YOU DARE. HOW COULD YOU.
Rachel you're meeean (though thank you for the mention), how can you stop here?
I'm going to assume you won't have a scene where Lily and James die seeing as you already have a one-shot. I also wonder what era you're going to set Breaking Even; how Beth will react to Sirius' supposed betrayal; how her relation to Severus will evolve.
This was a short review, but I wanted to show my support (and how sad I was to see this story end, though it allows it to be cannon - so far).
Expect me to catch up on reviewing previous chapters soon enough, and if I don't, come and kick me in the right direction. Okay?
&heartsAuthor's Response: I'm sorry! ♥ Oh, do forgive me, Val -- and yes, of course you were mentioned! :) I'm actually still hugely thrilled to see you'd been keeping up with this story the whole time. Your name cropping up again really, really made my day!
I haven't decided yet what I'm doing about Lily and James, actually. In that one-shot, Beth doesn't exist, of course, so I might rewrite a chapter with their deaths... We'll see, really. :P I haven't gotten to that bit of the writing yet! Breaking Even will go into November 1981, and I do believe the last chapter is set a month or so after the course of events. I'm much too lazy to look at my outline, but I /think/ that's correct.
Short reviews are just as appreciated as long reviews, never you mind. ♥ And you do know you totally don't have to review, right? It would be lovely, but if you don't have the time, seriously -- don't worry about it! Thank you for being so supportive of this story, and just for everything. It seriously means so much. :)
Hope to see you back for book three! ♥ Report Review
Thanks for the shout out! That kind of makes up for the hiatus in Sneth... I have to wait till 2/17?!? :-(
Anyway, very nice ending, in a middle book of the trilogy kind of way. I love how you put in there at the very end that Sev's memories of Beth still exist in Dumbledore's study. It gave me hope and set my mind whirring into how they can get back into Sev's head and why, etc.
Poor Beth! I wanted to give her a hug this time and tell her to keep her hopes and love alive. I'm wondering how the missing memories work. Does Sev not recognize her at all? Remember her vaguely as a Hogwarts classmate, who was friends with the Marauders? I'm trying to decide which would be more heartbreaking.Author's Response: Not at all! ♥ You definitely deserved a shout-out... although it does come with a rather extended waiting period, I'll admit. But since I'm so behind at responding to reviews, I can say now that you only have a little over three weeks to go now!
I'm very proud of the way this book ended, and I'm glad you thought it was middle-book-in-a-trilogy-esque, because... well, it is! There is hope, make no mistake; Sev's memories are proof of that. Don't give up on him just yet! You'll see the effect the missing memories have on Severus in the next book; that's a fairly significant part of events there, actually.
Thank you so much for all the wonderful reviews on this story, and for being so, so supportive of it! ♥ There really aren't words to express just how far my gratitude towards you extends. I'm already very much looking forward to seeing your opinions of the third book, too! Report Review
I love the story-line! I really can't wait to see where you going with this. Job well done, you deserve a 10/10Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to leave me a review! I'm so pleased you like the story thus far -- it's one I've invested nearly two full years of my life in by now, so obviously I'm a bit attached. :P
I hope you find the time to read on, and I'm looking forward to hearing more of your opinions! I very much appreciate the 10/10!! ♥ Report Review
And so this part of the story ends. Not sure though I agree to my own statement. Does ones fantasies ever end? I doubt it.
I have never really been the type to read fanfiction, since my own head is so full of my own stories, but as I said last time: Your writing skills never seem to fail you. You have produced a fanfic that can stand on it's own. You have managed to make me care about the characters. (Though I must admit, I have always been fond of Snape). You make them alive, and I can almost feel as if I knew them, all thanks to you portraying them so well.
So thank you, once again, for sharing the magic in your head. Really looking forward to see how it resoulves, and even if Severus won't ever remember Beth, she'll have the love for both of them. =)Author's Response: And so this part of the story ends indeed. Although it's true -- stories never really end, as long as we remember them. Perhaps that's just me waxing poetic, but I also think it's true!
I cannot even begin to properly thank you for all the truly wonderful compliments you have paid me in this review. I am so, so glad that you gave this story a chance, and that you cared about my characters and thought I wrote them well. Even that you think I have talent at all -- I just... that means SO much, and I mean that with every part of me!
It has been an absolute joy and privilege to share my stories with others, especially people like you. ♥ I would love to see you return for "Breaking Even" too! February 17, it'll be up. I have much more in store for Beth and Severus, and the Marauders too! Report Review
OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH. THIS CHAPTER. I CAN'T EVEN... OH MY GOSH. SO MANY FEELS.
This was AMAZING. Absolutely brilliant! Gah. Seriously, I can't even express how awesome this was. There was so much packed into one chapter that by the time I was finished I had to pause for a second to really understand what had just happened. Haha.
Yay yay yay Beth and Severus! SNETH SNETH SNETH. As you can see, I clearly ship them. They're so cute together, but not in a really romantic/gushy way. They're awkward around each other, and that feels really realistic. They don't just fall madly in love and then turn into this picture-perfect couple, which I love. I can really connect to Beth in those situations! Haha.
I CAN'T BELIEVE BETH SPILLED THE BEANS ABOUT LILY BEING PREGNANT. But I'm really glad that Roark (who i love, by the way) didn't see that it Severus's thoughts! And the bracelet that he got for her had a bird on it! That was so cute. SNETH. I just want them to work so badly! And now that Roark knows about her I'm really nervous that something bad is going to happen!!! They just have to be ok!
A line I LOVED in this was after Roark manages to see into Sev's thoughts.
Roark was sneering from where he still stood behind the opposite chair, upper lip curled into an expression of utter disgust. "What," he hissed through his teeth, his voice cold enough to freeze, "was that about, Snape?"
Ah I could picture that so clearly when I read it, and I just got chills! I really love how you write the Death Eaters, and can't wait to read more of them!!!
This chapter was phenomenal, and I adored it! You are fantastic! So much Sneth :) 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Haha! Oh, Cassie. :P I'm so happy you liked this chapter as much as you did! This is probably one of the most ship-centric chapters in this story so far, I think, and I have to admit that I was having quite a few moments of my own while writing this, just sitting back and letting everything happen. :D I think it's so important to write romance that isn't always gushy and harlequin-novel-esque, which is something I really, really tried to portray here. They AREN'T the picture-perfect couple, and yet they make it work anyway. And I just love that you're able to see that!
Not saying anything about what Roark may or may not conjecture, of course... you'll have to read on! :3 I actually didn't anticipate enjoying writing the Death Eaters in this story as much as I do (I feel like I say that a lot; I'm not sure what I anticipated about this story anymore, but it seems like everything's taken me by surprise!). My writing gave you chills?! That comment just made my day! ♥
Your reviews are simply the best. I missed them very much, and am completely grateful that you've returned to ITR! Thanks a million, Cassie!!! Report Review
Wow, I'm the first to review!
