I love your stories personally and this has to be one of my favorites. It's unlike anything else I have read especially ScoRose because they tend to be over cliched for my taste. I did also read your other ScoRose, which I must say I loved as well even though it ended out way differently then I had imagined! I'm looking forward to the next update eagerly, you are definitely one of the best writers on this website :)
Also I just wanted to let you know that there seems to be another story on this website that I remember reading that seemed oddly familiar to your other ScoRose, Winner Takes All. I think it was called White Flag or something or another, however, the writer uses the character Vinny and also the beginning of her story seems insanely similar to yours. The bit about the roses. I just wanted to let you know!
-S&SAuthor's Response: *jaw drops*
Wow! Thank you! I'm really, really happy to hear that you like my stories and that this one is among your favourites. One of the best? I don't know what to say to such a compliment - it's brilliant and beautiful and I thank you for thinking so well of my work. ^_^
Rewriting the Scorose cliches is something I love to do, and it means a lot that you like how I'm doing it. The ship became cliched much too quickly, and I have way too much fun making fun of it. While this story is somewhat of a parody, I also want to use it to explore the ship in a serious way, to prove - to myself, at least - that it is a plausible ship.
Hmm... I've looked for that story and can't seem to find it - if you do look back on this response, let me know if you remember more about this story. It could be a coincidence (I hope!), but with the way things are these days... :/ Report Review
Here at last :D
I'm going to start off with this line: "but when the average level of intelligence in the room was painfully low, even the greatest society ladies will have difficulty inspiring rational speech." That was hilarious. The humor in this story is so subtle and dry, but you really do have some gems. This line, and the story of Dominique's husband being eaten by a kraken are prime examples of that. They make me laugh as much as I would in a purely humor story, but you integrate them so perfectly that they still fit the era and the mood. Going back to this line, I love that Rose may not be above the other ladies in status, but because she doesn't care as much about her appearance, she actually has an intelligent bone in her body xD
The end scene was beautifully tragic as well. It tied in perfectly with "Pride and Prejudice", and as it was one of my favorite scenes in that novel, I'm really glad you included it. I'm interested to see how they're going to fall for each other in the end, if this only has traces of Austen's novel from here on out.
Another lovely chapter. I can't get over how perfect the style of this is. You write in so many different styles, and you do them all perfectly. Can't wait to read on! :D
-NaidaAuthor's Response: And I'm here at last to respond. I'm very sorry to have taken so long - I've read your reviews a few times already and really appreciate that you took the time to read and review this story. It means a lot to hear from you! ^_^
Those bits of humour are so random, inspired from various things (BBC's Sherlock for the first and the Quirk Classics version of "Sense & Sensibility"), and I'm really glad that you like them. *blushes* I never think they'll be suitable, possibly taking the parody too far, so it's great to hear otherwise.
With Rose and her lack of focus on appearance, I'm entering that sticky area of brains vs. beauty. Rose does have both, but she doesn't care about being fashionable or improving her beauty. Perhaps what makes her more intelligent is that she is that she knows there are more important things to care about - she sees their attempts at fashion useless and the waste bothers her. I think I'll have to work that in more, actually. Thanks for mentioning it! :D
I don't know how to thank you enough for your compliments and enthusiasm, Naida! It's wonderful that you're enjoying the story so much and I hope that I can keep up the style, characters, and plot. ^_^ Report Review
So much love for this story! The dialogue is perfect and the plot line has just the right amount of Pride& Prejudice. And I love your Rose, and your Scorpius seems perfect in his attitude! Anywho, its great! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! It means a lot that you're enjoying this story and its style. It seemed like such a strange idea when I started, and I'm shocked (and gratified) to see how much love readers have for it! ^_^ Report Review
"The number of spells required for so drastic an alteration in appearance would be far more than this poor author has time to list."
That has to be one of my favorite lines in all of fanfiction. It's absolutely hilarious, witty, and just plain brilliant.
Now that I've gotten that out of the way, hello once more! I really liked Lily's point of view in this chapter. You were right in saying that it helped to develop her character. It added more to the shallow, snobbish girl we saw in the last chapter, and she almost sounded insecure in this. She still sounded rather shallow and snobbish, but you added a layer underneath that showed why. She definitely is the "classic girl" of the time period, as her only desire seems to be finding a husband. She's so concerned with social standards, in fact, that she acts as the perfect foil for Rose. The two of them contrast sharply with one another, and you've done a great job of making those characteristics stand out.
Oh, and I think Albus has just become my new favorite character. Ahh, he was so lovely and out of the norm that I couldn't help but love him. So I'm hoping to see more of him in the next chapters.
I'm really excited to see where Rose has run off to, as well as to see more of Scorpius!
