James Potter II is a stud.I love him.I hope these pull their heads out of their asses and figure out that they like each other soon cause this is ridiculous.Author's Response: Ah, teenage ignorance. Perhaps it really isn't bliss. We'll just have to see how it goes! Report Review
Ginny should have hexed Percy and Audrey to Mars.Author's Response: Well, who knows what might have happened after James left? ;) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
The chapter did not drag on at all! It was such a good scene. Okay: THIS was the funniest scene in the story. I may have been shaking with laughter.
I am so glad the chapter went the way it did. James didn't get off it lightly- Ginny will probably be speaking to him later, but he didn't get screamed at and chucked out either. Best of both :)
And I love all the cute little James-Selene sections. Loving this coupling :')
Again, a truly terrific chapter, again I'm going to give you 10/10 for your amazing writing and whitty dialogue!Author's Response: Ah, thank you again! This was a fun chapter. Ah, who am I kidding, all of these chapters are fun. I just love writing this story in general. Thanks for the very lovely review!
-Laura Report Review
Firstly, LOVE A Very Potter Musical. Nice reference ;)
Secondly, OMG THIS IS FANTASTIC
I love James and Ginny's relationship. I've never seen it interpretted like this. Very nice :)
I like that the drama is building up. That's fab :)
And the end where James sat on the sofa with Selene in his arms... AHHH. SO CUTE.
In fact, your whole story is adorable.
Also, I'm not a guy, but the way you write James... I can so imagine a guy thinking like this. Pretty awesome. IT'S GONNA BE TOTALLY AWESOME. Another AVPM reference there ;)
Again: 10/10. Well done!Author's Response: Yes! Starkid fan! AVPM FTW!
Haha thank you very much. Like I've said, I love the mother-son relationship with James and Ginny, it's wonderful.
And I'm glad you feel like James seems like a guy. That's a bit of an interesting thing for me, being a girl and writing as a guy. I just kind of think of him more as a character, rather than focusing on "make his sound like a guy." Plus, I have a lot of brother's and guy friends, so that helps.
Thank you so much!
-Laura Report Review
"Tell my mum I love her because Iím about to die for real this time." - I honestly LOVE the fact that James is such a mummy's boy.
I LOVE James and if I could make him real and apparate him to me right now I would because he is simply amazing. He is just awesome!!!
What a way for the Weasley's to find out and poor Selene. But I love that James conforts her!! Maybe with the hormones they might have a cheeky snog ;) and get together *hint hint*
If this is updated again because xmas I will love you forever more x and if not then it's great New Year's present to me and I wil still love you forever more :D
P.s Have a great Christmas and New Year xxxAuthor's Response: James is a complete mummy's boy. Heck, he's said numerous times that Selene - the girl he likes - is kind of similar to his mother. Which is actually a very common thing, just in general in society. But that's not important right now, so I'll just move along.
James is my favorite character I've ever written. Ever. He's delightful.
That part was not so much fun to write. It made me sad. But it was important because not only is it a sadly common thing to happen with regards to teen pregnancy, but there does need to be something to interrupt all the silliness and humor. As for James making Selene feel better... I've got to say, it's much more likely that he'll say something stupid that'll make her laugh. But you never know ;)
Unfortunately, it will be a negatory on the Christmas update. The queue is closing on the 15th, and I won't have the next chapter done by then. New Year's, however, can definitely happen.
Thanks for the review! And did you just give me 11/10? Woo hoo! Extra credit! Thank you so much :)
P.S. Thanks! You as well! Report Review
I love this story. So much. So much. So so so- okay, I'll get on with the review. (I'd be going on forever).
1) The letter was one of the funniest things I have ever read. My family probably thought I had gone insane. I was almost crying with laughter.
2) Your characters are so real! They are so 3D and realistic- they could be real people.
3) The way you write is AMAZING. Gosh, I wish I could write like you!
4) Even though this is just the typical 'pregnancy story', you have put your own original spin on it. It is very rare that anybody writes in the boy's POV. Which I like =)
I read the part of the chapter about the platypus... then Phineas and Ferb came on on TV. Freaky! So high five for incorporating that.
Anyway, I'm giving you 10/10 because your story is quite simply awesome :)Author's Response: Well thank you very much! Anything involving James and Ginny interaction is incredibly fun for me to write. I love their relationship so much.
