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Review:Unwritten Curse says:
Wow, you're really good with dialogue. I should take a few pointers from you because dialogue is probably the aspect of writing that I struggle the most with. For you, it seems natural!

Anyway, I was just about to question why Bea was telling James such personal things about her life when she said that line about it not being personal, that she'd tell everyone the same thing. And that totally makes sense, especially because she's a reporter. I'm guessing she's very used to being in the spotlight and everyone knowing things about her, so she wouldn't be afraid to share those details with James.

I think they have a really interesting dynamic--Bea and James. One minute they're fighting and the next they're being "civil," as James put it. But you can tell they're actually quite similar, though they fight it. You are right that things are moving a bit quickly, though. Keep an eye on that--it's a lot like the Dramione ship in that it'll take time for them to overcome the animosity before anything genuine happens.

Another random comment: you handle a lot of characters in one scene really well. The Potter family scene was nicely done. I wasn't confused at all, I knew who was talking, their personalities were distinct. Great job!

Let me know when you update. I'd love to read more. :)

Author's Response: WOW! Why are u so sweet! That's so so nice!!! I'm at a lack of adjectives, so excuse my terrible vocabulary!

I have no idea what you're talking about! Your dialogue was so good! And definitely well written! But, it's an amazing compliment! Especially from such an amazing writer! Your chapters, really left me speechless!

I'm glad it made sense! I'd hate for it to not and just seem like something I randomly put out to fill plot holes! That is actually a key personality trait of Be a. She's very open!

Thank u! Yeah, I'm planning to slow the pace back down in the next chapter :) The plot will still be moving quite quickly, but hopefully a bit more smoothly :)

Thank u! That is one thing I'm terrified of! Having too many characters in a scene and not managing them well! Thank u! I'm trying to control a squeal threatening to escape!

Eep! Those two lines made my day! Ah! Like seriously! Amazing! I will! Eep! And hopefully the update will be quick :)

-Curie :D


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