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Review #26, by Ray After Shock

18th February 2014:
Ahhh this is so good:) FInally got a chance to read the last chapter, and it was so good! Cannot wait until you get a chance to update this! Looking forward to seeing what happens next.

Author's Response: Hello!

Hey, there its great to see you back again, you know how I love getting your reviews! Hopefully I'll be able to post a new chapter in the next few weeks but we'll have to see, real life is being a major jerk! Hahaha.
Much love,

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Review #27, by CassiePotter After Shock

8th February 2014:
And I'm back! This chapter was even better than the last one! They just keep getting better and better but also more and more intense! If I was Roxanne I definitely wouldn't be able to keep my composure like she's doing now!
I loved the opening of this chapter with Roxie and Molly! They're so fun together, and I love reading them! Their relationship is so, so believeable, both as cousins and best friends. They balance each other out really well, and it makes their interactions really fun!
I feel bad for Molly, since she feels like she'll never find someone who will like her! And because I think she sometimes feels overshadowed by Lucy, even though she's younger. I hope she finds someone who will make her happy!
Speaking of Lucy, she's a riot! I hope we see her again soon, because she's wild compared to the other girls we've met so far in this story! (Except for maybe Victoire) And Dom is one of my favorites, because the way you write her is so interesting and different from any characterizations I've read of her before.
OH MY MERLIN THE END OF THIS CHAPTER. I don't even know what to say about Ben! He gives me chills sometimes, just because I'm so anxious for Roxie! I have a feeling she's going to be alone with him again very, very soon...
This was another wonderful chapter, and I can't wait for you to update this story! I'll let you know when TFD is up and ready for you to read! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hello!

Its great seeing you here again with your reviews, they're always so lovely. These chapters were very difficult for me to write but I'm glad that the intensity stayed with you! I was having some trouble with this chapter in particular. It never quite worked up right to what I'd wanted it to be!
Roxie and Molly are so different that its easy to imagine them as best friends, you can understand their love for each other and also what keeps them together. :D
Molly is going through a lot at the moment and you're right when you say she feels overshadowed by Lucy, she thinks that no one will find her attractive. She's got some growing up to do!

Lucy is hilarious! If you were ever wondering who was more like Audrey, then here's your answer. HAHAHA. She's very fun to write for and we see her again, though not as much as I would like but I love her already. She shows up in Transparent soon as well, so look forward to that!
Oh, Dom...she only gets more interesting as this story goes. Just wait until Teddy Lupin gets involved...hehehehe.
BEN!I don't know what to say about Ben either, aside from the fact that I adore him. He's so terrible but he gives me the chills sometimes too, why do I write him the way I do? Am I secretly a perverted man? HAHAHAHA.
Oh, Roxie and Ben see each other again but I'm not sure if I want them to be alone or not. Oh, the possibilities...
Thanks for the review, I'll have to pop on over to TFD soon too. :D
Much love,

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Review #28, by CassiePotter Crash and Burn

7th February 2014:
This chapter was amazing! I LOVE reading Roxanne and Ben together, because there relationship is so all over the place!
The fact that you put in another flashback is really nice. I think something that stands out about this story is that you show so much contrast between Ben and Roxie as kids and then how they treat each other now that they're teenagers. I love the way that they're friends regardless of their differences, and that they don't care what people say about them. There's this wonderful innocence to them that you capture really well.
And then we have Ben and Roxie as teenagers. It's this fantastic emotional roller coaster that I adore reading. I feel so bad for Roxanne with the way Ben messes with her, but I also pity him. You've given us really small hints at his vulnerability, but he covers it up so well that we rarely see it!
I'm so, so curious about what happened when we went away! You keep teasing us with that but I want answers!
This chapter was really brilliant, and I can't wait to read the next one! I'm working in the next chapter of TFD, and there's a Christmas one-shot that I wrote that I don't think you've read yet if you have any interest in checking that out.
It feels so good to be back to read and reviewing your lovely work! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: HELLO!

Its good to see you back and I'm really sorry that it took me so long to get back to this review. FORGIVE ME! Hahahah.
Ben and Roxie's relationship is just one big mess of emotion and I'm glad that I was able to write this scene finally.
The flashbacks are really important to tis story, a lot of people just skim over them but they really show how things have changed between the pair since they've grown up. I want to really play around with that, a lot o what happens in the past sort of hints at what happens in the current chapter.
Ben has a vulnerable side but he's afraid of showing it to Roxanne, for various reasons. He's going to change slowly but surely and I hope you stick around! :D
You'll find out sooner or later what made Ben and Draco leave the country but I've got other things to do first so hold on tight!
I'm going to get to TFD soon, I promise and let me know when ASOS is up too! I miss it!
Much love,

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Review #29, by Roxanne Antoine After Shock

13th January 2014:
Yay :) SO HAPPY YOU'VE UPDATED!! Sorry for the sudden burst of excitement it's just I am so happy! Everyday I've been pacing waiting for the next chapter. It amazes me that you can write such detailed fanfics at the same time and not get writers block... Have you ever thought of publishing on fanfiction. net?- (I couldn't put a link) You would have hundreds of views, faves and reviews if you did! I love your writing and I LOVE Benjamin Malfoy. He is one of the sexiest OC's ever! This chapter was perfect. I loved the way you explored Roxy's families opinions of Ben and her. I wonder what her brother will say... I can't wait to find out the changes in store for Hogwarts!
I'll stay tuned and...
I hope you have a very happy new year! :)
Roxy xx

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm happy to see you here again and thanks for the really lovely review. Sorry that its taken me a minute to get back to you but I've had a lot of big girl stuff to do lately and it really sucks. Anyway, I hope to have the next chapter up in the next few weeks if things go right!
In regards to me writing so many fanfics at the same time: I usually take breaks in between to give myself some peace and sometimes work on two different chapters for completely different stories. I don't take notes most of the time since most of what I need is in my head. Or something like that, right?
I haven't posted anything on any other sites but I've been thinking about it. Check out that stuff if I ever pop up around there! Hahaha.
Benjamin Malfoy IS one of the most delicious OC's that I've ever written and don't worry, he'll only get worse. I mean better. HAHAHAH.
Roxie's family will have a lot to say about their relationship in the next few chapters so I hope you'll stay tuned! Please? D':
Much love,

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Review #30, by Ray Crash and Burn

1st December 2013:
Ahhh why did you stop? This is so good - for a moment, I though Roxanne was going give in to Benjamin! But she didn't, thank god. I love this dynamic so much - can't wait for the next chapter!:)

Author's Response: Hello, again!