Characterization is a big deal for me. It's something I noticed from my first story that it wasn't super strong for everyone, so I wanted to really try and improve that for everyone. So I'm glad you like all of the characters. They're like my babies :)
I'm glad you think I've put a spin on the story! That's what I was going for. I wanted to take your typical, cliched teen pregnancy story and twist it to make it different and interesting. All I can hope is that I've been successful! So thank you!
I'm a complete kid at heart. I love Phineas and Ferb and Perry the Platypus is my favorite part. Plus, I just love platypuses. They're awesome.
Thank you so much for the very lovely review!
-Laura Report Review
I AM SO SORRY. Like, sorry a million times over. This has to be the longest time I have gone without reading or reviewing your chapters. Blame it on preponed exams and paranoid mothers who are worse tha Hermione and think you're going to fail everything even though you're a consistent class topper and an impromtu tab confiscation. Sigh... Life burns.
It has been the longest time since I last read Choices, but the story' not lost any of its charm. I love, love, LOVE James. Honestly, he is so... Lkke gah, he leaves me speechless and wondering how the hell you are the writer of such a serious story like Finding Faith?! Your comments and remarks are so witty and I'm feeling like asking you "will you let me borrow some of your creativity and ingenuity? Like that Akwardness line (omg, that was so freaking hilarious! Hi James, yes it's good to see you too and yes, this haircut's called upside-down bowl) and that elbow sharpening one." The thing is, you don't write the clichťd male POV, where every other line's punctuated by a "i'm manly" or "i sound like a girl". Yet, there are phrases and sentences that are so characteristically masculine, I wonder if you're a boy in disguise. Really, it's refreshing to see aboy who emotional quotient expands beyond being manly.
The return of Mr. Sprinkles! Yay! And yes, let that be Nick and Lily flirting! I feel like I don't get to see the brotherly, overprotective side of James often enough.
Warm hugs and a slice of gooey chocolate cake (because, you know, tomorrow, 8th December is MY BIRTHDAY! I'M SO EXITED!)
-Akankshya.Author's Response: First of all... HAPPY BIRTHDAY TOMORROW! YAY!
Urg. I have exams in a little over a week. Am I excited? No I am not. I'm trying to get as much of my stories written as I can before I really have to put my nose to the grindstone - and before the Holiday Queue Closure.
Thank you thank you thank you, my dear! I really love writing as James. Basically, I take the more... whimsical side of my personality and exaggerate it.
Writing from a male perspective is surprising easy for me. I think it's because I grew up with three older brother, most of my cousins are boys, and I've always had a lot of guy friends. Heck, I didn't have any female friends until I was six or seven. And yet, now I'm attending an all women's college. Go figure.
At the moment, I think James was too baffled to spring into overprotective brother mode. But that will show up, don't you worry!
Once again, HAPPY BIRTHDAY!(tomorrow)
-Laura Report Review
I just read this entire story in one sitting. It's is fantastic and hilarious and if you don't update soon then I don't know what I will do with myself. Don't let yourself be the cause of my eternal suffering.Author's Response: Well, I'd have for you to suffer...
Chapter 8 is currently in the works and should hopefully be posted pretty soon! Patience, young grasshopper.
And thank you very much :) Report Review
Great writing, especially in the first few paragraphs. You do a great job of establishing the relationship between the two main characters, and you let James's voice speak so well.
My only criticism is that at times, the story does feel a bit cliche. I would like to see more interaction between the two characters before Lee tells James she's pregnant. Maybe a little less swearing?
Other than that, this is seriously a well-written story. =)Author's Response: Thank you very much! James's voice and characterization are some of the most fun I've had writing.
Thank you for the criticism. I can understand how you feel that it was cliche at times, as the basis of the story is, indeed, very cliche. However, as time goes on, I would very much like to get away from that and add a new perspective on the teen pregnancy issue. As for the swearing, there should be a bit less as time goes on (though there will be some, as that's more realistic).
Once again, thank you for the review! Report Review
"I even rolled like a ninja or secret agent or something. People should call me James Bond instead of James Potter." - And this is why I LOVE James!!!
Lily and Nick do I see a little romance developing over the love of Mr. Sprinkles
I love this chapter, especially because James and Selene are bonding and of course you've got the mad Potter's.
can't wait for the next one!!
Soph xxAuthor's Response: James is a nutter. An adorable one, but a nutter all the same. But that's why we all love him.
There will definitely be quite a bit more James and Selene to come. I'm a really big fan of their dynamic.
Thanks for the review!
