I am terribly sorry it has been an inexcusabily long time since my last review, but on the same hand ONLY TWO MORE CHAPTERS
sigh well I am terribly sorry that i have not reviewed in so long life was crazy then i went abroad for university and internet was a little spastic I needed to make sure I could also dedicate a good amount of time to reading and reviewing. It was refreshing to come back to this story and find it as skillfully written as i remember it.
*Deep down, James still held a slight resentment that Kettleburn allowed Sirius to ride the hippogriff in fourth year, and not him.*
-I love when you throw in interesting asides like that it is part of the reason your characters have so much depth there history with each other does not start when the story starts but seems to preexist what we know.
*With each deflection, Sirius found himself laughing louder...He found that he was having the time of his life quite honestly. James also appeared to be enjoying himself, practically prancing about as he dashed from the Slytherin attack* -I found sirius laughing a reminder of his laugh laugh before he goes through the veil seemingly always mocking his adversary but i was not expecting to really see any of future serious just yet it was a reminder of what we know to happen to serious for me Im not sure if it was meant to be like that or not but I really enjoyed it. And the james prancing comment reminded me of something snape would say about james
*Sirius and Avery panted from their own exertions but excitedly observed the girls. There was nothing in the world like two girls wildly going at it.*
-GAH LMAO lets not forget they are teenage boys and hormones are hormones though snape seemed unfazed
*as he could manage in order to deliver the most powerful punch to Siriusí perfectly chiseled features. No girl would ever look at him again, if Severus hit him properly. Suddenly, with a flowering fury of robes and red hair, a hideously large tome of Which Witch; a Full History of Witch Contributions to Magical Society cracked over the top of Severusí head*
-well that in itself is another contribution by a witch to magical society lily saved sirius face! this scene to developed the friendship between sirius and lily some more which i loved i love there interactions as friends. Not to mention lilys un characteristic enthusiasm to fight which as you said so fantastically bravery is not always logical and she was put in griffyndor not ravenclaw
*James Potter stood up in such sudden commanding glory; it was amazing lights didnít shine out from every orifice of his body.* - just happen to really enjoy the word orifice =P
I thought the whole scheme to get the two to the closet was quite sly on the part of sirius and im excited to see how it pans out so i am leaving this review here and off to the next chapterAuthor's Response: It may have taken you some time to review, but it took me even longer to respond! Sorry bout that because your reviews are always so wonderful and inspiring! There is a new chapter in the queue, honestly, and I do hope to get back to this and finish it! Thanks again for your kind words and encouragement ;) Report Review
I think this has to be my favorite story on this site :)
You're an amazing writer & I hope to see more soon!Author's Response: Thank you so very very much. Believe it or not, a new chapter is waiting in line! Bout time, huh? Report Review
I am so glad that you were able to find the time to post yet another wonderful chapter. I love how you had three different stories all wrapped up the neat little package of this one chapter. Every bit of it left me wanting more. You are a true master of making everything come together yet still leaving room for twists and turns and excitment. Brilliant! I just can't get enough. I do hope you are doing well. You always know how to leave me with a smile.Author's Response: Your review really made my day when I read it, and I honestly needed it at the time. Thank you so much for all your encouragement, and great praise. I am sorry that I am only finally responding just now, but I will try to post soon. Thanks again for the lovely review. If and when you do read this, know that you are a wonderful person ;) Report Review
this is just getting crazy.
though it is a good type of crazy, at least.Author's Response: Hehehe, crazy is good, and certainly works with your screen name! Thanks for the review, and I will try to post as soon as I can. Report Review
awesome! fantastic! splendid! hilarious! cant wait to see what happens next! Report Review
Sorry it took me a few days to get to this. I was really excited when you posted, but I have been horribly busy lately. Anyway... loved teh chapter and am anxiously awaiting the next installment of the broom closet. Nothing like entrapment to bring those two love birds together.