If I'd continued with this chapter it would have been way too long, you know. So I had to stop it and I'm sure you'll be wondering what I'll do with the pair of them later so be warned. Heehehehehee.
Roxanne did seem like she was going to give in to Benjamin, did she? But I couldn't let that happen you know, not yet! I'll try to get another chapter up eventually but I'm not sure when that will be so stay tuned!
Much love,

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Review #31, by Roxanne Crash and Burn

1st December 2013:
So happy you've updated! :) On one hand a think Ben is an a*se but I still love him! Poor Roxy. :( I really love the way you made them talk it out. While reading this you could feel the sexual tension in the air... I cannot wait for the next chapter maybe you could post it as an extra Christmas present? ;) I'm really in love with this fanfic. I'm dying to know if tragedy is going to penetrate Roxy and Ben's bubble anytime soon...

Author's Response: Hello!

Its nice to see you again! I'm glad that you keep coming back but this has been a reasonably fast update in comparison to some of my others. I had to really think about what I wanted to do for this one but it all worked out pretty well in the end.
Yes, Ben is sort of a jerk but then again...its Ben and he's sort of addictive. I think that in this chapter a lot needed to be said and a lot needed to be realized and poor Roxie indeed. Hahahaha.
I don't think that I could have held off on them not talking it out eventually. It had been building up between them for weeks and all that tension sort of exploded!!
Ah, the sexual tension only gets worse as we go along but I have other things to do for this story so we may not get to it as soon as you think! ;)
I wouldn't say tragedy gets in the way of Ben and Roxie but something does. And its not going to be pretty...
Much love,

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Review #32, by Casper Bits and Pieces

15th November 2013:
Glad to see the update! Why is Victoire so nasty?! I love the subtle things you write that show Ben still cares, even if he buries it faaarrr below his c-c-c-old exterior. I really do want Roxanne and Ben together because it's clear there's lots of history and genuine care there. I definitely am okay with the slow-burn though, they both have some things to figure out and Ben is quite disrespectful at the moment! I really want Roxanne to give Adam a chance and go through Hogwarts and all those growing up things without Ben for a little while, but I feel bad for Adam if the affection is all one-sided. You do such a good job writing these characters that as soon as I finish a chapter I cannot wait for the next!

Author's Response: Hello!

Casper, my dear, its lovely to see you again, as usual. I'm really glad that you're back and junk!
Why is Victoire so...Victoire you mean?! Hahahaha. I don't know why I made her so nasty but I got tired of the "Little Fleur" impression so I made her as far from the usual Next Gen canon as possible.
If you want to see how REALLY nasty she can be, try reading my other story, "Transparent", it will really make you wonder about her.
But anyway!
I think Ben still cares about a lot of things but he may come off cold but its his own way of defending himself. Actually, he's a very sensitive person but I haven't had the time to show that side of him yet.
Ah, so many people are shipping Ben and Roxie together right now! You guys have such high hopes for them and well, I hope you keep them after what I do to Roxie in the next chapter.
The things with Adam will develop slowly but its going to be interesting to see the balance between the three of them. Ben isn't going to be happy but then again, will Roxie? That's the main question here!
The next few chapters will be a tad different from the usual Roxie/Ben thing but I hope you'll stick around! Thanks SO much for the compliments dear!
Much love,

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Review #33, by meowcowpow Bits and Pieces

7th November 2013:
i totally change my mind. at first i didn't want ben and roxy to end up together. but now, even though their relationship is currently unhealthy...I want them to end up together ahhh the dilemma of unhealthy relationships! ben just sounds really confused and i feel like he could work hard to win roxy's heart for good and remain by her side. not very feminist of me. BUT BEN!

Author's Response: Hello!

Wow, so many people are currently reading this story and it just really surprises me! Thanks so much for stopping by, by the way, that means a lot.
I think a lot of people were really intent on Roxie and Ben not being together because of what happened. And yes, I suppose their relationship is a bit unhealthy...I wouldn't think of it as a bad thing really, just something that has a tendency to get out of control. Or something? Hm...
Ben is really confused at the moment and there's a lot going on with him that I haven't even begun to show. I hope that I get the chance soon, he's such a great character to write for, even if he's a demon sometimes. HAHAHA.
If there's one thing that Ben knows, its how to push Roxie's buttons and trust me, if he ever decides to win her over, he'll dedicate a lot of time to it. Like, a lot. HAHAH.
I know, Ben tempts all of your feminist values...he's just so yummy sometimes. I understand your pain! :D
But anyhoo, thanks for the review!
I'll try updating again soon, I promise!
Much love,

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Review #34, by CassiePotter Bits and Pieces

30th October 2013:
Gabbie that was brilliant!
It's so... Well, not nice, but interesting to see Victoire again! She really is quite the character, huh? She seems like she would be fun to write simply because of how mean she is! I love when characters from your stories overlap, especially because they all have such distinct personalities! :) (Speaking of characters overlapping, there's a mention of one of mine in the latest chapter of Holding On! Haha)
That scene with the Prefects was just so incredibly tense! I would have run out of there as soon as possible, so way to go Roxie for toughing it out! She's stronger than people give her credit for! I'm curious to see what happens with Adam, too... She might think she's done with Ben, but from the end of this chapter, it's clear that he doesn't think so!
Speaking of the end of the chapter, when will I know what happens next??? You are the queen of cliffhangers! I could picture Ben lounging there, waiting for Roxie, and it was just so perfectly uncomfortable! I can't wait for the next chapter now!
Brilliant work, like usual! I'll keep you posted on my one-shot that's in the queue, and really look forward to getting caught up on your work! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hello!