-NaidaAuthor's Response: That line! I'm really glad that you liked it! :D
It's great that seeing things from Lily's perspective helped fill out her character. She is very insecure and feels the need to prove herself, though unlike Rose, she believes that she can only do so on society's terms rather than her own. She puts on a lot to make herself one of those society ladies, but it only shows how shallow they are because it's a costume that doesn't quite fit her.
lol, Albus. I thought I might have gone overboard with him and especially with his appearance, but it works for this story in its own way. XD He's definitely not like other versions of Albus that I've seen in fanfiction, and I'll be pleased to include more of him in future chapters - he's just so crazy and fun to write!
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Ah, Susan, I loved this chapter, especially the Austen scene at the end because it fit in so well with the indifference between the Malfoys and the Weasleys in the Wizarding World; it really shows the longstanding hatred and feud that the two families have between them, and I think you went about executing it quite well in really showing both Rowling's and Austen's worlds in crossing each path with the other.
There were a couple typos I picked up on while reading. The first was where Rose was dancing with Teddy and telling him of how Mr. Malfoy had interrupted her and Lily's dance practice; you wrote 'those' instead of 'that', unless you meant to pluralize 'moment' rather than keeping it singular like you did. I can't seem to find it, but a little ways down, you typed "As Mr. Lupin lead her into the dance..." where it would flow better with '...led her into the dance...". Aside from those two typing errors, I picked up on nothing else. I really did enjoy this chapter, it was filled with activity and intrigue, especially since Rose is making no move to start conversation with anyone she does not know.
I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter when you post it. I'm sure it'll be excellent. :) 10/10
Inter-house review-a-thonAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, Leslie! I'm really glad to hear that this chapter worked out. This story is at once a joy and a challenge to write, all of the detail it requires often overwhelming my imagination (too often I have to keep myself from describing the whole history of the Potterverse within this alternate universe - it's maddening!). ^_^
That scene from Austen suits this story perfectly for the reasons that you outlined. Unlike some other scenes in P&P, that particular one really emphasizes negative feeling, something that Rose and Scorpius share between them more so than Lizzie and Darcy - the relationships between their families are entirely different and very involved. It definitely changes the dynamic of that scene.
I've fixed those typos now. Thank you for pointing them out! I've been having a lot of trouble with "lead" vs. "led", so I'm glad to have feedback on which one is better to use. :D Report Review
If the first chapter was brilliant, this far exceeded it. I think my favorite part was Lily. She was so superficial, and somehow, it fit perfectly. I'd usually be thinking "how did she end up that way with the brilliant parents she had (though I can't really call Ginny brilliant xD)" but in the context of this story and the way you wrote her, it completely works. She contrasts Rose perfectly, and the two of them together were amazing.
And then Scorpius. This line made me laugh for about ten minutes straight :P "It sounded as though a herd of hippogriffs was pounding overhead." SO EPIC. How do you manage to do it? You've managed to entertain me with a novel set in this time period and written in an entirely authentic way. I don't think it's ever happened before. I /like/ novels from this time period, but I haven't laughed at any like I did with this one.
I'm very excited to see how this continues :D I'm such a fan of your writing style and I don't think there's a single other author who could pull this off the way you can.
-NaidaAuthor's Response: Hello, Naida! Thank you again for coming along to read and review this story! It's fantastic to hear from you! ^_^
Wow, I'm glad that this chapter improved upon the first. It's more fun to write Rose out of her element of the quiet countryside - in Lily's world, she's out of place, and it will force her to adapt and develop in interesting ways. ;) It's even better to hear that Lily's characterization works even with its oddity - I never think about that kind of thing beforehand, though I really should. :P She's a product of her society, though, and that's what I really wanted to show - thankfully it came through in the story. :D
Haha, Scorpius is king of snark, only to have met his match in Rose. Oooh! I can't thank you enough for that compliment! I love being able to make readers happy while still writing things in different, often weird ways. It's a wonderful thing to make readers see something in new and interesting ways. ^_^ But your compliments continue and I don't know what to say except for a big, glomping thank you! Report Review
I love this story! It's amazing, and has an Austen/Bronte feel to it! I know you're basing this on Pride and Prejudice, and Scorpius really would be a great Mr Darcy! And I must admit I like how you depicted Rose here, I like her much more than Elizabeth Bennett in fact!
Can't wait for the next chapter! :)Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you! It's fantastic to hear that you like the story this much, even more that Rose is turning out to be more likeable than Lizzie. :D
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I still love that there is the persistent joke of how ridiculously large the Weasley family is. the room contained a great number of family members, making it impossible that Lily should be left entirely unchaperoned
Hellooo~ Teddy -- erm, uh Mr Lupin. Victoire is such a Marie Antoinette in my head. Also, baww Dom and her eaten-by-a-kraken boy. She sounds like someone I'd cheer for. Awesome Unspeakable plucky lass of the regency.
Oh Rose. You are so elitist. I can feel your nose rise waaay up, all snooty.