This was such a sweet chapter in so many ways. I love your Marauders (plus Beth, of course) and love how you show the relationships and affection between them. It's just so believable and real. I just wanted to hug Sirius here -- I love bouncy!Sirius. :-) And he was trying so hard to comfort Beth, even when he doesn't really see the appeal of Sev.
Of course, that makes it all so heartbreaking when you think what happens to James, Lily, Sirius and Harry in about a year.
And you're evil again trying to end on a hopeful note ("Maybe this is a sign that everything would eventually be all right again.")... Guess it's nice to give Beth some little happiness right now...Author's Response: You are indeed the first to review! :) I'm so pleased you liked this chapter, especially coming after the sort of horrific one before it (though I'm not going to lie -- chapter 32 is one of my favorite of this entire plot so far!). There is such a strong friendship between all of them, and it's never more important than at this time in their lives, when the war is only getting worse, and James and Lily are about to be in serious jeopardy. Sirius welcomes your hugs, I assure you! ITR is his most hug-demanding book, because man, does he manage to mess a few things up. :P But then he's also rather endearing, if I do say so myself, and those times merit hugs, too.
Wow. That was a ramble! Ending on a hopeful note was probably a wee bit diabolical, yes. I promise, though -- I've got things in store! We certainly haven't seen the last of Severus, and you know, a bit of hope isn't a bad thing. Even a LOT of hope isn't a bad thing. Only time will tell what's in store!
Thanks a million times over, as always, for such a lovely review. ♥ I don't know where this story would be without you. Truly! Report Review
Hello hello hello!
I know you said that this chapter was a bit if a filler, but I think it's one of my favorites so far! I just love how you write the marauders together, and how they're such good friends even though their personalities clash quite a bit!
I feel bad that Beth and Severus can't meet up as often because of the yucky weather! But fortunately for Sirius, this makes a lot more time for them to bond! Haha. He's so funny sometimes, because he really wants to grow up and go on missions, and be an important Order member and everything, but he still seems like such a kid! Even the fact that he calls missions missions makes me think of a little kid. And of course because he's standing outside bouncing a rubber ball on the sidewalk! Haha.
And I love how we find out that James and Lily have to go into hiding, and that poor Remus is the one to deliver the news! I was wondering when that would come up. I can't believe that's happening. And that Harry is going to come along soon! They're just so young! I clearly can't wrap my head around that fact based on the fact that I mention it in practically every review I leave for this story!
And Sirius just killed me at the end of this chapter! Nothing good can come of Sirius convincing himself that he loves Beth! Especially when she likes Severus! I'm nervous to see how this all pans out...
This chapter was phenomenal, and I absolutely love this story! It's nice that I finally have a chance to start getting caught up with it! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Oh, how lovely to see you've returned again, Cassie! ♥ I'm so excited!
This definitely was filler, yes, but I'm pleased you enjoyed it all the same. :) I think this came about in large part because I missed all of the camaraderie and more-immature Sirius from ITB. You've hit the nail on the head as far as he's concerned: He very much does want to grow up and be treated like an adult, but at the same time, he perhaps more than any of the wants to cling to the good old days at Hogwarts, when things were less complicated and uncertain. Hence red rubber balls and bonding time. :3
This is the part where things start to turn a bit more dark for James and Lily, and after the prophecy's made it's only going to worsen, I'm afraid. :( Their story is such a tragic one, but I don't think I realized how /much/ until I started writing it, you know? (I'm pretty sure you do!) I can't wrap my head around how young they are sometimes...
Oh, Sirius. He is SO conflicted in this story. ♥ He really does need lots and lots of hugs and praise, I think. But anyway! Thanks a million for reviewing this chapter for me. I'm so glad you liked it! Report Review
THIS WAS FANTASTIC. I was wondering about Peter, and ever since I read the Harry Potter series, I wanted to know what made him go over to Voldemort, and why he would betray his friends like he did. I think you did a phenomenal job showing why that happens, and it's a very Peter thing for him to do. He's not joining the Death Eaters because he's evil, or shares their beliefs, but it's because he wants protection and is afraid.
You did an amazing job writing Alecto and Amycus! I could picture them so clearly, and they just give me shivers! I love how they all mock Peter and treat him like a kid, because it shows how much contrast their is between the Death Eaters and the Order. And it's funny that he goes to them when they make fun of him, because he was just thinking about how often he's the butt of Sirius's jokes. That's just something I noticed, but I don't know if it was intentional or not! Haha.
And I loved the part with the Unbreakable Vow! It shows that Peter can't help what he does later, and that he's doing it to save his own life, which makes his death even more powerful! Ah this chapter was just so brilliant!
AND THEN SEVERUS AT THE END. I have no words for how amazing this is! Well, clearly I do, based on the size of this review, but you know what I mean!
This was absolutely phenomenal! Wonderful, wonderful work, as always! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: I always wondered about the circumstances of Peter's betrayal, too! I don't think it would be any small thing to make someone turn tails like that -- and Peter's frustration at always feeling a bit on the outside, building in momentum for years and years, seemed a pretty plausible way to go about it. I'm so happy that you seemed to think so, too!
LOVE your comment about irony, too, because you're really one of the only people who's picked that up. ♥ The weirdest part of the entire situation as I've written it is that things really aren't better for Peter on the other side at all. But he thinks they're more powerful, and therefore undergoes the taunts, the teasing, because he thinks that's the thing that, in the end, isn't going to get him killed. I never thought much about Peter before writing this story, and still don't like him much, but he intrigues me so much more now. :)
You are too kind, Cassie! ♥ I was thrilled to see your name back here again on this story's reviews, and it made me so happy to hear all your wonderful compliments. Thank you very much!! Report Review
Oh my goodness, this chapter was so powerful! I was literally in tears over all of this, it's not fair that their first kiss is their last and that Sev is going to forget all about Beth! Eek, it's just so sad! Especially when she went off to Sirius' and just fell apart! I know that he's only trying to protect her, but I feel really bad for Beth right now. Amazing chapter!Author's Response: Not going to lie -- I'm quite sure that I teared up a bit writing this, too, last October. (What can I say? I'm a bit attached to these characters!) I'm very much into writing tragic romance, I admit, and sad pieces always get me more than happy ones. I suppose that's the reason I choose to write them. But he was only trying to protect her -- you're right!