Hey, there, once again. Oh, god...I don't think anyone would want to see Victoire for longer than necessary, she's just so awful. She is a really fun character to write, simply because, like you said, she's terrible and I can't help but make her into someone no one likes. She's got a lot of issues and I haven't hinted at them yet but I think you'll be seeing her again.
Ah, my characters do overlap! You'll be seeing Teddy Lupin soon and you already know Dom-Dom but I can't wait to introduce Lucy. If you thought Audrey was bad...hahaha.
I thought that scene with the Prefects went by better than I thought it would. I had actually done something very different with it and I was certain that it wouldn't have worked. But it was all right in the end, apparently! Roxie is a lot stronger than people give her credit for and that's why I love her, she's such a good girl you know! But what's funny about her is that she's going to make a lot of mistakes so I can't wait to see how you take it later!
Oh, the thing with Adam will continue to develop. There's a slight attraction for him but Roxie is still so into Ben and its going to create this delicious tension! As for Ben...well, next chapter he does and says things that will make you cover your eyes. Hehehehe. He's got plans for Roxie that don't include her being alone. Or thinking that he can't be on her mind!
Ah, the next chapter...I just updated Audrey and then after that its A Force of Wills, Albus and THEN this again. But it might just depend on what I finish first...I can be so lazy sometimes. HAHAHA.
I can't wait to get more caught up on your work too. Its wrong that I haven't had the time! D':
Thanks so much for the review! It was lovely, as always.
Much love,

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Review #35, by Ray Bits and Pieces

29th October 2013:
Best characterization of Roxanne I've seen in a long long time! I absolutely love this fic - hope to see an update soon!:)

Author's Response: Hello!

Its a pleasure to meet you, I'm Gabbie! Thanks so much for leaving such a nice review for this story, I really wasn't expecting it! D':
I think Roxanne is one of the hardest characters to write for, to be honest. There's just something so complex about her and I'm never certain if I'm doing her justice but thanks so much for your support, you're awesome! :D
I offer you candy!!!
I'll update as soon as I can but I have alot of other stories that need my love too and I don't have internet at home. T-T
Much love,

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Review #36, by Roxanne Bits and Pieces

27th October 2013:
I was so happy when I saw that you'd updated. This is my favorite Roxanne Weasley fanfic ever. I love the tension between Ben and Roxy right now (I am totally shipping these chaacters!) Can't wait for the next chapter. Update asap! xx

Author's Response: Hello!

Its good to see you again, I was beginning to miss your reviews you know. But anyway, thanks so much for liking this story so much, that means alot to me! Gosh. I don't know how to thank you! D':
The tension between Ben and Roxie will only get'll see. Hehehehe. I already have the next chapter done, I just have to get through alot of other stories before I can get back to it. Until then, yes?
Much love,

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Review #37, by CassiePotter Changes and Challenges

22nd August 2013:
Hi Gabbie!
Sorry I'm a bit late on getting to this, but here I am now!
This chapter was so fantastic! Roxanne's emotions just feel so real! They also make me feel bad for her, because she's in a really tough place with Ben and her family, especially because they think they have an idea of what's going on with her, but it's really so much more than they could imagine.
I loved that little scene between Roxie and George! They're so sweet together, and he seems like he makes a really amazing dad. You can tell that he loves his family more than anything!
I got goosebumps reading that! Ben will just go and say anything! I'm a little nervous for Roxanne though! It's clear that Ben's not done with her, and I'm anxious to see how far he's actually willing to go...
I also can't believe he's Head Boy! He struck me as too much of a trouble maker. But I also like that you added that side of him, because its something new that we're just now learning about him.
This chapter was brilliant! I promise I'm working on A Spoonful of Sugar, so you'll see dear Louis soon! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hey there!

I'm so sorry that I'M just now getting to this lovely review. I haven't had internet connection at all and its been such a bummer! D':
I really like writing Roxanne, she's the only female character aside from Dominique that's just a girl. Her emotions go from one thing to another all the time and I try to make it as realistic as possible. I try so hard...
She's so much like George its scary. Hahaha.
Yes, her family thinks that they know what's going on with her but they're really not guessing on the right thing. Yet. Hahahah.
I think she's going to continue to have a tough time of it though until she can't hide the truth anymore.
Aw, I love writing Roxie and George! They're so much alike and the fact that he cares so much about his family really shows. And plus he spoils Roxanne so he'd never really deny her anything, he's a real softie. Heheheh.
Hahah, oh Ben! He's the hardest person to write for, he's just so complex but its always a nice challenge for me.
Oh, that ending...Ben will just say anything he wants but trust me, the original draft was much worse if you can fathom it. Hahha. Oh, Ben isn't done with her and now that he's seen that Adam's interested in her, he's not going to let her out of his sight yet. Jealousy is a nasty thing! But he won't admit that...
Yeah, I made Ben Head Boy because despite his reputation, he actually is a good student and McGonagall has her reasons I'm sure.
Hoping for ASOS soon! I just put a fresh chapter of Transparent up but A Force of Wills is going to be next! I promise!
Thanks for everything!
Much love,

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Review #38, by BookDinosaur Strangers and Fireworks

8th July 2013:
Hello Gabbie! -BookDinosaur- finally here with your requested review. I'm so sorry for the length of time it took me to get to you, but I was travelling. :-/

Anyway. I loved this first chapter, it served really well as an introduction. I haven't read many next-gen stories that have Roxanne as a main charater, so this was really interesting to me, and I think you've done a great job giving her a voice and personality of her own, and this is only the first chapter, so well done to you there and I can't wait to see where you go with her. ;D

I absolutely loved reading about Roxy's relationship with her dad, they were just so sweet together and I loved reading their interactions, it was so sweet and lovely and had me full of feels. :)

I liked the way you've portrayed the Weasley family, they're just a big bunch of nutters here, and I adore your take on the family. :) I also loved that you threw in the Quidditch team, because it's completely realistic to assume they wouldn't just disappear from Harry's life, so I loved reading about them again. Lee and George still spending time together was a nice touch as well, I appreciated that. :)

And the end! Now I just want to read on to find all about this mysterious Mr. Benjamin Malfoy. All in all, a wonderful first chapter that I really enjoyed reading. :)

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm really sorry that its taken me so long to actually respond to your lovely review. Real life is really messy right now and I haven't had alot of time lately to do much so my apologies.
I think that its a shame that we don't see much of Roxanne in the fanfic world, there's all sorts of things you can do with her character and its been a fun challenge. I tried to make her different from some of my other female leads because she's technically still just a girl and its fun getting into her mind.
Everyone loves that bit with Roxanne and her dad and I can't blame them! Its one of my the sweetest moments and I honestly love George to death so I like making him a very loving father. And Roxanne's so spoiled that it just makes for really tender moments!
The Weasley family was really hard to get right, I hadn't been able to balance them properly at first. Eventually I took a bit of a weird turn with them but its worked out better than I thought! :D
I never assumed that the old Quidditch gang had split up after the War, I sort of don't understand why they would. But its always great seeing Lee again, right? He and George are best friends so they're together alot, much to everyone's horror. Hahahah.
Oh, you'll get more of Benjamin Malfoy, if you can handle it. Heheheheh. I'll have to re-request again sometime! But feel free to read the story on your own, I really don't mind, I'd like to know what you think. :D
Much love,

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Review #39, by Casper The Painful Truth

17th June 2013:
Hi! So glad you updated!
This was a great chapter :) I like reading the flashbacks- it really gives a different insight into Ben and Roxanne's relationship and the effect it had on their family and friends. We also get to see a less guarded side of Ben!

