional roller coaster. I cried from that point on even though the letter from the Potter's made me chuckle and Moody. I just can't seem to handle this story! I think you're the first person to ever convince me of this time period. You and I both know I write (or did write) mostly humor. Ridiculous things half the time but this, this is fantastic. It's everything I would want for Lily and James (and of course the others) story. I feel like I know them, is that weird? As if I'm making a connection to them. They're real and I think that's amazing because I've never really been convinced of Lily in fan fiction. She's always so snooty and rude to James and James is always so beyond extra it makes it hard to see them together at times. This story creates that for me.

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Review #42, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap One of Theirs

20th January 2015:
So many emotions. I think I'm just completely worn out from this chapter and the last I can't even begin to imagine how you wrote either. I don't even want to touch on Frank, Alice and Augusta because thinking of them makes me too sad.

So instead I'll talk about Bellatrix and how you completely creep me out. One minute i'm crying. The next I'm laughing. While others I want to hide behind my covers and speed read because that girl is dark. Your imagery had me shaking. That's a compliment to your skill but not good on my end. It's a good thing I'm reading this in the morning. You and Dan like to creep me out when it comes to Bellatrix.

Give me nightmares.

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Review #43, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap No More Secrets

20th January 2015:
Oh lord. I just cried a lot. just call me Kim Kardashian because my tears were hideous. Lord, J, man. I wasn't expecting that. From the opening of the chapter I knew Sirius had done something and he had gotten into a car accident but I didn't connect the two together. Probably more my fault since I didn't re-read the beginning.

James's reaction was intense. I was surprised he reacted that way because if Lily can't blame Sirius then why should he? I know it was probably more of the heat of the moment and he is incredibly attached to her but that's his brother. Of course James doesn't strike me as the type if Sirius or any of the other's were to do something wrong he would go to the authorities or someone. Especially if they killed someone or did something just as bad.

I just feel pure doom is coming next. I reckon it'll be Voldemort's attack they were discussing in the previous chapter. I forgot to mention in my last review but you write the darkness so well. I was creeped out by Bellatrix and man I am currently OBSESSED with Lucius. You have no idea. After what, two years, two and a half years? I don't know how long it has been but he was my inspiration to write something new again. I think we share the same brain because all I could sense from him in the last chapter was his cowardice. i truly believe even though he was for blood purity and backed the Dark Lord and I'm sure at first it was exciting for him, he was a coward through and through. I think it partly has to do with love because out of all the Death Eater's it was only Lucius, Severus and Narcissa that were capable of love.

Oh and Augusta! I loved the mention of her. Truly made me laugh. I miss writing her. Oh and Alice! For a moment I drifted off and heard her in my head and a slither of a story emerged but the chapter sunk me back in and I can't remember what it was about.

Ugh, addicting! How am I going to get anything done today?

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Review #44, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot, and Prongs

20th January 2015:
It was nice to know that, even though Alice and Frank’s feelings for one another were clear, Sirius cared enough to not want Alice hearing about some other guy liking her.

^ Loved that part.

Hey! Hey! It's been awhile. Excuse the short review but it's hard to copy and paste on this phone of mine. Wow, I will be honest I don't remember the first few chapters entirely. I know there's more to Belle's story and we have even scratched the surface yet so I don't think I have to go back.

Long chapter but easy read. Your words just flow wonderfully I find myself at the end when I feel like I just started at the beginning. More than anything what I enjoyed about this chapter was the friendship/family aspect because they're all very close their friendship moves on to a deeper level.

I want to know more about Belle of course but I think I'm just as interested in Sirius. Yeah, we may know his story and everyone elses but there's just a sense of him, his emotions, he's such a dimensional character that I can't get enough of him.

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Review #45, by Ginny Padfoot The Force That Drives Us

16th January 2015:
That was a really good book that you wrote!
I loved each and every chapter of it and i can't wait to see the next book.

*Ginny Padfoot*

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Review #46, by fishfingers and custard The Force That Drives Us

4th January 2015:
This was possibly the best written fanfiction that I have ever read. Good job, and thank you for writing it.

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Review #47, by Snuffles The Force That Drives Us

1st January 2015:
Oh my. Wow. I simply don't know what else to say. I mean, I could yell at you until I'm hoarse for killing off Belle, but there wouldn't be much good in doing that. We'd probably just both end up extremely frustrated. (You know this is the second story I've read in which Sirius' girlfriend dies at the hands of Bellatrix shortly before graduating? Geez, y'all need to let up on the poor guy a bit. I think he's been through enough.)

But since I must accept it, I will say that I thought Belle died beautifully. She never lost her sass, her wit, or her courage. She faced it head on. She didn't let Bellatrix break her. And for that, I admire her. And you also nailed Sirius' reaction, imo. Watching him break like that, especially after seeing the two of them just be so gosh darn perfect for each other, was simply heartbreaking. He's just so lost and disbelieving and in pain, it physically pains me. Why must you put my baby through this.

And though this does not apply strictly to this chapter, since it's the last one I'm just gonna comment on the story as a whole and gush about James and Lily's relationship. I love it. I love it I love it I love it. They're such a natural pair, there's clear chemistry between them and their differences offset each other so nicely. Ugh. Can't stop fangirling. You also described Lily's mental state after both attacks quite well. She'd understandably carry a lot of emotional baggage from the two, and something like that's not going to erase overnight. But, you didn't let her dwell on it either and become some sort of hardened, emotionless zombie or whatever. Because that's not our Lily, is it?

