I haven't reviewed anywhere for a while, so you know it's special. You're a very, very good and promising writer! I love the way you described to us your methods of dialogue and description so we can easily follow what you do with each chapter. The story is well told, and you've got the characterization near-perfect.

Yep, I too am excited about "the meeting." I too find Narcissa fascinating because she's so open-ended ... not the right term but she's got so many gray areas, some could be quite good since that's how she turned out in the end. But we don't really know, do we, since JKR didn't exactly elaborate. So let's ... well, let's see what you give us. :-)

Author's Response: I'm so flattered that you liked this enough to leave a review - thank you! That's a huge compliment to me as a writer, and it's put a big smile on my face. :) Thank you so much for the review, and I hope I don't leave you disappointed!

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I love this chapter and can't wait to read what happens the rest of their lunch. Rose and Scorpius are so cute with each other.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! :) I'll get the next chapter up asap, and I hope you enjoy it just as much as this one.

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Um hi Yeah. Please update. Yeah. Ok I'm done embarrassing myself now. Just please update. Cool? Cool.

Author's Response: Aw, you're not embarrassing yourself! Don't be silly. I'm always happy to see reviews, because if I've made you want to comment, I did a good job. (I hope. :P)

Thank you so much for the review!

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Once again, you are a tease with the chapter summaries, but until now, I always had more to read :D Now I have to wait! :( So um, can't wait :D For more!!!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! :) I'll get the next chapter up as soon as I can!

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Awesome chapter...loved the excitement and then the romantic sexiness but still with some fun in the last part :D Fabulicious! Oh, I didn't just spell that awful word out, did I? :D

Author's Response: Haha, I'll take it as a compliment. ;) Thank you for the review!

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Great chapters, interesting how you got Lav in there. Intriguing!

Author's Response: Yeah, I always saw Lavender as being a lot more interesting than people give her credit for. She tends to be depicted as just a silly girl, but I see her as being a bit more complicated than that. She (along with Van and Victoire) also appears in The Dark Side of the Moon, and I have another story (Ghost in the Machine) written about her after the war, if you're curious. :)

Thank you for the review!

Thank you for the review! :)

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Great opener! Loved it...but keep forgetting to mention, isn't Teddy a somewhat distant cousin to Scorpius? :D Has that been mentioned at all?

Author's Response: He is - they're actually second cousins through their grandmothers. I haven't mentioned it yet, and I'm not sure I'm going to - I tend to see Narcissa and Andromeda as never really having reconciled, so the extent to which Scorpius and Teddy are aware of that relationship is 1) limited and 2) even if they know, probably unimportant to them. Just my take. :)

Thank you so much for the review!

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Loved this chapter! Cant wai for the next one :) loved the meetjg with narcissa

Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'll get the next chapter up as soon as I can.

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i think that for the moment i like Narcissa Malfoy but we'll see...scorpius has something in mind, i have a few ideas but we'll see that too. i'll wait for the next chapter
ps i'm italian sorry for the errors

Author's Response: Aw, I didn't notice errors - you've got a great grasp of English. I'm impressed!

Thank you so much for the review! I hope I don't disappoint with the next chapter. :)

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I love this story so much!!

The "gentleman" scene had me cracking up. That is exactly how my fiance is around MY grandparents--puts on the "polite" show, if you will. Really funny and well written!

I also love the private but not private moment between Scorp/Rose at the table.

As per usual, great writing and great characterization!

Love it!

Author's Response: Ha, I've had similar experiences, too, though not quite to this extent. I think I always ruin it with my confusion, though, so no one is ever fooled. :P

Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter, and I'll get the next one up asap.

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I loved the meeting. Scorpius and the chair thing, I got a real kick out of that. It might drive Rose nuts if he pulled her chair out for her all the time or opened every door. I think the meal is going pretty well. Narcissa seems to really like them as a couple.

Author's Response: Oh, I'm really glad that that came across - despite how awkward and nervous Rose feels, Narcissa really is trying and is tentatively feeling like she likes Rose.

Thank you for the review! :)

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I can't wait til she meets narcissa, is she going to have a baby at some point, man I am so excited. Please update soon

Author's Response: I don't have any plans for Rose to have a baby, no - pregnancies just complicate fun things, like fighting monsters. ;) I'm glad you liked the chapter, and I hope you continue to enjoy the fic. Thank you so much for your review!

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This story is even better than the first one! I loved school Rose/Scorpius, but I really enjoy reading the slightly more mature version of them! :)

I also think your writing of James and Al is great too. I love both of them. I hope we hear a little more about Lucy, as I always like your interpretation of her. Also, I can't wait to see lunch with Narcissa! That'll be interesting for sure.