-Laura Report Review
AW JAMES'S LITTLE LETTER IS SO CUTE! AND SWEET!! ITS THE CUTEST LITTLE THING EVERRR!!Author's Response: Thank you :) Report Review
And... My hundredth review goes to... Laura!
I hate you with a burning passion.
...Okay, I don't. Just kidding. As if could actually. I just love you as non-creepily as possible.
The thing is, I was so lost in the chapter, so caught up in it's action, that I kept biting my nails, till James made that orangutan comment. And now my dad's gonna say m nauils look diseased. So indirectly, you and your awesome writing skills are responsible for the murder of my poor nails.
James, boy, get any funnier and you'll be sent to Azkaban for killing peole though uncontrollable laughter. I mean, really, orangutans belch to declare their territory? That is a piece of information that i'm never going to forget. And your rant afterwards was epic.
Ginny's awesome. She's so cool! I loved her reaction, unexpected, bu characteristic of her, really. And often, when I read about Harry, I feel he's so different from J.K's. But you didgreat job. Well done!
Yes, Al, you're gonna be an uncle. Took you long enogh to figure that one out. And your fourteen year-old sister is going to be an aunt. But that's not so strange, compared to some other
things...like, I learnt this summer, a six year old kid is my cousinly grandfather. Go figure!
I wait eagerly for your next update, for, Choices as well as Finding Fait (That extra long review needs to be given, now that i'm hale and hearty again!)
-Akansha. Author's Response: Hooray! 100th review! I'm honored.
Hee hee, I did that on purpose, you see. I tried to get in a bunch of build up, waiting for the moment... but of course, James would mess it up. He's James!
I'm glad you think Harry seems in character. That's honestly the most nerve-wracking part, trying to get Harry right. Since all of us readers know and love him so well, we have a very clear image of him in his mind. So trying to create my own stories with him just freaks me out.
Interesting. Cousinly grandfather. Weird how things turn out sometimes, eh?
Finding Faith is in queue! Should be up soon. And I'm very very glad you're feeling better. And I hope your nails get better as well.
-Laura Report Review
ok first off great story! I love the Potter family dynamic throughout the whole story and I love the relationship between ginny and James! This is exactly how I pictured her as a mother...I ABSOLUTELY loved the banter between Harry and Ginny and I'd love to see more of it!Author's Response: Thank you! I really liked writing the Potter family, especially Ginny. And James, of course. He's just a bunch of fun to write. Thanks for the review! Report Review
AWeSOMe! Love the Sibling love!Author's Response: Thanks :) That was very fun to write! Report Review
I LOVE JAMES RIGHT NOW! He's so sweet!
"Did you know that orangutans warn people to stay out of their territory by belching?" - Oh James, you complete and utter idiot.
Oh my god screaming like the fangirl I am!
Well I was partly right, Ginny does mother Selene but James doesn't get killed :)
"Iím so confused. Why arenít I dead?" - How can you not Love James.
"If you donít know how to use protection then for Merlinís sake, keep it in your pants!" - I can honestly say Ginny is one of my favourite characters with James coming a close second. She has to be the awesome mother ever!
"Holy crap, Iím going to be an uncle." - Al is just cutest ♥ ♥
I LOVE IT ♥ ♥
Can't wait for the next one x
Soph xAuthor's Response: Aw, thank you so much. Your reviews make me so happy. And this chapter was just fun.
Ginny, James, and Al. What's not to love? I'm really excited to write next chapter because now I can really start to develop Selene's character. And I'm going to work a bit more with adding plotlines in that don't have to do with the pregnancy. So be excited for all that!
-Laura Report Review
They spoke! even if it was for a minute or two but they spoke, hooray! :D
"James Sirius Potter, you better hug me this instant or I swear to Merlin, boy, I will shave your head." - I seriously love Ginny Potter, she totally awesome!!!
I LOVE the Potter family gatherings and their random moments, I think their brilliant and I LOVE the Potter family so much. ♥ ♥
"I'm about to be murdered by my own mother. Goodbye cruel world!" - Bless him, I LOVE JAMES he's witty, funny and charming. *swoon* He's so unlike other James' I've read and I LOVE HIM! ♥ and of course you since you created his personality ♥
Selene and James just HAVE to talk now, she's been kicked out. Please, please, please say Ginny suggest she lives with them, maybe she hears her being sick or something and voila Ginny realises that Selene is pregnant!!