Thank you so, so much for leaving a review for me on this chapter. It was wonderful hearing from you again! ♥ Report Review
Okey, so. Where to start? I found this, and got interested because of J.K:s familiar characters. That's what made me start reading. But the thing that made me read all the posted chapters in one day was your wrighting. I'm at a loss for words. It all feels so (i can't really find any other good way to explain) "the world of Harry Potter" that Said Rowling wrote in the first place. I admit, I'm hooked, and really looking forward to read what you have planned for the characters. Thank you for sharing the story that's taking place in you mind.Author's Response: This review REALLY made my day -- thank you so much for leaving it! ♥ I'm absolutely blown away that you read all of these chapters in one day. Trust me, I know that's no small feat, and it really means so much to me to know that someone did that for a story I wrote!
I strive so much to bring as much "magic" as I can to my Harry Potter fan fiction, and knowing I've achieved that with even one reader is one of the best rewards. I'm grinning so much right now! I have much in store for these characters, and I'm actually nearly halfway through writing the third book in this series already. That's what I get for waiting to post the first ten or so chapters of the first book a year and a half ago -- I'm so far ahead now!
Anyway. Thank YOU for leaving such a wonderful review on this story. This whole plot is very dear to me, having been the main project I've worked on for nearly two years, and hearing someone liked it so much is just incredible. Very much looking forward to hearing your opinion on the rest, too! ♥ Report Review
OMG!!! You're evil!! I did not see that coming at all. This was such a well written chapter and I thought he was just building up to telling her he would be a spy and she'd worry about how dangerous that would be and then this! Their first kiss...and their last. Sob!
Seriously, you did an awesome job of ratcheting up the tension. I could really feel all Beth's emotions in this chapter.
I liked these bits:
" It was a dizzying feeling – it wasn’t parental affection, it wasn’t friendship. Was there a name for this?"
"I don’t want to be the person I am when you’re not here –“ LOVED that one! It's so true!
"But all she could make sense of was Severus’s voice, already fading in her memory, already starting to grow less familiar." Also so true... and so heartbreaking! I want to say, "Beth, you have to practice hearing it at least every half hour and still it slips away..."
So, I hate you right now. ;-) But I will be back! They will get back together, won't they?Author's Response: Ah, I'm sorry! ♥ Although I'm actually quite glad that I was able to surprise you like that, as odd as that sounds -- I obviously knew where things were going, and for some reason I was quite paranoid that other readers would suspect. :P
The emotions were a huge part of what was carrying this chapter, and hearing that you think I did a good job really makes me feel pretty awesome. That line you quoted, too, Beth's line about not wanting to be the person she is when Severus isn't around -- that's one of my favorites! In a heartbreaking way, but that's really how I like my romance. And thus I read and write it like that!
You are probably well within your rights to hate me. :3 But thank you for reviewing all the same! I make no promises as to their future... but I also won't deny that things work out for them. You'll have to see! ♥ Very much looking forward to hearing more of your comments, Ardeith -- your reviews are always so lovely!! Report Review
I read it, and re-read it, and my heart is breaking. Terrific writing, as always.Author's Response: I'm so, so happy that you enjoyed this chapter -- I mentioned this in a response earlier today, but chapters that are integral to the plot, like this, always make me nervous to post.
I'm flattered you liked my writing, too! All hope is not lost, I promise. After all, there's one more book to go! Thank you for taking the time to review for me -- I can't tell you what it means! ♥ Report Review
I KNEW THIS WAS COMING AND YET I WAS NOT AT ALL PREPARED.
D: D: D: D: D:
My mind is buzzing. Now that he's going to forget Beth, what will be his motivation to act as a spy? Will that be where canon seeps in? Or something else? His memory is going to have to be so severely modified... And if it's Lily who serves as the driving force behind his being a spy, and someone reached into his brain and found that out, this means he's willing for Death Eaters to use Lily to get to him. Right? Since that's his reasoning for forgetting Beth in the first place, to protect her. But if he's doing it for love in the name of anyone at all from the Order, he's still equally in danger. I am just on the edge of my seat wondering how he is going to justify to himself being a spy for the Order when, if it weren't for Beth, he would never dream of doing such a thing. Or will Dumbledore plant that in his mind? The desire to deviate from the Dark Arts? I AM SO FULL OF QUESTIONS. I FEEL BAD FOR YOU WHEN YOU GET ONLINE TONIGHT BECAUSE I WILL ATTACK YOU LIKE A SWARM OF BEES.
I should have known you would finally, FINALLY, FINALLY give us the long-awaited Severus-Beth kiss while simultaneously ripping away their happily ever after. DAMN IT, RACHEL. ARUGHHH. Their first kiss is minutes before Severus forgets all about her, while Dumbledore is piddling around the kitchen pretending to be interested in cocoa when in reality he was probably sitting there wondering why the hell he couldn't hear their conversation.
I feel so HORRIBLE for Beth and OH MY GOD SIRIUS I HAVE NEVER BEEN ANGRIER WITH YOU. I was hoping throughout the chapter that Beth would discover what he did so that she could tear him a new one, because he deserves it and I kind of want to see her terrify him because he has RUINED EVERYTHING.
This part: "I can't lose you - I don't want to be the person I am when you're not here -" and Please remember me - I THINK YOU ARE TRYING TO KILL ME. You have ripped my heart out and stomped on it and then called it mean names and then gave it to Sirius to give to Dumbledore like the traitor he is, and then Dumbledore ruined things with his ideas like he does, and I am no longer making sense but I do not know what is going to happen now because the extent of what I know of your plot after this point is murky, and I will have to force answers out of you. I know certain things but I NEED TO KNOW MORE.
How in the world is Beth supposed to go on after this. How is she supposed to cope. To see Severus come and go, and have him look at her without any flicker of recognition, not caring, and she meanwhile still has all of her memories of him, just thinking about it makes me feel so small and lost inside and sometimes I just really hate what you do to my feelings even though I also love it because it's worth it to have your feels stomped on when the author does it so deftly.
You are too talented at writing tragic love for your own good. Someday when you are published you will be renowned for breaking millions of hearts. And I will read every cruel/wonderful/miserably depressing thing you write. ♥Author's Response: -hugs you and gives you lots and lots of hot chocolate cupcakes- ♥
You are quite correct; this is where a bit more of the canon seeps in. You'll see that in the third book, of course, but you'll probably wheedle more out of me before you ever see those bits anyway, since you've got a knack for wheedling. He is still very much in danger, though, and luckily he knows that -- oh my gosh, if he forgot how much danger he was in. D: The Death Eaters aren't exactly light on punishment. And the Order isn't too, when you really think about it. And now I'm wanting to type all of these things and I don't want to give too much away, which means the next time you're online I'll probably just start chattering like a pressurized hosepipe that's been released at long last and you'll just be like WHOA CALM THE HECK DOWN ALREADY.