Great job, and I look forward to reading more!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I'm so glad to hear that you feel like this one is even better than the first one - it's always good to hear as a writer that you're going up. :P

There will definitely be more of Lucy as the story goes on, and James and Al as well.

Thank you so much for the review!

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This was too cute! Love your story, update as soon as you can :D xx

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm sorry updates have been sporadic lately - life has been very busy. I should be back to updating on a fairly regular basis soon. :) Thank you for your review!

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are you updating any time soon? its been weeks and you were so good about doing so weekly at the start of this story. what happened?!

Author's Response: Unfortunately, life happened. :( Things have been very hectic for me lately, and I haven't had much time to write. I'm hoping to start being able to get back to regular updates in a few weeks. :)

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Loved this chapter lOads! I have just read CINAS and this and its an amazing story!!! Update sokn, cant wait to ser what happens next!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) I'm sorry I kept you waiting on the update, but I hope it's worth it. Thank you for the review!

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Thank you so much for the thank you! I'm so glad you found the last reviews helpful. Hope I can do the same again here.

No surprise, I thought this was another great chapter. Your writing is very easy to read. Not that it's overly simplistic. It just has a good rhythm to it. It lends itself well to just sitting back and enjoying the story. Great plots and characters can too easily get lost when you have to go back and re-read every other paragraph because the author isn't constructing their sentences well.

The plot/substance of the story is starting to shine through now as well. I love the idea of the growing incursion of dark creatures. It was a subtle introduction but the possibilities for how it will tie into the story later are endless. It's such a unique twist on a new threat to the wizarding community and gives the story even more weight. It also, in it's own way, adds a lot of dimension to Rose's character, making what she does even more important, lending her a heavy dose of credibility. I love how in just a few sentences, we've had our knowledge of daily life both in her workplace and the world at large expanded. And, of course, the continuing saga of meeting Scorpius' grandparents. Now Rose has hurdles in both her personal and professional life. It really doesn't matter what type of story someone is writing. It needs layers, and this chapter has definitely started packing them in.

On to the mechanics. I'll say up front that I absolutely noticed an improvement in the dialogue. It was subtle, since it was already good, but I definitely noticed a change in the construction that I thought was super effective. I pulled out a few of my favorite bits:

-Victoire snorted. Unlike Dedworth, she actually appeared to be working; her long red hair was tied back from her face, and she was scrutinising a small stack of reports. "Rosie, never ask Van how he knows something about Lavender..."

-This time, it was Dedworth who gave the snort of laughter. "As soon as we find something worth checking out. Don't worry. Something will come up soon." He tossed the stuffed manticore onto his desk, swiveled around so his feet were back on the floor, and grabbed a few reports off it that from a distance looked quite similar to the ones Victoire was pouring over. "Something..."

I liked these for a few reasons. First, no identification of the speaker. When the dialogue is grouped with action, we assume the person moving is also the speaker. No need to add a tag unless that isn't the case. Second, when you did interrupt the dialogue, it was with more than a physical body "tick." Dedworth is doing something worth taking the time to note. There were still a few cases where you didn't *have* to add what you did to the dialogue:

-"They don't exist here." Her voice wavered slightly with uncertainty as she looked up at him. "Do they?" (her question 'do they' is more than sufficient to highlight her uncertainty)

-James gave a snort of laughter as he finished his drink. "Keep dreaming." (He doesn't have to snort here for us to know he's saying this with a bit of an attitude. The phrase 'keep dreaming' almost always means 'yeah, right, like that is ever going to happen')

I pulled these out to highlight that oftentimes the tags are redundant, but these really are NOT bad and I wouldn't even go so far as to say you should remove them. Just providing them as food for thought since I saw in your review response that you are/were worried about huge blocks of dialogue. And you're right. It's very easy to develop talking head syndrome. But I wouldn't be super concerned with it. If you look at a lot of published fiction, there are often many, many lines of back and forth dialogue without any interruptions at all.

I can feel my word count ticking down so I'll move on to description. In a way, I think your changes to the dialogue actually helped improve the description too. There was action mixed in, and comments on the setting, that went beyond the way a character was moving as he spoke. Again, it was subtle, but I thought it was very effective. The image of the stuffed manticore being tossed up into the air really caught my eye. I'd still look out for opportunities to include more description when changing location. Not going so far as to write 5 paragraphs describing each new place your characters enter, but I think it might help serve two purposes. First, it helps transition from scene to scene, especially in a chapter like this where there are no scene breaks. Take the paragraph that starts "Twenty minutes later..." It's a transition paragraph and a really great chance to switch gears, re-set the scene – give the chance for the readers to catch up on the time that's passed. Same with the paragraph "By the time she got home..." Another time for a little catch-up; a natural space to tuck in a little description and action.

