Look at Albus being uncomfortable and all cute :D
He's so funny when he was telling Healer Moore about his 'symptoms' :D
Yay! They saw their baby! and I hope that Alexa doesn't get morning sickness either.
I'm glad that Astoria helped get a maternity ward in the hospital and that Draco donated money.
Louis is there and hurt? Oh my what did he do? He is brilliant and funny and has a lot of nerve to flirt with the Healer, and do an extremely good job of it as well, until the ending when he was shut down!
Oh no she's got her sickness :-( I can see this being a long few months for her.
I can't wait to read more, I love how you write Albus and Alexa together, they seem so much like the best of friends and they're so comfortable around each other. :D Report Review
It's great to see the 'Grandads' talking in hushed whispers, I wonder what they've got planned?
Er that estate agent better not be flirting with our Theo! Unless it's secretly one of us! Although I don't blame her, how could she resist his awesome charms?
They should so be room mates!! and maybe more... but for now room mates!
It's kinda like a proposal haha but with an apartment instead of a ring :D
I yay a lot :D
Haha Harry is so funny going all red and spluterry :D
Oh Theo of course she's always going to be spending more of your money, she is your little girl! :D
That estate agent is definately good at her job.
I love that they're looking at apartments together, they're such grown ups now. And that they're embarassed by the Weasley car hehe.
I think that they're going to want the house, Theo and Harry better be prepared to part with more money I'm thinking.
Awww oh Alexa she's so cute getting all worked up like that. and pulling the puppy dog look and the pouted lip to get around Theo, and how he cracks at seeing it. Dad's can never resist that look!
"It's an apartment with stairs," I love Al's line!
Yay! They got the house!! Theo is awesome! :D Report Review
Yay!! Albus's POV telling his family, I wonder if they'll react like Alexa's family?
Aww Albus keeps thinking of that night, I think he might like Alexa, more then friends :D
Harry is such a great supportive dad, I hope he still will be when he finds out what Albus wants to tell them.
Oh my god! Kieron turned up before Louis, Albus is right to be scared, I would be terrified.
And he told them and then chased Albus! Poor Albus!
Poor poor Albus being hurt and dealing with Theo who's skilled in Occlumency.
I love how Albus thinks about Alexa, it's clear how much he cares about her and would do anything for her.
Theo and Harry are definately the best dad's ever! And Kieron is a great protective older brother.
Theo's threat of coming after him if he ever leaves or hurts her was scary. I wouldn't want to get on the wrong side of him.
Haha oh Louis! He's so great just walking in at the end like that and knowing instantly.
Brilliant chapter! I want to see Theo mad but I don't want him to hurt anyone :S I just want more Theo!! :D I think we need to start a Theo fan club? Report Review
I love Theo! :D He's so cheeky! I bet he has lots of plans for when his daughter moves out, he'll have no choice but to be a womaniser!
He is definately the coolest dad ever.
I wonder when they're going to tell their parents? I can't wait to see Theo's reaction, and Kieron's I think Albus might have to hide for a while. His plan to hide for eighteen years and eight months might be a good one :D
I can't wait to see more of Nicky and Kieron, I just know that they're going to be awesome!
oo what happened in the summer? And poor Albus guilt tripped into going shopping.
Awww Theo, I'll be there for you whilst Daphne is there :D
Oh wow, Astoria must be a psychic if she can guess that quickly.
I'm scared for Alexa, I hope it's going to go as well as it can do, she's very brave telling them all on her own.
So Kieron and doesn't like his mum? That'll be interesting to read :D
I love how much tension there is with Daphne being in the room, everyone must really hate/dislike her.
Oh no! Kierons gone! Oh Albus you better run!
VPBC? What is this mysteriousness?
Oh no!! Why? Why must there be such an awesome cliffhanger? It's a good thing I can just go straight to the next chapter! Report Review
I just have to say I really love this story! Especially how you write from both Alexa and Albus' points of view, because we get a better insight into both characters. I think one of the best things about your stories is that every character seems to have their own story, and that makes the plot much more interesting than just reading about one character and all of the others not really being developed.
Anyway, onto the actual chapter... Albus worries so much that it's really endearing. I'm sure he overthinks things more than girls generally do - more than Lexi seems to, as well. It was sweet to see how much he cares about his friends here, and that he wants to help them. Xavier's reaction does seem realistic, because I can't imagine it would be easy to find out that you actually are a father when you were told that your child had died. I can't blame him for going a bit crazy!
