Really good start, I look forward to reading more :)Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I hope you enjoyed the rest of it, too. :) Thank you for the review! Report Review
Okay Rose has officially gotten 'essentially' stuck on my head. She's such a fun character to follow around. I love the cousin relationships you've installed, especially because it's clear they all love each other very much, but there are those ones you try a bit harder to please and enjoy company with more. Rose and James's desire to please Fred and make him proud felt very realistic because there's always those few. I have a whole swarm of cousins and despite the fact I love them all, I also enjoy being around others more and can relate better to than a few
I still get a bit mixed up on ages and such, if you have a list going over all that i'd love to see it ;).
I also really like that the potions professor did seemed to prefer the little Weasley Potter gaggle because again, it is realistic. There are teachers the do like you a bit more an will let you off the hook easier, it just happens, and I like even more that it was potions and Slytherin head of house that was easier on Roxanne ;).
I'm continually impressed with your ability to make these people their own and not just minute versions of their parents.
Wonderful chapter darling Author's Response: Aww, yay! I'm glad you're continuing to like it! :)
Totally know what you mean about the next-gen ages. No worries - I think that even people who read a lot of next-gen might occasionally get confused. Most of the ages aren't specified in canon (only Teddy, Albus, Rose, Scorpius, and Lily are, and Victoire, James, and Hugo are all heavily implied. Other than that, it's totally up to the author, and I actually spread their ages out more than most people (who tend to clump everyone but Teddy and Victoire very close together).
So, my next-gen ages:
Teddy is 23 at this point, having attended Hogwarts from 2009 - 2016.
Victoire is 21, having attended from 2011 - 2018.
Fred is 21, having attended from 2012 - 2019. (He has a very early fall birthday.)
Molly is 20, having attended from 2013 - 2020.
Dominique is 19, and attended 2014 - 2021.
Lucy and Louis are both 18, and in their seventh year.
James and Roxanne are both 17, and are in their sixth year.
Rose, Albus, and Scorpius are all fifth years. (Obviously.)
Lily ad Hugo are both third years.
Victoire, Dominique, and Louis are Bill/Fleur's. Molly and Lucy are Percy's. Fred and Roxanne are George's. Rose and Hugo are Ron/Hermione's. James, Albus, and Lily are all Ginny/Harry's. :) Report Review
soo.. dom is lesbian? ok then... ?Author's Response: Yep, I decided to make Dominique a lesbian. :) Report Review
BTW, If Rose doesn't want Scorp, I'd gladly take him.
*winkwinknudgenudge*Author's Response: Haha, aw, I think a lot of people have that reaction! Fictional boys are just better, a lot of the time. :P Thank you for the review, and I'm so glad you're enjoying the story. Report Review
Omg. They are so frustrating. They like each other, they want to figure out more about each other, and they are such little brats for not doing something about it!
I really love James and Roxanne and the entire family dynamic that goes on in this story so much. And the fact that this goes around a Hogwarts schedule and them being in HOGWARTS actually matters as opposed to you never once mentioning anything school related, which annoys me.
I love that the discussion about the map and the Chamber of Secrets. Just tying in those things that you kind of assume everyone would know, until you remember that they aren't in Harry Potter world the way we are and don't know every thing. Scorpius's reactions are perfect. Also, because I've already read way ahead... I feel like there's a chapter a while down when Scorpius and Rose are fighting about James, and Rose is telling him what a good person he is and says something like 'you know that map of Al's you thought was so cool? Well it was James's' obviously that's not completely right, but something close. But this chapter they tall him that James took it, so he already know. I could be completely wrong though, I'll point it out while I'm reviewing if i I notice the chapter that I think Rose says that.
And they even get along in this chapter! We're making progress! They may take a while, especially considering it seems like Rose takes after Ron in the relationships area, but they weren't fighting!Author's Response: Heh, when I first started this story I ended up drawing out class schedules for fifth/sixth years, just so I could make sure I was being consistent and not doing exactly what you mentioned, which tends to really annoy me as well. Come on, guys, Hogwarts is not just a dance party with love triangles. It's actually a school. People go there to learn. Ughhh.
I actually don't think you are completely wrong - oversight on my part when I was editing things around. I've gone and fixed it so it's consistent now - thank you for points it out!
