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Review #26, by Ayumi Rose. --- Unpleasant Fallout.

21st June 2015:
I can't wait for that conversation for the next chapter and roses reaction!! So so glad that rose is doing ok although her fertility being affected is still devastating... Great chapter, can't wait for the next!!

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Review #27, by SunshineDaisies Rose. --- The Letter.

12th June 2015:
House Cup 2015 Hufflepuff

Hello! I'm shamelessly using the review challenge to catch up on my reading and reviewing :) I'm very pleased about it!

So first of all, I had to look up what an erkling was and OH MY GOD. It sounds all sweet and innocent BUT NOPE IT EATS KIDS. I AM HORRIFIED. I DON'T EVEN LIKE CHILDREN.

Okay, so now that I've got that out of my system, this is a lovely chapter! The transition was wonderful as usual, and I think the letter is a great way to progress the plot. Sending a thank you note for lunch is so wonderfully old-fashioned, I can absolutely imagine Narcissa Malfoy doing it.

And of course I would never expect someone to do that now, so I understand Rose's heart attack as well. She might have been a touch dramatic, but I think we all have those days where everything is awful and then the littlest thing makes you sob. Poor Rose.

I'm excited to see what happens next with this! I just love the whole premise of this story so much.

Going back to the erklings, you do a fantastic job of incorporating information like this into your story! It sounds completely natural and really brings Rose and her world to life. You've obviously done a ton of research and it really shows how much you care about this story and your writing, which always makes things more enjoyable to read.

Happy House Cup!

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Review #28, by Reems Scorpius. --- Definitive News.

8th June 2015:
Awesomeness! Please hurry with the next!

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Review #29, by Becca Scorpius. --- Definitive News.

3rd June 2015:

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Review #30, by ayumi Scorpius. --- Definitive News.

1st June 2015:
FINALLY!! rose is alive!! (at least)...heartbroken about her fertility tho how could you do this to us!! ;( definitely can't wait for ron to react to rose saying scorpius' name; i do hope he and scorpius eventually become friendly again (it will probably take years at this rate lol)

I'm super interested to find out more about the whole incident and the true reasons for van and victoire's concern etc about what happened!! cannot WAIT for the next chapter!! please keep updating your stories as they literally brighten up my day!!

also about the sequel - gasp! SUPER STOKED about it and I'm guessing scorpius will somehow have to restore rose's soul??!??! can't wait! ♥♥♥

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Review #31, by TidalDragon Rose. --- A Weasley Family Saturday.

31st May 2015:
Howdy! Sorry it's taken such an eternity for me to get here - especially because this is so well-written. But work's been a bear.

At any rate, I really enjoyed this - much more than most Scorpius/Rose fics I've read. I think their being out of Hogwarts (even if only just) is a huge factor in that, but even more so it's down to the maturity you've lent the two. You've made it obvious (even not having read the previous story) that they each have their flaws, but made them willing to talk about and deal with them - something SO rarely done in fic and even less so with this pairing. I also give you props in that regard for holding firm and not having Rose roll over. As you've characterized her she doesn't seem the type, but it was important I think that she didn't relent.

I also really enjoyed the balance of this piece. The way you transitioned seamlessly from description or inner thought to dialogue and back again was delightful and the whole chapter read so naturally for me (like a "real" book - I use quotes because I happen to think that the work we do on our stories makes them VERY real, but you know how people are)! You should be incredibly proud of that because it's a really difficult thing to do I think, but you nailed it.

The one thing that rang a TOUCH odd to me was the comment Rose made about Lucius "probably" having gone after her family. Granted, she's not that old, but presumably she'd be aware that Lucius Malfoy had attempted unspeakable things against her family - if from nowhere else but good old Ron. Maybe that's me, but it just surprised me to see.

Anyway, I've added this to my reading list (the first Scorpius/Rose novel to make it - be proud again) since I'm still swamped through the end of June, but I hope to come back and carry on because I'm really impressed with the story even after just this chapter. EVERY time I participate in this Prefect Review Exchange I swear I get a brilliant story I would've NEVER otherwise read. Lucky me, right?

Thanks for sharing Beeezie!

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Review #32, by Gabriella Hunter Rose. --- A Weasley Family Saturday.

26th May 2015:

This is Gabbie from the forums with your review and because I don't think we've been properly introduced, it's lovely to meet you! :D

So, I don't read much Scorpius/Rose even though there are a thousand stories on the archives. I could never get into this pairing much but I like what you've done with the characters here, they don't seem to be forced onto each other simply because of the "Bad Boy"/"Good Girl" angle that I've seen.