I'm really intrigued about what the relationship between Xavier and Cody actually is. For Cody to leave his NYE party to help Xavier, they must be quite close, plus Xavier has obviously told him a lot more about his past than Albus and any of us thought. It made me laugh that they all thought Xavier was drunk and he was completely sober, and was a lot more rational when he actually spoke to them than I expected.
I didn't expect him to go to Stewart to help him deal with finding out about Ethan, but I really like Stewart's character. He loves Tasha and Ethan, but he can see enough to know that what Tasha told Xavier was wrong. He's very level-headed, and I think that he is going to be a big help in the whole situation. The fact that he isn't insisting on being called Dad by Ethan, and is making sure that Xavier knows he isn't trying to usurp his place make him seem like a genuinely nice person, and I think both Tasha and Xavier are lucky that he is involved.
The way you portrayed the meeting between Xavier and Ethan was realistic, too, and I was glad about that. Ethan seems like a really cute kid, and although it's going to take a long time for them to build up a relationship and it won't be easy for anyone involved, I'm glad that Tasha has agreed to let Xavier meet Ethan and things can hopefully move forward from the mistakes they all made.
There wasn't much Lexi and Albus in this chapter but their characters still came through well. Lexi's frankness is really funny here, like how she admits that she's come along because she's nosy. Plus, she's using the pregnancy thing to her full advantage (who wouldn't?) to get what she wants.
And you've made me very curious about Louis and the whole vampire/werewolf situation. I hope there'll be more of that to come as well, because I really want to know about it!
Sorry for the mammoth review, but I really do love your story and your writing, so I hope you update again soon!
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I love that you're writing this from their different POVs, it's great to hear both sides of the story :D Albus worrying is still funny, although he has definate reason to be worried, it's great that he done his research :D
I really love that they both know that they're both to blame for this situation, and not just blaming the other... entirely :p
His freaking out makes this situation seem a lot more real.
Awww Albus stays around hers every friday? That's so cute, and I love that he hates his dads cooking :D
Another wonderful chapter! I know I've said it a few times but your such a talented writer, I love all of your stories so very much! Report Review
Albus freaking out is funny, poor him. I hope that their friendship is not ruined by this.
They flow together perfectly and seem to have a great friendship, even in a situation like this. You've written them so well together.
Oh I really hope that Theo catches him, just for the hilarity of it. I loved that he compared her to Kieron, it's funny that Alexa is doing the same thing he said Kieron did. :D
So good! I can't wait to read the next chapter :D Report Review
I really like the freaking out about the future and will happen after Hogwarts, it's very realistic.
And the party is so different to other parties, I really like it.
Also yay! Nicky and Kieron :D
And Albus and Alexa kissed, I think they're going to be growing up a lot quicker now :D
I like how you portrayed them drunk it was very realistic :D
I know I'm going to love reading the rest of this story. Report Review
I've been reading your story all day. I was supposed to only read the first chapter or so, but I couldn't stop reading. I don't usually like stories in which the main character gets pregnant, because the whole idea of pregnancy freaks me out, but I've really liked reading this story.
I keep wondering why Rose and Alexa don't get along, will you explain that somewhere along the story?Author's Response: Aww, that is so nice to hear, such an amazing compliment for me. Thank you. I rarely read pregnancy stories and this is my first writing one, so I understand, but I'm grateful that you chose to read this one and that you enjoyed it. :D
Yes, the reason why Rose and Lexi don't get along will be revealed in chapter 24 (I think). :)
Thank you so much for leaving a review.
Sam. Report Review
Hi darling! Youíre my last review of the battle! But I do plan on continuing on :)
Anyway, to the chapter! First of all, Iím going to point out that I was pretty confused. Not about the apartment looking; I love the way you set that. You started the scene and let it sort of play out for a few sentences before showing exactly what was going on. Thatís a tactic I really enjoy. But, and I very well may have just missed something so correct me if I did, I thought from the start that they *were* getting a place together.