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Okay. I'm going to need a chart to remember whose cousins and siblings and whose child is whose. This is when not reading a ton of next gen gets me, because I still get a bit confused on the family members. I LOVE the Roxanne and James dynamic you have, I love that you're not ignoring the family just because they aren't scorose. They are such a huge part that it's always annoying when they're just faded into the background.
The way that Rose always has to poke Scorpius and he has to make sure he responds and pokes back, it's great. It makes for such a smooth read that is over before you realize it.
I love the letter she wrote to cousin Fred! I don't know why I loved it so much, but it just felt really Hogwarts - sneaky/smart studenty. Haha, that makes no sense, I know. I also really liked that you don't have Scorpius as this perfect sweet man that Rose just HAS to fall in love with, he clearly has his own flaws also.
♥Author's Response: Oh, I love writing James and Roxanne - the dynamic is just so much fun. Making them fade into the background tends to annoy me, too, so I'm right there with you, and I'm glad you felt like I avoided that. :)
And yeaahhh... Scorpius has lots of good traits and is a pretty all-around good guy, but he's definitely not perfect. (Among other things, Scorpius, why in the name of God would you talk about very personal matters in public so often? It always seems to backfire on you!)
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wait? that's the end. fajskdl;gh. but i want more rose/scorpius!
... SEQUEL TIME.
this was a great story. i really enjoyed reading it :)Author's Response: Haha, thank you so much! :) It was so sweet to see your reviews as you went through it. I hope you enjoy the sequel just as much! Report Review
So obviously I re-read this chapter to review, and I have to say I like it even more the second time. Not that I didn't love it the first.
You are making these teenagers, teenagers! And it's awesome. I feel like so often the reason I don't like next gen is because it's an imitation of Marauders era. And that just doesn't fit. In that era they were had the possibility of being murdered for anything constantly looming around them, and though they were just teenagers, they were also people caught in the middle of a war. Next Gen is a time when thing are okay, and happy, and they all have supportive and stable families, they are going to be way different people than their ancestors. Okay, ramble rant over, back to your story ;).
The way that you move through the day feels really fluid to me, we don't need to actually be with them during the class and know what they're learning every time, it could get dull, but just following them through the classes is plenty to make it feel like they actually are at Hogwarts.
Scorpius feels really different in this, I can feel the way he'd be able to be cold like a Malfoy, but the prejudices that his father possessed have melted away. He's still judgmental enough to go through the list of Al's cousins, but to be honest he's probably right. The friendship you have between those two feels realistic, and not just a concoction to get Rose and Scorpius together.
I love that Scorpius, despite thinking she's hot, really doesn't seem to like her. It's much more interesting and believable than both of them 'pining away but never loving for the curse of the Slytherin and Gryffindor' and it's easier to identify with thinking a person is attractive without actually liking them as opposed to liking someone and not acting on it, for me at least.
I really have to say that what makes your story so special and easy to fall into is that you're letting it tell itself. I can feel how real these characters are to you, their varied personalities and all the time you've put into creating them, and it just makes for an intoxicating read.
I didn't find myself confused anywhere in the story as to what was going on or where they were located, nor did I find myself having to wade through descriptions to get to the point, so I'd definitively say that your description are spot on.
The flow feels smooth and natural, You're giving us new information to keep it interesting but not sparing on anything that would make it feel rushed.
Okay, obviously if i haven't made it clear enough, I very much enjoyed this chapter (and the next 7 ;) ) and will review at least one more for this request!
Thanks so much for requesting, darling ♥Author's Response: I'm really glad you like Al and Scorpius's friendship! :) In Rose/Scorpius fics, it often does end up feeling like Albus and Scorpius are just friends because it's convenient for the plot, and I really wanted to avoid that.
I'm also glad that you like the fact that Scorpius isn't sitting around mooning over her. He's definitely got a bit of a thing where Rose is concerned that goes beyond "You're hot and I hate you," but at least early on, he also really doesn't like her. He's quite happy to jump on the Rose bandwagon once he realises that maybe he's just been seeing one side of her, but he definitely doesn't start out besotted.