And it rises even more in the dance. Hehehe, focus! Teddy and all his perfect perfect charmy-ness is dancing with you and all you can focus on is DARN THAT MALFOY BOY. Oh Scorose, no matter the era.
ďNot a bad sort. He is very clever, incidentally. I think you would like him, Rose, should you attempt to know him better. You are very much alike.Ē Heee. You two with your snooty ol' noses.
Haa, the ever classic Austen scene in the end. I think it's a very fitting scene to use. You say the rest of the story will only be a passing similarity, which I'm actually quite excite for :D because P&P gets adapted quite enough already, so sometimes the plot's a bit tired, as much as I love the characters. Can't wait to see what you've got in store ^__^Author's Response: The sad thing is that my family is larger, so I probably exaggerate out of experience than the reality of the Weasley multitude. XD When I wrote that line in the story I forgot that a lot of the family wasn't actually present - Rose's parents, Hugo, James, at the very least. Oh dear.
Haha, I can't help but write Teddy as hot. I think it's too deeply ingrained on my brain, stemming from an old love for Remus. ^_^ Dominique the plucky lass! OMG! Love that image. Now I imagine someone writing a series of stories about her adventures as the only female Unspeakable, leading experiments into the control of wild giant squids.
*reins self in*
YES that pesky Malfoy boy! It says a lot that she can be dancing with the gorgeous Teddy and the whole time be thinking about the not-so-gorgeous Scorpius. WHY ROSE WHY? But Teddy knows the score. I can imagine that between him and Victoire, they've got the whole thing already set, and are just sitting back to watch the sparks fly. XD
I'm glad that you liked that part at the end, though you're right that P&P has been done a million times (to death? don't want to admit that far :P), so I'm instead going to happily romp through the Regency period at will and see where the plot takes me. :D
Thank you again for the wonderful review! My reaction to seeing these reviews is always "eeek!" followed by lots of squees and giant grins - it means so much that you're enjoying the story! Report Review
omg there is something so hilarious about Albus being the pretty boy of the family. Albus Severus, the boy with the lush black locks. But paisley and polka dots and stripes why Albus, why. Do you not have eyes? If you're rich, the least you can do is not look like Willy Wonka.
lolol you are so awkward Albus. Ravishing! Now I am seriously imagining Gene Wilder in Albus' place for some reason.
Ooh love the historical snippet with Dumbledore. French revolution and all that. I can totally tell you're having fun with the regency ;D Carriages! I am strangely excited by the sight of carriages. They just seem fun. There are not enough of them at Hogwarts.
Oh Lily, you are overwhelmed. Hehehe, love this chapter of narration from her. She's like the meddling best friend of modern era fics, but it's just so much more fun in the context of this setting. I do want to see more Rose and her witticisms, so I shall tally ho to the next chapter!Author's Response: Albus is rarely the pretty one, now that I think about it. Though what author could resist dressing him up in paisley and polka dots! The image is horrifying, yet hilarious (if you're not blinded, that is). LOL, he is dressed like Willy Wonka! That must be where I got the idea from! Wonka's pretty rich too, but riches certainly can't account for taste. :P
Albus is such a sassy fashionista, but now, I will always hear Gene Wilder's voice whenever he speaks. XD
It's so awesome that you're enjoying this story, especially all of the historical details. I'm never sure how many readers will pick up on them, though it's always fun for me to include them - it's probably the most inspiring aspect of this story for me, being able to fit the Potterverse into Muggle history. :D
I'm glad that making this chapter from Lily's perspective worked out. She's going to be an interesting character to write, being both the innocent and the matchmaking friend. You know what? She's like Emma! This can be a crazy Austen crossover! That'd be even more fun! *dances*
Thank you again for reading and reviewing this story, Gina! I can't express how much I appreciate hearing from you! ^_^ Report Review
Dominique's husband was eaten by the kraken. The kraken!! That is brilliant and I love how you threw that in there so casually. Poor Dominique.
I want to point out a particular bit that I really liked:
Dressed in robes of subtly-patterned grey, he was a vision of London's deepest fog, his hair a flash of pale gold like the light of a hinkypunk leading unfortunate travellers astray.
The imagery there is just gorgeous.
I recognize this scene! Ahh, this makes me want to watch Pride & Prejudice. I just might do that after I'm finished typing up this review. Rose is the perfect protagonist and I like that you've made her resemble Elizabeth Bennet without making her Elizabeth Bennet. She's still very much your character. Her inner thoughts are quite amusing to read. She's clumsy and awkward and very ill-at-ease in such a place with so many people whirling around in circles, but she appears to be trying to make the best of things.
While she was trying to mimic the socialites in order to fit in, growing nervous that wizards outside of her family weren't asking her to dance, it made me feel so sorry for her. It also made me like her so much more than I already did, because there's something endearing in the way that she tries to please people who expect things of her even though it's essentially degrading. She's the odd duck, the woman who's way ahead of her time in her convictions, and here she is confined to a room of spinning dresses and stuffy men, out of her element.