I am also very eager to see what Ms. Redding has in store. poor Sirius, Poor Remus, Poor Shanon. It's all such a horrible love triangle. Anyway, looking forward to more pretty much sums up m y review.Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I am dreadfully sorry I haven't responded lately, lots of things going on. I will post again soon though.
I very much appreciate you following this crazed ungodly long story still! And, yeah, Redding will go beyond something that rhymes with the word witch! Thanks again for the review :) Report Review
Okay, I'm so sorry it's taken me so long to review; your chapters are so long I have to read them in little snippets but I eventually got there! Plus I'm sick so I get more bonus points :L
That closet scene was written amazingly o: Perfect in every way; you characterized them both very well and I really enjoyed reading Lily's side of the conversations. James, on the other hand, is hilarious and I love him! :D I absolutely LOVED Lily's comment on the broomstick between her legs. I think I was laughing as much as James if not worse!
Okay, that's the closet bit done, once again, I loved it (: Whoa, hang on a second. I can't make up my mind here! First I was all for Sharius (Teehee) and then I went for Shamus (AHAHA!) but now, I don't like the thought of Shan being with Remus o_O Omg, make up your freakin' mind Marc! It was really sweet and I loved it and I so wish I had a guy like Remus; but dude! Not good. What's wrong with me? D:
I guess I'm just so used to Sirius' girls running off with Remus but this just .. Shan and Sirius are getting to me and they seem so perfect for each other and now the werewolf is trying to ruin it. Omg, I am so mean. But still I loved it and scandal; Angelina saw them! o: Amazing chapter, as always. I loved every bit of it except my blood pressure went up a bit high when Remus and Shan were all, lovey dovey together D:
10/10, love (;Author's Response: What's sad is the time it's taken me to respond! I apologize profusely for that, things have been not so great lately. Though your review was definitely a bright part of my day when I read it, as your reviews always are!
Yes, I know how long my chapters tend to grow, and I really do appreciate you reading them despite it all! James and Lily are so wonderfully awkward with each other, which is really how I imagine it must have been for them at first. Really loved writing this. Hopefully I can finish this whole closet thing and move on to much more interesting things!
Sharius - Shamus!! HA! Liquid came through the ole snout with that one. And, heck, who wouldn't want a guy like Remus? Or Sirius for that matter! Sirius and Shan are rather nice together, and in defense of the werewolf, well, he did fall for her first. Just nobody knew it, not even Shannon. Anyway, yeah, I get it!
Angelina will be awful, but that's a given. I do so love drama. Thanks so much for the wonderful review. I will have to catch up with your stories very soon, and I will! Report Review
I love this chapter!
And I love how you mention Sirius's wonderfulness at Transfiguration, which is practically canon and almost never mentioned in others' fanfictions. Amazing.
OH MY GOD. I can't get over how good that was. Especially the ending, and I'm so excited! I can't wait until the next chappie is up! Redding's such an evil wench!Author's Response: I am so horrible for not responding earlier. I apologize. I always adore your reviews and really look forward to see what you think, thanks so much for the encouragement. So glad you liked it , and I hope to have that next chapter up as soon as I can. Thanks again :) And, yes, Redding is well beyond even the most casual magma flow! Report Review
Oh my gosh, I love how Diggory randomly shows up and helps. The talk between him and Sirius was borderline adorable, and I loved his participance in the plan. Katie totally made it, though. And it was awesome.
Lily to the rescue with her book! That was positively epic. Well done!
I LOVE the last paragraph! Ugh! You're so awesome!Author's Response: And you are more awesome. Thanks so much for all your reviews, and your supportive words! I do like the image of Lily clutching a mighty tome and clobbering Snape in the head...it's all out of love you know, really. Report Review
ahhh that was aweosme! oooh crap angelina saw shannon and remus! damn! u know it makes me wince when i think of how sirius will react when he finds out! any way haha god i love lily and james! there such a good couple. i must know what happens sooo please update soon? :-)! o and yes im the first reviewer! im special lol
~marauders loverAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for liking it and reviewing. And, yes, Angelina is not a very nice girl as you will see. Lily and James' little adventure in the closet will continue, lots of stuff to come... will really try to update soon.