I honestly really can't wait for Ginny and Harry's reactions and I'm kinda sure Ginny is going to be all motherly to Selene after she's finished killing James of course.
Can't wait for the next chapter :D
Soph xAuthor's Response: Brief conversation FTW! It's a step in the right direction. Selene just needs to give up her stubbornness and THEN we'll really be getting somewhere.
Ginny is the best. Her parts are my absolute favorite. Closely followed by James' randomness. I think writing his characterizations and all the things from his perspective is some of the most fun I've had.
I have the next chapter loosely planned out - though I have yet to actually write anything. So you'll just have to wait and see what I have happen!
-Laura Report Review
You and your random Potter family scenes just rock! :)
James is just so different...i've got so used to reading about too-cool-for-my-shoes, bad-attitude, arrogant, obnoxious The James Potter, that this all new personality you've created seems just like a breath of fresh spring air. Well done.
I love Ginny. She's every bit as awesome as I imagined. And Harry! Really, Harry freaking Potter indeed. I also thought much of Selene's and James conversation and James freakout. All in all, this chapter left me LOLing. :D
You've done a wonderful job. Though the story's idea is kinda old, your execution and extreme writing skills make it fresh and unpredictable. Not to mention the intensive work you've put into the characterization of every character, especially James (yes, I realise I praised it already, but I can't help it). This is an awesome story, and you've done a great job with it.
P.S. Selene WAS disappointed James, very disappointed. Just pick up on that fact and ask her out already.
P.P.S. I was reading Songbird again last night. Can I, once again, say that its the most freaking awetastic James/Lily story i've ever laid my eyes on? Reading it again allowed me to grasp the emotions better, and I now say that it can even surpass Saval's work (i kid you not). I love it like I love chocolate, books and my parents. The story is just so GODDAMN beautiful, it leaves me spechless. It's a classic, really. A story i'd definitely read to my daughter one day, as her bedtime story. She'll love the story of Princess Lily and Prince James, I can already tell.
:)xoxoAuthor's Response: I honestly don't know where they come from! My fingers just become possessed and then all of that pops out! But you know, I'd really like to think that they end up like that. Now that the world's happier and the pressure's off, I like to think Harry would have gotten much more whimsical.
Ginny is so much fun to write. I have plans for upcoming scenes with her that I'm just so excited to write! You have no idea.
You know, sometimes I really hate the obnoxious arrogant James that everyone seems to portray. I mean, yeah, I can somewhat see the rational behind it, but c'mon. He's the son of HARRY AND GINNY. I like to think he'd inherit Harry's awkwardness and Ginny's awesomeness to make a strange mixture of dorky and cool. But maybe that's just me.
P.S. Was Selene disappointed? Was she really? Perhaps it was just wishful thinking or an overactive imagination on James' part. Or maybe she really was disappointed because she's in love with James, too. I'll never say which one!
P.P.S. You shut your face. Shut it right now. You - I can't even - you are SO NICE TO ME. Better than Saval? Seriously? No. I refuse to believe this. Really? D'aw, you're just so sweet! Thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you!
I kind of love you.
(But in a non-creepy way) Report Review
This chapter was a little bit exciting because we finally have hope that Selena will actually be around in future chapters. Maybe she'll actually hold entire conversations with James?
Now, I know that he's scared of losing her as a friend but it seems like their relationship is in such a bad place that he wouldn't be risking much to tell her his feelings. Yes, it would mess up the plot but she has spent the last four months ignoring James and yet he has done nothing. With the way he's acted so far, it's hard to believe that he's in Gryffindor, much less that he's a Wotter... Not that he isn't completely loveable! He's just afraid of rejection and it's a bit pathetic when she's rejecting him every day.Author's Response: Things definitely might be looking up!
Yeah, James is a little bit afraid of Selene. But he also knows how best to deal with her. Yes, he probably should be trying to do more, but he also knows that the best way to get Selene to forgive you is to leave her alone. But yes, he can be a bit pathetic - something that he himself acknowledges!
Thank you for the review!
-Laura Report Review
I love James and his relationship with Ginny! It warms my heart!Author's Response: It's really fun to write! Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Omg I love this so much- its not like the typical pregnancy stories at all! Its different and has a deeper plot line which I like:) update soon!Author's Response: Yay! Good, that's what I was hoping to do. I do like the concept of the teen pregnancy story, but I don't like how cliche they are. I'm glad you think it's different! Report Review
I just.. loved this chapter. Every little bit of it.