To part with one's brains for the sake of society's expectations...poor Rose. Although I'm feeling less sorry for her than I am for Scorpius at this point. I can only imagine that she's going to build up some nice steam and a sharp tongue and then unleash it on him when she gets the chance. I'm rooting for her to squash his ego!
Excellent chapter! I enjoyed it very much. :)Author's Response: There's a giant squid, so why not a kraken too? XD I think I must have been thinking about "Sense and Sensibility and Sea Monsters" at the time - as horrible as that book is, the random appearance of sea monsters is too hilarious to resist. Poor Dominique is right, though - it actually mirrors what happened to Austen's sister's fiancee, who also died at sea (Cassandra never married because of it).
Anyway, I'm glad that you liked that line about Scorpius! I worried that it went overboard with the imagery which isn't particularly Austen-esque, but it was too pretty to remove from the story. It also gave me an opportunity to describe Scorpius not as silver, but grey - drab, plain grey like the hated fog. But it's great that you liked that part! ^_^
Yes! You've got it! That's just what I wanted to do with Rose. She's in Lizzie's role, but she isn't Lizzie - she's got a bit of Kitty or Lydia in her, too, in her reckless behaviour and open emotions. I always imagine Lizzie as having more poise, which is one reason Darcy falls for her, but Rose is more rebellious and very much the country cousin. It's fantastic that you picked up on that difference - re-writing a famous book is daunting and I keep wondering whether I'm making the main characters too similar to Austen's.
Oh, that moment when no one asks her to dance was a painful one to write. She's put into that horrible wallflower situation, feeling like everyone can see that she's different and "wrong", like she's marked. She does, at that moment, really want to belong, but it's not her place - she and that society are incompatible.
Haha, poor Scorpius is right. :P You'll see.
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After reading the first chapter of this, I've been meaning to come back and review for ages, but I never seem to get around to reviewing stories when I say I will >.< It's gone on my favorite stories now, though, so I can't ignore it any longer. It's such a lovely story, as is all your work, and it was a delight to read this chapter.
The language you use in this is so perfect. It really does sound like an Austen novel. You've managed to take me back in time when reading this, and the language is done so perfectly that it doesn't feel overdone, if that makes any sense :P I suppose I mean that this could have started to feel like a parody, but the way you use the language is just spot on.
I love the Pride and Prejudice references in here as well. That's sadly the only Austen novel I've read from beginning to end, but you've used the plot, even just in the first chapter, so perfectly. Being an avid Rose/Scorpius shipper, I can completely see how that ship could relate to the novel: A new take on the love/hate relationship.
I can't wait to read the rest of this, but schoolwork is calling (as much as I'd rather be reading this) so I'll be back soon! There aren't a lot of writers who can do what you do: you're so versatile, yet you manage to do everything perfectly. It's such a treat to read your work.
-NaidaAuthor's Response: Don't worry about it, Naida - I have the same problem! There are so many stories to keep up with, and it's impossible to ever get to them all, no matter how interesting they may sound. But it means a lot that you have remembered mine and, even better, enjoyed reading it! ^_^
I'm really happy to hear that it sounds appropriately Austen-esque in language - it's a strange style to work with because it's wordy and formal, but I've read so much 19th century literature that it comes (too) easily sometimes. It's kind of scary when I get on a roll with it. :D But I definitely don't want to go overboard - this isn't quite a parody, more like a hypothesis regarding Scorose that I'm hoping to prove. :P
It is the most widely read Austen novel, so it's definitely a safe one to use, though I can't help include references to some of the others because I always see them as one whole world - Austen as a whole rather than Austen in parts, I suppose. Anyway, yes! It's also the novel that best fits Scorose - this story is one of the few times that I've really wanted them to get together and stay that way. They are a little different than Lizzie and Darcy in this, I like to think, but no matter what, the love/hate relationship is key to this kind of story.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter, and for getting so much enjoyment from the story! It means a lot to hear these compliments from you! ^_^ Report Review
He peered down on her with squinting eyes, having refused long ago to wear spectacles of any sort lest they pollute his pristine image of the highest fashion.
- Oh, Albus. Bahaha. I've really grown attached to Albus in fanfiction as of late, and this version is very enjoyable. Not wearing glasses because he was worried it would damage his pretty appearance! He's got his priorities in a nice little row, doesn't he.
I absolutely love Lily. If so much as a napkin falls over, everything's in tatters and her whole world spirals out of control. If someone looks at another person oddly, she is mortified and is instantly a martyr for having to witness such a horrifying spectacle.
The characterizations of everyone is marvelous. I like how you painted Dumbledore as Harry's great mentor who succumbed to the revolution's lust for the lives of the brave and good. He's like a grand war hero here - completely the same as in the regular Potterverse, and yet completely different. It's such an impressive thing you've done, spinning everyone into roles appropriate for the time period and for a story that mirrors Pride and Prejudice. The tweaks like that makes this so much fun to read.
