Oh, Rose. Poor Rose. I could not stop giggling. That girl...if anything could go wrong, it would have. I love how anxious she was in the beginning of the chapter. You even had me feeling jittery. I think it's the pacing of the words and all that. You've got such a talent with sentence structure. That's some pick-up line, yeah? ;)
Also, I am declaring my love for your Scorpius. He's just...ngh. When he patted Rose's shoulder and tried to give her a pep talk, kind of, and she still felt the warmth of his hand on her! Girl, Julian Murdock is old news.
I loved Hugo's little bit in here too. He's just so..spazzy, I love it. And Al and Pippa trying not to laugh during Potions when the list winds up near Julian's shoe. Oh, god. I love that Julian can probably read the title of the list too, all thanks for Scorpius. I wonder if he'll even notice, what with her laying across the floor and all.
I can't stop laughing. I really hope Rose doesn't die of embarrassment. :PAuthor's Response: I am making it my mission to sit down and answer all your fab reviews on this story right now. HERE WE GO ~
Of course nothing can go right with Rose around. :D Ahaha, that's so awesome that I gave you the jitters! True story, I probably wrote that after drinking coffee. I always think it doesn't affect me, and then I either get hyper or jittery, and never know which one it'll be. Woeee.
SCORPIUS. I have forever dibs on him, and there is a long waiting list. :3 Julian who? Although yes, I'm rather a fan of Hugo too, in the way that I fangirl over Lily's Hugo (though they are quite different) -- he just needs lots and lots of hugs, in a little-brother sort of fashion.
I make no sense sometimes. It happens. ♥ Gah, I am so, so happy you came by and reviewed all of this for me! I don't know what came over you, but I shan't question it. :) Thank you so much!! Report Review
Oh, hey. Look at me here reading your scorose.
This... I... You... OMG, Rachel, you're hilarious. This was brilliantly funny and it was exactly the sort of humour I really appreciate -- not like the glaringly obvious trying to be funny sort of funny, but the subtle, cynical sort of humour of your brooding Rose. I loved her. She was brilliant. She thinks so highly of herself... the bit about her pride in the comment about Scorpius from the morning announcement. Pimple on a giant's backside. Oh, Rose, you clever girl you.
And Hugo was /such/ the little brother. Poor bloke. I loved this opening chapter and and cant wait to see what you do with this gem. Expect more reviews in the near future, my darling.
Love youu like a parrot love's a pirates shoulder.Author's Response: Oh, hey. Look at me here answering your review.
Gah, I am SO glad you thought this was funny! :D I already told you this, I suppose, but I'm really nervous when someone comes and reads this after reading some of my other stuff, or vice versa. Because it's /nothing/ like what I'm normally used to writing, and I still have no idea if that's good or bad! It was a fun venture and who knows -- I might try it again soon. But right now some part of me screams DO NOT TAKE THIS TOO SERIOUSLY, KEEP MOVING, NOTHING TO SEE HERE, PLEASE AND THANK YOU.
Rose's dry humor -- well, I've got a very, very, /very/ dry sense of humor, so three guesses where that came from. :D 99% of the things that come out of my mouth are sarcasm. Trufax. Also, Scorpius is da best. ♥ I have permanent attachment to him.
YOU. YOU ARE SO FABULOUS. THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS REVIEW. ♥ And for the glorious simile which I will now try and return in full:
Love you like Scorpius loves lavender scarves.
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Everything about this chapter is pure win. I love Pippa lecturing Rose with a big wad of gum in her mouth. And the fact that Rose likes to carry about a newspaper to look smart and she likes the noise of crinkling paper!
This story is just so fantastically written - the humor isn't overbearing, at all. It's just lines here and there that make you snort and pause to giggle. It's not an all-out laughter, which is fine in some instances, but it gets kind of old when an entire story is just based on ridiculous things, you know? This has substance and a plot and delicious Scorpius.
I mean, really, Rose. Julian vs. Scorpius? I'm already drooling over your Scoripus, Janechel. You and Gina write the best Scorpius - love it.
The entire library scene was just awesome. I love how Scorpius was all serious about helping Rose snag Julian that he made a list of things he liked to help them find common interests to bond over, and then laughing at her frustration. He's just..gah, so dreamyyy.
I have to remind myself to finish this story soon. I'm sure I will love it and I will do a fist pump when Rose finally gets her head out of the clouds dreaming of Julian and realizing that Scorpius is MADE FOR HER. I'm waiting for it.Author's Response: You. You are just awesome. ♥ I'm so happy you returned back to read more of this! And I'm really glad that the humor doesn't seem overbearing to you -- as you know, it's the first I wrote, and, well. Sometimes I'm not the best with humor. :D I did try to maintain a plot, too, so really you're just alleviating all my fears!