And yes, you are the first reviewer, so, all the chocolate frogs in the hp universe for you! Thanks again :) Report Review
Wow Laura, I didn't know you were the type to write such a dirty chapter!! Haha, just kidding, it was quite entertaining. I missed your Sirius and the gang after so long, and I can't wait to see how the scheme works out. Funny, in my own Marauders story Sirius also had a grand master plan involving a closet, James, and Lily, but it's quite different from yours. It's chapter 3 of They Couldn't Stop the Voices, if you'd like to take a look.
Anyway, I haven't talked to you in a long time, but I'm so glad you updated this story. I've FINALLY updated Saviour after a few painful months, and Two Shots is coming along well, too. But yeah, PLEASE update with the second half of this soon! So I can see if James and Lily bite each other's heads off in the closet or what, haha. I'd love to see more of Julia and her friends, too.
Hope all's well with you,
~GabbyAuthor's Response: Thanks for making me smile so much at a very horrible time! I will have to check that chapter out very soon too :) I've kind of been away for awhile.
Thanks so much for your support, and checking it out. I have posted the next bit, and since it is me and I can't completely put a situation to bed, there will be another chapter with all this too. I will be checking out your other stories as soon as I can, and I know I already said thanks, but really hun, thanks :)
great chapter again! i like sirius' idea, and i recall that julia suggested they be stuck in a closet together--is that right? well, anyways, i love the story, love the chapter, hate the slytherins, and all is good in the world :). i'm sad that i got to the end of the current chapters, but excited for more! :DAuthor's Response: You rock. Yes, I believe Julia agreed with the idea to lock them in a closet. So happy you like this story, and your comments are very encouraging. The next chapter is almost finished, and I will post it as soon as I can. Thanks again for all your reviews! Report Review
that's wonderfully cute, the monkey-and-dragon sirius-and-julia thing. i still don't like brad. humph.
i'm excited for sirius' plan for lily and james, and i love the mini prank that remus pulled on sirius and sirius rearranging remus' things. :)
great chapter again!!! i'm glad that sirius has somewhat recognized that he really likes julia :D.Author's Response: Thanks for returning :) Brad isn't that bad, but I do understand. You're the first to mention Remus' monkey prank, and Sirius' retaliation, thanks so much for that! Glad you are liking things thus far. Report Review
The fight was an absolute brilliant touch. I especially liked how Lily joined in. "Knowledge is Power" and a book to the head proves that saying right. I really had fun reading this chapter. In fact I had so much fun and was so into it, I didn't even notice the length of it. It could have gone on for pages more and I still would have been reading without notice.
There isn't much I haven't said before. Your writing is always amazing. I am always excited every time I see that you have another chapter posted. I look forward to Lily and James' encounter. I do hope you have another wonderful day! I know I will! Thanks!
OrangezauberAuthor's Response: Always making me feel better with the long chapters, thanks so much for that! I always worry that people hate that, but you made me feel much better about it. Glad you liked the fight so much, and Lily's part in it. Next chapter is almost finished, been very busy with the end of summer. And I did have a great day when I read your review, and I'm hoping to throw another one back at you!
Thanks again for your excellent reviews, they make my week :) Report Review
great chapter! agh, i want to know what was occupying remus and shannon's time...
great prank and great gift from sirius :D:D:D. they need to be together, like NOW. it was a very long chapter, but a really good one, so yeah. you deserve a pat on the back. or a quill. or a sirius!! but yes, great chapter, can't wait to read more. :)Author's Response: Remus and Shannon do love to study, exactly what, I think you might be able to guess. Happy you liked the prank and the gift from Sirius. Those two have no idea what they're in for ;) Yes, another long chapter, can't help it though. And I wouldn't mind a sirius pat, ha!
