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Review:Unwritten Curse says:
Hi! So I picked this story because I felt like diving into a WIP and I couldn't resist the cast of characters. ;)

This is a random detail, but I like that Pippa goes by her middle name. I think it's an interesting quirk to throw in and it seems to fit well with her characterization, which is spunky and offbeat. I'm really enjoying her so far!

I'm wondering why James Potter felt the need to crash a wedding to inform a woman he barely knows that her fiance is cheating on her. I'm sure you'll explain this in later chapters--I'm very curious to find out. You have quite the interesting set up here!

One thing I'm confused about is what the audience was thinking/doing while all of this was happening. You don't mention the guests until the end, when Pippa's family is trying to calm them down. I would've liked to see them throughout this chapter, reacting to the events as they unfold. It would've helped me visualize the scene a bit better. Just a thought!

I'm venturing on to the second chapter now. Look out for another review from me!

-- Gina

Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad! I'm a huge sucker for a James II/OC!

I love that name, 'Pippa'. It was the first time I've thought so much about a name! I quite like Pippa! She so fun to write! :D

Well, it is because of his animosity towards the groom :) The exact reason will be mentioned in the 3rd chapter :D Thank u! I thought of it in a dream ;) Really, I did.

Hm, that's really good CC! I'll go edit it after I post the next chapter! :D It was an awesome thought!

Ooh! Really?!?! *squee!* Its the first time anyone has gone into the next chapter in a review swap! Thank u!

-Curie :D


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