Now, I like that maturity that you've given Rose and the fact that you started this chapter with family and ended it discussing family. That's actually something that I found very well-done, I'm not sure if anyone else caught the parallels between the beginning and end.

Rose loves her family and it's made clear in the first few paragraphs. We get a lot of detailed information about her and I feel like I know her pretty well and enjoyed the discussion she had with Albus too. The cousins that you introduced so far all have distinct personalities and I really like that you've done that--usually in a story, they're just a sea of faces but I feel like I would know them well after continuing with this story. Anyway, I thought that the idea for the DCB was a neat addition to this story, Rose isn't written like this often.

I also love Healer James! :D

I do think it's a bit dangerous but I think that might be resolved somewhere down the line. Now, I know that you wanted more input on Scorpius and Rose's relationship and I have to say that that I like them as a couple but I sense a bit of distance between them. I'm not sure if it's intentional, since they haven't gotten past some issues but I think that they work together.

I'm worried about Scorpius's insistence on Rose meeting his grandparents though. I can understand both of their POV's but I wonder if he's having second thoughts? There was some hesitation in his behavior that I picked up on but that might have been done on purpose. I'm curious to see what happens with these two, I wonder if they'll be able to stay together if things start to go wrong.

Anyway, I liked this! I didn't spot any CC's that should worry you so don't worry about that. Feel free to re-request!

Much Love,


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Review #33, by ayumi Scorpius. --- Eavesdropping on Ron.

26th May 2015:
*praying that Lyssa has come to tell them that Rose has woken up*
Loved loved LOVED this chapter! love hugo and scorpius' relationship, love how roxy starts to like scorpius because of that, of all things, and love the eavesdropping of course ; )
i'm glad albus at least agrees with scorpius' decision to use the potions too
and i really do hope scorpius and ron get past this tho, i can see that they probably got on really well before! I'd love to see some ron moments where he battles with his dislike of draco when accepting scorpius too!
Overall: ♥♥♥♥♥

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Review #34, by becca Scorpius. --- The Potter Boys' Arrival.

22nd May 2015:
You were supposed to update today!
I've been waiting all week
Now as punishment put up 2 chapters :-P

Author's Response: Hey, it's not even 5pm my time - I've still got 7 hours! ♥

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Review #35, by LittleMissAutumn Scorpius. --- The Potter Boys' Arrival.

15th May 2015:
Albus and Scorp are so cute. I think Rose will eventually wake up and be ok; I don't think that she'll actually least I hope not. However, she might not be able to have children but I think everything should turn out fine. There's always other options.

I have a feeling that Mrs. Weasley and Mr. Potter were probably talking about legal stuff, most likely about the proxy. If they found out what Scorpius agreed to before Rose wakes up then all hell will break loose.

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Review #36, by Ayumi Scorpius. --- The Potter Boys' Arrival.

15th May 2015:
Whoop whoop for a new chapter!! Hope rose will wake up soon!! For the Harry hermione thing I'm guessing that they're talking about how the attacks were near hogwarts/ might be coordinated and can't be a coincidence along with all the other creature activity?? Only a theory tho
Can't wait for next week and the next cinas update!! And thank u for getting back to me about Noah; I will defo read that story when it comes up!!

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Review #37, by lhod23 Scorpius. --- Inner Turmoil.

13th May 2015:
Wow I am loving this so much. Scorpius is a bad a**. I love getting things from his point of view. Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I hope you enjoy the next chapter just as much! ♥

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Review #38, by Ayumi Scorpius. --- Inner Turmoil.

13th May 2015:
scorpius' anguish is definitely coming through!! I feel terrible for him and then I question the fact that I feel so terrible for a fictional character...I would have thought that Ron was pretty angry but more concerned about rose I guess?? He probably just sees him in a new light as actually standing up for himself, which isn't necessarily a bad thing
Another great chapter and I definite cannot wait for future chapters and the next cinas update!! Also I was wondering will Noah from cinas feature at all?? I rly liked him actually

Author's Response: Oh, good! I'm really glad to hear that. ♥ If I'm making you feel terrible for a fictional character, I admit I'm very happy about it - I must be doing something right! :P

As far as Noah goes... ugh I want to feature him so bad, because I like him, too. I'm trying really hard to work him in, but it's tough because he, like Lucy, works at the Department of Mysteries and tends to keep very long hours. I *will* be writing a short story focusing on him and Lucy encountering some very odd and frightening thing at some point, though, so even if he doesn't pop up for any length of time in this story, he will at some point. :)

Thank you for the review! :)

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Review #39, by Becca Scorpius. --- Inner Turmoil.