I think because both dads were there, and they talked about their summer jobs not being enough to pay the rent... I totally just assumed theyíd decided to get a place together. So that sort of took away from Alís big question, and I went back and skimmed to see if Iíd missed anything. Maybe letting us know very early on that their looking for an apartment for just Lexi and the baby could help? When Harry mentioned that theyíre paying and stuff it just solidified my idea that they were paying for a place for the two of them together.but I may have just missed something :P
I do absolutely love the way that Al starts off by explaining whatís important about being there all the time. It was so honest and true. He would miss a lot, and sheíd have to deal with a lot being by herself and pregnant. Then of course by herself with the baby. Itís almost guaranteed that they wouldnít both hear the first word or see the first step... and you played into all that so well! And Lexiís answer! Yay!!
I literally LOLíed at the part where Theo asks her if sheís excited about not being alone for the idea of spending more of his money! hahahah! Youíve really built a lovely father daughter relationship ♥
And we did get to find out Ginnyís reaction! I feel better now :). I love that you had her telling Lexi after the emotional storm settled that she was welcome any time. We know how accepting the Potterís are, and that just brought all sort of warm feels to me. I hope you continue this story past her pregnancy and when she has the baby because now i really want to see her and the little tyke over at the Potterís house :P
Youíve really done such an awesome job with keeping Lexiís emotions realistic but still pregnant. Their indecisiveness about the apartments was all leading up to this and ah! Iím so happy for them! It makes so much sense, though. No one wants to raise a baby with balconies and shared walls and no grass and awww ♥ it was just so very sweet.
I think that Al and Lexi make an incredibly unstoppable team, haha. Sure, Lexi has the sweet daddyís girl thing going on, but Al clearly got his ability to rationalize through things from his father and uses that. Their dadís never had a chance :P
Small think I just noticed - summer in Ďweíve got our summer job salariesí shouldnít be capitalized :)
I loved that Theoís offer came with stipulations. It reminded us that he still is the dad, and not a total push over ;).
This was such a sweet chapter, Sam! See you soon!
Jami Report Review
This is another brilliant, funny chapter!! It's really engaging, the narrative works really well and helps show both sides of the story - both people's thoughts and opinions - in that sense you've got the best out of first person and third person and created your new kind of narrative. It's really nice how you smoothed their relationship out again, and the way the arkwardness comes and goes - it makes it gripping, totally understandable and even cringy at times - which is hard to do through writing I guess. The chapter title says it all...though I was delighted when the minister for magic walked in.unpredicitibe, but she coped well.
Peanut butter chicken nuggets sound extremely inventive and delicious though ;) Report Review
I really had fun with Albus in this first section. Just the way he kind if didn't know what to do with himself was so amusing. He'd already used the majority of his freaking out up, but at the same time he's more or less freaking out about NOT freaking out. Love it. And his thoughts pertaining to his family and only being able to take them at small doses at a time... Yeah. Absolutely relatable. Hahah
Poor Albus is really struggling with his own mind right now. I'm really impressed with your ability to make his character very well fleshed out. You don't give him a personality trait then go wishy washy in it. Like, you've identified that he freaks out about everything, and you make sure to keep that as a trait instead if just using it when convenient. So far he's worried about being calm, worried about if he should or shouldn't regret his and Lexi's encounter, and lectured himself for thinking about. He's awesome. I want to hug him. Although I think to keep in line with the idea that they both barely remember that night, maybe it would be better if he's kind if fuzzy on how she's was but knows the parts that he does remembered we're great?
I really loved how supportive harry was. The man has seen the world nearly come apart then played a huge part in putting it back together. Of course he won't be thrilled, but it's clear through his attitude towards his son that he does believe whatever it is, it's going to be okay. Because it will. And part of me even wonders if he has an inkling...
Oh goodness. Well, we expected that one. All things considering, getting knocked out really isn't the worst thing that could have happened when telling two families that they're going to be having a baby. Especially at such a young age with no real plans for the future. Yep, he's lucky he just got that. Hahahahahaha.
I'm happy that Theo seemed so understanding! He and harry feel a lot of like. They both grew up in the same time though and saw the same things, so again it feels natural that they wouldn't overreact to certain things that aren't dire or anything. And it's not like they can go back in time and change what's been done, so having Theo be understanding but also point out to Al that things are going to change a whole lot felt really natural.
I loved their conversation. I think it felt really honest and true, and also enjoyed the bit of comic relief with Louis when he interrupted. He seems like a fun guy, haha.