The number of spells required for so drastic an alteration in appearance would be far more than this poor author has time to list.
- Ha! Breaking the fourth wall! I appreciate that bit of narration; you've got this elaborate flowery setting and proper dialogue and then you throw in a little bit of "surprise!" so that the story can't take itself too seriously.
Ginny is fantastic. Strong and sturdy and knows what she wants. It's astounding that someone like Lily came out of her - Lily is painfully aware of every flaw around her, her mind magnifying all of them. Rose must drive her nuts. It's going to be delightful to watch Rose embarrass her just by acting like a human.
Lovely chapter! I'm off to make dinner and then I shall come back to read the next one. ^ ^
- SarahAuthor's Response: Your review has me in giggles, though I'm already at wit's end, so perhaps I've neared the breaking point, but still, you picked out the most hilarious of things, and I'm very glad of it. Like that breaking of the fourth wall - I couldn't resist it, and it seemed like something Austen would do to properly put readers in their place and make them reassess what's going on (not to mention shamelessly poking fun at the characters, which she does relentlessly). I'm glad that you liked that little detail - a throw-away line in many ways, but it does exactly what you said. :D
The Potter children are very messed up, that's the best way of saying it. XD Both very OCD, especially Lily - I hadn't meant to make her that way, but what you say is perfectly true, that she's unable to deal properly with anything that interferes with perfection. She's the ultimate perfectionist, and anything less really, really bothers her. Poor girl. And Albus! I usually make him the down-to-earth Potter, but I needed a crazy fop, and in strolled Albus. I wonder how many people back then refused to wear their glasses because it wasn't stylish to do so - they must have often suffered, and this aspect of Albus will become important later on. ;)
Thank you so much for your review! I didn't expect something of such length and detailed observations, but I'm extremely thankful for it - you've given me a few ideas for the coming chapters, little things that will help tie the whole together really well. :D Report Review
I love Victoire! I usually don't like the girly-girl characterization of her, but it fits here better than it would in modern times, with beauty being such an important variable in likeability. I think I caught a reference to her being part Veela in there, with all her admirers, and that was nice and seemed fitting as well.
Oh, Susan, the dancing ♥ It's so pretty to behold. I love Rose's mixed reaction to seeing Lily and Scorpius together, her lack of joy at seeing them mesh so well together and then her relief at seeing Lily so miserable. You've grafted her with Elizabeth Bennett so well here.
I really like that you included that little, albeit memorable, scene from Pride and Prejudice. It fits Scorpius and his Malfoyish nature so well, and again, I think Rose's mixed reaction was very interesting, the way she covered up her obvious pain and embarrassment with loathing for him.
It will be interesting to see where things go from here :)
AmandaAuthor's Response: Victoire is always a difficult one for me because in my head, she's that beautiful eldest cousin who sets the bar way too high for everyone else - her parents are smart and good-looking, so she's got the benefit of great genes, not to mention the Veela blood. I tend to make her unlikeable, I guess because I so often write from Rose's point of view, and being one of the youngest, Rose sees her as that impossibly high standard she could never live up to. But for this story, I wanted to make Victorie someone socially powerful who is on Rose's side - goodness Rose needs a true ally, and Victoire (along with Teddy, who is, in this story, I admit, Victoire's stooge). I'm really glad to hear that you liked how Victoire turned out - she is far better suited to the Regency era in this portrayal, a perfect court lady with considerable political power.
That scene with Lily and Scorpius dancing wasn't even planned - I'd meant for Scorpius to randomly appear throughout the room, closer and closer to Rose until she finally overhears him, but instead, he ended up dancing with Lily. It's a lot to Lily's credit that they don't get along, as Lily could easily ham up to him if she wanted, but even she has a poor impression of him - if he consents to an insulting match with Rose, he can't be suitable as a husband. XD I'm also glad that it gave Rose an opportunity to become more of a reflection of Lizzie Bennett - I never really keep Lizzie in mind while writing Rose so that I don't get them mixed up, so hearing that there are still similarities is helpful. Rose does have to keep the right attitude to really make the whole "pride and prejudice" idea work.
He did hurt her, more than she'd ever admit, but she's able to quickly redirect it into hatred of him rather than self-loathing. She may be awkward and ignorant of society ways, but she's still got confidence in herself as an individual - this is a problem for her in society because she's not "feminine" enough, willing to sacrifice her independence in order to marry into a comfortable position in life. But to hear him say those things about her and especially her family, it's quite a blow.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this, Amanda! It's fantastic that you're enjoying this story and it means a lot to hear these positive comments from you! ^_^ Report Review
You write so eloquently and appropriate for the era the story takes place. The story line is cohesive and flows smoothly. Excellent work!Author's Response: Wow, thank you very much! I don't know what else to say - your compliments are amazing and wholly undeserved, I assure you.