I thought for sure you would have anticipated the kiss! :D That has been planned basically as long as the idea for his losing his memory has, because a) I am masochistic, and b) there is no second reason, because the first is basically it. (You obviously forget that you are friends with someone with strong Slytherin traits.) Although for some reason your mentioning Dumbledore piddling about with cocoa made me laugh, because he probably is wondering why it's so quiet out there but at the same time I can see him actually making cocoa. It seems very much like a Dumbledore-y drink.
I KEEP FORGETTING THINGS THIS FAR BACK, THIS IS WHY I SHOULDN'T WRITE IN ADVANCE. Sirius really screwed everything up, though. Like, majorly. And to be honest, he does not learn from his mistakes very well. Make of that what you will! Cackling, though, because this was basically the extent of your knowledge of the plot and you're probably envisioning whole natural disasters in book three. CACKLING. ♥ (Though like I say, it's not like I won't be liberal enough with details if you do enough coaxing.)
-rolls around in a huge pile of feels- I am glad the stomping was deft! I sometimes wonder if it's a good thing to write tragic love... but then I don't care and plow on anyway. You are /so supportive/ and you've given me so much confidence in myself and my abilities and just gah. If by some miracle I ever publish a book, you have a lifetime guarantee of a signed advance copy, and here's that promise in writing so I have to go through with it!
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I am totally enjoying this story, even though it's sad right now. I hope something good comes out of this for Beth since she will be the bearer of the truth (you know, since she still has HER memories). I am very much anticipating where this story is going now. I hope that updates will be forthcoming (and not too far away;)). Oh yeah, how much guilt is Sirius going to be having (or any) since Beth will now need someone to lean on not knowing that he was the one that ratted her out.Author's Response: Hello -- it's wonderful to see you've popped back by! This story is sad right now, but I'm still very glad you're enjoying it. And I don't think that Beth will be out for the count, to be sure. Don't give up on her!
Updates will continue to be every Sunday! Well, these next two chapters, of course. I'll make an announcement in the last chapter, but I'm planning to post the first chapter of the third Sneth book on February 17, which is Beth's (and my) birthday. And after that, every Sunday like clockwork unless otherwise stated in an author's note!
You'll see what happens between Sirius and Beth in book three. :3 I'm very excited to continue to hear your opinions on this story! Thank you for your review! ♥ Report Review
I'm really enjoying the story and can't wait for more. Beth's character is great. Please post more soon.Author's Response: It's great to hear from you! And I'm so pleased you're enjoying the story, too. :) This plotline is something that's very close to my heart, simply because it's been around for over a year and a half, and I'm quite attached to it. Hearing that other people enjoy it, too -- that'll never get old!
I post updates every single Sunday, unless otherwise indicated, so you can definitely check back then. Thank you so much for taking the time to leave this review for me! ♥ Report Review
You're back! Happy New Year, tenth!! :D
With a very strong chapter, love the characterizations of Snape, Dumbledore and Peter here. Love the way you continue to write our hero Sev in character, warts and all. His arrogance, his self serving-ness, his pride...as shown in these bits:
“What I have to say,” he sneered through gritted teeth, “is of rather high importance, and would interest you greatly, should you care to listen.”
what sort of a question would it be? And (even as he thought it, he hated himself a bit for it) what would it mean for him?
And he was an Occlumens, or, at the very least, on his way to becoming one… he could do it, he could hide it from them, he was good…
Just great stuff! As is this insight:
There was something about finally letting out what you had been thinking for months and months, and had never had the courage to voice before, or indeed, much of anyone to voice it to.
I'm intrigued by the way you write Dumbledore, you/Sev seem to see his devious, ruthless side which poor Harry and friends never seemed to.
And poor Peter! Nice parallelism as always putting both spies in this chapter.Author's Response: Happy New Year, Ardeith! :D And even though it's early yet, I hope it's going very well for you so far. If anyone deserves a great year, it's you!
I'm so pleased you're still finding Snape to be in character -- I do admit that from time to time I have my doubts. But it's like I've said dozens upon dozens of times before: There is both good and evil inside of him, and unlike a lot of people, he lets both sides shows in different circumstances. He's not inherently horrible, but it cannot be denied that he's made some seriously poor choices. I just... gah. Love him!
I think those little insights are sort of... personal justifications of things, if that makes any sense. ;) There are several of them sprinkled through ITB and ITR that, if I went back and found them again, could point to, and you might see what I mean. It's personal reflection on life!
As for Dumbledore, I COMPLETELY agree with you. I just said this in another response, but most canon characters always seemed to paint Dumbledore as such a saint, even in the later books, and after OotP I never saw him that way at all. He lies to Harry's face on more than one occasion; he abandoned his family essentially for Grindelwald. He's good, yes, but it's almost Snape-like in the way that he's got some bad qualities, too, and often walks the line between the two. In short, I'm glad you seem to see him the way I do!
Thank you so much, as always, for returning to review this latest chapter for me. I honestly cannot even begin to tell you how much your support does for me! ♥ Hoping to see you back quite soon! Report Review
It has just occurred to me, right this very second, that in becoming a spy for Dumbledore Severus has freely given up any positive reasons he had for joining the Death Eaters - which is recognition. He will do the work of both sides and only get the negative recognition for the bad side. He won't get to lay claims to all of the good he will do. And since I believe admiration and respect was one of the leading reasons why he signed up with the Death Eaters in the first place, and now he won't be getting any of that from the Order, keeping it all a secret, I feel the full magnitude of what he's done. Years later, after finishing Deathly Hallows, you achieved what The Prince's Tale never achieved, no matter how many times I've read it since. You showed me exactly what Severus was sacrificing.
Okay. Hands-down, favorite chapter. It wasn't just what was said and shown, but the language you used - I don't know, it was just even sharper than usual, which is an amazing feat because your writing is already so marvelous. But in this chapter, every single sentence stood out. And that's why I had to keep pausing to reread things, soaking them in to remember them. This chapter felt so short because of the way it was written, and sdkfjdfj. Severus and Dumbledore and Peter and - oh my goodness. Everything about Peter's section, his guilt and descent into a sort of madness, and the parallels of both men who've become double-agents. We know Severus's motivations, which are much stronger than Peter's But then, everything about Peter is weaker. I think Peter might be beyond saving.
I feel so terrible for Beth, who has no idea what's coming...I wish the next chapter were posted already because it's like a band-aid; just need to rip it off.