Aw poor Adam, seems like a nice guy but Roxanne just isn't interested! I love the way you write the relationship between the adults, Angelina and George are such great characters- I like their train of thought and the way they treat Malfoy and his family- very cool :)

I can't believe you left it on a cliffhanger! haha! Tension is definitely mounting and I can't wait for the next update!


Author's Response: Hello!

I'm so happy that people keep coming back to this story, it really makes me feel good about my writing. Also, my apologies for taking so long with the update, I was really busy and had been havign a bad writers block. Hahaha.
I will keep including the flashback, perhaps not every single chapter but you'll be seeing them again. I think I really love them because you can see how different both Ben and Roxanne were when they were little and what happened as they grew up.
Ben I think was more innocent as a child so he wouldn't be as guarded adn he really does like having Roxanne as a friend. :)
Yeah, its really going to get awkward for Roxanne and Adam. I think there might be a slight chance that she could like him but I'll play around with that later. ;)
Hahah, I like writing Angelina and George! I've written them before in my other stories, "This is Angelina" and "Memories" and my one-shot "Again", they're just so loveable.
I think they've been through so much that they can't really hold too many grudges against Ben and the Malfoy family. I mean, its been twenty years!
Yes, I left you guys on a cliffie yet again! I really can't help myself...I have an idea for the next chapter, hope you'll come back to check it out! :D
Much love,

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Review #40, by Roxanne Antoine The Painful Truth

16th June 2013:
AMAZING I cried tears of joy when i realized you'd posted another chapter.
Kindest Regards,
Roxanne Antoine x

Author's Response: Hello!

Hey there! Oh, my goodness I'm so happy that you've been waiting this long for another chapter and thanks so much for coming back! I'm sorry that it took so long! D':
Hopefully I'll be updating for this rather quickly so no worries and hopefully no more tears! Hahahaha.
Much love,

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Review #41, by CassiePotter The Painful Truth

15th June 2013:
Hi Gabbie!
This chapter was fantastic! I loved gettin back to Roxie and Ben! I always really like reading the flashbacks that you write, because it's really fun and interesting to see what the two of them were like as kids. It really highlights how much they've changed, and how much happier they were when they could just play together without anyone making a huge deal out of things. Except for Perce... But he's always making a huge deal out of anything involving Ben, isn't he? Haha.
I really felt bad for Roxie throughout everything that happened on the platform. On one hand, you can see how much her brother wants to protect her, and how much her parents love her, but on the other, everyone's trying to pull her from Ben and push her towards Adam. That has to be so awkward for her! Also, I thought you wrote Roxanne's emotions really well as they changed throughout the conversation that was going on, and you really showed how she reacted to everything that was being said.
This chapter really made me love Angie as a mother, though! She's definitely there for her kids, particularly Roxie during this chapter, and wants to do what's best for them, but won't push them into anything they're uncomfortable with. She was really sweet and comforting to Roxanne, and I really loved it!
AND THE END OF THIS CHAPTER. It was so good! It's starting to have a darker tone, though, and it makes me a little anxious, but also really excited for future chapters! I have a feeling Roxie's plan to avoid Ben is not going to work out for her.
Hopefully you can update this soon, so we can find out more about the event going on at Hogwarts, and Roxie and Ben's relationship, and hopefully what happened in Italy, too! I can't wait for Audrey and Percy, either! I'm not sure what I'm updating next, but I'll let you know! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hey!

Cassie! D': Its so good seeing you again and thanks so much for being the first person to hop onto this chapter, I was sort of worried about it for a minute. It had been so long and I wasn't sure if anyone would be interested in coming back to it but here you are!
Anyway, the flashbacks are always really fun for me to write and also a little sad. They show just how sweet and hopeful Ben and Roxanne both were when they were children and the differences between them in the future makes you wonder what was lost as they grew up.
Things were far more innocent between them as children but there were still little hints that it wouldn't be easy for them. Every little flashback sort of always plays or hints at something that will happen in the main story so pay attention to those!
But anyway, Perce can make a big deal out of everything Ben does can't he? I think on some end it might be a tad bit of jealousy because Roxie's not spending as much time with him as she used to. But he's very overprotective of her and later on, it just gets so much worse...
Anyhoo! Its really hard on Roxanne having everyone pushing her towards Adam when she obviously isn't interested and I tried to get her emotions just right.
There were alot of versions of this chapter and I think this one really showed her range better than some of the others.
I hadn't really played too much on Angie being a mother in this story since Roxie is an obvious daddy's girl. But I thought it was time to show that she was a good mother and the type that would be supportive no matter what happened. And you know that Angie is actually pretty perceptive so she most likely knows whats bothering Roxanne but is just waiting on her to say. She won't push the issue unless she has to, she really loves her kids.
Ah, the ending! I was iffy on it, I wasn't sure if this was the direction I needed to go but it worked out better than I thought! Her avoidance of Ben isn't going to go in the way she thought...things are going to heat up between them before the end of this story.
In more ways than one. Hehehehehehe.
You find out about the event happening at Hogwarts and Ben's relationship with Roxie changes a little too. Mwhwahahahhaha.
Let's see...I'm going for Audrey and Percy next and then after that its A Force of Wills finally and then Albus! D':
So much work to do...
Anyway, I'm going to hop on over to The Fourth Daughter right now!
Much love,

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Review #42, by GirlOnTheSidelines Will and Won't

6th May 2013:

I can never decide if I hate Ben or if I am really just in love with him. Honestly, the things you do to me.