Aside from smoothing out the transitions between scenes, description can also serves to break up the dialogue. If it's been 2 or 3 paragraphs since the last conversation and you've set the scene up a bit, you might not feel as bad about including longer swatches of dialogue. And I really am not at all suggesting you need these huge, weighty paragraphs of description, describing everything from the weather outside to the type of carpet Rose has in her flat. But a few well-placed lines can go a long way. Just as a quick example. What about if instead of "...she was ready to collapse. The day had been more than a little draining..." in that second transition paragraph, you had Rose kicking of her shoes, looking over at the stack of dishes in the sink and thinking those would have to wait until tomorrow and then being just about to collapse on the couch when Lucy appears at the door. Same message (Rose is super tired) but shown more as opposed to told... Over my word count! This is becoming a habit. Hope this is helpful. Feel free to re-request!!

Author's Response: I'm really, really sorry for how long this response has taken - I actually thought I had responded awhile ago, but I have a little bit of a backlog and I didn't realise that it had spilled onto a second page (because I am horribly unobservant sometimes). :(

I'm really, really glad that you noticed an improvement in the dialogue, and I've been keeping in mind the other things you pointed out about the dialogue. It's been really helpful, and I definitely think it's improved my writing overall. I also see what you mean about description and showing/telling - I'll definitely try that for the future.

Thank you so, so much, and I'm sorry it's taken me way too long to respond. ♥

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Love this story. It's great. Hope you can post again soon


Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'll get the next chapter up soon - I'm really trying to update this on a regular basis. :) Thank you for the review!

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"I loved this chapter" ;) but really, I did. :) I expect a new
chapter next week, so many people are counting on you!
Ok, bye, update soon!
-Alex

Author's Response: Aw, haha, thanks! :) I'll try my very best to get chapter 6 up by next week - I've got a few RL things going on this week, but it should be doable.

Thank you for the review! :)

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I was just glad Rose thought of some spell to help the poor lady. I'd of hated to see her just sitting there holding her hand as the life left her. Maybe Scorpius can give her some pointers for the next victum thats bleeding out in her custody :)

I did love the chapter !

Author's Response: Yeah, Rose is definitely going to be bothering Scorpius for spells and ideas before the next time she goes out into the field - that's what Healer boyfriends are for, right? :P

I'm really glad you liked this chapter. Thank you so much for taking the time to review! ♥

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So today I discovered this story, realized it was a sequel, and read the entire prequel in 3 hours. I loved it. I love this story. You're a BRILLIANT writer, and I love how you write Scorose. Perfect story. Probably going to be my favorite! Update soon please :)

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! :) I'm flattered that you think so highly of both 'Curiosity' and 'Wrinkle,' and I hope you continue to like this. I'll update as soon as I can - thank you so much for taking the time to review!

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O.k. First I just wanted to apologise for not reviewing earlier, what can i say, when there are 5 chapters up already and your becoming more than a little hooked, you tend to overlook the little box at the bottom just a little. :D Can you forgive me :D

Secondly, this is awesome, I love it, I am hooked and please update.

Lastly I will be reading the prequel to this :D But I can't promise to remember to review... :P

Thanks :D x

Author's Response: No worries! :) I'm just flattered that the story pulled you in so much! I'm glad you liked it, and I'll update soon.

♥ Thank you for all of the lovely reviews! :)

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I loved this chapter. :p
No, really I did. You write Rose and Scorpius really well! I also liked how you wrote Rose's first time out in the field - it was really well done.
All together, I just love everything you write! :D
I still can't wait until she meets Narcissa! :D
10/10! :)

Author's Response: :P Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it, especially her first time in the field - I was a little nervous about it, because it's not really the sort of thing I've tended to write in general.

I hope you like the Narcissa meeting! Thank you so much for the review!

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More. Please. Please?

I loved this chapter just as much as all the others. Your depiction of Scorpius and Rose is different to many others I've read, steering away from the usual I-can't-love-you-because-of-my-parents-but-you're-hot-anyway-hey-let's-snog plotline, which is what makes it this good. And I love the DCB and the way you write it - I'm still waiting for chapter 9 of The Dark Side of the Moon by the way!

Stalking your author page from now on.

10/10 :)

Author's Response: I've actually been working on chapter 9 of 'The Dark Side of the Moon' over the last week, and I hope I can get it up soon. I've been busy with grad school and applications, which is why I've kind of lagged lately.

I'm glad you like my Scorpius and Rose - I definitely wanted to avoid that plot line, especially with the wild tension because of who their parents. I just have a hard time believing that after 20+ years, there's so much tension. I mean, really? The trio and Draco have all passed 40 by this point - aren't they over it by now?

I'm so glad you liked this chapter so much! Thank you for the review!

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I always look forward to your updates :) I can't wait to see what happens with Rose and Narcissa!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I hope you like it!

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