It is wonderful to hear that you've enjoyed the story so much. ^_^ Report Review
I must tell you how much I adore Regency romances! Itís my secret guilty pleasure. So Iím absolutely going to dive into this story. I am not much of the Scorpius/Rose ship but I have a feeling that you will be able to persuade me.
I like how youíve basically summarized the Weasley family with one sentence and how youíve couched it in terms that are still recognizable but yet fit the era that youíve decided to place them in.
Needless to say, when nothing is divided by four, the answer is still nothing, and as one knows from the Bard, nothing comes of nothing. This made sense and yet it did not. Whereíd it come from? :P
Hm, curious that there are two unmarried elder female cousins. Iíd like to see why that is. I donít know if itís significant to the story but Iíd certainly like to see. Also, itís funny to think of Hermione as pushing her daughter to marry though with the mindset of this time period I can see it.
Oh I love Ron. hands clasped behind his back as he awaited the owl post, having forgotten that it had arrived but an hour before. So Ron. Youíve described Ron and Hermioneís future lives here aptly. Itís how I wouldíve seen them (though Iíd see Hermione as more effective in modern times than just letters).
You couldnít have painted Rose and Lily more different than you did in this exchange. Itís done subtly but quite effectively. Yet there is a sense of tired affection in there!
I love this idea. I love Harry Potter and I love Regency romances and I love Jane Austen! Yay! It all comes together! Rose is likeable. Sheís dry, sheís smart and she isnít willing to just be one of those girls who marries because she has to. She still wants to be independent and itís fun to see.
Great beginning!Author's Response: Wow, this is a fabulous review! Thank you very much for taking the time to be so detailed, and to ask all the right questions, too. Your review made me think about certain parts of the family history that I hadn't yet touched upon, but ought to in order to clarify things for readers (not to mention myself) and that perhaps will also figure into the plot later on. ;) I can't thank you enough for this review!
If it helps, I'm not a Scorose person either - not in the least. I'm usually trying to sink that ship, but I do want to give it a chance, and this setting was the only way my brain could convince itself to write this ship. There is a certain Darcy-ish aspect to a character like Scorpius Malfoy, and certainly Rose with a certain combination of her parents' traits will fair well as a Lizzie. The rest of the story, however, can go as it will, and that's where I'm having all of my fun. :D
That quote "from the Bard" is out of King Lear, his line to Cordelia that "nothing comes of nothing" - I complicated it rather too much, and it's become one of those things that makes sense in my head, but no one else's, oh dear. XD It happens far too often.
One of the unmarried elder cousins has her story told in chapter four, but the other one I still have to decide upon and sketch out the details for. They're not central to the story, but they are useful for explaining why Rose is reluctant to marry, or even to fall in love. The story about Ron and the reason why he and Hermione are isolated from wizarding society is more complicated, and I hadn't actually thought of it in detail until your review, but now I think I have a solid idea for it, the facts of which will be sprinkled throughout later chapters (starting in chapter four). Again, it's not a huge deal, but it does impact Rose's life as much as everyone denies that it does.
I'm glad that you also like Rose. You've described her perfectly and I just hope that I'm able to make the plot work without having her sacrifice her strength of character or her ambitions to become a great writer. :D
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I love this story so very much. The Pride& Predjudice style of it is just amazing. Also, Rose and Scorpius, YAY!Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm really glad to hear that you've enjoyed the story so far, and I hope that you like the rest, too. :D Report Review
I've been meaning to get around to this but have been hesitant because of my unfamiliarity with Jane Austen's work - please don't hold that against me as those novels are also ones I've been meaning to read as well.
I really enjoyed this first chapter and I can tell that I'm going to want to continue reading it right away. Your style is formal and elegant, reminiscent of the era that you're story is set in. It's fabulous.
Your characterizations are fantastic as well. I love the history of the Weasley family at the beginning, integrating the characters that we know and love into this new setting and doing so seamlessly! I love how Harry is the war-hero and Ron is a captain (my favorite line in this chapter is this: the war he still secretly wished for, if only because it gave him meaning), both having fought in the war. Charlie is still off in Romania and Fred is still a dead soldier. I really enjoyed that you brought in Hermione's house-elf campaign as well - very fitting.
I am really enjoying your characterization of Rose the most though. She's very...sensible, and intelligent, and she seems like the girl who can't be bothered with flirting with boys. I love how she wants to marry for love, but her parents see it as her having no other option. Lily, on the other hand, is the perfect contrast - girlish and giggly. It's amusing to watch them interact.
