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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Hello Curie! I'm here for the Eighth of the Twelve Days of Reviewing. :)

I realy enjoyed reading this story! I think your development of the prompt was really nice. I think Prompt Four stories (like mine) turned out actually quite dark compared to the others.

I really enjoyed reading about Teddy and Victoire here, they were such a sweet couple and it was so obvious that they loved each other. The way Teddy was just there for Victoire made me so happy to read about them.

But ah, Dom! I mean, not to be nasty or anything, but she's being really selfish, ruining her sister's Christmas and proposal. I mean, okay she miht be upset that her boyfriend dumped her, but it's not like Teddy was proposing to Victoire to spite Dom! And unfortunately, I think this situation is quite realistic as well, a lot of relationships seem to be really one-sided. :( That's why I was so happy to see Teddy and Victoire's relationship where they both cared about each other so obviously.

I really enjoyed the way you descibed Victoire's relationship with her sister, it was really nice and very vivid, I could really feel how much Victoire cared in this story.

I jut want to point out though, there were a couple of instance where you spelt 'Victoire' as 'Victorie', switching the 'i' and the 'r' around. It was nothing big and didn't really disrupt the flow of the story though, so you don't have to worry too much. :)

I think that the way you switched POVs was really smooth, I really liked how you switched so easily from Victoire's to Teddy's.

I think you have some really nice imagery going on here - these two quotes in particular were beautiful and really vivid, the helped me see the scene in my mind so well.

She had been so happy then. Her eyes dancing, the fire in her eyes lit with elation.

and

The white blanket of snow contrasted heavily with the black quilt that was the night.

This was a really nice story and I really enjoyed reading it, congrats on getting an entry into the Duel and good luck! :)

Author's Response: Emily! You're so sweet!!!

Yeah! I know right! I've read a few and they're quite dark :) and yours! Ah! Really heart wrenching! But amazing! Congrats on the win!

Thank u so much! That was definitely my point and I'm glad it worked! He's totally my perfect guy! :D

I'm glad you thought it was realistic :) yeah, Dom is a bit selfish and totally crazy in this. Yeah, I Thayer with u on that one, a lot of relationships are one sided.

Eep! Thanks so much! I have no siblings so I was going blindfolded with this one! I'm glad it was sweet!

Thank u! This was actually my first story in 3rd person!

I've never been complimented on imagery in any of my stories, so this means so much to me! Thank u thank u thank u!! :D

Thank u! Thanks again for reading mine , Emily!!

-Curie


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