So this was another fantastic chapter. This is such a unique story and so complicated. I wish Ben would just stop being so hard to understand, in most stories you have some sense of what the other person is thinking but with Ben, I just don't have a clue. I can never tell if he actually likes Roxanne or not. And then he spews out things like he did at the end about always giving into her and I'm just like... huh? I do not understand what is going through your mind Benjamin Fredrick Malfoy? Also, on that note, does his middle name have anything to do with Fred Weasley, or is that just my wishful thinking?

Firstly, how old is Roxanne exactly? Is she going into her Fifth or Sixth Year at Hogwarts? And also, is it really bad that a part of me really, really wants her to be pregnant? I don't know why, I think she's too young (although that didn't stop me from making Vivian pregnant) but she is also not emotionally mature in the slightest sometimes but a part of me just really wants her to have that connection with Ben that actually cannot be broken. I know, it's weird and probably doesn't go into this story at all, but a part of me just really wishes she was. Maybe its just that I love babies.

On that maturity note though, I was quite impressed with how she behaved in this chapter, I think that while she has a lot of maturing still to do, she is definitely more mature that she was at the start of this story which in some ways is nice to see but also a little sad. It was interesting watching her hold her ground against Ben in a way that she hadn't previously been able to do.

Okay, so there was something I always get a little confused about: the Malfoy family. So, is the Draco in this story the same as the one in Force of Wills? And in this one he is married to Pansy Parkinson and has Scorpius and Emily with her but also adopted Ben who is older than them? Right? I'm still curious to know who Ben's parents actually are? If I remember correctly )I read a couple of chapters of your story with Albus, Rose and Scorpius) do Pansy and Draco later get divorced (if they are even the same couple as they are in this story)? Sorry I'm so confused.

Anyway, amazing chapter as always and I look forward to more. Even though I sometimes just want to shake Ben and tell him to just speak whatever is on his mind and stop being such a confusing jerk!

GirlOnTheSidelines xxx

P.S. I'm really sorry, I just realised I left a review from my friend's account, IrishMyth, who was still logged on. Sorry that one on The Bad Taste was from me!

Author's Response: Hello!

Hey there you! Its so great getting this really massive review and I've missed you bunches and all that junk. Anyway, on to this!
Okay, so I'm not quite sure if I hate or love Ben myself most of the time but he is a hard guy to get straight isn't he? You're never quite sure what he wants and that's done on purpose, he's a more difficult character for me and I'm having my fill. ;)
I think that with his feelings for Roxanne, you should really re-read "Restraint" to get a good clue on it. He has feelings for her but right now, they're really complicated due to various reasons that I haven't written yet and that you'll just have to guess at. ;)
I suppose I should make his feelings more obvious sometimes but then...where's the fun in that?! >:D
The thing with his middle name being Frederick is none of your business either. ;)
Okay, my love, Roxanne is fifteen, she's going into her Fifth year at Hogwarts. She is also, sadly, a Prefect so there you go. HAHAHAH.
I had actually thought of making Roxanne get pregnant from Benjamin but with the way I needed this story to go I didn't go through with it. And also, I just can't see Roxie having a baby, she's not nearly emotionally ready and it would only cause more uneccessary drama between her and Ben. And well, there are alot of those stories around and I love yours so much and I can't compete with that.T-T
I think Roxanne handled herself really well in this chatper with Ben. I mean, she had to or else fall prey to his various tricks and his fantastic bum and well, you know what I mean. I think that she'll switch between being really mature and being really childish, which makes her more difficult but fun to write. I mean, honestly, she is only fifteen, she's not like Astoria who HAS to be grown up for the sake of her life and she isn't street smart like my gal Audrey. Roxanne is just a girl and I need to keep that in mind. :D
And to be honest, who says Roxanne is going to be able to hold her ground against Ben later? Oh, the thinggs he'll do.
OKAY. As for your question about the Malfoy's, I get alot of questions about them for some reason, I think I was too vague in my chapters previously.
Yes, the Draco in this story IS the same Draco from A Force of Wills but since that story happens in the past technically you don't find out WHY he's so different in this story until I finish A Force of Wills. *Inhale*
This story takes place one year before my story with Albus and the rest so yes, he is still married to Pansy. Ben is waaay older than Scorpy and Emily and he is adopted and I won't go into who his real parents are until...well, when I get to it! >:D
Trust me, the things Ben thinks about are not for the faint of heart. You may regret wanting to know what? I might make another short story with him just for you...
You'll be sorry.
Thanks for the review!
Much love,

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Review #43, by Roxanne Antoine Will and Won't

11th April 2013:
. SO happy with this chappie :D

Author's Response: Hello!

Haahaha, I think alot of people liked this chapter and thanks for leaving me a quick little review! Hopefully you'll come back to this once I start writing again! ;)
Much love,

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Review #44, by Courtney Dark Tug and Pull

7th March 2013:
You really do like your cliffhangers, don't you?? I am already super intrigued to find out what happens next! Roxanne and Benjamin's relationship is kind of...bizarre. It's like they've got this strange attraction to each other, even though they are very different people and they keep coming together in weird and unexpected ways! It's great! Especially when Benjamin starts to pull away...but then seemingly comes springing back. It's clear he has feelings for Roxanne, he just doesn't know what to do about them. And I guess Roxanne feels the same, too.

I LOVE George and Angelina. God, they are so embarrassing, but in the best way possible. I think you have written their relationship really, really well. It seems very believable and I laughed out loud at almost every single one of their comments in this chapter. And it's kinda cute how Ben has a crush on Angie.

Hmm, I found Draco and George's relationship in this chapter very interesting. It was very cordial which was odd to see, especially as they didn't get along at all at school. And I have to say, I am so happy we got to see a little glimpse of Draco in this chapter, as he is always an interesting character to read about.

I'm not quite sure why, but I really liked reading the little section at the end, about night in Diagon Alley. That first sentence, about how it was loud and noisy, really gave me vivid memories of some of my own experiences and I could almost picture Diagon Alley in my mind, which was awesome! And the detail about Fred's bedroom and the energy that lingered there was super sad and touching - a very nice detail, I thought.

Great chapter!


Author's Response: Hello!