Thanks again for your awesome reviews! Report Review
i'm split. i want sirius to be happy but i want remus and shannon to be together. hmmm.
grr, i don't want brad to be with julia. bah.
great chapter once again. i want to know the rest of julia's letter, as well as her present from sirius :). i really really like this story (i don't think i told you that yet)!!! :D
i also forgot to tell you that i like how you made peter a character with thoughts and obsessions other than cheese :).Author's Response: hee hee. I do like a good romantic triangle, or maybe it's more like a rectangle in this story! Thanks again for your review, and for liking the way I have portrayed Peter. I am really happy you like it so far, thanks again. Report Review
hmm, i think sirius thinks julia wants to come to hogwarts, but i don't see how that's possible. maybe he'll give her the two-way mirror? that'd be a cool gift...
i wouldn't mind reading abt julia's date, but i would also like to get to what i am waiting for (not that i'm not enjoying the story as it is right now...). decisions, decisions. seeing as you've already written loads of chapters, i suppose my dilemma doesn't matter, does it? wonderful chapter, i feel awful for remus :(Author's Response: Yes, yes I think he does. But remember there is quite the age gap between these two. I know everyone wants me to get to these two finally meeting, and I will, I promise. Thanks again for the great review :) Report Review
ooh, i want to know what sirius will get her! and dorcas definitely has a thing for remus...i still feel bad for him, being stuck in the room w/ sirius and shannon :P. great chapter, long chapters are always nice :).Author's Response: That was so fun to write, what Sirius got her...he's a very thoughtful young man! Yes, poor Dorcas really has it bad for Remus, bit of a hopeless triangle for the lot of em. Super happy you like long chapters, because most times I just can't stop! Thanks for all the great reviews, I appreciate every one :) Report Review
poor sirius and remus :(. and i don't want james to forget about lily!!! no.
great chapter again!! i really like this story :).Author's Response: There they go again, Lily and James, always at odds...glad you like the chapter, and thanks for the review. Report Review
i liked this chapter :). ugh, james and his big mouth!! and i feel really bad for remus :(. but great chapter. i liked the present julia gave him :)! and i want everyone to realize the person that they truly like! :DAuthor's Response: But, you never know what or who you want when you're young, so will see what time brings for them. Yes, I feel awful for Remus too, poor guy doesn't deserve that. Thanks again for the review, thrilled that you like it. Report Review
I really want to know what she got him!!! and i hope lily and james move along :D:D. the lavender robes idea was good :). great chapter again!Author's Response: You have to keep reading, hee. James and Lily are on a perpetual rollercoaster, but things as we know will work out. Thanks for the review :) Report Review
oooh, i wonder what she'll get him :D. great chapter, ready to read more :D :).Author's Response: Thanks for coming back! Glad you're still liking it :) Report Review
Oh, I am so glad to see a new chapter. I cannot tell you how many times I opened this page hoping to see an update.
Keep it up!Author's Response: aww, now I feel a bit guilty making everyone wait so long...I will try to not make you guys ever wait like that again. Thanks so much for your review :) Report Review
oooh, this is a great start! When I read your summary, I was really excited to read it. I wasn't disappointed! You are an amazing writer with promise. I can't wait to read more!
By the way, I love your take on Sirius. It's really stands out over all the other Sirius/OC stories I read. Good job!Author's Response: Thanks very much for coming over to read! I know it's quite long, but I appreciate your time and input. I am trying to not go down the dangerous paths with Sirius, but some of it can't be helped ;) I do hope you continue to like it, and thanks again. Report Review
i love sirius' plan!
i think its totally going to work.Author's Response: Thrilled to hear you like the plan. Next chapter is about 3/4's written, loads of James and Lily. Thanks so much for your review :) Report Review
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