Please don't hate me but I have things I have to quote back at you. It is physically necessary for me to do this, for no other reason than for you to know that these particular lines were very bright spots in a sea made up entirely of bright spots, and authors should know when they've written things that strike with readers:
There was a near-deafening silence; it seemed to roar in his ears, or perhaps that was only his own blood, throbbing there while his heart beat at what must surely be twice the speed of a normal man's.
- I had an actual physical reaction to this. I felt a sense of panic here. Actual, real-life panic, just because I was reading it and experiencing it in my head. You make Dumbledore so intimidating that even someone as intimidating as Severus is going around in circles in his head waiting for something to happen, for Dumbledore to speak. And that feeling of being freed when he confessed to Dumbledore made me smile because, even after everything he's done, Dumbledore used to be his Headmaster. An authority figure and someone who protected his students. It would, in light of everything and even though it might feel somewhat absurd, be so nice to receive a smile from someone so important. I don't think you could ever stop secretly wanting the approval of Dumbledore.
He looked up at Severus again, and the glinting, icy expression had come back into his eyes, cracked through with something that was, more than likely, sadness.
- Okay the imagery slayed me. Pile of jealous green goo over here.
But what hour? Severus had lost track of the time, of how long he'd been here, and couldn't remember any other bells to tell him otherwise. His senses seemed heightened, waiting for a verdict - everything was in sharper relief, the shadows deeper, his breathing louder -
- ♥ Love this. Literally made my heart speed up.
More and more, Peter, you sound like the rat, the scum that you are, for betraying those who trust you still... Had he made those words up, or had someone said them to him once?
D: SPREAD SOME OF THAT TALENT AROUND. It's a widely-known fact that you're very good at getting into the heads of those mentally on the fritz, and it's displayed so remarkably here that I am just skdjfkdfj. I'm so proud of you and all the wonderful things you can do with words.
UPDATE NOW, PLEASE.Author's Response: SEVERUS IS SERIOUSLY JUST THE BEST, THOUGH. And I don't mean that in a self-flattering way, of course, because it's totally to Rowling's credit that he is the way he is. But you're so right: He stands almost nothing to gain personally by doing what he did, and yet he does it, because of his intense love (for Lily in canon, for Beth here), and that's part of the whole thing about complexities that I adore about his character. There are moments of good between all the bad, and then there are moments where he's neither, and I don't think I'm ever going to get tired of writing him. ♥
I think one of the most gratifying things about your reviews -- besides the fact that they come from YOU -- is that you always seem to notice things that I sort of see personally while writing, but don't think anyone else will ever notice. When I went back and posted this (since it's now been almost four months since I wrote this, and oh my gosh, when did that happen), it seemed a bit different; a bit sharper, like you say. And I don't know how you continue to pick up on things like that but I appreciate it immensely!
You're going to struggle with the next chapter. ♥ Most painful Band-Aid in the plot so far... except perhaps the last chapter. They're both kind of bad.
I love when you quote things back at me! :D Dumbledore's pretty terrifying in this chapter, now that I think about it. But I think of him that way -- he's not the basic saint that many of the canon characters portray him as. He lies, he does questionable things. He's human, despite the fact that he's one of the most brilliant wizards who ever lived. And Severus, who is sort of, but not really, the same, can see that; that's why it gets heightened in his chapters.
ANYWAY. THIS HAS BEEN A VERY RAMBLY RESPONSE. ♥ I'm typing up responses to your review and one other one, just so I can post chapter 32, and I seriously debated doing it at two in the morning last night (technically Sunday!) because I was /that/ excited about it. Seriously cannot wait for you to read it.
Thank you so much for being such an amazing friend. You don't need to, but you review EVERYTHING I write! How awesome is that?! ♥ Report Review
Oh this chapter!!!
Loved the beginning part. It's so bitter sweet reading about James and Lily because there's this big, depressing plot line hanging over everything. And they're so happy and Harry is going to be in the world soon. And gah, I just want them to LIVE!!!
Oh god that letter. I would feel so much dread if I got a letter like that. Dumbledore can be a scary man sometimes (especially when played by Michael Gambon in a certain GoF scene). He's this brilliant wizard who defeated Grindelwald, you really wouldn't want to disappoint him. And I love the fact that you had him say that he could not help them. It just points out the fact that Dumbledore can't and won't always be there to rescue everyone.
And Snape. Well wasn't he quite the white knight in this. He was very certain of Beth when he was in front of Dumbledore. Making sure it looked like he'd instigated everything and the like. Probably didn't do him any favours in Dumbledore's eyes but Beth's probably swooning all over the place as he says those things.
But then he goes all weird after the meeting. He is just one big enigma is that man.
AND WHAT IS GOING ON WITH THE SECRET KEEP THING?! HOW IS THAT GOING TO PLAY OUT?!?!? INTRIGUED!!!Author's Response: I think one of the things I love most about writing Marauders -- and it really is one of my favorite eras -- is knowing all of these things that happen to these men and women in canon, and getting to examine their characters BEFORE all of that happens. So yes, there is a big depressing plot line, but right now they can be together, and play Exploding Snap, and make vaguely inappropriate jokes, and being lovely and wonderful. ♥
I know exactly what GoF scene you're talking about! That's probably as close as the Dumbledore in my head comes to being anything like movie-Dumbledore, really. :D He's a very flawed wizard, for all that people put him onto a pedestal in the books, even Harry and the Weasleys. Brilliant, yes, but very flawed.
And then, of course, we go to Snape, who has more flaws than I can either count or name! And yet I love him in spite of it. :) He is never going to be a white knight, no matter what. But forget Beth, there are times, when writing him, when even /I/ swoon -- and that's really no mean feat, knowing who I'm writing!
Ah, so many questions! I'll say what I did before: I promise you, everything you've asked so far gets answered in time. ♥ And I forgot to mention it in my other two responses to you, but I'm very sorry it's taken me so long to get back to you on these. It's the first week of the winter holiday for me, and I've been exceptionally lazy!
Thank you so, so much for doing this for me -- three reviews in a week is more than I can ever hope to ask of anyone. :) Seriously, I can't tell you enough!! Report Review
Oh Lord, drama is about the descend on Beth's world.
WHAT DID YOU DO SIRIUS? WHAT DID YOU DO?!
Now I get why he has done it. He doesn't trust Snape one iota, he's worried for Beth and he knows how much trouble she could get in for with holding information. He's just trying to be a good friend.
SHE IS GOING TO BE SO MAD!
Why must you always make Sirius do things that are going to make Beth mad at him for? He just wants to do the right thing and it always ends up back firing for him in some shape or form.
AND WHAT WERE MCGONAGALL'S SUSPICIONS?! You see that woman is /very/ intuitive so I think it's perfect characterisation on your part for having her suspect something.
WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN?
I have so many questions!!
