|Review:||Courtney Dark says:|
Hey there! Thank you so much for entering the Uncomfortable Challenge!
Wow, this was an amazing, spine-chilling one-shot. I think you covered the prompt, Horror/Dark, extremely well - there were so many emotions in this piece and I felt every single one of them.
I absolutely love reading about this time period, especially when centered on very minor canon characters, such as Marlene, so I was very excited to start reading this. I think the way you introduced both Marlene and Sirius was excellent, and the scene in the restaurant was so adorable and perfect - but the whole time I had this feeling of foreboding, because I knew that something horrible was going to happen by the end of this chapter, and I had a feeling I knew what it was.
The scene when Sirius apparated Marlene home was eerie. Shivers were seriously running up and down my spine when Marlene said the line: “I know, Sirius, please, hurry up.” I could just picture the scene perfectly in my head, feel my own heart drumming inside my chest!
And then you have the huge contrast with the light, fluffy scene at the Potter's house. I loved your characterization of both James and Lily - this one-shot has really made me want to read more about all of these characters!
Wow, the scene where Marlene finds her parents bodies and her sister was incredibly written. I found myself tearing up, shivering in horror as she cradled her sisters limp body. I also really loved the way you wrote her death. Your portrayals of the Death Eaters was fantastic, and all the thoughts and emotions running through Marlene's head...just wow.
I was going to say that you could have ended this one-shot after Marlene's last section, but the very last scene was so incredible that I think you ended in exactly the right place. The way you showed all those emotions, especially of Sirius and Lily...you almost had me in tears!
This was an incredible one-shot which I really enjoyed!
Author's Response: Hi Courtney! :D
Thank you! Its so exciting hearing that you did something well! :D
I absolutely LOVE writing Marlene! She just comes so naturally, and really, as someone once told me, 'writes herself'. Haha, well, mystery was never my strong point :P
OMG REALLY?!?! Yay, mission accomplished! Thank you! I'm glad you could, because in a way, I'm picturing the scene first, and then putting it down in words :) So, the fact that you can picture it just makes my year! :D
Haha, I'm glad you like the potter house scene! It was a miss or a hit. I personally like it because it kind of slows the plot down? haha, i am planning a prequel and they are in it! So, maybe we can do a review swap or something?
OMG REALLY?! i honestly hated the writing style in that scene! But Im glad you liked it! I cried so many times when I was writing this, so I'm glad I was able to make you feel those emotions, but i am super super sorry for making you cry! Thank you! Writing thoughts is just so hard and you complimented that! THANK YOUU!
Thank you! The last scene was the most painful to write, but I really do love it! :D Thank you for such an incredible review Courtney!