I think the only thing I felt like I missed out on in this chapter is Ginny's reaction. But we might see hers next chapter!! I just think it would be a huge deal to find out your son is going to be a father. Then again, I think I'm just selfish for more of the awkward 'in pregnant' scene. Haha!
Loved this chapter! Report Review
This is such an awesome story!! I love reading about Al and Lexi - they are such funny, witty characters and their story is that of pure orginality and humour.
You make the characters so loveable and genuine - I can really feel for Tasha, Al and Lexi - even though you manage to make me feel frustrated or happy each chapter. This story has a really inventive yet unpredictible plot - no idea how the characters will react to each other - and no idea what's going to happen next. You manage to tease out the story line bit by bit, in such a gripping way.
The style in which you write in makes the story really flow well, and the different relationships Al and Lexi have to maintain through all their situations are both funny and gripping at the same time, which I know doesn't really make sense, but you manage it really well!!
The title is really creative too, I just thought I'd say, ditto the awesome chapter names. An overall great story! :D Report Review
Hi Miss Snaky! Hiss!
I think that you made a good choice by having Albus do a decent job acting normal in front of Lexiís dad before he knew. Iím sure it was nothing but difficult, sitting next to the girl you got pregnant and her father and pretending like nothing was out of the ordinary. But still, he pulled it off really smoothly. I liked that Lexiís dadís suggestion about taking Lexi with him because she wonít visit if she doesnít like it. It has just enough irony. He has no idea how much she needs to like the house, considering her child will be spending a significant amount of time there, and I just couldnít help but giggle.
I think that Alís rationalization of why to tell the different families was perfect. Although I did feel like this could have been a good section to give us more of a feel on these families. If Lexi would have argued that they tell her family first because her dad is more understanding and then his second because his mum will be so angry, or tell his family first because they are more aware of how often this thing happens, and her dad second because theyíll need Alís family to calm them down... Iím not saying any of that is true. But, when telling something so huge like is, it would build up the readers anticipation if we have sort of an idea what these families are like. I wasnít really expecting anything from Lexiís family except for her brother to go crazy, which he did. And Iím not really expecting anything from the Potter family. But if you were to edit in more of the conversation between these two about whose family to tell first and why, then eventually settle on telling each separately, we WILL have something to expect so seeing if it goes the way that the kids think it will can really bring heightened sense of anticipation.
I really, really loved Lexiís line to her mother. We know that they arenít close, and that just further demonstrates how deep the gap between them is. Her daughter could care less about her opinion and her son didnít even want to be there because she was coming...geeze. The woman has really burned her bridges.
I also love that youíve made her dad so awesome. I feel like he almost makes up for her being terrible. He cares a lot about his children, heís accepting of his son so we know that he isnít judgmental, he pays enough attention Lexi so that he even knows a lot about her best friend. heís just all around a really good guy and I love that youíve made one of her parents that way.
Iím going to back up a bit to Lexiís fears of Astoria knowing, because I forgot to mention that before. I wonder if sheís being paranoid, or if her aunt really DOES know? Women are terribly intuitive, and maybe there was a reason she squeezed her *above* the stomach? I totally bet when her and Draco go home, sheís going to be saying, I told you so, haha. I really love that you include those small details, by the way. Iím sure nothing will ever come out of that mention of Astoria, but it just made Lexi more realistic. Your aunt looking at you in any way and hugging you above your stomach can be nothing, but to a girl whoís about to tell everyone sheís pregnant, itís a huge deal. And having Lexi be all paranoid really took her character to such a realistic place.
Lexi getting sort of sidetracked sometimes, like when sheís thinking about her family then goes to her mom then goes to another story for another day, those are also little things I love. You write first person point of view really, really realistically!
This was a lovely chapter, mídear!! Iím excited to continue! Report Review
Here I am, at -- for now, at least -- the end. What a fun, clever journey it's been. I'm already looking forward to more.
Interesting... so it seems that Al has a darker side to his personality than what we've seen so far. With this Jessica girl attempting to sow mayhem in Al and Lexi's relationship, it makes me wonder whether we'll see some of that before everything is said and done. There's certainly plenty of wholly justifiable anger floating around at the beginning of this. It seems like a volatile situation.