I can only imagine what sort of trouble Rose will get into at the ball. I can't wait to read more and to have you introduce Scorpius. :)Author's Response: This story too!? I think I might faint from receiving these reviews from you, during your busy time at school, no less! It's amazing and you're amazing. Thank you, Missy! *hugs*
A familiarity with Austen's novels isn't really required for this story - it's based more on the time period, and the major Austen references will usually be jokes or plot points when I'm feeling particularly lazy. Some of the characters also seem to be veering in the Austen direction, but that's an unconscious thing - I wonder how many readers try to see the Austen characters in the ones from my story, even if I didn't purposely base the character on anyone in particular. For the most part, this story is a period piece - me having fun with history. :D
I'm really happy to hear that the style suits the era. I'm taking great pleasure in writing with this style (not to mention the way that it's helping me study 19th century literature in a roundabout backward sort of way :P). I've been trying to bring in as much of the Potterverse canon as I can, even if integrating some of it into this time period is challenging, but it's the kind of challenge that I enjoy. In many ways, Rowling's universe works very well with the Regency era - I suppose it's because Rowling herself loves Austen. :D
It's great to hear that you like Rose so far - she has her annoying aspects, too (just as Lily has her sympathetic and relatable points), but I've wanted her to be more like her mother than I've written her before. It's the nice part about writing fanfiction - one can take the same character and re-write them over and over again in all the different ways. With next-gens it's worse (or better?) because there is no set "canon" for any of them. ;)
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omg. I love it! I love the way this whole story gives me a Jane Austen feel every time I read it. I'm speechless. You're such an amazing author!
(ps. who is that man you used on your banner?)Author's Response: *blushes* Thank you! That's a lovely compliment! I love reading Jane Austen, so it's a wonderful experience to try on her style and see where it takes me, and it means a lot that you've enjoyed the results so far! :D
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I like how you did something very different with Scorpius and Rose. A new time period! How delicious! I'm excited to see how you portray the next chapters.Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's great to hear that you like how the story's been going so far. ^_^ Report Review
I'm baccck!!! Haha, anywho, I love that you switched to Lily's point of view during this chapter. It makes me happy to see that she's not quite as annoying as she was in some of your other stories. And I personally hope that she falls in love with someone who is a bit "off the mark" of the usual man, so that she can grow as a character. Because I would love to see a Lorcan type of character appear in this story so that Lily can fall in love, and become a wee bit more like her mother. Maybe. Dreaming is allowed, right?
Also, I'm really hoping that for the next chapter, there is more of Albus. Oh goodness, there are so many digressions possible in this story. Albus, Lily, Ginny and Harry, Mione and Ron, Hugo(is he in the country??), and all of the other cousins... Please continue writing!!! :)Author's Response: Oh, I'm glad that you're back for the third chapter, and even more glad that you liked Lily in it. I had to show things from her perspective, if only so that readers could see her at a distance from Rose's overpowering POV. I'm still trying to decide who to pair Lily with, but I do very much like your idea of finding her someone out of the ordinary who will bring her out more. Dreaming is definitely allowed, haha, though it may not turn out to be a dream. :P I really like your idea!
Albus will definitely appear more - perhaps not in the next chapter, but in the one after that. I have a big scene planned for him. *evil grin* He's a strange character in this, someone like Lily in his apparently superficial attitude, but who knows what he's hiding behind all of those clothes? ;) So many digressions, so hard to decide which ones to use! This story is way too much fun to write. :D
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I'm not really sure how Lily turned out to be so shallow, what with Ginny being so independent and free and Harry being a war hero. But I imagine that Lily's life went something like, "Daddy, can I have this?" and Harry would be a push-over to his one and only daughter. Especially with James and Albus being men and apparently inheriting other portions of Ginny and Harry's personalities. When Lily came around, I should think there would not be much left of the good qualities...
Ok, enough about Lily, but Rose and Scorpius's personalities... How Rose is so judgmental at first sight(may I say, hello Elizabeth Bennet?!?!), and Scorpius has the air of royalty about him, although still being a gentleman at all costs.
I am rather curious why Scorpius was there in the first place, however. Maybe in a future chapter you could be so kind to explain it?(oh goodness, I'm talking like the era.)
Goodness, such a long review. But I do love the story. :)Author's Response: Long reviews are lovely! Thank you for taking the time to leave them! ^_^
Lily is rather shallow, but primarily in comparison to Rose - she knows what her place in the world is and how she, as a woman, can succeed in this kind of society, whereas Rose refuses to partake in that lifestyle. You are right in that Lily is the spoiled daughter of a powerful wizard, so she would have received everything she wanted, but she's also still young, naive, and just very feminine. :P I know a good few people like her in real life, so it's always amusing to hear reviewers wonder over her character.
I do have an explanation for Scorpius's presence, but for some reason, I forgot to include it in the chapter! Oh dear. I will include it the next time that he and Rose meets - perhaps she'll ask him or someone else will mention it conveniently. Sorry about that!