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I HATE YOU FOR MAKING THIS STORY SO FREAKING GOOD THAT I CAN'T STOP READING.
next chapter is the last one. i swear. forreal this time.Author's Response: Yeah this is definitely one of the cuter chapters. :P Sorry it's being so inconvenient, though I'm happy it's drawing you in so much! Report Review
okay. so the next chapter will certainly be the last one until tomorrow. really, this time. i mean it. .Author's Response: Aw, haha, I've totally been there. I'm really, really flattered that my story is having that effect on you. :) Thank you for the review! Report Review
THIS CHAPTER WAS SO CUTE. ah, i love the rose/scorpius dynamic you have here. it's different and fantastic. and it's nearing 11 pm here and i have to get up at 6 am, and for the last two hours i've been sitting here saying "just one more chapter" to myself over and over again.
but really. this time, just one more chapter until tomorrow.
probably.Author's Response: Aww, thank you! :) This was one of my favourite chapters to write, so I'm really glad you liked it! Report Review
Oh dear, it's taken me forever to review this last chapter...sorry about that!
I thought Scorpius did quite well with the cousins gathering considering a few of them can be rather intimidating. Dominique definitely put him on edge, but I think Fred was actually the worst. But I like that Rose knows her own mind enough not to be too bothered what by what her cousins think of Scorpius. They don't know him like she does. Hopefully he'll grown on some of them because hopefully he'll be around for a very long time. At least Teddy would be on Scorpius's side! I like Teddy's character. He seems like a great guy. Rose should definitely take her advice from him. :)
Favorite line: “Were we meant to?” asked Roxanne. “I thought we were meant to embarrass you. My mistake.” Ha ha! What are cousins good for, right?
Also, the ending lines were sweet, though not over-the-top. A very satisfying ending.
I thought this chapter was a nice way to wrap up the story! I'm so sad that it's over, but I'm incredibly excited about the sequel. I just love reading about Rose and Scorpius, and you do them so well. This story definitely gave me a new perspective on Slytherins, and ignited my love of Rose/Scorpius stories. It's now an addiction. :)
Thanks for sharing your fabulous story with us!Author's Response: Well, it keeps taking me forever to respond... so we're pretty much even, I think! :P
I definitely agree that Fred was the worst. Dominique put him on edge, but she tends not to be outwardly hostile - she just likes putting people on edge. Fred does not understand that kind of subtlety.
Thank you so much for all of your reviews, and I'm so, so glad that it gave you a new perspective on Slytherins and a Rose/Scorpius obsession. :P
I'm personally a Gryffindor all the way, but I never liked the way Slytherins were covered in the books or are covered in fanfics - it's just boring a lot of the time, and I've always felt like there's a lot more to them than just the boring blood purity openly conniving characterisation they often have. I knew I want Scorpius to be a Slytherin, but I also knew that I wanted him to be a generally sweet and charismatic guy, and I really tried to balance the two. I'm really glad that, for you, at least, I did. :)
I love Rose/Scorpius, so much. It's such a great pairing. Report Review
Awesome story! I was always excited when I saw it updated and its sad that its done but I'm so excited to read the sequel which I'll be doing in about 30 seconds
keep up the awesome work! :)Author's Response: Aw, thanks! :) I'm glad you liked it so much, and I hope the sequel doesn't disappoint! Report Review
I am so happy with the ending. I was really afraid that you would break them up and have them meet again a couple of years later when the had both grown up a bit. Scorpius did well meeting the cousins - so brave in the face of the animosity of Dominique, Roxanne and Fred. Thank you for all your work on the story! I'll check out the sequel now.Author's Response: I'm really glad you like the ending! :) I was afraid people would find it underwhelming, but I definitely wanted to avoid them breaking up and then working it out further down the line - as you saw, further down the line will be full of problems, so I wanted them to have as strong a relationship as possible going into that.
Thank you so much for your review. :) Report Review
I am sorry I missed this when it first came out! It's a good chapter. I was happy that Scorpius forgave Rose - good choice on her point to acknowledge him as her boyfriend. The meeting in Hogsmeade should be entertaining. Thanks for the new chapter!Author's Response: Oh, no worries. :) I'm glad you liked it! Thank you for the review! Report Review
Def going over to check out the sequel. Great story! So cute! Love Rose and Scorpius!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :) Report Review
hey, i read this story so often again an again and just love it! I also read the beginning of your new story and i will keep reading your story!!! I really like your writing and i hope when your publish a book you will tell us what its called so we can buy it!!! LOVE SCOSEAuthor's Response: Oh, I'm glad you like it enough to reread it! Thank you so much for your support! :) Report Review
Let me get this straight, Dom is a lesbian right? That's the only I wanna know that I'm right on other than good story.Author's Response: Yep, she is. :) Thank you for the review, and I'm glad you liked the story! Report Review
I can't believe this story's over!!