Oh my gosh, Scorpius. ♥ He is hands-down my favorite character in this story, although Rose is a peach. I'd like my very own Scorpius, please! (Can I say those sorts of things about my own story? Eh, too late. Already typed them. :3)
Don't even worry about finishing this up, Missy. Just get to it when you can, if you want -- and if you're thinking, "Who told this girl she could write a romcom? Get me OUT!" I will completely understand that too. :D Thank you so, so much for reviewing this for me, though! ♥ Totally made my day! Report Review
This story was hilarious! Rose's character was just perfect and everything fit together wonderfully!
Hope you write more Scorose in the future :) hahaAuthor's Response: Oh, thanks so much for taking the time to stop off and leave me a review on this! :) I'm really glad you did -- it always makes my day when someone goes the extra mile, you know?
Really glad to hear you liked the story, too. :D It's a bit silly, but it was lots of fun to write, and I'm glad everything fit together in your eyes! Quite a few people have asked for a sequel, and you know, I might just have to deliver someday. ;)
Thanks again for doing this for me -- can't tell you what it means! ♥ Report Review
Such a completely awesome story! :DAuthor's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review it! I'm happy you liked it -- it was a lot of fun to write, and I actually miss it quite a bit. ;)
Lovely to see your name back here, and even lovelier to see you'd read this, too! Thanks again for doing this for me! ♥ Report Review
This story was fantastic--you weren't planning on writing a sequel, were you? ;)Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I'm really so glad you enjoyed it -- and thank you for telling the time to let me know, because that means a lot!
You know, I kind of miss writing about these characters. Writing about them was fun, and I totally wouldn't be adverse to doing a sequel, even if it was just a one-shot or something. We'll have to see, won't we? :D Thanks again for being an awesome reviewer! Report Review
This is definitely my favourite chapter...so far :P Rose & Scorpius are adorable!Author's Response: Ah, so far! :D It's always a good time when Scorpius decides to bust out the feelings, isn't it? I'm very glad you're enjoying the story so much!
Thanks -- again! -- for taking the time to leave me this review. It really does mean a lot to me that you do, and I'm always just really happy that someone's enjoyed something I've written! ♥ Report Review
Oh, this chapter was wonderful! I laughed so much :PAuthor's Response: I'm glad to hear it! Sometimes I've got no idea if the humor I'm trying to write will actually come through or not, so it's always really, really awesome for me to hear that I made someone laugh with my writing. :)
Thanks for another review, and I'm really glad you seem to be enjoying the story thus far! :3 I appreciate your taking the time to leave it! Report Review
I can't wait to read what Scorpius has planned :)Author's Response: Ah, yes, Scorpius and his plans. :D Then again, he could be just winging it as he goes, couldn't he?
Thank you for taking the time to leave me a review! It's very much appreciated, and I hope to see your name back here soon. It means a lot to me! ♥ Report Review
This was an amazing story and I love the way you wrote it.Author's Response: Hi -- thanks so much for taking the time to review this story for me! :) I'm very glad you liked it, and the way I wrote it. It was a bit out of my comfort zone, but I'm very glad I did!
And, as an aside, I'm enjoying your penname. :3 Great to hear from you, thank you, and I hope to see you back soon! ♥ Report Review
I'm back! Armed with tea and biscuits!
That darn Hugo! By the way! That was really good foreshadowing, back in like what, chapter 4 or 5. I am almost wanted to say I knew it, but then again, I'm not that skilled.
Since I can't review the next chapter again. I am going to take a moment and fangirl.
AH! SO CUTE! I LOVE ROSE AND SCORPIUS SO MUCH, ESPECIALLY THAT LAST LINE. BEAUTIFUL.
The end. :)
Thanks for being such a great writer, and for being so kind :)
GrangerDanger76Author's Response: Mmm, biscuits. :D Sounds good right about now! Currently still sipping my coffee, no big deal... It's getting cool now. :P
Ooh, thank you! True story -- I didn't come up with Hugo's involvement in the story probably until I was actually writing the 4th or 5th chapter. This story's changed plot lines several times, but I'm really pleased with the end result.
I LOVE the Rose/Scorpius ship -- it's definitely my favorite, as far as next generation goes. :D Thank you for being such an awesome reviewer, and being kind in your own right. It really means so, so much to me that you took the time to leave me 10 reviews! You're incredible! ♥
See you around. :)
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Are you British? Because your really good at this whole british lingo stuff! :)
And so it begins. Poor Scorpius, Rose always seems to get him good. This was a great chapter... :)
Totally worth it. :)Author's Response: I'm actually not British! But I've been writing fan fiction for a long time -- ten years now -- both offline and here. (TenthWeasley is actually my third HPFF account, although it's the only one I've stuck with.) But anyway, I've had a lot of practice with Britishisms and knowing the words they use in place of the American ones I've gotten used to. :P Pavement/sidewalk is still one I struggle with!