I don't think you've mentioned in the past that Emmett comes from a wealthy, pure blood family. Which obviously could have been on purpose, but nevertheless it was surprising to discover the opulence of his spread. But then you go into the reasons why his family pays for him to live like this and it was really sad. Up to this point, you've portrayed your gay characters as being accepted rather unconditionally by their families. OK, I guess Hugo makes Ron kind of upset, but that's just Ron being Ron. It isn't as though Ron is chasing him away. To me, it added an important element of realism to see that not every family is so accepting.
Ha! I was right about Emmett's mystery lover! Pardon me while I do the Prescient Reader Dance. Actually, I'm at work, so I'll skip that. Boy, this seems awkward. Lexi is struggling because she knows Hugo from growing up. Darcy is struggling because Hugo is hot. Emmett is struggling because his carefully woven curtain of secrecy has been torn away, exposing his truth to the light. I love it! And then the girls give Hugo the third degree while Emmett squirms. This is awesome!
You did a really good job of writing the controlled chaos of a Weasley (extended) family gathering. It felt like a churning mass of activity with a miraculously thin layer of order keeping the whole thing from bursting. I also liked your thoughts on the varying degrees of lycanthropy that affect Bill, Teddy and Louis. You didn't lay it on too thick. Just enough to support your plot point and then we moved right along.
I liked all the verbal sparring between Lexi and Al's siblings. She really does feel like one of the family at this point. She even manages to get the upper hand on the seemingly untouchable Lily.
Ha! Al made it seem like he was so calm about Hugo and Emmett's relationship. Then he sics Ron on them. Genius! What a devious prat!
I love the kiss that they share. I was sitting here through the whole thing, thinking, "Al's gonna wuss out. Al's gonna wuss out. Al's gonna wuss out..." And then he not only doesn't wuss out, he lays a capital-V Very capital-S Serious smooch on her! Way to go, Al!
You promised me an explanation of why Ginny agreed to name Albus partly after Snape and you didn't disappoint. I really didn't mind that she didn't go into too much detail about the war. That isn't really the focus of this story. But the things that she did say solidified the characterization you've given her as a very thoughtful, level-headed person.
Let's see, what else before I get to the big finale? Kieron and Dom are getting married. Should be a very classy, very nice wedding. I can see why Lexi wants to be involved in the planning. I have to imagine that it's going to start her thinking about her own situation with Al, as well.
And then the explosion at the end. That was an emotional roller coaster. I felt badly for Xavier on one level. He's just realized that a completely traumatic, horrible episode of his life was based on a lie. But Stewart had the only point, at the end of the day, that really mattered. What Xavier was doing wasn't good for Ethan at all. It was heart-breaking to read about the little boy crying, trying to find comfort and understand why everyone was yelling and his mother was crying. Tasha comes off seeming like a pretty horrible person, although I suspect you'll show us more complexities to her character before it's all said and done.
You continue to do a great job of showing all the relationship pitfalls that Al and Lexi are desperately trying to avoid. I agree with Lexi. I hope that PB and J is able to hold together. Anything less will be pretty sad to read. Report Review
Hello some more!
So I have something to share. It's a realization that I've come to after, what are we, seventeen chapters into Al and Lexi's advanture in parenthood-to-be? I hope you won't be upset about it, but I feel the need to get it out there in the open. I think I like your "Lexi chapters" a little better than your "Al chapters". It's just something about the way you write her inner voice. The "snarky but still kind of serious" comments she makes inside her head. Those little implied pauses that make her comedic timing perfect. Lexi's inner monologue is hands-down my favorite thing about the entire story. It's brilliantly done. Not that I don't like Al, mind you. I've almost forgiven him for not playing Quidditch by now. :P He's a good guy with plenty of his own quirks and insecurities that make him fun to read. But Lexi is really the star of the story for me.
This chapter had a heck of a lot going on, so I'll try not to miss anything. Lexi's opening meditation on the physicality of Quidditch players once again challenged a major piece of head canon I've accumulated while reading Next Gen stories. People always write professional Quidditch players as these top-notch, extremely fit athletes whose grueling training regimens keep them in amazing condition. Your version kind of makes sense in a way, now that I stop and think about it. I mean beaters obviously have to have big upper bodies to slap the bludgers around and Seekers probably need a lot of core strength for all the tight maneuvers, but basically Quidditch players are the magical equivalent of polo players and nobody thinks of polo players as being incredible physical specimens. This story makes me think a lot...