I think I have a really, really bad habit of leaving cliff hangers and its pretty awful of me but I can't help myself. >:D
Roxanne and Ben's relationship is really weird, isn't it? Its a strange sort of thing, as if they really can't fight it and want one another despite whatever happens between them. It would be more romantic if Benjamin were actually the sort of guy to apologize, swoon at her feet and worship the ground she walked on.
But then again, this is Benjamin Malfoy and he is a monster. I take full blame. :D
There will be more weird moments between the couple, I promise you. Benjamin will say something about always coming back to Roxanne in the next chapter, it honestly really bothers him as much as it does Roxanne when she gives in to her own desire.
*Snickers at saying desire*
Bwhahaha, everyone says that they love George and Angie. I mean, how can you not? They're pretty hilarious! I am so used to writing them by this point that writing them is alot easier to me than some of the other characters. All of their jokes were supposed to make you laugh and I'm glad that you enjoyed reading them! I laughed while typing them out because, honestly, who doesn't love a dirty joke? Ben's always had a crush on Angie, probably a bit more than he's liked Roxanne. Hahaha.
I think so much has happened to Draco and George in between their school years that letting all the past animosity go has given them sort of a friendship. Not quite buddies but they're not enemies either. I can't say the same for Draco and the Trio, however. :D
Draco is an interesting character and he isn't the bad guy in this story either. Honestly, he's the sort of person that you feel sorry for later down the line...
I always think that Diagon Alley is a really bustling place even at night. The noise and commotion reminds me of home or places like Chicago where cars are always going down the road or people moving around.
There are some other weird details about Fred's room. I wonder if anyone caught on to the fact that Roxanne was in his room and not her brother? Strange, don't you think? ;)
Thanks for coming back! I might not have time to re-request but stop by whenever you like for the last chapter. It'll be my last one before I leave for basic. D':
Much love,

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Review #45, by patronus_charm Will and Won't

6th March 2013:
Hey Gabbie! Iím here with your review! Haha its fine that you didnít request any earlier, as youíre here now! Iím sorry that my hate for Benjamin is so apparent; perhaps heíll grow on me in this chapter?

I was just like go Roxanne, at the beginning of this chapter. She was finally showing some girl power, and trying to stand up against Ben, and I felt so proud for her, as it was really lovely moment to see, as you could tell how much sheís matured, and grown as a person.

I loved her thoughts when she was getting ready to meet him though, as they made me laugh so much. The way she described what her family members would be up to, and I think even though she just mentioned that whatever George and Angelina would be up to would give her nightmares, I think it would give me nightmares too, as I now have weird images in my head! And lol, wearing a hideous bra so he wouldnít want to kiss her, genius!

I really liked the flashback, as it was really sweet and lovely, and Mrs Malfoy just seemed so nice, and just lovely. It was strange to see her be so nice to Roxanne, but it was a pleasant surprise, as I would like to think that after the war they would past their past differences behind them. Then the mention about Draco buying too much from the shop made me laugh as well, as I can just picture him walking out with mountains of things.

I liked all the canon characters you included in this, as I noticed the mentions towards Mrs Mclaggen, Teddy and Victoire, and that made me smile! So Benís always been a ladies man then? He started young then! Draco always seemed like a bit of player in my mind too, so I guess it would only be natural to follow in his footsteps!

That dream! Poor Angelina, it made me nearly cry too! Though Percy being Georgeís second lover, surprised but hey I can see they would be like that!

Quick question, is this story interlinked with A Force of Wills? If so, is the Emily mentioned, Emily Greengrass?

I liked the heart to heart they had, as it showed a more open and more emotional Ben and that was nice to see, as I was a little worried he was becoming heartless! I did feel a little sad that they did leave home, but hey Malfoys are so pale, they do need a little sun from time to time!

Then Ben thought she was pregnant! Lol! Haha that made me laugh so much! Even though they just had a sort of argument, it made me happy to see that it left on a humorous note. Well for me, Iím not too sure about Roxanne!

I loved the last sentence more girl powerness! This chapter made me laugh so much, and I really love this new Roxanne, itís such a nice thing to see!

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hello!

I really did forget to put this in your review thread because I was so busy lately but like you said, here I am! Hahaha.
And I suppose Benjamin will have to grow on alot of people, he's not really the easiest person to like.
But oh, how I adore him! :D
I think Roxanne was really just trying to be as strong as possible in this chapter and after what happened, she has grown. She still has some growing to do but I'm glad that you picked up on her changing a little, she doesn't want Ben to bully her anymore.
But he still does. Hahhaa.
Bwhaha, anything that George and Angie are doing in their bedroom would frighten anyone and I feel sorry for anyone who's walked in on them. Poor, Roxanne and Perce...
And yes, that ugly bra was going to be her shield against Ben! But he did say that no matter what she wore he'd still think about her naked so that might not have worked? Haha.
I wasn't so sure on this flashback at first but I'm glad that you liked it. I wanted to write Mrs. Malfoy in a way where she was kind and gentle, and she's the sort of woman that really enjoys children so she wouldn't have been rude to Roxanne.
I think Draco mostly buys things from Weasley's Wizard Wheezes for himself, I haven't written him as particularly happy. Hahhaa. And its fun picturing him in his office just playing around instead of working!
I couldn't think of the proper old lady in this story but I settled on Mrs. McLaggen for whatever reason, just because I remembered McLaggen from the books.
I didn't really like him...
Anyhoo, Teddy and Victoire are mentioned more than once but they don't really play a major role in this story.
Ben is a reluctant ladie's man! I think it was something he grew into but he probably did notice his dad being really sweet on the ladies. Hehehehe. They start young, don't they?
You know, I thought that with Angelina and Georget hat it would be good to show them in a different light. They're not always so happy, they're very damaged and so Angie's nightmare just made me so sad. What she was talking about with George smiling and on the ground comes from another story.
My warning to you is to not read that if you're afraid of angst (That's "This is Angelina").
But yes, Percy would pretty much be George's second wife. They're really close. Although Percy wouldn't really want anyone aside from Audrey but hey, they must sneak around. ;)
In answer to your quick question: Sort of. All of my stories interlink on some degree and what happens in A Force of Wills can sort of be seen in this story. But no, the Emily mentioned in this story is Benjamin's sister, Emily Malfoy. But it makes you wonder, why is she named after Emily Greengrass?
I think Ben is the sort of person that's afraid to show too much emotion, which would explain why he would come off as cold. But writing him more vulnerable is a challenge, he never does as I want him to and gives me a hard time.
Bwhahaha, Draco is pale but I can't really picture Ben that way. For some reason, I think he'd be a tad more tanned, like Charlie Weasley since he probably likes being outside.
Ben did think she was pregnant! It was funny to write Roxanne's reaction to it too! I wasn't going for it to be funny at all but it turned out to be and I was like, sorry Roxie! HAHAHA.
Roxanne is going to change. She's going to turn into a big girl soon! Glad that you enjoyed this! I might not be able to update in a while, since I'm leaving soon but this was so nice! Thanks!
Much love,