Ah, I see what you did there. ;) Thanks so much (once again) for these reviews -- this is turning out to be a great morning, and it's all thanks to you! I can't express my appreciation enough! ♥ Report Review
Alright I'm back! Had to put the kettle on real quick, but I'm back!
POOR ROSE! Scorpius is going down! haha, I just love getting into this.
You are really talented, like honestly, just keep doing what your doing. I love your characters and really wish I could just insert myself into the Weasley family.
Anyways, I'm currious to see where it turns out... (just kidding i've already read it, I'm just trying to channel how I felt after I read because I neglected to leave reviews... *goes and hides in corner*)Author's Response: Kettles are necessary for fic reading, this is true. As I've currently got a coffee mug glued to me, I can sympathize!
Oh, Scorpius. Oh, Rose, actually -- that's what I probably should be saying. She's wonderfully impulsive. :3
Oh my gosh, you are making my WEEK. My MONTH. How am I supposed to thank you for such amazing reviews? I am sending lots of virtual hugs your way, believe you me. And please don't feel bad about not reviewing! It honestly does not bother me. :D The fact that you left a review on the last chapter is awesome enough, and if you'd just read it at all, I'd be over the moon!
Thank you so much! ♥ Seriously, these reviews are so amazing! Report Review
“And good afternoon to you, Kneesley,” he said with a melodramatic sort of bow as I came alongside him. “How is my favorite ginger?”
“I am not defined by my hair color,” I responded, with as much pomp and arrogance as I could muster, giving said hair a little toss.”
Can we just take a moment of silence for this quote.
That’s it. I don’t think I can really talk about anything else besides how funny you are! I really wish I knew you in real life, because you are hilarious! You must be like, super popular :)Author's Response: My sister's got red hair, and she was talking once about all the ginger jokes directed at her. :P So, really, she probably inspired that little snippet, although she'll never know it!
I honestly am blushing. This is what you have turned me into. ♥ I love making people laugh, though, and generally I like to think I'm pretty good at it. The better I know you, the easier it is to make you laugh -- I can put my sister (the one who's not a redhead!) in tears. :P I'm definitely not super popular, but I've got a good-sized group of friends, and I'm easy to get along with. So. :D
I don't even know what to say anymore. You are /fabulous/! Thank you so, so much for these reviews!! Report Review
I just adore the little nicknames her makes up, as opposed to the stereotypical “Rosie”. More realistic and just makes me laugh :)
Good chapter! The plot is starting to get intense! :)Author's Response: The nicknames are one of my all-time favorite parts of this story. :D And as such, I included a new one in nearly every chapter. It got to the point where I couldn't remember which ones I'd already used, and I'd have to do a search-and-find before coming up with a new one. Ah, writing!
Scorpius is just such a fun character to write. I actually miss it, just a little bit. :) May have to bring him in again someday! As always, thanks so much for your reviews. I'm so super excited you've enjoyed the story this much! ♥ Report Review
I quite like Pippa’s character. I’ve always had a certain disliking towards O/C’s just sort of thrown into the mix. However, Pippa is super cute. I really like her (and her obnoxious gum popping)
Plus, OH SCORPIUS AND ROSE! :) haha,
I’m such a dork. Might have to keep reviewing!Author's Response: Pippa sort of came from nowhere, and she more than anyone else developed as the story went along -- but I'm glad you like her. I love the name 'Pippa' and that's really the only reason she appeared initially in the story at all. :P
You're not a dork! You're a very fantastic reviewer who is making sitting at a computer for six hours that much more bearable. :D I really do appreciate all your comments, more than I can say! Report Review
“Counting myself, I knew exactly how many people were willing to miss the first five minutes of breakfast to haul themselves to McGonagall’s office and speak into a microphone.
That number is one.”
Pretty sure you are a goddess.
You should be really proud of your editing (or beta if you have one) because I can never find errors. The only thing I found is so minor I shouldn’t even bother pointing out but
“’Anyway, Breezeley,” he said, leaning one shoulder against the door, “I’ve got a proposition for you.” He waited for my reaction, but I didn’t deign to give him one; this situation smelled fishier by the second. Snake Boy cleared his throat a bit awkwardly and pushed on.
“Anyway. Look, next weekend’s the first big match – exactly a week from today, actually. You know that.’”
In the second paragraph the second anyway doesn’t really flow. I personally think it would sound better if the second anyway is removed.
Does that make any sense?