I dunno why, but i just.. am still processing everything.
Another great chapter!
My mind is completely fried. So next chapter, I promise I will write more. Just brain, fried, yeah.
-AbhiAuthor's Response: D'aw, you're sweet. I like you, let's be friends.
-Laura Report Review
Yes, Laura, I did indeed remember to pack my toothbrush, and dental floss. (I have extra toothbrushes and floss, so that's what i've packed). Crisis averted.
Mr Sprinkles! That's so adorable! Nick may be missing a few eggs, but he is cute as hell. Another great chapter, what can I say? Every chapter you write is amazing.
Looking forward to no.4!
I stopped procrastinating, and finished packing, for once in my life.
-AbhiAuthor's Response: Praise be to Merlin! I was worried about you ;)
Nick... oh Nick. I don't think there's really much more to be said about him, the cute little bugger.
Thanks for reviewing!
-Laura Report Review
Oh my. That chapter was so sad! Poor Jimmy Jams, POOR SELENE! Man, what she has to go through! I can't even imagine.
Another great chapter! Lily was so adorable, and exactly how I imagined her to be.
"By the way, congrats James. Youíd be a great dad."
Next chapter here I come!
-AbhiAuthor's Response: I love Lily. It's so fun to write about her and James. She's fiesty, but at the same time she's really sweet. Thanks for the review!
-Laura Report Review
So, well, here's the story. I am sitting in my study, supposed to be packing for my school camp WHICH IS TOMORROW, and instead of packing, i've been exploring hpff.
Yeah, I'm stuffed. And tomorrow when i'm on the bus, ill probably remember that i've forgotten something really important like my toothbrush. And i'll start crying.
But for now, I really don't care about the consequences. I just wanted to read.
So, I actually follow your blog!! I mean I don't actually FOLLOW it because I don't have a tumblr account, but yeah, I visit it like every second day to see if you've posted something! And I got really worried because your changed its URL or name thingy! I could not find your blog, and then the genius I am, thought to look at your authors page, and BAM, there was your new blog-name-thingy.
So I was just on it, and you mentioned that you just updated Choices, and I saw that it was another JamesII/OC, and i LOVE next gen, so I thought that I would give it a go! I always/mostly review finding faith, so I hope you remember me! You probably won't but that's ok.
So yeah. On to Choices. I am really excited for this story!! I think that although I've read a lot of stories with the same pregnancy-shock-and-disaster thing going on, I think that your's will be different, and exciting!! I can already tell that your character bases are quite interesting, and I'm really liking James.
I am actually listening to a song by Imagine Dragons (mY FaVoUritE Band EVER) AND ITS CALLED SELENE. Freaky huh.
Anyway. Yeah, I am starting to really like this story. And yeah. I love you.
-AbhiAuthor's Response: REMEMBER YOUR TOOTH BRUSH. DENTAL HYGIENE IS VERY IMPORTANT. SOME FLOSS WOULDN'T BE A TERRIBLE IDEA EITHER.
Well, my apologies for chaning the site then. I didn't really like having all the numbers in it... and I have accounts on other places with teamstarkid, so I just went with that. I'm glad you found it again :) And yes, I'm aware that I gave a very odd explanation for the change. But well... that's me, I suppose.
Actually, I DO remember you from Finding Faith. I recognized your user name - you've left some very nice reviews :) So thank you.
I'm glad you're liking this story. I debated for a long time about whether or not I should write/post it, because the teen pregnancy story is kind of overdone on this site. Don't get me wrong, quite a few of them are really very good, but it's really common. But I wanted to see if I could put a different spin on it, and so far it's been recieving good response. So fingers crossed!
Wow, that's weird. I can't say that I know Imagine Dragons, but I do know OF them, if you get what I mean. I know their song In Time because of Perks of Being a Wallflower and I absolutely love it. I should listen to more of their songs... and Selene will be right on the top of the list!
I love you, too! (But not in a creepy way)
-Laura Report Review
Aw. I had just read some of Ur other stories (which were very brilliant!) so I thought Id read this one, and i have to say, I'm disappointed. The characters and facts are great, just don't like the plot. Does she really have to b pregnant? Sorry. Just frustrates me. Seems kinda stupid.Author's Response: Well, I'm sorry you feel that way. I just wanted to put my own spin on the cliche pregnancy story. I do hope you give it a chance, but if not, that's okay. Everyone's entitled to their own opinion. I'm glad you like my other stories. Report Review
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