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Review #46, by Courtney Dark After the Storm

4th March 2013:
Ooooh, you're evil! Leaving us with a cliffhanger like that - I thought that was really well done, by the way and a great way to end the chapter.

So, there was a lot I liked about this chapter, so this is going to be a struggle for me, pointing out my favourite bits and pieces...hmmm...

I think my favourite part of the flashback was Roxanne and George's conversation about Fred/Perce. Roxanne's comment: 'ďBut Benjamin's not his dad,Ē Roxanne said defiantly and for a moment she was quiet as her father waited for her to reply. She knew that she was touching on a shaky subject but she asked, ďthat's right about Perce isn't it? He's not Uncle Fred but people act like he is sometimes" was really interesting and explained the reason why Roxanne calls Fred Perce. So I think that was a great detail to include!

I lurve Roxanne's relationship with Molly. She seems like a great cousin, and I love how some characteristics of Percy seem to be coming out in her-I especially liked their conversation about prefects and the introduction of Adam (loved the piercings and dyed hair) and his girlfriend. I hope he will continue appearing in more chapters...there could be some possible tension with Benjamin there, methinks.

I like that Perce and Roxanne were getting along-ish again in this chapter, rather than outright fighting. Their conversation seemed very realistic and sibling-ish which reminded me of me and my sister, which was great. Overall, this was yet another great chapter.


Author's Response: Hello!

Bwahhahahahah! I know, I'm evil. I leave alot of cliffhangers on all of my stories, I really can't help it, its such a bad habit. HAHAH. Oh, to have seen your face...
I'm glad that you really liked this chapter, it took me a long time to get right. But I think it needed the time jump and also, it was great going back into flashbacks and Roxanne's family, who I love. ;D
I had to have that conversation with Roxanne and George sooner or later. It actually comes up more than once in this story, later on and I thought it'd be a good introduction to what might happen later. There was always a reason for why Roxanne called her brother by his middle name and I'm glad that you were able to pick up on that and enjoy it! Alot of other weird things are going on in their house too but I'll get to that eventually. Eventually...
Bwha, I LOVE Roxanne and Molly too! I think they balance one another really well and there is some Percy in her, she's a very well-mannered girl. Then again, Percy isn't so much like that anymore...but that's another story. ;)
Bwhahaa, the Prefect conversation made me laugh because well, Roxanne doesn't want to be a Bloody Big Head. HAHAHA.
So you like the introduction of Adam, eh? I'll have him poking up more than once in this story and yes, there's going to be some tension between him and Ben.
And well, Ben is going to be hated by everyone even more so than usual. :p
I'm really glad that you enjoyed Perce and Roxanne's relationship. They don't fight all the time but they do clash and get on each other's nerves. :D
I took things from arguing with my own brother into that part. Oh, how he annoys me...
Anyway, thanks for coming back! I shall re-request!
Much love,

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Review #47, by DancingMooncalf What the Heart Wants

4th March 2013:
Ow Roxie, she's so young and naÔve and full of trust... I don't know but I bet this won't end to well for her.

You sure know how to keep up the suspence. It's driving me crazy... I almost can't stop reading.
You got to teach me how to do that, it's amazing!

x Maya

Author's Response: Hello!

Welcome back, Maya! :) I'm really glad that you're still reading. But yes, Roxanne is very full of trust and she's very naiive but then again, she's spoiled and only fifteen. She's got some growing up to do and I won't tell you what happens, you may or may not want to smack Ben. :D
Oh, thanks so much! I like playing with suspense and making you all want to read more, thanks so much! :D
Bwhahaha, you can ask me things on my MTA if you want, I guess I could give some advice? Hahahha, I don't know. I'm no expert! D':
Thanks again,
Much love,

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Review #48, by DancingMooncalf Stealth and Lies

4th March 2013:
Hey again,
I was curous about the other stories you had written and this story has really gotten my attention and I'm really very curious how it goes on.
You are very good in building up tension, I can't tell you enough. I almost feel in tingling in the air while I'm reading.

Roxanne seems to be a bit naive, but maybe she ust wants to trust her old friend. I makes me want to reach out and protect her, really. I don't want her to get hurt you know.

I think you are an excellent writer!

Author's Response: Hello!

Why, hello there! This is such a nice surprise, I didn't think that I would be seeing you again so soon but thanks for reading this other angsty story for me. :)
I'm glad that it was able to catch your attention, I wasn't really sure if people would notice it but this makes me feel better. :D
Ooh, the tingling may just be your nerves about to be stretched and shattered! I love building up suspense and making you all squirm because its fun and I'm evil. >:D
Roxanne is very naiive, I'd wanted to make that a point in the first few chapters of this but really, she's only fifteen. And yes, she just wants to reconnect with her old friend but I can't say if she gets hurt or not, I don't want to ruin anything for you! ;)
Pshaw, thank you!
My Audrey/Percy has another chapter, have fun reading that whenever you can.
Much love,

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Review #49, by Courtney Dark Torn Apart

1st March 2013:
Greetings (That's me trying out one of my new favourite ways of saying hello, FYI. Yes? No?) Okay, sorry. Onto the chapter...

First I want to say that so far the flow of this whole story is excellent. Your plot is flowing smoothly and at an even, steady pace. You are not rushing things but each chapter is not ridiculously slow and boring either-so congrats for that!

I really liked some of the newer characters that were introduced/reappeared in this chapter, especially Molly. In a lot of fanfiction stories she is stuffy and boring, but she actually seems really awesome in this. I have to admit, I laughed a quite a bit when you described the way she was dancing in her underwear and singing that extremely, erm...interesting song. That was definitely a nice, humorous touch to the chapter.