12th May 2015:

Author's Response: Just updated. ;)

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Review #40, by Ayumi Scorpius. --- A Confrontation with the Weasleys.

12th May 2015:
I wouldn't be particularly suprised if Ron and hermione hold this against him forever, tbh. I get where his angers coming from but jeez. I wouldn't be too happy if someone said that to me either!!
Definitely can't wait for acorpius eavesdropping on Ron!! (I assume that's what you're referring too ;D)
Great chapter as always!!

Author's Response: Yeah, as far as good ideas go, that was so far from one that it's not even on the same planet. That is indeed what I'm referring to, though - oh, dear. :P I hope you enjoy it when the chapter is posted, and thank you so much for the review! ♥

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Review #41, by Ayumi Scorpius. --- An Unpleasant Revelation.

11th May 2015:
If rose does have fertility issues it will break my heart!! ;(
So looking forward to the big blow chapter here we come!! Fabulous writing as always :D and I am LOVING the scorpius povs

Author's Response: Thank you so much! ♥

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Review #42, by Ayumi Rose. --- Danger Behind Every Corner.

11th May 2015:
OF COURSE rose just runs straight in without a moment of thought...I'm actually rly curious about the whole girl-wearing-robes mystery too!! Going straight to the next chapter because PROCRASTINATION :D

Author's Response: Yes! The girl-wearing-robes will be addressed at some point, I promise, but I do find it interesting that people have mostly overlooked that because of how gravely injured Rose ends up being. It's far from irrelevant, though! ;)

Thank you so much for all your reviews - they make me smile. ♥

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Review #43, by Dianainga Scorpius. --- Inner Turmoil.

7th May 2015:
I was thrilled to see a brand new chapter, but very worried about Rose. And, if anything happens to her, I cannot imagine how Scorpius will bear the guilt! He needs James and Albus, for sure. I do hope for the best and cannot wait to read your next chapter. Pulling for Rose to wake up with little or no side effects. Great story!

Author's Response: Thank you! I just posted the newest chapter; James and Albus have indeed finally shown up, and I hope you enjoy their reactions to all of this (and, of course, the chapter as a whole).

Thanks so much for taking the time to review, and I hope you enjoy the newest chapter, too. ♥

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Review #44, by LittleMissAutumn Scorpius. --- Inner Turmoil.

7th May 2015:
Oh my gosh! I still can't believe the things Scorpius told Ron! I was biting on my fist and couldn't tear my eyes away but oh I still adore that boy. His chapters are always my favorite. I think Rose is quite self-centered and she needed Van to put her in her place, which seemed to work since a part of her realized that she needs to be more compromising with Scorpius.

I think she'll wake up though and that Scorpius really did make the right decision. She may have trouble having children but I have hope that she'll be able to eventually and that her and Scorpius will have a long, loving life together.

Update soon please!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much for your review! I'm glad you're enjoying Scorpius's chapters as much as I'm enjoying writing them - he's so much fun, especially when he loses his temper. :P I hope you like the newest chapter! ♥

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Review #45, by becca Scorpius. --- A Confrontation with the Weasleys.

7th May 2015:
Update NOW
I started CINAS two days ago and finished this now
And I have my semester exams going on
And I'm a medical student
And I'm totally hooked
I can't sleep, study, eat or rest till I know what happens next.
So please for the love of God put me out of my misery

Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much! It's so wonderful to hear that my writing is so... well, addictive. ♥ I put you out of your misery by posting the next chapter a day early - does that count? :P

Good luck on your exams! :) :)

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Review #46, by SunshineDaisies Scorpius. --- An Unexpected Friendship.

6th May 2015:

I went back and read through the first few chapters again and the new beginnings and endings work perfectly! Having all the chapters start in a brand new scene somehow makes the whole thing work together much more effectively.

The flow was good all the way through what I read tonight, so it seems to me the rest of the story will keep on trend. :)

I think the group of Rose chapters actually worked really well! It was a bit out of pattern, but I think that's what's best for the story. Rose is where the bulk of the action is for that set of chapters, so it makes sense to keep the narrative focused on her. I know I was far more interested in seeing the lunch from Rose's point of view, and having those three chapters focus on the build up, then the event, then her reactions is really nice to read. It keeps her thoughts and feelings more cohesive. It would've felt a bit disjointed to jump right into Scorpius's thoughts and feelings.