I loved it, you're a really good writer.
Great chapter, incredibly funny.
I'm so glad there's a sequel and I can't wait to read it :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this story - you've been such a great reviewer, and I want you to know how much I appreciate it. *hug* I hope you enjoy the sequel as well! Report Review
I love your story. The way that Scorpius and Rose are with each other is very real and I can imagine it being a real life relationship.
Rose's family's interrogation was hilarious. Frankly, it sounds scary. Scorpius has nerves of steel.
The story was very good, but felt a little unfinished in this chapter. Overall, though I loved it :)Author's Response: Yeah, I was a little afraid that it would feel a bit unfinished. I think I'll leave it for a few days and then take another look at it - hopefully I'll be able to tie the ends up more neatly.
Thank you so much for the review. I'm really glad you enjoyed the story, and as I said in response to your other review (again, thank you for being the first review on the new story!), I really hope you enjoy the sequel as well. Report Review
Yay! They're goether! I thought you wrote the Quidditch match well and I didn't skim at all. I'm glad your doing a sequel because both characters seem to have a lot more growing to do and hopefully we'll get to see them meet each ohters families.This chapter was great as always!Author's Response: They are. :) Scorpius meets Rose's cousins in the next and last chapter, and I'll be writing about their interactions with each other's families in the sequel (The Wrinkles of the Road - the first chapter has already been posted).
Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
She admitted that he is her boyfriend now! She admitted that he is her boyfriend now! Aaahh! I hope she admits that she loves him next! Aaahh, I AM SO HAPPY. HAPPY HAPPY HAPPY HAPPY HAPPY CAN'T SERIOUSLY WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER THINGS ARE GOING TO GET AWKWARD (I THINK) BUT I KNOW SCORP CAN MANAGE.
sorry for the mad caps. ehe.Author's Response: Aw, no, not love declarations for Rose in this... but there are plenty of those in the sequel. ;) Thank you so much for the review, and I'm really glad you liked the chapter so much! Report Review
I'm officially hooked.Author's Response: Oh, good! I'm sorry you got hooked just as the story was ending - I hope you don't feel underwhelmed - but if you check out the sequel, I hope that gets you equally hooked. :) Thank you for the review! Report Review
Loved this chapter.
I'm so glad they won and I can't wait to see how Scorpius is going to cope surrounded by Weasley cousins. Please update as soon as you can. :DAuthor's Response: Aw, thank you! :) I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
I thought you did a really good job with the Quidditch commentary. I find writing Quidditch is rather difficult, and I understand why JKR thought it was difficult to write - there's only so much to say, you know? Your commentating kept my attention and was informative, yet not over-the-top with information. Good job!
And hooray that Scorpius is no longer upset with Rose. And I'm so thrilled that she acknowledged him as her boyfriend without any prompting or feelings that she was obligated to call him that. I think it came across that she genuinely felt that she likes him enough and cares about him enough to want to put that title on what they have. Very exciting! And of course I'm very excited to see how all of Rose's cousins react to seeing her and Scorpius together. It's one thing to know that two people are dating, but seeing them in person, together, is very different somehow.
Excellent chapter! I'm sad that this story is coming to and end, but I'm anxiously awaiting the sequel! Now off to review the other chapters I haven't gotten around to yet - sorry about that! I moved to another state to attend grad school, so I'm still settling into my apartment and to a new routine. :)Author's Response: Agreed in full. I mean, I can wax poetic about football and enjoy it a lot, but pretty much the only people who enjoy it with me are other football fans. I don't think that many people are drawn to CINAS for the Quidditch action, so I really wanted to make it accessible... which took a lot of writing and rewriting. :P I'm glad it worked in the end!
No worries about not reviewing yet - I know how you feel (I'm also starting grad school/moving, though thankfully I haven't even had to change cities), and besides, you spoil me with all of your amazing reviews. I'm beyond lucky to have a reader like you.
Thank you for a lovely review. :) Report Review
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