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Wonderful! Seriously, wonderful. I see so many similarities between Elizabeth from PP and Rose, such as marrying for love only. Have I mentioned that this is possibly my favorite era ever? And seeing you place the world of Harry Potter in Jane Austen's makes me glad. Almost makes me want to talk like it too! The last line is truly a statement of the times that you are writing in, but are Ron and Hermione really penniless, even though Ron would be a war hero? Love the story so far :) ...and I'm posting comments on the other two chapters as well.Author's Response: Wow, you've been reviewing a lot of my next-generation stories and I'm stunned - it's a fantastic compliment that you've enjoyed them all so much. It's a great era to write, perhaps the most exciting because it's all open for interpretation without the restrictions imposed on, for instance, the Marauder era. :D
The Regency era is one of my favourite too - there's something captivating about the time, all of the political fervour thinly masked by the polite Austen-esque society. It's endlessly fascinating. :D I'm really glad to hear that you like how the Potterverse is being integrated with the Regency period - it's been lots of fun to do so far!
You've got a point about Ron and Hermione. I did it more as a quick plot point than something I really thought about (like the history of the Weasley family). I've been trying to think of a reason why they would have had to remove themselves from society, and I can only imagine that there's a scandal of some sort there, something that Ron did which forced him out of the Aurors. But what? It's a plot hole, and it's something I have to think more about.
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Back again with another review!
I really enjoyed this chapter. You have defiantly got the style of that era down-pat and the way that you have written it as well is brilliant, I like how you've given it a Jane Austen and Charlotte Bronte feel to it.
So far the characterisation has been very solid and nothing has screamed OOC. Harry (for a period drama) is really good and so is everyone else. I liked it how you gave us a little insight into Lily's head and how she was thinking. You can defiantly tell that Harry and Ginny are her parents in this chapter, she just has that... fiery charm that the Potters seem to have :)
I am really enjoying this Alternate Universe and so far, can't find any historical faults or mannerisms-gone wrong which is good :D
All in all great chapter!
*Jaz, 10/10Author's Response: Thank you very much for being able to review this chapter as well! I really appreciate it. :D
It's great to hear that both the style and the characters are turning out so well - it's strange to shift the next-generation characters into a period of manners and very strict social rules, but it's also fun to write about the fashions and those social rules because they create wonderful plot points and character quirks. :D Harry is usually a character I can't write, but he's a little different in this story, more of the patriarch, respectable and benevolent - I was worried he would sound to bland or distant, but I'm pleased that he was neither. It's even better to hear that Lily possesses some of her parents' qualities, especially that fiery charm - she tries to deny it and hide behind conventionality, but there's something more to her that I hope to explore later. ;) Report Review
Oh, I love that you took this chapter to explore Lily a bit! She's such an amusing character in this story, and I love her inner monologue about her looks and how they've been wasted on Albus when she could make much better use of them.
Speaking of Albus, you've done something interesting here. I don't read a lot of next-gen because it tends to be a bit cliche rampant, but I believe James is usually painted as being pretty and empty-headed, is he not? Interesting that you've transposed that onto Albus, the namesake of two Hogwarts headmasters. I like the bantering between him and Lily, and their interactions with Rose as well. Very entertaining.
Again, I also like your characterization of Ginny. Her matter-of-fact personality and tomboy nature is refreshing when juxtaposed with Lily's obsession with beauty and propriety.
Oh, my, what are we all in for? Your imagery did its work here, and I can see that Lily, Albus and Rose are about to enter a world bigger and brighter than anything they've seen. I'm very excited to see how the ball will go, and to see the return of the dastardly Scorpius Malfoy, as well as some of the other characters we are fond of from canon (perhaps).
AmandaAuthor's Response: It's great to hear from you on this chapter, Amanda! Well, it's great for anything of mine that you review, but this chapter in particular was one I've been uncertain of, mostly due to the change in perspective, but also in the way that the alternate universe continues to develop. I'm really glad that you liked how Lily is turning out so far - she's a strange character because, for all her focus on appearances, she is a deliberate, careful thinker. Albus is much the same (though Lily will refuse to see it!) - I have an image of him as a secret spy, which is actually what I picture Harry doing during the French Revolution. XD This universe is getting way too complicated, that's for sure! But I love adding more and more details to it.
Yes, usually James is more of the silly one whereas Albus is either the brainy/nerdy one or the sensitive one (I don't read that many stories with them, but I think many writers take their inspiration directly from the Epilogue with its skeleton characterizations). In this story, Albus is the spoiled younger son who is very comfortable with his existence - a character more suited to that time period (there seems to be someone like him in most stories from that time). Yet, oddly enough, he gets along well with Rose. I still have to iron the creases out of his character. ;)
There will be more canons! Some of the cousins as well as others - the girls need dancing partners after all, and one knows that Scorpius will just refuse to dance. :P I hope that my inspiration for this story keeps up because it's a fun one to write. It's wonderful to see that it's just as fun for readers! :D Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! Report Review
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