Where's Peter, what is he doing? What's Snape doing, is he holding up after sharing his secret? What is Dumbledore going to do? What is Beth going to say to Sirius?
AND NOW I JUST REALISED THAT SIRIUS GOES TO ASKABAN IN CANON AND THAT, THAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN!
This story Jane, I just can't with all the feels!Author's Response: Ah, Callie -- if there is one thing you should know by now, it's that this plot is filled to the brim with drama. ;) It's borderline soap-opera at some points, I daresay, although that might be pushing it a bit far. But you're very right about Sirius's motives: He hates Snape, and is about as far from trusting him as he can get. And knowing how Beth feels about him, he thinks he's doing good by keeping him from hurting her, when in reality he is doing the exact opposite.
I don't always mean to have Beth mad at Sirius! Though I suppose it does happen a lot, now you mention it. I never planned it that way, if it's any consolation! I know you've already read the next chapter, too, so you've probably figured out what McGonagall suspected, at this point. All your questions are going to be answered in time -- I promise!
We're going to pretend Sirius never goes to Azkaban, obviously. ♥ Feels abound! Thank you so much for taking the time to review these two chapters for me -- it seriously means so much!! Report Review
What?!? No Sneth for "several weeks"?!? When I saw about the queue closure, I thought it couldn't mean this story...surely you were a trusted author! Sob! I'd better be busy over the next "several weeks" (sob!) because then I won't miss Sneth so much.
Anyway... despite my extreme sorrow, I will try to leave a review...
Really enjoyed the beginning of the chapter...the Marauders all happy together made me smile. Even knowing what is coming for all of them ... And I continue to scrutinize all mentions of Peter to see if his betrayal is leaking through.
Please tell me Sev is not going to be so stupid as to break up with Beth for her safety!! Please don't let her allow him to do that.
And in answer to your question in your reply to my last review, I actually think it is pretty cool that they haven't even really kissed yet. I think the easier thing to do would be to make their relationship more conventional, but what you've written makes more sense in their anything but conventional circumstances, if that makes any sense...
Anyway, hope you have a good holiday and will look forward to more Sneth in the New Year!Author's Response: I know! It's been eight months (as I just calculated) since I've gone so long without posting Sneth, and that was the break between when ITB finished and I started posting ITR. I am a trusted author, in fact, but this year the queue is closed for us, too. It's going to feel so weird -- it's been even LONGER since I've not posted anything, period!
I love writing the Marauders all happy together! ♥ Sarah mentioned it being more like the story in ITB, and looking back, it's weird to think how innocent that novel seemed, in comparison to this one. You know?
I cannot tell you what's in store for Severus and Beth. :3 There's a bit of plot twist and shout, as it were, and I'd hate to spoil it for you early! I'm honestly really glad that you like that they haven't kissed, though. It would have been easier to make them all romantic... but it would not have been in character for Snape at all, and even Beth's character (though my own) wouldn't have stood up to that very well. I think it makes much more sense to have them taking things glacially slow, and it's awesome to see you agree!
Have a good holiday and a happy New Year, Ardeith! ♥ Your reviews are invaluable to me, and I'm honored to have received them so steadily, and for so long. I'll see you back for chapter thirty-one in a couple of weeks! Report Review
Technically I should be reading Break Out first, since I try to read in the order of what you posted first, but Sneth was calling to me today. I just really need my Sneth fix.
ONLY FOUR MORE CHAPTERS, AGHHH. I am already beginning to plan how I can talk you into posting Breaking Even earlier than you intend to.
Sirius walked past her with such deliberate steps as to make it painfully obvious he had seen her.
If I didn't know any better, I would swear I'd been transported back to the In The Black days. The beginning half of this chapter was exactly what I needed, especially since we're getting so close to the end and I know you're about to stab me in the soul with something jagged. It was so happy and so fluffy, the five of them all together playing Exploding Snap (or rather four of them, while the I-am-too-superior-for-this Remus snogs his book), with Sirius most likely cheating and Peter forever not as good at it as his mates, and James knowing the gender but not telling, and Sirius being the life of the party, and Beth wanting to suck up to Dumbledore by giving him information about their Animagus-ness.
Oh, James. How I would like to thunk him in the back of the head. I know people like him - "We know the gender, but we're not telling!" and "Oh, we know the name, but we're not telling!", and they absolutely tick me off. FINE THEN. IF YOU'RE NOT GOING TO TELL ME THEN DON'T EXPECT ME TO BUY THE KID ANYTHING. Although I forget that in Britain baby showers are only just now becoming a thing, and they're still not that popular. Hmm. Beth should just sneak into the nursery and see what color clothes Lily's bought already. I'm nosy like that. Although I can't really talk because I had my brother convinced for seven months that I was going to be having a boy, by strategically placing a small pair of blue socks on a table where he would see them.
That's what you get, Sirius. YOU SHOULD FEEL ALL THAT GUILT AND MORE. I wonder if they really will tell Dumbledore about them being Animagi. I almost hope they don't, just because Dumbledore himself has so many secrets and yet he expects everyone around him to be honest. In this respect, he reminds me of Voldemort. He wants everyone's unconditional cooperation and trust, but trusts very little himself. I mean, there's no way he told James the real reason why he was interested in his Invisibility Cloak. Bagh. Dumbledore.
The second half of the chapter, of course, was a complete downer. Which I suspected you were going to do. As soon as I saw the little *, I knew it was all over. And yep, it was Severus standing there thinking things I do not want him to think, and he wouldn't listen to my entreaties to not do what I know he's thinking of doing. Your plots. They killeth me. You are so mean to your audience, giving us warm happy fluff with chivalry being dead and coffee and James and his weird sonogram, and then shoving us outside in the gas lamps with Severus and his headache and broodiness, making me feel miserable because he's GOING TO DO SOMETHING STUPID.
Okay, okay, it's not stupid. He's being selfless and lovely and heroic for once, and I really resent him for it. I don't care if they're in danger. I WANT THEM TO BE TOGETHER. DANGEROUS LOVE. Which is selfish of me and very unselfish of him. I'm so used to him being selfish in general that it's really, really inconvenient that he's going to put someone else first right when I most want him to indulge in selfishness. AND OMG IT'S SNOWING. YAYYY. But anyway, yes. Severus. Beth. Sirius. I just. Why can't James and Lily make Horcruxes so that they won't really die, and maybe Severus can just go kill Voldemort... I am grasping at straws. I will shut up now. JUST DON'T KILL ANYONE I LIKE, OKAY. PROMISE, OKAY. OKAY. YOU JUST PROMISED AND IT'S IN WRITING.