Anyway, moving right along, I like Scorpius as the quiet, artistic type and I like his career choice. I've grown rather weary of stories where he's an Auror. And I bet he'll design Lexi and Al an awesome house someday.
All of the banter about Cody McIntyre -- great teen heartthrob name, by the way -- was funny and very humanizing for Xavier. Well, having him stuff his face at the buffet table was pretty humanizing too, but it's nice to see that even gorgeous professional Quidditch stars get unrequited crushes sometimes.
I'll highlight a bit of that awesome internal monologue of Lexi's that I was raving about:
I must really want this thing with Albus to work.
Either that, or I'm just growing up. Maybe both. I hope it's both. We hope so, too, Lexi. Just don't change too much when you grow up, OK?
Goodness. Cody McIntyre knows who Al and Lexi are already. And not exactly for the best of reasons. It's obviously such a mixed bag, being famous. At least he's on the correct side of the Jessica issue.
So Al... yeah, he doesn't really have a subtle bone in his body. You did a good job with the horribly awkward conversation about Xavier's supposedly lost child, I thought. Whatever's coming in the next chapter, you set it up with a double dose of dramatic tension.
The Minister's son seemed like such a sweet kid. You keep giving us little peeks at the way Al and Lexi interact with children. And even though it's totally not the same interacting with somebody else's kid -- trust me on this one. I know from experience! -- I think it bodes well for their future as parents. The fact that Al was able to overcome his awkwardness and Jason's seemed like a pretty big deal for him.
This Jessica is a nasty, nasty piece of work, isn't she? I hope the doubts she tried to plant in Lexi's head don't take root too deeply, but pregnancy is an emotional, hormone-overloaded time. Sometimes little anxieties turn into big things. :(
Well, I have to say, the next chapter is shaping up to be a barn-burner. I might have to go ahead and read that. ;) But then I'm all out of chapters!
Here are a few things I noticed while reading that might be typos:
plates of little sandwiches and mini sausages and Bertie Box in a bowl, among other things. - Bertie Botts?
I turn, mouth still open and ready to speak, then shut it quickly when I recognize the little person who must have shouted me running in my direction. - who must have shouted at me
"The other's aren't like Al. - others aren't like
"How long before he starts to worry about how long you leave him now? - There's something really odd about this sentence. Not sure where you were going with it.
Great job with this! One more chapter and then I'm all caught up! Report Review
It's review battle time! Let's get it on!
So a small thought on Lexi's dad's appearance. I thought maybe you should have given us just a little more of a hint that he popped up unexpectedly. Maybe tweak Al's reaction so that he's more along the lines of, "hey, where did he come from???"
That aside, I loved the whole breakfast scene. Poor Theo has to get his jabs in where he can, because the poor guy is hopelessly outgunned from all sides, it seems. Betting with Ginny has never been a productive use of anybody's time or money, because even when she loses she finds a way to get back at you. And Lexi plainly has the poor man's number. If I was Al, I would have gotten the heck out of there, too.
So before I say another word about the next section of the chapter, there's this:
I groan; I may hate playing Quidditch, but watching it is admittedly not so bad. - You... You... You've committed Albus Potter head canon heresy!!! Seriously, this is the first story I have ever, ever read where Al doesn't like playing Quidditch. Dominique as a guy I can get used to. Gay Hugo will work just fine. But Al not playing Quidditch... Congratuations, you have genuinely challenged me to wrap my head around something. ;)
Oh, and I loved this little line: Dakota is a unisex name, I'll have you know. Like Dominique. Getting tired of reviewers poking you about him? :p
I like that Lexi and Albus are sort of easing into this whole boyfriend/girlfriend thing. Nobody's falling all over anybody else or professing everlasting love. The pacing feels very natural. They're still feeling the situation out.
Bringing the press into the equation was a completely realistic touch. It's hard to have a Next Gen story without the notoriety of their parents intruding. But I like that you've given them some notoriety of their own. And I have to imagine this Jessica person is going to complicate matters somewhere along the way.