The flashback in this chapter was really sweet, and I think it really suited the mood of the story. It was nice to see a vulnerable side of Benjamin-to show that he did have real, human emotions, and reasons for doing the things that he does. I actually felt a little sorry for him-Perce was pretty horrible, and the idea of he and Teddy shooting hexes and jinxes at him increased my sympathy even more-although I still want a reason for why he acted so horribly to Roxanne!

I love your Audrey and Percy! They are a hilariously hilarious and slightly quirky couple which I love. I particularly liked the line: '"He took a day off today and I told him to go buy me some more panties at this Muggle place I like in London." And Roxanne and Perce's reactions were great.

Overall, I thought this was a great chapter. I was a little worried I was going to get bored, after reading 9000 words, but I certainly didn't, and you should definitely be commended for that. Nice job.


Author's Response: Greetings to you as well! :D

Its really nice seeing you back of course and I really enjoyed reading this review, it made me very happy to see you back again. :3
Oh, goodness, thank you for saying that the flow of this was all right. I had to slow myself down alot for this to get certain scenes and bits in place but I think I flubbed on the current chapter. I dunno? Hahhaa. I try not to rush myself with any of my stories, because it usually turns out pretty darn awful.
I think alot of people might have been really surprised by Molly in this chapter. I mean, I never wanted her to be stuffy and boring just because Percy/Audrey were portrayed that way. Come on, people, have some fun! ;)
I like imagining this particular Weasley home to be a bit more lively, and Percy in this story and in my others isn't really much of a stiff.
And yes, uhm, that was an interesting song Molly was dancing to, wasn't it? :p
I made up those horrid lyrics myself...
I'm glad that you laughed though, that was my intention! Just a dash of humor in an angst story really relaxes me and hopefully you all!
Gives you a break from the tears...
Anyhoo, I actually liked this flashback the most so far. It did show alot of emotion from Benjamin and made you really see him as just another little boy. Also, I never want to paint any of the Weasley grandchildren as being perfect, I wanted all of them to be flawed.
Teddy and Perce picking on Ben was just the perfect thing I could have used for that moment. :p
Ben may or may not talk about why he acted the way he did with Roxanne. Later on...
People really like Audrey and Percy! Hahaha. It stuns me, it really, really does. I mean, I guess that they really are pretty hilarious together, even though Percy didn't make an appearance like I'd originally wanted. :(
They're actually pretty quirky, like you said and a tad odd. If you wanted, you could check out "This is Audrey Tang: The Bad Taste" and "That Night" on my author's page, if you wanted to know more about them.
I warn you though, its very...uhm, mature.
That quote from Audrey you like had me dying when I wrote it! :D
Thank you SO much, I don't know why this chapter was so long. I honestly don't. Thank god you didn't get bored...
Much love and thanks again,

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Review #50, by CassiePotter Will and Won't

28th February 2013:
Hi Gabbie!
Oh, I absolutely ADORED this chapter! It was fantastic! There were just SO. MANY. FEELS. You really captured the whole emotional spectrum in just this chapter, and did it so well! The emotions from Roxie were so strong and powerful, and I loved that even though they changed a lot throughout the chapter, they flowed really well and felt very natural. You just write her so well! I feel like I know her and we're really good friends already just from reading this! :)
I LOVED the flashback! You do such a wonderful job of weaving them throughout the story, so we get bits and pieces of how Roxanne and Benjamin's relationship got to where it is now. I can just picture the two of them together as kids! And Pansy is Ben's mother? SO DOES THAT MEAN BLASTORIA HAPPENS??? I hope so! But back to this story, the part where Roxie gave Ben her wilting daisies was so cute! She's such a sweet little girl, but has that feisty side that I love!
AND THE END OF THIS CHAPTER. GABBIE IT WAS PHENOMENAL. I can't even... GAH. Ben just gives me chills! The way he messes with Roxie's emotions while still being confused about how he feels is perfect! But he still seems a little dangerous, even if he has moments of being sweet to Roxanne! I can't wait to see how this develops! And the very end... Poor Roxie. You're definitely not done with Benjamin Malfoy!
This chapter was just so incredible! I loved is! ASOS is up, and TFD is next, with Holding On after that. I think. We'll see. Haha. See you on the forums! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hello!

Cassie, its always so lovely to see you back! :3 I truly look forward to your reviews you know. When I was writing this chapter, I wasn't sure what I was doing to be honest but I'm glad that I was able to get the feels just right. Roxanne's emotions tumble and flop alot so capturing them all is really fun, while difficult at times. I mean, honestly, she and George are just alike...D':
Ooooh, I am SO happy that you love Roxanne so much and that she feels so real to you! I honestly can't even begin to go on about how good that just made me feel! Like, gah! *Blushes*
I try to weave the flashbacks in with the story as much as possible, to not only show how different Roxie and Ben are in the present but to hint at later things to come in the story. Mwhahahaha.
Well, technically, Ben is adopted but yes, Pansy is his mum and did you notice how spoiled HE was in that flashback?! Hahhaha.
And he talks about Roxanne.
Bwhaha, Blastoria? I shall not tell! >:D
I actually have the image of Roxanne giving Ben her wilting daisies in my mind and it just makes me feel all fuzzy. :) And she's a fiesty, sweet little girl and I'm absolutely in love with her, she's really fun to write. :D
Ooh, Ben! He's so.I don't even know how to describe him. He's just too much! I got the shivers writing his lines because well, he's so mean and crude and...delicious. ;)
So you picked up on how confused he was about her, did you?! Good job! :D That's just what I was going for too. He can manipulate all he likes but he can't deny how he feels forever you know.
Not if I have anything to do with it.
Mwhahahahhhahaha. >:D
Yes, poor Roxie but she won't stay down for long, she'll pull through. But, will she give in to Ben in the end?!! That's the mystery for you all, right? :D
I know I would, just cause I'm weak for a man with long hair. Hehehehe. ;)
Ooh, ASOS! My darling Louis, I'll be there as soon as possible! I promise! :D *Smothers him in kisses*
Can't wait for your next update! I'm going to really work on getting A Force of Blaise up there for you. :)
See you on the forums!
Thanks again!
Much love,

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