And just when I was starting to miss Scorpius's pov, this chapter happened! The timing was absolutely perfect.

As for chapter specific things, I loved reading about James and Scorpius. I haven't read CINAS, so it didn't seem terribly surprising for me, but I did enjoy the fact that Scorpius seemed surprised. It was a really nice conversation between the two, and I really look forward to seeing more of their friendship!

I really liked reading about Scorpius's reaction to the lunch, and his reaction to Rose's reaction. I love that they aren't a perfect couple. They argue and disagree about all sorts of things, but then work really hard to fix it because they love each other. It's so nice to read about a relationship that's realistic in this way. It doesn't happen terribly often.

Like last time, this was a really lovely read and I'm excited to read the rest! :)

Author's Response: Hey! I'm so glad that you thought the changes I made worked - thank you again for pointing out the issues. You're wonderful. ♥

I'm also really happy the clump of Rose chapters worked. There are a few points in the story where there's a clump of one or the other - I'm currently in the middle of what's probably going to be a clump of six or seven Scorpius chapters in a row, because the narrative kind of requires it, and I always worry when that happens... but at the same time, I obviously don't want to break them up just to break them up.

I'm glad you liked Scorpius and James. In CINAS, they weren't quite enemies, but they weren't friends, either - I'm happy that Scorpius's surprise worked for you, having not read CINAS! I really do want this to be able to stand on its own, because it's a very different kind of story.

I'm also really happy that their relationship is coming across as realistic, because that was something that was really important to me. I don't want it all to be smooth sailing, but I also don't want to let their affection and attachment get lost. It's a balancing act, and I'm perpetually nervous that I'm not getting it right. :P

Thank you so much for your wonderful review! ♥ ♥

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Review #47, by QuillIce97 Scorpius. --- A Confrontation with the Weasleys.

5th May 2015:
I'll be happy as long as it's updated really
Also , if that's you're real name , it's really unique , at least in my part of the world 😊

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! ♥

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Review #48, by killjoy Scorpius. --- A Confrontation with the Weasleys.

5th May 2015:
I loved this for no other purpose than I've always hated Hermione's "I'm so much smarter than you so everything I think is right."attitude. Just like how she wanted to free all the elves just because she thought it was wrong when the elves didn't want to be freed. Her and Ron have used their war hero status to get what they want for so long they don't like it when it doesn't work.

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for the review!

Yes, I do think that Hermione and Ron have certainly used their power at times to sidestep procedures and get what they want - on some level, that's inevitable, IMO, particularly when it comes to something as emotionally charged as this issue. I do think that their frustration is understandable, though Scorpius's reaction is, too - it's just such a mess!

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked the chapter! ♥

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Review #49, by cocopops Scorpius. --- A Confrontation with the Weasleys.

4th May 2015:
Omg! Yay for a new chapter! So glad that you're almost finished with the editing. It's been super sad to see the story being updated on your currently reading list, clicking on it and realizing that you were just editing some of the older chapters.

Anyways, about this chapter. Wow. Just wow. I think Scorpious went a bit mad haha! Totally not judging, since parents can be a pain in the butt, but still. I was so sure Hermione was going to punch him in the face and repeating history. Thanks for the awesome story! Feeling nervous about the Rose situation though.

Author's Response: Aww, sorry it was disappointing! I have added a lot of new chapters earlier on with Scorpius's pov, if you haven't seen them, but yeah, I'm sorry I left you guys on the hook even longer. :P It's finally being continued, though, and I'm really glad you enjoyed this chapter (in which you're totally right - Scorpius definitely went a bit mad :P). I hope you continue to, and thank you so much for this lovely review! ♥ ♥

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Review #50, by ayumi Rose. --- An Uncomfortable Conversation.

30th April 2015:
part of me is still rly worried that they're gonna break up soon or at least come across lots more conflict...especially coz of rose's acromantula injury?? I think their different interests will always be some point of contention but hopefully they'll be able to work it out?? I just don't know...I'll be heart broken if they do break up tho :( but well written as always!!

Author's Response: I shouldn't say *too* much :P, but I will say this - there are going to start to be other significant conflicts in the story besides tension in their relationship very soon. (Well, starting with the new chapter of Scorpius's yelling match with Ron and Hermione, which I've just put up.)

I'm not sure if that helps or not. :P Thank you so much for your wonderful review, though! ♥

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