Al's aside on the financial situations and teachings of their two families added a nice bit of color to Al and Lexi's picture. You know the reasons why I have trouble imagining Theo Nott as a hardworking, upstanding member of society, but you're definitely selling me on him. I like the idea that it wasn't just muggle-borns and goblins who were forced into hiding during the war. Pure bloods who defied the Dark Lord must have had an even larger bulls-eye on their backs, because he didn't tolerate that sort of disloyalty. I also think it's great that all of these kids are equipped to fend for themselves without their parents' money.
Did you look where you were going when you drove straight into crazy town? - Ha! Good on Lexi, calling Al out on this strange anxiety he has about their whole situation. Seriously, he needs to pull himself together.
The next door neighbors seemed like a good element to add to the story. They're exactly the sort of happy, suburban family that Al would like to become and Lexi... well, it sounds like it was growing on her by the end. The kids sounded really cute. Al and Lexi could definitely get a bit of practice in before they have to deal with things first-hand.
Oh, my. I guess I was right about Jessica. You certainly know how to keep things interesting!
I noticed a couple of small typos that you might want to take another look at:
I have to remind myself that she doesn't know what she want to do yet, so she doesn't have a job - what she wants to do
"Just over five months," she answers politely. "Al says you have to kids, how old are they?" - two kids
I thought you did a great job with this. It covered a bit of ground and did a nice job building on what Al and Lexi started in the last chapter.
I will be back soon! Report Review
Wow, this chapter was amazing! I loved it! It definitely was drama-filled, but aren't those the best kind of chapters? Haha. I'm so happy that Al and Lexi are officially together! It's so cute! The mistletoe scene was perfect! And I think you wrote Ginny incredibly well. I feel so bad for Xavier, though. Hopefully things can get better for him, and he can spend some time with poor Ethan. I can't wait for the next chapter! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hey, Cassie.
They are, especially in terms of writing. So, I'm glad reading it was just as exciting.
I'm so glad they're finally together, too. I just don't know what it is with me and waiting ages. :P It just seemed realistic this way to me. But I'm glad you like that they're together, and the mistletoe scene. That was one of my favorite parts. :)
Things will pick up for Xavier, I promise. He deserves a hug, though. *hugs*
Thanks for reviewing!
Sam. Report Review
This story is amazing and I can not I wish for the next chapter to come soon because I am going nuts about what is going to happen next! I love this LOVE IT!Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm so glad you like it. :D
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Hi Sam! This chapter was wonderful! Jason was adorable, and I can't wait for the next chapter! I'm going to go read it now! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hey, Cassie.
Aww, I'm so glad you like Jason. I just want to hug him. :)
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I loved this chapter and I love this story! You're a great writer!Author's Response: Thank you so much!
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I'm glad that Xavier found out, but talk about the worse possible way for that to happen. Really am curious about Emmett's family and all that so can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: It was. I just hated hurting him like that, but it had to be done for the rest of the story and he'll be okay. He's strong.
Emmett's family are mentioned every now and again, they even pop up in the sequel. :)
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Kieron, no! Don't beat up poor Al! We like him!
Wonderfully amazing chapter, Sam. I coulf feel the tension radiating out of my screen when she told them. Though I did feel a bit sorry for her mother, she was a bit harsh there.
I loved how the whole family is all, "Eh. Al's going to be killed. Who wants some pudding?" :p
LizAuthor's Response: We do, but... Kieron is Kieron. He has a temper and he hits first, asks questions later. He would be so awesome if he wasn't like that. But still, poor Al. *hugs*
She has her reasons, but her mum will be back and things will... change. :)
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OH NO, YOU TWO. WHAT HAVE YOU DONE? As glad as I am that Theo didn't catch them it also would've been hilarious. Great chapter as usual.
Sam - ah. More cliff hangers.. Bad Sam. :c
Teeny review this chapter, sorry!
LizAuthor's Response: I kinda wanted Theo to catch them, would have been so funny, but he couldn't because of the next chapters. :)
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Male Dom is awesome, Sam! Just like you! :p
I somehow don't know if Alexa and Al can lead to anything..good. (Psh. Except that I do know.)
But I must say I really like the banter between the two of them, and the superly odd friendship they have with each other where they both like one another but don't at the sam time.
I just hope Al gets over Catrine soon. He's gotta be focused on Alexa!
HAPPY VALENTINES DAY,
LIZ.Author's Response: Male!Dom is so awesome, I'm glad you like them. Aww, thank you. :)
Their friendship is so odd and crazy and works, which is odd. :P
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