I also feel like there's been some very subtle hinting throughout the story that Peter may not be totally loyal? Not sure, maybe I'm just imagining it, but he's definitely in a different class than James and Sirius, who are so obviously dedicated to each other and the fight against Voldemort. But I did like that you managed to include him well and treated him like the good friend they all assumed he was. A lot of people like to forget that Peter was actually, once, on the good side.

If I have one complaint, it's the lack of Marauder bonding, or any sort of real bonding that was not Lily and James. I do realize that is the intent of the story, to develop Lily and James's relationship, much as in the books where everything is from Harry's point of view, indirectly, and so this cannot really classify as a complaint. I suppose that in a perfect world, what I really want is a book series based on the Marauders and their shenanigans (or a movie. or tv series. whatever Joanne decides...) and so I certainly cannot fault you for that.

Perfect ending to a perfect story. Totally looking forward to the sequel, whenever you finish it. You have a true talent. Thank you so much for sharing it with all of us humble readers. :)

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Review #48, by Snuffles Surviving the First Defy

1st January 2015:
Oh god, oh god, oh god. When Olivia talks about "her boys" and "her sons" I just lost it. Nearly cried. It just makes me so happy whenever I read about Sirius being welcomed into their home as a second son, especially with this war going on. Shows that even in times of war, there are still good people out there.

And dang, all the Jily moments in this story are fabulous. This is possibly one of the best developments of Lily and James' friendship-to-relationship that I've yet seen. Seeing James so caring and compassionate, sensitive to her wants and needs, and always just there for her, it just makes me all warm and tingly and I really want to go looking for a James of my own, honestly. They're just so real. Earlier, you acknowledged Lily's problems with James, but we also saw his development, not to mention that there was a lot more to him in the first place that Lily never seemed to see.

And of course, every scene with Bellatrix or any of the death eaters is also excellent. You somehow seem to have given them a sort of humanity. I've often felt that the villains of Harry Potter are so wonderful in that, in some strange, twisted sense, you can feel for them. Bellatrix is the epitome of senseless evil, and yet, to see her groveling at the feet of the Dark Lord, to see her unending devotion and ceaseless desire to please him, we begin to feel sorry for her. She just wants to do what she feels is the proper thing to do (I won't say "right", because I believe even Bellatrix acknowledges the evilness of her acts). She truly believes this is the way that the world ought to be run, and that what she's doing is justified. And so I feel sorry for her.

Lastly, Regulus. Damn. I see glimmers of Sirius in him, albiet a more cowardly, selfish version of Sirius. He appears to have the most developed conscience of any of the death eaters, despite being the youngest, and I like he simply lacked the backbone, nerve, and true moral stamina that Sirius possessed that enabled him to walk out of his family. Regulus accepted and believed everything his parents force-fed him, but I can't help but think (as we do know from DH), that he's got a little bit of doubt about the whole thing. Wondering if, perhaps, Sirius does have the right idea. Anyway, this continues to be excellent and I can't wait to see where it goes next.

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Review #49, by Snuffles Baby Steps

31st December 2014:
I love the way you write everyone. I love how you've developed the characters, mostly your OCs (Belle, who I simply adore) and those who essentially are (Frank and Alice- especially Alice! I can see where Neville gets his kick-butt-ness from!) But you also do the Marauders and Lily really well, and since this is a Sirius chapter, I'll mention him. He's my favorite character in the entire series, so I get very upset when people don't write him well, but you've not only written him well, you've somehow written him with almost every one of my Sirius headcanons included, it's so fantastic. Ugh. I can't stop fangirling over this enough. This is why I love fanfiction, because people like you really do use your immense talent to further craft and expand the world that we all love with a work that rivals the original in quality (in my humble opinion).

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Review #50, by Snuffles Sirius Black

30th December 2014:
First off, congrats on the award! Only one chapter in and I'm already positive this is going to be one of my all-time favorite Marauder fictions. You just capture the boys and the Potters so well, it's exactly as I always imagined the Potters to be. So loving, caring, opening their home to any who needed it, and, of course, welcoming Sirius as a second son. This line in particular resonated with me:

But all that anxiety had melted away when they’d met Sirius for the first time during Christmas Holiday. From that day on they had tried their hardest to give him all the things his own flesh and blood deprived him of.

Because, first of all, 11 year old Sirius Black just hits me right in the feels. I imagine him as being this spunky lil dude that's so accustomed to pain and abuse and also had this complete upheaval of his beliefs after coming to Hogwarts and he's so proud and strong and doesn't want to let anyone in but he's so little and cute ugh it just makes my heart melt. And the fact that Mrs. Potter just wants to give him as much love as she can, as much love as she gives her own son, she just has always reminded me of Molly Weasley and I think you seem to have angled her that way as well and wow I just love this so far and I'm really excited to read the rest.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your sweet review!! Maybe by the time you finish the story I'll be continuing the sequel!

I'm so happy you're enjoying the story; your review has really brightened my evening! Thanks again for taking the time to leave it, and I hope I'm able to make you fall as in love with these characters as I am by the end if it!!


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