Probably not :)Author's Response: Oh, I love that line, and hardly anyone's pointed it out! :D I'm no goddess, but I do play one on television, so... *ducks rotten tomatoes* And that's what I mean about my humor sometimes falling short!
True story -- I rarely, rarely edit my work, and even more rarely do I get it beta'd. So that's a really high compliment to hear, actually -- thanks so much! And word repetitiveness is something I'm perhaps the worst at catching; I do most of the time, but, of course, that slips through. I've taken your suggestion and changed it!
These reviews. They are lovely. ♥ Thanks so much for coming back and doing this for me!! Report Review
“And this is why my grades are slipping'.
Pretty sure I laughed out loud at that, for a good five minutes, just saying.
You’re good at comedy. :)
Characterization is certainly one of your strong points. You have subtle direct AND indirect characterization such as Pippa and Albus.
But you have BEAUTIFUL indirect characterization for Rose and Scorpius. These characters really make the story, and kind of make me want to be their best friend… not even kidding.
You rock :)Author's Response: I'm so pleased you're laughing at the funny bits -- which sounds weird, but sometimes I never know if what I find funny, other people will, too. I look back at the comedic things I tried to write a few years ago and cringe!
I love characterization -- it's probably my favorite bit about writing. The original fiction novel I just finished is basically more characterization than anything else. :D I'm so glad you like it, and that you enjoyed the rest of the story, too! Thank you very much for leaving me all these reviews! Report Review
Okay so first off, your post on my forums page was so incredibly sweet, that I just had to go back and review all the other chapters too!
So I had heard quite a bit about this story, through the forums and what not, but when I actually went to check it out, I was a bit turned off by the whole wanting to date some Julian guy thing. But I sat down and read it anyways, because you’re a pretty big deal over at HPFF Forums… not going to lie…
Anyways! I quite liked Rose’s distinct right off the bat personality. However, in this chapter I just really liked the uniqueness. I hadn’t EVER read of a quidditch commenter since the original series. I’ve NEVER read about it in fanfiction, so that’s really what drove me to start this story :)
GOOD chapter :)Author's Response: Oh, you totally didn't have to do this! Wow, my morning is made. :) I'm sitting here doing responses when I probably should be a bit more productive, but it's reviews like this that makes me understand WHY it's so important to respond. If people like you are going to take the time to write me a review, then I should take the time to thank you for it. It's only just.
I'm quite excited to hear that you'd heard about this story somewhere else -- I wasn't under the impression a lot of people talked about it! :P I'm a big deal?! I just... That makes me smile. SO much. ♥ I don't consider myself well-known over there at all, but I guess my name pops up now and again!
I definitely understand the whole wary-of-Julian bit, because really, I would have been too. I'm glad you read on -- this story is blatantly Scorose, and it was never intended differently. :D I'm happy it's unique, too, because I never write next gen, and so really had no idea what I was getting into. For all I knew, there were dozens of such stories littered about!
Thank you so much for coming back and reviewing these. That really is so awesome, and it means a lot to me that you did! ♥ Report Review
SO CUTE! Wonderful story with believable and charming characters, BRAVO :)Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much for leaving me a review -- I totally didn't expect this, and it really made my night! :D
The characters are, I think, my favorite bit of this story. Well, they really drive the story, don't they? But anyway. I really do appreciate your taking the time to give me your opinion! Hope you drop back by soon! ♥ Report Review
lovely, lovely , lovely. you really are magical. like honestly. you have turned my day upside down, well right side up., it was wonderfulAuthor's Response: Oh, that is such a high compliment -- wow, I've got the biggest grin on my face right now! I really am glad I was able to make you happy. This is a silly little story, and written as such, so I love that you're getting enjoyment out of it!
Thank you so much for leaving me such sweet reviews! ♥ I hope to see you back soon! Report Review
another wonderful chapter, you really are fantastic at this. i am very much enjoying your story and i can not wait for moreAuthor's Response: I'm so happy you're enjoying the story. It was a lot of fun to write, and I hoped while writing it that it would be a fun read, too. You're boosting my confidence!
Again, thank you for taking the time to review! It really does mean a lot to me that you did! ♥ Report Review
oh my goodness i adored it. ive had a pretty crappy day (teenage girls can be such horrible people) but i have to say this made everything pretty much better. i loved it :)Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much for leaving me this! I'm so pleased I was able to make a bad day better -- I mean that. ;) Teenagers are horrible, but hey, that's what fan fiction's for!
Thanks so much for taking the time to review this. I hope you continue on with the story! Report Review
Thats so cute Author's Response: Thanks so much for taking the time to tell me what you thought! I'm happy you enjoyed it. :) Hope to see you around! Report Review
now that's a uber cool story!!Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to leave me a review -- I'm glad you enjoyed the story! :) Hope to see your name back by here someday! Report Review
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