I can't believe it will be nearly January when I get to read this again. :(
You must provide me with lots of snippets to tie me over in the meantime. ♥Author's Response: I will never fault you for reading Sneth. :3 I know what an endearing part of your life Severus and Beth have become, of course. FOUR MORE CHAPTERS. When did I write so much? Why am I so near the end? I don't like it. Make it stop.
The beginning of this chapter was such a nostalgic kick, and I think I largely wrote it because I missed "In The Black" and how innocent it seems, in retrospect. That's something I never expected, the dramatic change in tone between that book and this one. "In The Red" actually turned out quite a bit darker than I meant for it to, although it might have to do with the fact that for some reason my brain kept making me write chapters set at night. Or maybe I've switched the cause and effect up there -- who knows? I know how much you love Marauder banter, so that's just a bit of something I try and include for you, too. ♥ I've said it before, but I'll say it again -- basically, you wrote this story! Lulz forever at your reaction to James and Lily keeping the baby's gender a secret. :D I think he enjoys having something to hold over their heads, tbh.
SIRIUS SHOULD FEEL /ALL/ THE GUILT. There are so many instances in this plot when I'd just like to take him by the shoulders and give him a good shake. (I'm writing a bit of that sort of Sirius in the third book right now, actually.) I actually really like that comparison you made between Dumbledore and Voldemort, though. I can't ever back Dumbledore 100%, and I think I like him less than a lot of people out there. I just... he deceived so many people, for years and years. He lied to Harry, then gave him the silent treatment for a year (are we five years old, Dumbles?), and /still/ didn't trust him enough to explain about the Horcruxes in more detail, leaving Harry to basically stumble around blindly for the entirety of what would have been his seventh year at school. There are a lot of redeeming qualities about the man... but there are a lot I can't get behind, too.
The second half of this chapter is a marked difference from the first, this is true. :( Though I don't think anybody expects me NOT to write brooding Sev at this point, honestly, because he is a staple of the story now, brooding and thinking and brooding some more. Poor guy, though -- he's being all selfless and here you are, shooting daggers at him and screaming at him through the screen. ♥ You've got him very confused, I hope you know. He told me so in one of our frequent chats.
I can't remember the last time I went so long without posting Sneth. I suppose it was when I finished ITB, and took a break before posting ITR... but that was eight months ago. Holy. I suppose I could be enticed for snippets, though, if you asked nicely...
♥ Thank you so much for such support. I am such a broken record. I CANNOT TELL YOU ENOUGH. Report Review
She had been asked to be a joint Secret-Keeper for James and Lily, along with Sirius.
- WHAT IS THIS DEVELOPMENT. I am now putting it under a microscope. Does this...well this means that they won't know who the traitor was - Beth or Sirius. DOES BETH GO TO AZKABAN INSTEAD. Or maybe... Hmm... Maybe... I DON'T KNOW. BUT I WILL CONTINUE TO SQUINT AT THIS UNDER MY MICROSCOPE.
Your presence is urgently requested at headquarters tonight, at eight o' clock. Please do not delay.
- Just reading that makes me anxious. I feel like the kid in class whose name is called over the intercom to go to the principal's office, and all the other kids are staring at me and saying "Ooohhhooohhh, what did you dooo. You're in troouubbblle."
Sirius's cold is the least of his worries. Beth is going to take his Pepperup Potion and stuff it up his nose. Or Transfigure him into a kite and let the wind beat him up for a little bit. I fear for his safety.
"If you knew so much, your aim was - what, to get us to deny it? I'm not denying anything."
- AND THIS IS THE MOMENT WHEN I DECIDE I AM SHOVING BETH OUT OF THE PICTURE AND RUNNING AWAY WITH HIM FOREVER. Oh my goodness, I love that! Indignant and stubborn, just standing there looking Dumbledore right in the eye all defiant-like, being all, "This is my woman. Suck it, yo."
He really kept his cool in there, despite the fact that Dumbledore is literally his master's biggest enemy, his biggest threat, and loyalty would probably dictate that if he got such an opportunity, he blast Dumbledore into teeny pieces. But then the part where Beth could feel his heartbeat in his hand, racing just as fast as hers, reminded me of just how human he is and everything that's at stake for him right there in that room. There is no way he is going to go home that night and not fear for his life and Beth's life and basically ever sleep soundly again.
I am really, really worried now, with those details at the end. She told him it was worth it, but he didn't seem so convinced that it's worth the risk of putting her in danger. He doesn't even so much care about himself as he does about her, which makes me love him all the more, but I think things are already transpiring inside his head. Things that will not be good for Beth. I am getting the feeling that he is about to go do something very stupid.
I'm worried about how Dumbledore's going to treat Beth now, too. Will he trust her? Will he still assign her missions? Is Beth going to figure out that Sirius was the one who exposed them? Is Beth going to be allowed to sit in on Order meetings and is anyone else going to find out? Does Dumbledore know that Severus told Voldemort about the prophecy? Or does he just suspect because he knew some stranger was listening in on his conversation with Trelawney? Maybe he'll use Beth's association with Severus to his advantage, and try to turn him into a spy now? MUST KNOW EVERYTHING NOW.
I am so scared to read the rest of this novel. I've been sitting here frozen ever since Dumbledore and his cold, flat eyes came into the equation, civil and severe and making harsh comments about Severus's mark and, sdkfjsdfj. I DON'T KNOW HOW MUCH MORE I CAN HANDLE. I want Severus to realize that this is worth it, especially when it comes to him of all people, who has known so little love in his life. But since I know things about future plotty bits, you've got my nerves tangled up in a knot right now. Sirius already told him that if he hurts her in any way, he'll destroy him. So if Severus goes and tries to break things off with her, there is going to be chaos everywhere.
Every single week you make me have a nervous breakdown.
-lies unconscious on the floor, babbling nonsensically-Author's Response: I am very pleased with your squinting in the first paragraph, mostly because -- well, you've hit upon something else no one else seems to have, as of now. ;) The end of Breaking Even goes through November 1981, so I'll leave it up to you all to wonder what sorts of accusations are going to be slung around! That letter would intimidate me too, though, no joke. (I feel, though, like having Pepperup Potion shoved up your nose would be massively painful. Maybe it's just me.)
LULZ, YOU RUNNING AWAY WITH SNAPE. ♥ I'm going to say something honestly: I wrote Cedric for people to project romantic fantasies on him, basically, but I never imagined that the same sort of thing would happen with Snape in anyone's case. :D And that makes me positively delighted, if I may be frank! It kind of gives me hope that I know how to write a proper romance still, one that isn't fraught with awkward looks and pauses and things people refuse to say.
But you're right; he's really not convinced it's worth it. He wants to keep Beth, but he wants to keep Beth SAFE even more, and that's the eternal struggle for Severus at the moment (which, of course, we see at the end of the next chapter too, because apparently I feel the need to drill it into people's heads). There's so much fear and uncertainty and Severus, who's never been loved like this before, doesn't know if it's something that can last amidst the world they're in. Which is where stupid things come into play: He doesn't get what's going on. :(
My lips are sealed on mission work. That comes into play in book 3! (I always forget that where I'm at in writing is father along than where people are reading. Oops.) All your questions, I think, are going to be answered in the first few chapters of Breaking Even -- except for your one about Severus and Dumbles, which will be answered after the queue closure. :3 YOU'LL KNOW SOON ENOUGH, I PROMISE.
I'm scared to post the rest of this novel, I think. I hate change, I hate endings -- and the end of Sneth, of EVERYTHING, just seems so close now. It was one thing when I had the idea for a trilogy and was starting out and everything, but I'm already almost a third of the way done with the last book. Woah. That just hit me. I am 7/9 of the way through with THE ENTIRE PLOT.
-babbles nonsensically alongside you-
Thank you for sticking with me the entire way. You have been here from the very beginning, before I set fingers to keyboard to write this. That means so, so much more than I can ever put into words. :)
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Oh my God.
I'm so excited and scared at the same time for Beth and Sev.
A brilliant chapter as always.
I can't wait to see what happens next.
Magic xAuthor's Response: Ahh, it's so great to see you back here again! :D Between you and me, you're quite right to be scared for them... although it might be for different reasons than you think. You know, I'm quite curious to see exactly what people think the resolution of this story's going to be, seeing as from this point where you've reviewed only five chapters are left...
Thank you so much for popping back in again, though! It really is so encouraging to see you're still reading, more than I can properly put into words. Thank you so, so much, and I'm very much looking forward to hearing how you react to what I've got in store! ;) Report Review
So this week I'm the first to review! I was so proud of Sneth in this chapter! They've come so far in their relationship. I loved them standing up to Dumbledore and trying to keep him from blaming the other and holding hands!
But okay...what is going on with Dumbledore? We know he's going to figure out how to use this relationship, right? Because we know he's not above using people. But he better not hurt Sev or Beth!
And now I know why I love Beth and think she is so real.because this:
"it was true that she worried things to death, but the sole good quality of that trait was that, more often than not, her fretting never came to fruition."
...is totally me! And the sole good thing about when the fretting comes to fruition is that you've mentally practiced dealing with it. I know...small consolation for Beth and for me. :-)
And right now Beth and Sirius are the Secret Keepers.when will the switch to Peter happen? I hope Dumbledore doesn't switch Beth out because of Sneth? She would never forgive herself! Don't do that to her!!Author's Response: You are the first to review this week! I can't even tell you how excited I was to post this chapter, mostly just for Severus and Beth standing up to Dumbledore -- that's basically the first concrete thing about their relationship ever. Is it bad that they haven't even had their first kiss yet? I sorely hope not...
And as far as Dumbledore is concerned: He can be VERY scary sometimes! There are a couple of canon instances when I was pretty scared of him, not going to lie.
I think a lot of Beth's qualities (namely the excessive worrying) are very me, and maybe that's why they come across as real to you -- because they are real traits, at least in me! But whatever it is, I'm glad to have gotten that realism across. :3
Ah, everything about the Secret Keeper role will be played out in due time. I've got things in store, never fear! ♥ I literally cannot wait for you to read the rest of this book! Thank you so much for your continually lovely reviews, Ardeith!! Report Review
I've spent the last week reading In the Black and then getting caught up on this as well, and I feel bad about not leaving reviews on each chapter but I've just been in such a rush to keep reading that I didn't bother to take the time. So sorry about that, but I'll try to make up for it by at least leaving a decent review on this chapter. Also, at this point I feel as though I've literally read everything you've got on here and I've seriously adored everything you've posted! Sorry if it's a bit creepy that I've left so many reviews!
Anyways, throughout this whole story you've managed to integrate Beth in a way that seems to natural and not forced at all. So many stories have a sort of 'fifth Marauder' and it never feels right, but somehow you've managed to make it seem so natural that Beth was here for everything. She's a really neat character, really like the way that she's grown throughout everything.
I'm a big fan of her relationship with James, and Sirius especially towards the beginning of this book. Now, I'm not so happy with Sirius with what he's done, but at least it can be said that he really does think that he's doing the best thing for her. The two of them treat Beth like their sister (well, for the most part) and I've really enjoyed the dynamics between all of them. Also, really loving James/Lily in this. They are so young to be having a baby, but you've really done a good job about making all of that seem natural, also it's been addressed with Beth's comments about how young Lily is, which makes it less weird in a sense. It's not like it's being ignored.
Of course I just adore the whole Beth/Sev thing that's been going on the whole time. I've literally been squealing every time that they're relationship furthers. I know that it's going to have to change now because of Sirius, but I just cannot stop myself from wanting to root them on anyways. They are just so adorable together, and I've never really said that Severus was cute with anyone before ever. So the fact that you've managed to create this relationship is amazing.
I'm really interested to see what's going to happen now that Dumbledore knows what's going on between Beth and Severus. He clearly isn't going to be happy about it, but it'll be interesting to see what he decides to do to handle it.
Really great story so far and I cannot wait to see what comes next!Author's Response: You are AMAZING. How am I supposed to even begin to thank you for everything you've done for me in these past two weeks?! Seriously -- I am just absolutely blown away by all the reviews you've left me on my stories. I cannot tell you in any amount of words how much that means to me. You are just FANTASTIC!
And please, please don't feel the need to apologize for not leaving reviews on ITB and the rest of ITR! I honestly do not care /at all/, and the fact that you've left me a review here to tell me that you've been reading at all means the world to me. This trilogy has been a project of mine for a year and a half, since April 2011, and just even being aware that someone's reading it and enjoying it is one of the absolute best feelings in the world. You've just made me so, so happy!
I'm pleased beyond telling that you like Beth so much, and that she's integrated naturally into the story for you. And you're right -- to James and Sirius, she's a little sister (except, of course, when Sirius was briefly deluded otherwise). I know I have a bias, but I'm massively attached to the Beth/Severus pairing. ♥
You're definitely going to see what's going on with Dumbledore now! I'm actually in the process of posting chapter 29 when I found all the reviews you left on Break Out, as well as this one -- how do you like that? So you won't have to wait long! ;)
But really. I just... you made my entire month, just with this review, and that doesn't count all the others you've been generous enough to leave! I am so honored to have them. ♥ It was fantastic hearing from you again, and again -- thank you so, so, so much for all you've done for me!! Report Review
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